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Deepa

@spvd

Trailblazer

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#731

part 5
awesome dear...
excellent...
poor Jodha...
feel sorry for her...
Jalal is being inhuman with her...
hes confused and so troubling and torturing her...
and that Ruqaiya damn her...
Jodha should really humiliate her...
so Jalal has realized his feelings for Jodha?
cont soon dear...

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Anushka

@...Anushka...

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#732

Bhavi di 🤗 🤗 🤗
aaj tak suna tha ki intzaar ka fal meetha hota hai,par itna meetha hota hai ki hum aapke update mein kho jaaye! ! Waah Waah 👏 👏 👏
Standing ovation to my azeez Bhavi di! 👏 👏
She's a ⭐️
Di I was totally lost in this chapter. Jalal was sooo awesome in dis chapter
The way he took care of her, his concern even Radha couldnt ignore ❤️ Such a lovely and making speechless piece it was 😳
And how our lovely Radha wanted to see him at night. She was missing him 😉
Zarina (If I'm right 😛),bechaari Jallu ke gusse ka shikaar ho gayi. I wonder its the first time Jallu ignored her like this 😆 Hayee Radha you have made Jallu crazy 😆
Aww Jallu's entry in Salima's chamber in night, In aankho How he hugged her and asked her," Itni nafrat karti ho humse" Hum to iss line ke kayal ho gaye di 😳 👏
Lovely it was how his words affected Radha. How his intense emotions shocked her
It is indeed true ki nashe mein insaan sach bolta hai ❤️
Ruqaiya maharani chali thi Radha ko sabak sikhaane aur khud beizzat ho gayi. 🤣 Uska chehra dekhne layak hoga!!
And the precap is just testing my patience ❤️
Update soony soony, iss bacchi ki dilli tamanna hai 😳
Love you endlessly ❤️🤗

Edited by Anushka8722 - 11 years ago

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rachana999

@rachana999

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#733

Hi bhavini,

Thanks for PM. u r my first friend in buddy list. 😊 .
I love this story so much that I will check at least 3 times a day to see whether u updated the story or not.
seriously I like RKG than ITHL. And, pls update regularly . last time I got so much angry 😡 on u, I started scolding u for not updating and myself for so much addiction to the story.
u don't believe , I read RKG so many times I cant count. I am sure there r many more silent readers like me who like ur story.
please update the story regularly. . Reg., story, I will say u r fabulous 👏 . I like some people in this forum. U people's command on English is really fantastic ⭐️ .
esp., bhavini, the way u write stories, I mean the ideas are very impressive. Some times, I feel the CV's can make u JA story writer 😉 .
keep going and make us happy with ur works. All the best. 😊 . Once again , do the update regularly.

Rachana

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--a.ishu--

@--a.ishu--

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#734

Wowww di!! Killer update!! I luvv this ff soo much.. Plzz update soon na!! N thank u soo much fa d pm!!

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shahbhavini

@shahbhavini

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#735

Originally posted by: varshaakulkarni
haaye haaye mein bhi res 😆

Hey bhavvviii ... sorry for the delay ... I was out for shopping .. kal seafood party hai ghar pe ... so hubby ko help bhi kar rahi thi ... btw abhi just update khatam kiya hai ... okay I am starting my blabbering ...😆

1) Ye tera jalal pe mujhe bahaut zyada taras aa raha hai bhaaviii 😆... he is so so soo sooo much confused ... bechara kabhi khud pe gussa aaraha hai ki he is falling for a bandhi, kabhi radha pe gussa aaraha hai ... n next thing is he is not able to control his emotions for radha ... usko dekhte hi lattu ho jata hai majnu ki tarah ... n then when radha makes him realize that he is king & she is bandhi ... again he recovers from the love trance of radha 😆 & is clueless of what he was doing ...OMG ...

Ufff ... bhaaaviii this chapter was literally a masterpiece ... my dear ... the amount of emotion of confusion in jalal & in jodha described was worth praising 👏👏 ... i mean seriously ... i was crying , the next moment i was laughing , & again getting confused with jalal ... seriously u have made me crazzyyy bhaavvviii ... no wonder you are a great writer ⭐️... no doubt about that ⭐️👏

2) The next thing was the meena bazaar description ... I mean from where the hell you get such ideas bhaaaviii 😆... again the description of meena bazaar , the number of competitions held ... was so nicely explained by reva to radha ... & I could sense a bit of regret in jodha for not being available for meena bazaar 😆 ... I loved the way jodha was cursing rukaiyya 😆 ... I was 🤣 when jodha was thinking of slapping ruks ... & me too was imagining that with jodha 😆

I so wish jodha gives one tight slap to rukaiyya before leaving agra 🤣 ...

