OS - On current MU track Part 8 on Pg37 Updt 12/04/14

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Part 1 -- below

Part 2 -- Page 5

Part 3 -- Page 9

Part 4 -- Page 11

Part 5 -- Page 18

Part 6 -- Page 21

Part 7-- page 31

Part 8 - Page 37

Jalal stumbled in her Hojra.. The wind was blowing with casual coolness.. His vision was a little blurry.. But he knew he was near her..
He moved towards her bed. There she was.. Looking like a beautiful angelic sleeping beauty... For a while.. He forgot all his worries and pain.. A smile crept upon his face as he saw her sleeping peacefully...
He moved aside the curtain that was coming in between him and her. Now he could see her without any hinderance. He sat in her feet gazing upon her soft feet. She was such a pure angel. As he moved a finger upon her feet.. She moved them and took them back... Ja was surprised... He smiled at her innocence... He got up and moved to her bedside... Some strands of her hair were disturbing her sleep by coming on her face... He got annoyed... He ran his finger around her face and set her hair behind her ear lobe...
Jo in her sleep felt his soft touch and smiled. She murmured.. Shahenshah... Aap gaye na.. Hum jaante the aap zaroor aayenge.. Ja was taken aback.. Wat did she just say.. He giggled.. He said.. Haan hum aa gye.. Humnein waada jo kiya thaa aapse...
He rested his palm upon her cheek and slowly caressed it. She turned around her side and grabbed his hand in her embrace. Jalal who had leaned down a little ..completely laid down near her... Seeing the beautiful smile upon her face.. He immediately remembered how smilingly she had lied to him about her meetings... Tears began to form in his eyes... He took her palm in his palm and asked to her.. Kyon Jodha begum.. Kyon.. Kyon kiya aapne humare saath aisa.. Soon his tears fell on her eyes and there... There she opened her eyes to find a drunken Jalal by her side...
She was shocked to find him so near her... She immediately got up but as she tried to get up.. She found her palm fixed in his hand very tightly... She stuttered.. Shah..shahenshah aap yahaan... Aur..ye kya... Jalal smiled bitterly... Jodha begum aap puch to humse aise rahin hain jaise hum koi gair mard hain.. Aapki tasalli ke liye bata dein ki hum aapke shauhar hi hain.. Jo gave an expression of not-so-funny...

Suddenly jo found Ja's grip tightening over her palm.. She winced in little pain.. Jalal got up and said.. Vaise gair mard se yaad aaya... Agar humari jagah koi gair mard bhi hota to..aap itna gussa nhi kartin..kyon sahi kaha n humnein...

Jo was not only shocked but disgusted as well.. What did he just say...
Kya... Kyaa keh rahe hain aap... Before she could say anything.. Her tears were flowing down her eyes and her throat choked. Jalal released her palm and looked into her deep eyes. She looked so innocent. But then why did she lie..and that too for so long.

Jalal held her by her shoulders and asked her in a roaring voice... Ye aansoon humein mat dikhaiye.. Humein bas ye bataiye ki aapne aisa kyon kiya... Bataaiye humein... Kyun milti rahin ekgair mard se.. Humse kyun chipayaa aapne ye sab... Kyon humari dosti ka naajaayaz faaydaa uthaayaa... Boliye kyun...

Jodha's heart was in her mouth. What all was he talking about.

She jerked off his hands from her shoulders and said loudly basss... Bass kijiye shahenshah
Jalal again grabbed her shoulders tightly and jerked her again. Tellme damn it..why did you deceive my trust..i cant believe you would do this... Aapne humara bharosa toda hai Jodha Begum.. Hum aapko kabhi muaf nahi kar payenge... Now his voice was more teary than angry.. He slowly leaned down a little in her lap as liquor was taking over him... Pata hai agar allah bhi humse aakar kehta naki aap kisi gair mard se milti hain to bhi hum vishwaas nahi karte... Kyinki hum jaante hain aap kabhi aisa nahi karengi...lekin humnein khud apni aankhon se dekha hai aapko usse milte huye... Kyaa aapko ek baar bhi humara khayal nahi aaya Jodha begum...

