FF:Hum hein sirf aapke liye - Ch 9 First hug updated - Pg 8

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hi Friends,
I am silent viewer of this forum. Everyday morning I wake up and open only this forum.
These days I am only thinking about Jodha and Jalal. So, I attempted a FF. First thought of writing OS, but it turned up I have to write a very long one.

This is my first attempt, so any comments are welcome 😊

Chapter Index

Chapter 1 - Pg 1

Chapter 2 - Pg 1

Chapter 3 - Pg 2

Chapter 4 - Pg 3

Chapter 5 - Pg 3

Chapter 6 - Pg 5

Chapter 7 - Pg 5

Chapter 8 - Pg 7

Chapter 9 - Pg 8 First hug 😳

Hum hein sirf aapke liye


Chapter 1 - Jodha's sacrifice

It is almost midnight. But it is not yet end of the day for Jodha. She is worried and anxious that she is unable to stop Benazir from going to Jalal. Moreover no one in the palace except for Salima begum believes her. She sits in front of Kanha praying desperately and cursing her helplessness. Just then Moti came running to Jodha and said that Benazir is going to Jalal's room.

Jodha rushes to Jalal's room. Moti runs behind her. She wants to go inside and throw this vishkanya from Jalal's room but did not dare to do it. Jodha thought I will just wait here, but will keep an eye on them.

Inside Jalal's room, Benazir is offering grapes and wine to Jalal. Jalal is in no mood to entertain Benazir. His mind is thinking only about Jodha and the discussion he had with Hakim. Why does he feel weird whenever he thinks about Jodha? This weird feeling is neither painful nor joyful. It is kind of both. He is so angry on Jodha but cannot spend even a single day without seeing her. Maybe Ruqqaiya is correct, I am not the same Jalal when Jodha is around. Before I used to punish who ever made me angry. But I am different with Jodha. Why is she special?

Benazir observed that Jalal is not interested in her; his body is here but mind elsewhere. She thinks that now there is only one way to attack Jalal. She pours the wine in his glass and offers it to Jalal. Just when Jalal was about to take it, Benazir takes the glass and takes a sip from it. Shehenshah ko dene se pehle iss kaneez ko dekhna chahiya iss mein kuch vish tho nahi hein. Jalal nods his head. After taking a sip, Benazir offers the glass to Jalal. Jalal takes it and is about to drink it. Benazir thinks ab iss Jalal ka khel khatham.😆

Jodha is shocked to see what happened just now. What if her Shehenshah drinks that wine? I should save him and rushes inside the room. She runs and shouts nahi Shehenshah vuse mat pee jiye and she sprangs and takes the glass from his hand and drinks it in one sip.

Jalal is shocked to see Jodha here. Jodha drinks it and falls on the ground her body slowly turning green. Benazir tries to slip away silently, but Jalal shouts for the guards and asks them to catch Benazir. He holds Jodha in his arms and shouts for hakim. Jodha says hume kshma kar dijiye Shehenshah aapki kaksh mein aise hi aagaye, vush mein vish hein isliye hume aana pada. She is unable to say anything more, her eyes are blurred and head is reeling. Moti is crying non-stop.

Jalal is silent with shock, he has no words to say. His mind is blocked, he cannot see Jodha changing color. Hakim rushes into Jodha's room and immediately gives her medicine.

Hakim tells Jalal that she needs rest and the medicine will take some time to show effect.


Jalal lifts her and makes her sleep on his bed. Moti is crying uncontrollably. Moti says, Shehenshah Jodha aur humne Benazir ko saap se vish lethe hua dekha tha, lekin aapne vuspe vishwas nahi kiya. Vus din se Jodha aapki parchayi bankar aapki raksha kar rahi hein. Jalal stares at Moti with confused look, unable to believe what she just said.

Hameeda, Salima begum and Ruqqaiya begum rush into Jalal's room. Hameeda couldn't believe what she is seeing. Jalal ko bachane ke liye Jodha ne vish peeliye, hume maaf kar dijiye Jodha humne aap pe barosa nahi kiya, Hameeda cries holding Jodha's hand.

Ruqqaiya is shocked to see Jodha's actions. To save Jalal's life how can she take poison by herself? How can a person be so selfless? Salima says humne bathaya thaana ammijan Jodha begum Shehenshah se beintheeha mohabat karthi hein, isiliye vusne Shehenshah ko saaya ki tarah mehafoosh raka hein. Jalal is shocked to listen what Salima begum just said. Jodha humse mohabat karti hein...ye baat sunne mein kitna acha lag raha hein hume. Agar mohabat karthi hein tho vus din humse yeisa bartaav kyon kiya hein?

