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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow,the guy has some guts...i hope jalal teaches him a lesson.
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Thank u so much for updating!!!Always look forward to ur updates! My comment might not be too detailed today because I have an exam this week so pardon me! comments in red inline
(btw, just saw ur msg too on WA -was going to reply but it might be late there so did not want to disturb u but will definitely catch up after thursday and if get time than lil earlier)

Originally posted by: lashy


OSR PART 32
1st June

ENROUTE THE FARMHOUSE

'How much longer to go?'

Jalal darted the car clock a casual glance 'Errr...I'm guessing another half an hour'

'Arre' came the sullen voice from the back of the eight-seater 'Please change the songs on the radio na...some Hindi cd maybe...'

'One sec...' letting out a sigh, he cast another look at the semi-familiar controls in front - unfortunately, the song-change requests from the ladies squashed at the back of the car were getting whinier. Now, how was it his fault if the dashboard on this hired Toyota Innova was so different to the controls on his flashy Audi?

'Wait...let me try...' came the gentle offer from the passenger seat, a second later 'You keep your eyes on the road and hands on the steering wheel, mister...'

'Thanks love...' Jalal whispered with a brief wink

Ohh thank u! Jalal and jodha both r on trip! I was reading with cautiousness to c if jodha is there or not. so thank u sooo much.

- and THOSE exchanges were enough to spark the next 'tease-session' amongst the lively picnicking group.

Clearing his throat, Maan suddenly called out to his friend on the driver's seat 'Oh Mahapurush...YOU taking so long to figure out how to work a cd player is unbelievable...' indicating to the beautiful Jodha sitting beside him, he remarked casually 'Getting distracted today, are you Jalal?'

'No doubt' Meera chipped in

'Distracted while driving?' Abdul acted all horrified 'God, that's dangerous for us poor people yaar...'

'Just keep your eyes on the road for our sakes Jalal...' Renu remarked on a flat note

Shrugging his shoulders, Maan corrected Renu mischievously 'Well...as long as THEY BOTH manage to keep their eyes on the road... we're safe...'

'Eyes on road AND hands on the steering wheel too, remember? That's important for our safety...no hanky panky...'

'Ohooo...well said Abdul...' Salim whistled 'We're watching you both closely, ok?'

'Not again' Jodha hid her flushed cheeks in embarrassment

'Guysss tum log na...' having caught their freshly devilish expressions through the rear-view mirror, Jalal turned to his girl thereupon and smirked aloud 'Jo...I have a good mind to string this guy up on stage as the college jester during the Annual day function! You game?'

'I'm game Jalal' Jodha voiced her support

Bah! Like that was going to stop them. In fact, the comments only grew increasingly naughty - now topped up with rounds of boyish wolf whistles and girlish giggles too. The couple at the front could do little but sit tight and deal with their own abashed frowns - there was just no winning against such a bunch of pranksters, was there?

I love this group (both her and his) and their teasing of Ja-Jo

'Waise Jalal...' Meera spoke up once all the laughter had died down 'This reminded me...'

'What?' Jalal asked, glimpsing at her inquisitive expressions via the rear-view mirror - he was preparing himself for another bout of jesting!

'MAHAPURUSH...' she folded her palms as she cited the term Maan had used a minute ago 'Aapne tho kamaal hi kar diyaa...'

'What Kamaal?' he blinked innocently

She rolled her eyes 'Your exam waalaa kamaal...like you didn't guess...'

Oh, he'd guessed, but he was just being typical 'Jalal'. Nevertheless, he repaid her compliment with a graceful nod thereon 'Hmmm...thanks...'

'But seriously' Payal joined in on a more serious note - revealing her earnest amazement along with Meera 'How did you manage it? Jodha told me you'd done no revisions...no studies...nothing...and within a few days, you caught up with the curriculum and topped the mark lists too! Not fair...'

THAT'S IMPRESSIVE! 👏

'I know...'

Leaning against the headrest, Jodha observed Jalal and his refined responses to the ongoing praise - the subtle contentment in her eyes giving away what she truly felt. Witnessing how her friends were going ga-ga over her boyfriend's intellectual abilities, the soft smiles on her face gradually morphed into something more blissful.

aww- she seems so proud of him but sure her competitiveness must have kicked in!

No doubt; her 'initial' reactions when the first and third semester results had actually come out a few days ago, had differed slightly. No doubt that she'd been rendered momentarily speechless - and maybe even the tiniest bit jealous - when she'd viewed the exceptional percentages he'd got. No doubt that the 'Competitor Jodha' had been spontaneously provoked - she'd challenged him with a 'Wait and watch...I'll outshine you in the next semester!' remark, which he'd graciously accepted with a 'Let's see!' reply.