His voice was getting lower and lower as sleep took over him...he rested his head in her lap while Jodha was too shocked to say anything... Her tears did not seem to stop.
Jodha couldnt believe wat she had just heard. She was broken beyond repair. Did he just allege her of keeping relation with other men? Did he just say she met with other man? Her heart skipped a beat. Then..suddenly..she remembered..he had said that he wouldnt have believed god if he hadnt seen from his own eyes... This was an irony for her... Where on one hand she felt he trusted her so much... On other hand she felt terrible... Just by seeing her with a man.. He has assumed so worse of her... This was a limit... She gently lifted up his head and made him lay down on the bed comfortably... She never knew she wud hv to see this side of him... How innocent he looked.. But he had alleged her for spmething that was unacceptable by her...she was now quite understanding..so as to why he was being so rude and indifferent to her in past few days...

Where she should have felt like killing that very instant when he was accusing her... She felt relieved for some unknown reason...she had come to know about the reason for his anger...

She didnt feel angry... She felt broken and deceived... Yes she had also committed a mistake by not telling him about her secret visits... But the way he had accused her left her poorly shaken...

She decided to leave his palace for there was no reason to stay with someone who would believe anything just by seeing things...but before that.. She made sure she'll apologise for her grave mistake as well...




Was typing this OS for my IFian WA gang... Giving them live OS...then thought of sharing on IF as well...will post Part 2 soon... Will send pms later 😳

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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres... KILLER... SUPERB!!!!šŸ‘

WA Gang is lucky to read this superb live update of this OS... It was so much... we were waiting for your each para....

Let's come to update... Mind Blowingā­ļøā­ļøā­ļø... Amazingā­ļøā­ļøā­ļø...

U R writing skill... Subhan AallahšŸ‘... mua mua🄱

I loved how U have written and showed drunken Jalal's state... Yaar on complain... OS me drunk stat me ek kissi mil jati tošŸ˜†... Me GM😳... Just kidding... Jalal mind is filled with doubt... how can he kiss... part below blew me away... how hurtful Jalal is... He said everything in drunken stat... in his dialogue two feelings shown... 1st that she has not accepted him... 2nd she has relation with someone else...


Jalal smiled bitterly... Jodha begum aap puch to humse aise rahin hain jaise hum koi gair mard hain.. Aapki tasalli ke liye bata dein ki hum aapke shauhar hi hain.. Jo gave an expression of not-so-funny...

Suddenly jo found Ja's grip tightening over her palm.. She winced in little pain.. Jalal got up and said.. Vaise gair mard se yaad aaya... Agar humari jagah koi gair mard bhi hota to..aap itna gussa nhi kartin..kyon sahi kaha n humnein...


Jo was not only shocked but disgusted as well.. What did he just say...

Poor Jo felt deceived and sad... She knew that she is as fault too... After this accuse I am sure she will leave Agra in next flight...lol...

Yaar... I am in love with UR writing... Sorry for late comment... LOVE U JAAN...šŸ¤—šŸ¤—šŸ¤—šŸ¤—šŸ¤—


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wonderful... plz update soon nancy!!!
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Awwwsum buddy plz continue rakhna plz N PM me :)
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Loved it 😊

Wanted to see such thing in show.

Now please update soon Nancy
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It was written wonderfully so far please please update soon and pm me when you do..😊
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Nanu darlinggg... šŸ‘ woowww loved ur update to core... It was fantastic fabulous superb amazing excellent and not even getting words to describe it... Wooowww... And update next part soon... And tell me one thing ki y can't u go and become the cvs of JA if u would be cvs of JA then the show would be in 1st position till the time it airs and why are u making this as OS why can't u make it a FF... šŸ˜† šŸ˜‰
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fabulous update dear😊nd thnx fr giving dis OS...iss quiting nd nt quiting ne to dimag hi kharaab kr rkha h😔plz update nd pm me too if pssiblešŸ˜‰
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wonderful... plz update soon nancy!!!



Thank you so much NIKKI dear 😳

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