Moti says jee haa Salima begum aap sahi kah rahi hein. Jodha Shehenshah se bohat prem karthi hein lekin maanne ke liye tayar nahi hein. Raat din Shehenshah ki surakshah ke bare mein hi soch thi hein. Vusne Shehenshah ki surakshah ka vrat bhi raki hein, aaj poora din kuch khaaya bhi nahi hein. Hameeda breaks down and prays yaa allah meri bachi ka kayal rakhna.

Jalal is speechless, Jodha humare liya itna kuch kar rahi hein. He just left the room without saying anything.

Precap: Ruqqaiya's realization and Jodha-Jalal's inner turmoil


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Posted: 11 years ago
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WOw dear !!👏👏 Superbbb!!! Loved it to core.. the way you wrote everything was simply awesome.. Loved how Jodha drank the poison to save Jalal..😳 And loved how You portrayed Jalal's feelings.. SIMPLY AWESOME !!!⭐️⭐️⭐️ Glad that you showed Moti and Salima telling about how much Jo loved Jalal yet she doesn't accept it..😳 Reallly awesome piece.. You write amazingly.. Please update sooon!!👏⭐️😳

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I am desperately waiting for next update !! Pm me please!!😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thank you for such wonderful comments😊😊😊. you made my day 😳I will update soon.
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Originally posted by: kpranavi05

Thank you for such wonderful comments😊😊😊. you made my day 😳I will update soon.

Your welcome !!😃 Pz update soon!😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Here is the second chapter. Hope you guys like it...please keep the comments coming 😊

Chapter 2 - Ruqqaiya's confusion cleared

Jalal left his room and met Adkha saab on the way. He orders to take Benazir and Zakira to the prison. He informs him that he wants to be alone for some time and no one should be allowed to disturb him.

In Jalal's room, Jodha is silently sleeping on Jalal's bed. Hakim is regularly checking on Jodha for any improvement. Jodha's color is slowing turning back to normal. Hakim informs Hameeda begum that medicine is showing its effect and Jodha will be conscious in few hours. Hameeda prays allah thera laakh laakh shukr hein ..tumne humari bachee ko bacha liya.

Ruqqaiya is still in state of shock. One side she is happy that her Jalal is safe but on the other side she is confused thinking why Jodha did this. Does Jodha really want to become the khaas begum? Answer immediately came to her..nahi agar Jodha begum khaas bana chathi tho apne jaan ki baaji nahi khelthi. Who sach mein Jalal ki parva karthi hein. Vusne kabhi bhi humse apna jagah cheene ki koshish nahi khi. Jab humara talaq hone vala tha, vusne hi hume bachaya hein. Jab humne vuse thofa diya tho bohat kush hui ki humne vuse achi tarah se baat kiya hein. Voh humare saamne kabhi bhi koi galat barthav nahi kiya. Lagtha hein hum vunse jalthe hein voh humse nahi. Hum vunki nek soch se jalthe hein, hume darr hein ki Jalal bhi vunki sacha dil deker vuski aur chala jayega. Haan humari soch hi galath hein, hume itni buri barthav nahi karna chahiya Jodha begum se.

Just then Maham anga enters the room and is irritated to see Hameeda begum's concern for Jodha. She pulls Ruqqaiya begum outside and tries to poison her ears. Ruqqaiya begum vusko voh jeher peene ki jaroorat kya hein, vuss neeche phek bhi sakthi thi. Abhi ye jeher peekar Jalal ki aur kareeb aane ki koshish kar rahi hein. Ruqqaiya gets irritated listening to her. Khamosh Maham anga ab yek aur baat bhi nahi Jodha begum ke bare mein. Vunhone Jalal ki jaan bachiyi hein. Itne saare begume hein lekin kisine bhi Jalal ki suraksha ke bare mein nahi socha. Hume aaj saaf hogaya hein kaun sahi aur kaun galath. Ab aapko jyaada bolne ki jarrorath nahi hein. Maham is shocked to see transformed Ruqqaiya.

Ruqqaiya enters Jalal's room and tells Hameeda - ammijaan aap jaake aaram kijiye, hum rahenge Jodha begum ke saath. Hameeda says nahi Ruqqaiya begum jab tak Jodha ko hosh nahi aathi, hum yaha se nahi jaayenge.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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WOW.. awesome start dear.. loved it ! You write so nicely.. loved the chap..👏👏

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: SShreShthA

WOW.. awesome start dear.. loved it ! You write so nicely.. loved the chap..👏👏

thank you thank you..comments keeps the motivation up 😊
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wow it was an awesome start dear
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Wow , nice FF , liked both the parts 👏

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