I knew it! It is nice to see that they still have not lost their original traits especially her!

Yet; she knew the very instant she'd made that 'Wait and watch' challenge, that attaining it was not going to be easy - beating Jalal Muhammed at academics was no walk in the park! While she'd prayed for him, stood by him and spurred him on throughout his testing times - what he'd achieved was of his own accord. Coping with bereavement to catch up on six subjects within a couple of days AND excelling in them was no mean feat. Jalal wasn't just a go-getter - the talented man had a natural flair for the field of management. Now, THAT was nothing short of praiseworthy - and THAT was something the 'Girlfriend Jodha' was extremely proud of!

'So how did you do it?' they prodded on

'Some secret formula maybe?' Payal suggested

'Something like that' he confessed just then, stealthily giving Jodha a mischievous look.

She grinned back. She knew what he was thinking about. He knew that she knew what he was thinking about. In a way, it was her cute formula - the 'MY well-being = Sum total of YOUR (health + happiness + love + success) / timescales...' that'd magically resurrected his spirits!

I still love this formula!!! so CUTE, SWEET, TOUCHING and ADORABLE!

'Arre yaar...' came the abrupt interruption in the form of Renu's gripes 'We're here for a picnic now... forget about college...annual day...and EXAMSSS... we've just finished with our exams 6 weeks ago...lets enjoy now!'

'You're right!' the girls agreed in unison

'Three cheers for our group...we finally made this happen...'

'WHAT!' Renu sat up in a flash, a surprised frown now marking her face 'You mean 'I' finally made it happen!'

'Yeah...' Payal promptly admitted with a sheepish shrug

The car fell silent for a while there. No one else had anything to add to that comment. Well, Renu was undoubtedly a cranky fusspot. However, in this instance she wasn't wrong. Had it not been for Renu's efforts, this trip would never have materialized.

Getting a picnic coordinated between 8 passive people had turned out to be a nightmare of sorts for her. For starters, the initially proposed date had to be postponed since Jalal was reluctant to party on a date that coincided with Robbie's 1st month memorial. Then, Jodha's family had taken forever to give her permission - putting everyone else's plans on hold too. Following that; Payal and Sana hadn't given their confirmations till she'd literally threatened them into submission! Phew! No wonder then that Renu was so fiercely defensive of HER hand in having arranged the outing.

Well, I guess then I should thank Renu for being herself so we could see JA-JO in trip btw how did Jodha's family get convinced?

Thankfully; apart from the date and venue everything else about the trip had been more smooth-sailing! Well, the ladies had organized the food and the tambola, leaving the men to take care of transport, music, drinks and everything else!

AT THE FARMHOUSE

Girls and guys, pranks and masti, food and drink, dance and music, fun and games - this mini crowd had all possible ingredients required to make this the most enjoyable of picnics. However, what amplified the appeal of the entire experience was the setting itself.

Gosh, I miss my Picnics too when I was in India!😭😭

Set in between acres of rolling fields; the fully-furnished 3000 Sqft farmhouse they were spending the day at, had every probable luxury needed to cater for a merry group of college students - and more!

Italian marble tiles running across an entirely air-conditioned ground floor, a large projector to play movies, a sparkling kitchen, comfy rugs on the floor, plush sofas and marble statuettes gracing the corners. Why, its exclusive large rear-garden even had the mini waterfalls for added effect. Basically, the farmhouse was P-O-S-H!

Seems NICE!

Of course, HIS affluent gang had frequented such places many-a-time - but, the sights and the splendorous interiors were nothing short of a revelation for Jodha and her pals.

'You like it?' Jalal had asked her softly, when he'd caught her admiring the view of the lush gardens from the portico

'It's not bad!' she'd part-admitted with a twinkle

'Wanna come back every year then?'

'I'll think about it' she'd chuckled

It wasn't very long before everyone had managed to make themselves at home. After all, everyone was eager to get the party rolling - and my, what a party it was turning out to be! By midday, they'd fooled around as much as they could, feasted far more than they should have and laughed till their sides could take it no more. So, they decided to plonk on the sofas to give it a rest and squander the lazy noon away with a few calmer forms of amusement - 'Antakshari', for instance.