3) I also loved the way jalal shouted rukaiyya infront of everybody during the daawat 🤣... mein toh chahti thi ... jalal uth ke chaar laafe aur bukke bhi lagade ruks ko 🤣 ... kaash aisa hota ... never mind sabke samne chillaya .. yahi kaafi hai .. mere kaleje ko thandak pahuncha ...😉

4) Jalal was so much concerned when jodha burnt her hands ... bechare ko kuch samajh mein hi nahi aaraha tha ... he only made her to prepare the hammam n then when she burnt her hands ... he felt the sting & was yelling at her ... OMG 🤣 ... mein ne bola tha na bhaavviii .. mujhe tere ye jalal pe bahaut taras aaraha hai 🤣 ... ye jodha aur kitna satayegi jalal ko ...

she has completely ruined his sleep , peace , khana , peena ..everything ... bechara shauchalaya bhi jaa paa raha hai ki nahi ... i dont think he has peace in shauchalay also 🤣 ...

Ohhh gawd ... awesomee update bhaavviii ... 👏 my reactions while reading the update 😛, 😃 , 😭, 😉,☺️ , 😕 , 😡, , 😲 , 😭 , 👏 , , ... ye saare reactions while reading this update ... awessoome , amazing , fabulous ...

I just cannot wait ... the revelation of jodha as a princess ... then toh mera jalal , zameen aasman ek kar dega ..usse paane ke liye ☺️ ... aur fir aise toot padega uske upar ... ☺️ ...

I will reply soon to your comment sweetu... congratulation U became Goldie... Jaan

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shahbhavini

@shahbhavini

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#736

😆

Originally posted by: hely
O Nadaan shohar thread me aaja

thread me aaja... thread me aaja aa aa..
update de jaa...aajaa...😆

update naa sahi to teaser leke aaja...

teaser bi nahi h to short chappy leke aaja...

short chappy nhi h to..time hi btaa jaa...

aaja update leke aaja...😆😆

Meri Shayari... Kesi hai tu... Tu sach me always kya kya shayri leke aati hai... tu aur Aisha milke ek comedy show bana sakte ho... sach me my cutie pie wife... tera yeh shohar to tere yeh hunar ka kayal ho gaya😆

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Manishi1

@Manishi1

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#737

Hi Dear..I like this FF a lot. Your Jodha is too strong and determined. It will be interesting to see how Jalal melts into this hot Candy😛. Keep updating.

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swetha

@sw123

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#738

superb awesome excellent update

👏👏👏👏👏

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shahbhavini

@shahbhavini

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#739

😆

Originally posted by: varshaakulkarni
haaye haaye mein bhi res 😆

Hey bhavvviii ... sorry for the delay ... I was out for shopping .. kal seafood party hai ghar pe ... so hubby ko help bhi kar rahi thi ... btw abhi just update khatam kiya hai ... okay I am starting my blabbering ...😆

Vow Party time😃

1) Ye tera jalal pe mujhe bahaut zyada taras aa raha hai bhaaviii 😆... he is so so soo sooo much confused ... bechara kabhi khud pe gussa aaraha hai ki he is falling for a bandhi, kabhi radha pe gussa aaraha hai ... n next thing is he is not able to control his emotions for radha ... usko dekhte hi lattu ho jata hai majnu ki tarah ... n then when radha makes him realize that he is king & she is bandhi ... again he recovers from the love trance of radha 😆 & is clueless of what he was doing ...OMG ...

Ufff ... bhaaaviii this chapter was literally a masterpiece ... my dear ... the amount of emotion of confusion in jalal & in jodha described was worth praising 👏👏 ... i mean seriously ... i was crying , the next moment i was laughing , & again getting confused with jalal ... seriously u have made me crazzyyy bhaavvviii ... no wonder you are a great writer ⭐️... no doubt about that ⭐️👏

heheheheh Tuje Jallu pe taras aaati hai... muje bhi... U know bichre ko pata nahi chal raha hai usko ho kya raha hai... Radha ke siva aur kuch dikhta nahi... pehla pehla pyar hai...hota hota hai... soon apne aap ko sambhal lega...par problem hai ki jaha wo thoda control karta hai...Radha koi naya panga leke aa jati hai... Yeh chapter me muje usko pura confuse hai ... har min pe different emotion...

Yaar I am so glad U like love this chapter... Yaar yeh story thodi different hai... It will take real long for Jodha to accept her love...Jalal to accept kar lega but Radha will not... for long long time... Iss story me romance dream me hi ho sakta hai...

