OS - On current MU track Part 8 on Pg37 Updt 12/04/14

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sara

@SARA4444

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#91

amazing os

⭐️

continue soon

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Nikki

@NikkiReed

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#92

Sorry nancy couldnt quote before part as i was busy but read all parts and loved it to core... ur really an amazing writer...👏 love ur writting and pls update soon... and make it a FF and just like pri said give it a name... and update this OS and all ur FF's soon...😆😆

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Surish

@Surish

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Posted: 11 years ago

#93

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Deepika

@dkorumilli

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Posted: 11 years ago

#94

read all chapters . Amazing story. Really loved all chapters and felt relieved that he made Moti read it. Your chapters are so good that I am lost in reading them and when I am looking for more update completed and need to wait for next chapter😡. Update soon

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Soumya

@baubles

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#95

Heyya Nams...amazing take on the current track dear...!!⭐️⭐️

Sad to see Jo leave...hope Jalal gets her back soon! Glad that Jalal knows the contents of her letter...😳

Update soon!! Love ya..🤗

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JAN_SA

@JAN_SA

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+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#96

loved it cant wait to read more

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Inaya Haya

@lilmzsunshine

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#97

oh this is nice!!! I just discovered it.

If only the real story goes somewhat like this ...

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Deepa

@spvd

Trailblazer

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#98

part 4
awesome...
poor Jodha...
thank God he asked Moti to read...
else once again that Maham would have read some thing else...
what will he do now?
cont soon dear...

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Pallavi

@Pals2411

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#99

Princess, read all the 4 chapters at one go and I must say it has turned far far better than our JA😛 I loved the fact that you used the drunk Jallu to spell out his frustrations, his turmoil and thoughts to Jo😊 There was no unnecessary dragging, no over-drama during their big confrontation. I liked how he rested his head on her lap after he feel asleep due to excessive drinking. I can very well understand Jo's pain and her walking out of the palace

I loved the letter trick also dearie and more so when it was read by Moti. Thankfully, you didn't play with our emotions like the CVs normally do😳 MA 😡😡 Moti played an important role here, by not only reading the letter but also informing Jallu about the stranger meeting (Sujamal), how Jallu was defended by Suju during jashn and about the vachan part which if even Jo was there would not have revealed🥱😃 Loved it dear. Hamare CVs ko thoda akal aata to ab yeh naya DHAKKA promo ki zarurat nahin hoti🥱😡

Great going. Update soon. I want to know what happens hereafter. Jallu kya karega? Jo kidhar hai? Patch up kaisa hoga😛