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'Tujh bin suraj mein aag nahi re

Tujh bin koyal mein raag nahi re

Chaandaniya to barse

Phir kyun mere haath andhere lagde ne

Adhoori adhoori adhoori kahaani, adhoora alvida

Yunhi yunhi reh na jaaye adhoore sadaa

Adhoori adhoori adhoori kahaani, adhoora alvida

Yunhi yunhi reh na jaaye adhoore sadaa - aaa'

'Yayyy that was really good!'

'You are a pro...'

'Too good!'

'Jodha... kyaa gaati ho yaar!'

'Thanks guys' she gushed at the ongoing rave reviews her melodious rendition was receiving - before darting him a quiet look to see what he had to say.

Still lost in the beauty of her song, he broke out into an elusive grin 'Amazing as usual' he hadn't yet gotten over how dreamy she'd appeared throughout, creasing those eyebrows with her eyes shut tight as she'd hit those high notes!

aww Jalal admiring HIS girl 😳

'Ok now YOUR chance to sing...a song that begins with 'A'' Payal prodded the other team

'Nooo' came all the retaliatory voices in unison

'I've already finished singing...no more...' Maan groaned 'I can't remember any Hindi song now with A...Salim you sing yaar...'

'No way!' Salim stretched his arms out lethargically 'Jalal hasn't opened his mouth yet...let him sing now...'

'What! Me?' he cocked his head in shock 'Not me...you all know I can't sing...'

'Kuch bhi... like we are all Sonu Nigams!'

'I'm not singing...' Jalal shook his head

'Ok we give up...'

The ladies were obviously winning the Antakshari match by a long way - and the men were acting like typical bored players in a game they had little interest to begin with!

Following nearly five minutes of nothing but 'You sing' 'Jalal will sing' and 'I wouldn't sing', Jodha grew tired. She decided to take matters into her own hands - albeit, covertly. After all, the helpless men had put up with their tantrums for so long now and they could do with a bit of help! That AND the important fact that she was just as desperate as the rest of the lot to hear HIM sing a Hindi song - something even SHE hadn't had the opportunity of listening to, so far! So, taking advantage of the ongoing hungama, Jodha stealthily put her hand out and signalled to him.

It took Jalal a few seconds to realize she was beckoning him - but when he did, he promptly understood the real reason behind her underhanded tactics!

'I'm not singing' he shook his head at her firmly

'Sing once na...' she silently pleaded, before mouthing out a song to him - while ensuring no one from the raucous gathering was watching them 'Apni karam ki kar adaayen...'

'Oh nooo' he crinkled his forehead in pain 'Not THAT song...' like her listening to it on his car radio every two days wasn't enough!

'Stop the fuss and sing once...' she stared long and hard - and when even that didn't work, she glanced away unhappily 'Fine...your wish...'

I LOVE LOVE their (actually any couple) talking through eyes! ROMANTIC! I

Studying Jodha's mock-frustration with a defeated smile, the poor boyfriend had no other go but to give in. Letting out a weary sigh, he eventually turned to his mates 'Ok guys... I have a Hindi song with Aaa...'

'Arre wah'

'Go on...'

Taking a deep breath, he stared down at the rings on his finger and went on to hum the song she'd suggested - his awkwardness plain for all to see

'Apne karam ki kar adaayein..

Yaaraa.. Yaaraa.. Yaaraa..

Mujhko hi raah dede Kasme de waade de

Meri duaaon ke something something ko sahare de

Dil ko thikaanein de Naye something de

Khawaabon ki something ko Mausam ke paimane de'

By the the end of the first para, Jodha was literally biting into her lip so she didn't break out into a bout of sniggers. When Salim had said they were no Sonu Nigams, he was not being modest. None of them could carry a single musical note properly. However, Jalal's rendition had to win the prize for being the 'Worst' of an already bad lot!

Yet there she was; sitting back and thoroughly enjoying it with a wide grin. So what if it was her favourite song that was being butchered so mercilessly? After all, there was something so cute about the nervousness in his voice as he robotically went about screwing-up the lyrics. There was something so innocent in the fact that he was twirling his finger rings and not looking up because he knew he'd be braving many 'amused' faces if he did so. Most importantly, there was something so comforting in knowing that her adorable Mr.Know-it-all wasn't really Mr.Know-it-all. He couldn't cook, dance, draw and now as she heard him out, he couldn't sing - even if his life depended upon it. Phew, the scales felt more balanced now!

I can't believe her. this is so funny to me- although she thinks he seems innocent and cute but still being competitive that now scales are balanced. but, I like it! it seems natural reaction!