2) The next thing was the meena bazaar description ... I mean from where the hell you get such ideas bhaaaviii 😆... again the description of meena bazaar , the number of competitions held ... was so nicely explained by reva to radha ... & I could sense a bit of regret in jodha for not being available for meena bazaar 😆 ... I loved the way jodha was cursing rukaiyya 😆 ... I was 🤣 when jodha was thinking of slapping ruks ... & me too was imagining that with jodha 😆

I so wish jodha gives one tight slap to rukaiyya before leaving agra 🤣 ...

Yeh story is mainly based on Radha... and Meena bazar me lets see Radha karti kya hai...

Yeh Radha ka chale to Ruku ka churma bana ke kha jaye... She hates her... they will clash so much in next chapter...

3) I also loved the way jalal shouted rukaiyya infront of everybody during the daawat 🤣... mein toh chahti thi ... jalal uth ke chaar laafe aur bukke bhi lagade ruks ko 🤣 ... kaash aisa hota ... never mind sabke samne chillaya .. yahi kaafi hai .. mere kaleje ko thandak pahuncha ...😉

hehehhe chalo teri ichha puri hui😃

4) Jalal was so much concerned when jodha burnt her hands ... bechare ko kuch samajh mein hi nahi aaraha tha ... he only made her to prepare the hammam n then when she burnt her hands ... he felt the sting & was yelling at her ... OMG 🤣 ... mein ne bola tha na bhaavviii .. mujhe tere ye jalal pe bahaut taras aaraha hai 🤣 ... ye jodha aur kitna satayegi jalal ko ...

she has completely ruined his sleep , peace , khana , peena ..everything ... bechara shauchalaya bhi jaa paa raha hai ki nahi ... i dont think he has peace in shauchalay also 🤣 ...

🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

Sauchalay... omg... Yaar Jalal ka dimang sach me pagal ho gaya hai.. vohi usko bolta hai hamam ke liye aur vohi chillata hai🤣

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Ohhh gawd ... awesomee update bhaavviii ... 👏 my reactions while reading the update 😛, 😃 , 😭, 😉,☺️ , 😕 , 😡, , 😲 , 😭 , 👏 , , ... ye saare reactions while reading this update ... awessoome , amazing , fabulous ...

I just cannot wait ... the revelation of jodha as a princess ... then toh mera jalal , zameen aasman ek kar dega ..usse paane ke liye ☺️ ... aur fir aise toot padega uske upar ... ☺️ ...

YAAR TU INTI PYARI COMMENT DEGI TO ME... TERE LIYE LIKHTI RAHU... YAAR I AM BLUSHING...😳

AUR HA JALAL KO JAB PATA CHALEGA RADHA IS JODHA...PATA NAHI KYA HOGA... BAHOT BADA HUNGAMA... PURA MEHEL PE EARTHQUACK AYEGA... WAIT AND WATCH😆

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ash

@ashpat

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#740

Bhavini, sorry for late reply. I noticed how u were going to write around 5000 words but ended up writing around 9000 words. I think there is a little fault of mine too becasue when u sent it to me for review- and I was like there seems somethign missing and u felt same way and that's why ended up writing part 2 and 3.Now, i feel complete. But i noticed u have added two or three paragraphs more when jalal ends up waking up early before radha and checks if she is alright and his resolve to stay away from her.

Anyway, back to things I liked. One thing I have LOVED about u and ur stories is the description of characters' thoughts and feelings. You don't leave anything for imagination which is a good thing. we don 't have to guess what they are feeling. I really get amazed with the way u have show jalal's kashmakash (dilemma) between heart and mind and even radha is starting to have conflicting thoughts now. I like how jalal keeps saying he won't see her or meet her but ends up near her or thinking about her. I like radha and reva's conversation about meena bazaar and also like how u described the groups and competition and also the prize of spending time with jalal. I just hope radha accept the prize when she wins rather than saying i don't want it or she could say that but then ends up spending time with him anyway.I LOVED when radha was calling ruq chudail.lol I love jalal and radha's arguments. So, jalal wanted radha to bath him hmmm, full on GM, But, poor radha, i felt extremely bad for her that she had to carry hot water when she is so weak and on top of that she burnt her hands but must applaud her that she till kept making lep. it must have hurt her like hell. i liked jalal's concern and compassion for her when she is unconscious. Even radha was shocked with the care. But, did i really read that jalal KISSED radha's forehead, cheeks and kiss and she got lost in it. oh wow. but then suddenly both realized it so jalal let radha go. And ya, i also liked how jalal kept seeing radha in zakira - although latter reminded of that witch benazir. Uff taht ruq, how can she be so heartless but I liked radha giving tit for tat to ruq. I can't believe how radha worked this hard in kitchen for long hours but loved the way she explained the dishes and finally won and how jalal loved the food too and then she fell unconscious...

update soon. u're welcome. muah.