Unaware of the mischievously vindictive thoughts going on in his girl's mind, Jalal arrived at the finals bits of his song

'Apne karam ki kar adaayein

Kar de idher bhi tu nigaahein

Sun raha hai na tu

Ro raha hu mai'

'That's it.. I'm done' he abruptly stopped and looked up at his silent audience and especially her, sporting a part-abashed frown

'Ro raha hu mai? Perfect lyrics...' came their comments

'Abbe ro hi rahaa thaa... gaa nahin rahaa thaa!'

Everyone's chuckles that had been suppressed so long ultimately gave way

'Well...I did warn you all...' Jalal shrugged

'Hmmm...' Abdul interrupted the revelry out of the blue, suspicions now clouding his features 'I know Jalal...and there's NO way he would have thought of a Hindi song by himself and all... I smell something fishy here...'

'You mean someone's helped him out?'

'Yes...someone from the other team, I think...'

Sensing the impending trouble coming their way, the horrified Jalal and Jodha hurled each other 'Oh nooo...not again...' stares.

Then in a flash, Jalal leapt across to playfully muffle Abdul's mouth with his hand - unable to think up no alternative form of damage control for then 'Abbe...chup... I'm from your team...'

I could imagine this! 😆

'See I told you guys...' Abdul wrestled his way out of his bestie's grasp 'Jodha helped him out! This is Love, Songs and Dhoka!'

Following a deafening round of laughter from all quarters; thus started the Jodha-Jalal tease session No. 32! With Maan singing a hundred different tuneless versions of 'Sun rahaa hai re tu', Salim and Abdul completed the drama by enacting highly theatrical Romeo-Julietized scenes to it!

The hapless couple could do little but grit their teeth and bear the 32nd onslaught with embarrassed grins. After all, there was no winning against such a bunch of pranksters, was there?

THE REAR GARDEN OF THE FARMHOUSE

'Hey' she eventually called out, after having observed how he'd been so immersed in studying the beautiful landscape for some time now 'Stepped out to escape all that teasing, haan?'

'Nah' he broke out into a smile, without even turning back 'I'm used to it...have been putting up with Abdul for 15 years now, remember?'

'Yes' she sniggered and then quickly got down the portico steps to join her boyfriend on the lawn 'God, I've never had such fun in my life...' she paused 'By the way, what are you doing here?'

'Nothing really...everyone's busy lounging and chatting...so thought of stretching my legs for a bit...' he indicated to the gardens 'It's sultry...but it's superb na!'

'Same here... thought of stepping out of that AC hall to catch some fresh evening air!'

'Was planning to read a book' he showed her the Isaac Asimov sci-fi novel in his hand

'Wow' she beamed and showed him the Nora Roberts romantic-thriller in hers 'Same here!'

'Chalo...let's sit down in the shade somewhere...'

these two are unbelievable they want to read book when they finally got some time off alone 😆😉

No sooner than she nodded in agreement, Jalal gently took her palm in his and the duo began a casual stroll around the expansive well-manicured gardens. Hand-in-hand; the pair made their way through the dainty pathways - surveying the rockeries, mature shrubs and flowering beds perfectly dotted on both sides.

A few minutes on and a fresh surge of enthusiasm suddenly crept into her voice 'Hey look there' pointing to a secluded enclosure a short distance away, she asked on an inquisitive note 'Is that a garden swing?'

'Looks like it'

'Come on...lets go'

'WOW!' she nearly squealed in glee as they approached the spot 'Never sat in such a swing before ...that too in a private garden...'

I love swings- 😊 Used to swing when I was kid but still do if I see one.

'It's very dusty' Jalal let out a semi-convinced sigh on visually examining it 'And a bit rusty too!'

'Arre so what?' Jodha nimbly launched off to remove the leaves and the grime from the seat 'See...it seems better already'

Beholding his girlfriend's excited antics for a short while, Jalal erupted into a warm chuckle as he ultimately chose to yield to her whims. He started helping her out thereafter and before long, the dusty-rusty swing was in a more usable condition - thanks to their combined efforts!

There was still one issue though - the piercing sunlight falling upon the seat was not totally conducive to a calm eve of book-reading.

Shielding his eyes with his hand from the strong rays, Jalal glimpsed at the shady trees nearby - he got an idea. If he could pull this off, the setting would be the 'perfect' reader's getaway!

Swiftly guessing what was going on in his mind, Jodha grew alarmed. The mighty three seater iron swing had to weigh a ton and pushing it through all that muddy ground was going to be back-breaking 'No...Jalal...don't...it's not...worth' she spoke up, but stopped her sentence midway when he'd darted her a 'Just gimme a sec, please?' glance

'Fine!' folding her arms, she stood back and watched him with a disapproving grimace - she was not one to be impressed by unnecessary herogiri - especially not when it could cause him injury. However a few seconds later and those displeased frowns on her charming features gradually resembled something else - something more along the lines of awe. Much to her surprise, he was accomplishing what he'd set his heart out to - well, he'd managed to shove the hefty damn thing halfway already!

'OKAY!' she surrendered begrudgingly. So maybe, she'd marginally underestimated how tough he was. So maybe, all those taut muscles weren't just for show.

'There' the breathless man exhaled in relief, once the swing had reached its shady destination a few minutes later. Looking up at Jodha with a victorious grin, he dusted his palms brusquely and gave her a spirited wink 'My ma'am...all your wishes fulfilled ...wanna sit now?'

'You bet' she giggled, snapping out of her stunned gazes

Comfortably proceeding to take his seat on one corner, Jalal leaned against the backrest and opened his book - waiting for her to join him.

Contrary to what he was expecting, Jodha didn't sit beside him. Nah! Such lovely ambience. Such lovely company. Such a lovely book in hand - she was going to read her novel her 'preferred' way. Flicking away her heels, she set her mobile down and went on to lay on the long plank - daintily resting her head on his lap.

Lovely sight to watch these two like this!

'Wow' he thought when he studied that riveting face of hers now reposing on him.

He hadn't expect her to do that. Nevertheless, he LOVED it - especially, the fact that his girl now had no qualms exercising her rights over him - especially, the manner with which she'd snugly made him her home.

EXACTLY!

'Now stop staring at me...' she tried not to blush 'And start reading your book...'

'I'll try...' he grinned, slowly beginning to run his fingers from her forehead all the way through her long wavy hair that cascaded across the swing. Pursuing with his mischief; Jalal continued to check out her enticing features with unbroken gazes, while she attempted very hard to concentrate on her story. Sometime later and she had to give up

'Jalal' she protested softly, closing his eyes with her hand 'Stop staring at me and READ your book!'

'Ok...' he conceded with a hearty laugh thereafter and moved her palm away to return to the pages in his novel

Thus, they went about swaying on that swing for a long spell - a spell that was equally delightful for both - a spell of tranquillity with nothing but the sounds of the creaking swing and the chirping birds around. She dug into her Nora Roberts, seeking comfort in the presence of his lap as she did so. He perused through his Isaac Asimov, deriving his pleasure in playing with her locks as he did so.

After making it through a few pages in this fashion, Jodha subsequently spoke up on a mild note 'Jalal...what you're doing to my hair is undoubtedly A-M-A-Z-I-N-G...but, anymore of this and I'm just going to fall off asleep on you...'

I like it too and then it makes me sleepy too.It is so nice to Jalal doing all these things for his gf.

'So?' he questioned - his eyes still transfixed on the chapter he was reading 'Sleep na...we've come here to relax after all...' he paused 'By the way, I love playing with your hair...you know that?'

'Same here' she snickered

'Same here ka kyaa matlab?' he enquired slyly, glancing down at her crafty expressions 'You love ME playing with your hair or YOU love playing with mine?'

'Keep guessing' she teased him, flipping another page as she did so

Smirking at her canny responses, he returned to the interesting chapter he was at

'By the way' she resumed once again I meant to tell you...there's another thing I LOVE...'

He waited patiently - something already told him there had to be a twist to this

'I LOVE your version of Sun rahaa hai' she halted 'Even more than Arijit Singh's..'

'Oh nooo' he rolled his eyes - he knew it! It HAD to be something like this!

'Sing it again for me na...'

'What!' he glared down at her in shock 'You've gotta be kidding...no way...'

'Pleasee eee eee' she put on the girliest charms she could

Shaking his head in the negative, Jalal decided to keep his eyes on the book for then 'You don't LUURRVVEE me singing and all Jo...you just find the whole spectacle entertaining...'

Some time later, he caught the sulky frowns on her brow from the corner of his eyes 'You're more tantrumy today than usual, aren't you?' he sighed not-too-happily 'We're in such a peaceful setting...why do you want to hear me bray now?'

Glimpsing away from her book, she gazed up at him 'Because when you sang that song, you had an innocent look on your face...and that's the sweetest expression I've seen on you...ever!'


What! She couldn't be serious! He examined her eyes carefully for a while - there had to be a catch somewhere! Anywhere? Surprisingly, despite a thorough investigation he found none. So, she wasn't joking? She genuinely loved to watch him sing? Wow!

Kneading his forehead with his fingers, he exhaled awkwardly 'Hmmm...but promise me you're not gonna making a habit of this...'

awww- these two are lovey and adorable!

'I'll try...' she giggled

Overcoming his reservations, Jalal cleared his throat - about to restart the song he'd sung not so long ago. Just then, the pair were interrupted when a music of another kind started reverberating - it was the ringtone on her phone

'Oh...one sec' she stretched her hand out to grab the instrument from the lawn below - it was a number she couldn't recognize

'Hello' she attended the call soon after

For the following few seconds there was no response whatsoever

'Hello' she pressed on 'Who's this?'

'Jodha Singh...' came a man's unfamiliar voice ultimately 'It's me...'

Ohhh no Shraddha, nahiii, u cannot ruin their trip by stalker-or btw is it that rishabh guy ?😡
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Hope you enjoyed it 😳 and if you did, please don't forget to leave likes as it really encourages the writer in me to keep going


Update soon. thx for pm. 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey lash awesome part !

Loved the whole Robby incident too that u wrote so delicately and the kisses that followed 😉

Keep it up ! And I feel it's time for the villain to come out in this picnic ! Picnic is synonym to a Jashn / party lol !
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Posted: 11 years ago
#64
Thank you for the update... You should write a book... Can't wait for the next update..
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Posted: 11 years ago
#65
Lovely update 👏

And congrats for new thread 🥳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: lashy

Sorry for another review...Bear with me...There are certain songs which are catchy and hummable...You instantly love them, hum them continuously and they become a rage within no time...While there are certain songs that after 3-4 times of hearing, give you a beautiful feeling and you keep on humming them even after the movie has gone long back...😃...This chapter falls in the second category...This chapter grows on you after you read it a couple of times...And that is exactly what I felt...😃... ...I have selected some sections of this chapter that I loved the most😃
'Ro raha hu mai? Perfect lyrics...' came their comments

'Abbe ro hi rahaa thaa... gaa nahin rahaa thaa!'

That was really good...I laughed too, along with them😆
😆

Swiftly guessing what was going on in his mind, Jodha grew alarmed. The mighty three seater iron swing had to weigh a ton and pushing it through all that muddy ground was going to be back-breaking 'No...Jalal...don't...it's not...worth' she spoke up, but stopped her sentence midway when he'd darted her a 'Just gimme a sec, please?' glance

'Fine!' folding her arms, she stood back and watched him with a disapproving grimace - she was not one to be impressed by unnecessary herogiri - especially not when it could cause him injury. However a few seconds later and those displeased frowns on her charming features gradually resembled something else - something more along the lines of awe. Much to her surprise, he was accomplishing what he'd set his heart out to - well, he'd managed to shove the hefty damn thing halfway already!

'OKAY!' she surrendered begrudgingly. So maybe, she'd marginally underestimated how tough he was. So maybe, all those taut muscles weren't just for show.

'There' the breathless man exhaled in relief, once the swing had reached its shady destination a few minutes later. Looking up at Jodha with a victorious grin, he dusted his palms brusquely and gave her a spirited wink 'My ma'am...all your wishes fulfilled ...wanna sit now?'
I know your girl is already impressed ...ab aur kitna impression jamaiga mere Jallu😉... But your girl again fell for your muscular charms...Hai re meri Jo ... tu to pakki gayi kaam se😆

'Wow' he thought when he studied that riveting face of hers now reposing on him.

He hadn't expect her to do that. Nevertheless, he LOVED it - especially, the fact that his girl now had no qualms exercising her rights over him - especially, the manner with which she'd snugly made him her home.

Jo is coming out of her shell slowly and steadily😳...Jallu is very happy...and so are we😳😳😉
'I'll try...' he grinned, slowly beginning to run his fingers from her forehead all the way through her long wavy hair that cascaded across the swing. Pursuing with his mischief; Jalal continued to check out her enticing features with unbroken gazes, while she attempted very hard to concentrate on her story. Sometime later and she had to give up

'Jalal' she protested softly, closing his eyes with her hand 'Stop staring at me and READ your book!'

I loved all the above...Word by word😳...He staring at her lovely face with unbroken gaze😳...finding it hard to concentrate and so does she😳...She closed his eyes with her hand😳...But he still continues caressing her forehead and lovely long locks😳...I can imagine Parijat doing that in front of my eyes while swinging and reading😳...

After making it through a few pages in this fashion, Jodha subsequently spoke up on a mild note 'Jalal...what you're doing to my hair is undoubtedly A-M-A-Z-I-N-G...but, anymore of this and I'm just going to fall off asleep on you...'

😳😳 ...I loved her line

'Keep guessing' she teased him, flipping another page as she did so

😳😳 ... I love this line too...They keep their relationship interesting by taunting, teasing and keeping each other on the toes😳😳

Glimpsing away from her book, she gazed up at him 'Because when you sang that song, you had an innocent look on your face...and that's the sweetest expression I've seen on you...ever!'

What! She couldn't be serious! He examined her eyes carefully for a while - there had to be a catch somewhere! Anywhere? Surprisingly, despite a thorough investigation he found none. So, she wasn't joking? She genuinely loved to watch him sing? Wow!

He is so used to thinking beneath her words that he cant believe that there was nothing beyond her dialogue😆...Jo ek din Jallu ko pagal kar degi😆
Kneading his forehead with his fingers, he exhaled awkwardly 'Hmmm...but promise me you're not gonna making a habit of this...'

'I'll try...' she giggled

😆😆 Come on Jo...😆...Tere Jallu ko pareshan kar...I love that😆
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Hope you enjoyed it Embarrassed and if you did, please don't forget to leave likes as it really encourages the writer in me to keep going
We will not only like but also add comments...Not just one but many...Till you say, this writer is fed up and needs no encouragement from harassing readers😆...Please stay away😆

Edited by Pals2411 - 11 years ago
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@ALAKH
Every gl wl want a prsn lyk ur jalal in her lyf. ur writing gvs a crystal clear picture of a relationship that how it shud go.im inspired.n for ur jodha she is , a frnd , a prfct lovr .bt no where dominating nor dominatd. thanx di 4 ds update. plz update soon.👏

🤗 Thanks so so so so much Alakh... thanks a lot...

@ Sammy
(There are so many reasons this name rings a very warm bell you know... it was the name of the first story I received a lot of praise for.. the title of it was Samyukta.. but most used to refer to it as Sammy...)😳
How's your migraine girl? Khayal rakhna apna. I feel so guilty sometimes after pestering you for an update. But within 2-3 days of your last update I start wondering about the next one. I guess I'm not gonna change.
😆 Don't change don't change.. I love you as you are!🤗
Loved this one too. Especially loved their peaceful moments spent together. I'm so hooked on to this story.. you won't believe but today I've been checking IF every half an hour just to see if the udate's come!! That too on cell. Thanks tahe dil se for putting so much efforts into this.
*Sigh* music to my ears eeet eees...
Btw I think I know whom that unfamiliar man's voice belong to. Jodha was told to expect his call no? Am I right? If I'm then can't wait for the next part. (See I told, I'm not going to change).
Who...😕
sorry for all the spelling mistakes. I'm typing from cell. Will get back with proper comments later.
Nah re. 🤗 shows your love/excitement..
But love you for this story yaar.. 🤗
And I love you too...
ps- innova is toyota's 😛
💔 Silly Silly lashy 😭 I duck my face under a sheet and don't come out for 1 week...

@ Ashwini
Wow,very nice.I think the culprit is a girl
Thanks so much dear.. btw, may I ask what made you feel so.. 😳 that the culprit's a girl..
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@jaskaran.kaur08
Beautiful writer...😛😛😛 i love their embarassements and the gang's teasing jokes😉😉😉... they are so cute😳😳😳 i start immagining them like this only... only ur update give a sigh relief from the now ongoing track...😭😭😭... continue dear... if you publish all this chapter and make a abook.. im sure its going to rock..try sometime... update soon..
Ongoing track -> No comments 😆 Btw, I'm not totally flustered about it now ...it has its meaning in the story, I guess.
As for NJAPA... Thanks so so so much my dear dear jas... loved your words of encouragement.. 🤗 Hmmm publish and book... my husband's promised me that if I finish all of it like a good girl (and not abandon it like a story I did previously) that he'll have it edited and published in ekindle (as in its a free medium for readers to read stories...😳)

@Choti

Awww yes... she's been a bit of a troublemaker this chapter.. and Jalal bearing the brunt of it all .. 😆
Yes... kahan purani wali reserved Jo.. ab dekho..Tantrums Queens.. Just like me😎
Way to go Jo 👍🏼 😛😆
Puraani waali Jo... hmm..the thing is Jo was that way only with Ja - a bit stuck up/closed/reserved if you can call it that... she wasn't that way with others (see how she used to be a mischief-monger with her momma/bhabhi/chote bhaiyya etc using her feminine charms with them to get her way etc)
But yes, one massive change in her has happened - she didn't really believe in fairy tales kinda love, in the magic of romance (she thought it was all part of some lovely novel-reading or that only a very fortunate few had that) and she definitely wasn't the biggest fan of the institution of marriage...Jalal's changed ALLL that...
So, now she is just as bad with HER guy 😈 as she is with say her friends/chote bhaiyya etc.. 😆😳
Wow so many loving the troublemaker Jo, I see 😆 after all, we don't get to see ANYTHING like this in the serial... Ja used to be troublemaker.. ab woh bhi something else.. 😆
LOOOL... Arrey yaar... I LOVED these smooth peaceful moments as well... kisne kaha I didn like it.. but phir bhi... mujhe is FF mein bohot bada dhammaaka chahiye... shaadi to u said NO... to phir yaar ek mini SR hi dedo...before marriage waali... lol what m I blabbering 🤣
Chotiii 😲😆

oh man! Whos on call... THE STALKER? Some one else?😕
Hmmm...lets see if you can guess 🤣
Haso mattt😡😡
Omg that definitely made me laugh just a bit more.. 😆

Edited by lashy - 11 years ago
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@divyavm
My sunshine.. 🤗

My writer-e-khaas, Amazing parts 31 and 32 ... Just caught up on both.
Thanchooo...😛

- For part 31: I love how Jodha is so perceptive of Jalal's emotions about that card she received ... How he is reacting is more important than the card itself which I loved
Yes.. I think EVERYONE loved his reactions and her reactions... but to tell you the truth. that poem took a helluva long time to pen.. 😆
Also, what a twist with the card ...
😳
- For part 32: Loved Jodha's quasi-pride and competitiveness on Jalal doing well on his exams ... You describe the mix of emotions so well
She is amazing na... actually, even for a non-career oriented gharelu woman like myself... when it comes to 'common' fields of interest... I do get competitive with my hubby... and we sit back and argue... good timepass for my two lil ones to see who wins... so, I guess its quite natural... 😆

Also, loved how Jalal agreed to sing for his Jodha 😳Though he was so bad it ...
😆

Thanks again for writing such a beautiful story! Keep it coming.
Thanks dear for reading it.. and encouraging me.. 😳

@ Komaliya
Just lovvveeed the last two chapters...😳
Awesome update😃...
Well...will try to catch up the rest of the chapters as well.😃
Nooo don't kill the buildup... 😭 read in order Komaliya..
Thanks dearie btw... 😳
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@varshaakulkarni
Shraddha 🤗 ... how the hell u manage to pen such story 🤗 this chapter had everything ... i loved the way jalal was singing so coyly & innocently only for jodha ❤️, to the bunch of prankster's pulling jo & ja's leg ... was soo cute !!!! the pure & innocence reflects so much .. i am really in love with this story of your's
Thanks sooo much (to the power of 2328973192874) 😆 loved your comments here and by pm...
Hmmm as to why I now prefer reading/writing modern stories.. and not consolidating every OS into a FF...

Ok..for a very long time I've been writing only historicals... starting right from Prithviraj Chauhan days... and in a way, while its novel to start with...after a while it gets very crippling to write .. I can't explore as much with a historical as I can with a modern story... I can't use words like Damn/Shucks/Woah to describe mild annoyance...I was always restricted to phrases like 'Lord, what a travesty!' The scenery and settings for the love story have their shortcomings too since according to protocol there are not many places a queen can wander about...I can't even use the word 'second' to describe passage of time (since there weren't clocks then) but have to stick to moments/spell... if you see what I mean...
That's why, I'm venturing into modern for a while now... 😳 but, its so sweet of you to ask... my dear..I might go back once NJAPA is done... let's see...
Hat's off to your creativity shradhha 🤗 ... but damn my happiness didn't last long when jo's phone rang ... n that instant i guessed its the same maniac stalker ... felt like pulling him out from the phone & beating him black & blue😡
🤗
lashy ... grr grr grrr ... i hate YOUR stalker ...😡
Don't we all.. 😆

@hemakeerti
Hi Shraddha... Yet another amazing chapter... Just loved the teasings of the gang all the way.. So the stalker is into direct action now... Wow... Waiting for next chapter, guessing it would be closer to the revelation of stalker
Hmmm lemme just say this much...if the stalker was to come out into the open now..then..what would I end up putting for the climax...😉
btw, thanks dearie... 🤗

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