SS: ~Ehsaas~updatd chptr 14 on page 81 - Page 43

Created

Last reply

Replies

539

Views

179.5k

Users

63

Likes

1.5k

Frequent Posters

Pallavvi thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: aanchal_c

babe when do we get the next update,benzo ko jaldi bahar nikalo in a dramatic style and jodha ko bacha lo.๐Ÿ˜†

aww...aanchal...i can sense your anxiety...๐Ÿ˜ƒ
thanku so much for the update requests...๐Ÿ˜‰
i ll update it tomorrow...๐Ÿ˜ณ
abhi likha nahi...๐Ÿ˜†
b/w this is first time ever u used any smiley...bcz its really rare to find...๐Ÿ˜†
dun worry darling...jalal jake sidhe gala pakdega uska...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜ก
i love u so gave u a clue๐Ÿ˜†
Pallavvi thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: srividhya68

finally benazir will be out...
wonderful update
loved it

thanku vidya๐Ÿ˜ณ
Pallavvi thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Anju_S

Wow awesome updates... ๐Ÿ˜Š

hey anju...thanks dear๐Ÿ˜ƒ
Heeralicious thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Pallavvi

oh my god...๐Ÿ˜ฒ
now to i myself know that tere review ke reply ka pehla word yehi likhna hai...๐Ÿ˜†
every time u leave me speechless and spellbound by your response...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ
yaar nancy tujhe mujhme esa kya dikh jata hai jo itti taarif karti hai...๐Ÿ˜ณ
i feel like crying in happiness...๐Ÿ˜ญ
what a colorful and eye pleasing this review is...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ƒ.
i m really glad that u like the chamber wala scene...๐Ÿ˜ณโญ๏ธ
love u so so so so much...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿค—โค๏ธ
and i ll try to update soon...may be by tomorrow night...๐Ÿ˜•

LOL!๐Ÿ˜† Thankss!! Yar I give you such review Coz u DESERVE it !!๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
I am sachi mein in love with your writing.. I have been like crazyyy for ur stories from the time I had started reading Ishqzaade.. Your writings are readers' delight !!!Embarrassed
Therefore, you deserve such reviews!!! Love ya babes...Update sooon!EmbarrassedClapStar๐Ÿ˜ƒ
aanchal_c thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago
hey when will u continue this ff...๐Ÿ˜Š
Pallavvi thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago
Hello friends...๐Ÿ˜ƒ
i m back with the update...๐Ÿ˜‰
sorry for the delay...but you know the reason...๐Ÿ˜ญ
this update is esp. dedicated to all Benzo haters...*including me*๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜ก
plz forgive the writing mistakes๐Ÿ˜ณ

Chapter 11:-

Raashid: - ho gaya janaab...ab aap dekh sakte hai...

(Jalal stopped at once...and looked at him...his heartbeats started growing faster and faster...he slowly stepped towards mirza and stood beside him...as soon as he watched it...his eyes widened in immense shock...)

Jalal: - (shocked) Benazir...

(But he was still in a dilemma...that how could a baandhi have that much audacity to target a shenshah's begum...how dare she??... How and when did she do that??...jodha never liked her presence so how is it possible that she dint protest while benazir's attack...as hakim sahib said that there were no signs of fight back or protest by her...his mind was struggling with a storm of thoughts...when suddenly his attention shifted towards the morning practice fight held b/w jodha and Benazir...and the time when his sight had become blurred for few minutes due to the dust all around...and when the dust came down...Jodha's hand was on her neck and she was mourning in pain...every moment became alive in front of his eyes...he immediately understood everything... ...jalal murmured to himself...."oh no...!! How could I ever forget that...how could you ignore that fight jalal...she did everything right in front of your eyes...and you were standing there like a fool...oh god...what have I done??...I myself put jodha begum in this danger...she was not willing to be a part of it...but I forced her...taunted on her...I am responsible for her condition... ...what kind of husband I am??...who couldn't even protect his wife...you don't deserve her jalal...you just don't..."...jalal was so much enraged and ashamed on himself that for a moment he felt like killing himself...he clenched his fist really tight and hit it hard on the wall present at the entrance in anguish...put his head on his fist...and bowed it down in turmoil)

(Seeing jalal's reaction...Mirza moved towards him and put his hand on his shoulder...and asked in a worried voice...."What happened bhai jaan??...are you alright??...do you know her...?"...jalal who was tilting his head down till now...lifted it up... his eyes started burning in rage like fire...he was so much furious that his body almost started trembling because of it...his mind had almost stopped working for that moment...the only thing that he could think of and make out was... because of that Benazir...his jodha was in this much drastic condition...because of her...she was almost at death's door...he turned with a jerk and again reached near the portrait that the sketcher had drawn...he put off his precious necklace and gave it to the sketcher as a reword...and ordered him to leave...he took the portrait in his hands and stared at it with fuming yet tearful eyes...)

Hakim: -(confused) aap kuch bolte kyu nahi bhai jaan??...aap pehchante hai ise...??

Jalal: -(in a husky yet damn angry voice) bahut achi tarah... (Now his voice became a bit regretful)....humse bahut badi galti ho gayi mirza...jane unjaane humne khud apne hi haatho se jodha begum ko maut ke kuyeen me dhakel diya... (I myself pushed her into this death's well unknowingly...).humari aankho ke samne sab kuch hota raha...aur hum waha khade hoker unki maut ka tamasha dekhte rahe...magar ab hum jante hai ke hume kya karna hai...(he looked at the portrait of Benazir in his hands with utmost disgust and tore it away into pieces...tossed it into air...and continued really angrily as his fury crossed all its limits...)...benazir....(gritting his teeth)...I won't spare you at any cost...you have committed the biggest mistake of your life...you will have to pay for it...you have to die...you will have to die benazir...khatam kar dege hum tumhe...

(and with it he hurried towards the bed in rage ... picked up his shamshir and made his way towards the exit to leave for benazir's chamber...Mirza tried to stop him and rushed behind him...before he could reach the entrance...mirza came and stood in front of him...preventing him to go outside...the thrust of that vishkanya's blood was so much evident on jalal's face to mirza...he had turned into a devil at that moment...that would go to any extent to punish his culprit...)

Jalal: -(shouted in extreme anger) hat jaao humare raste se mirza...hum use zinda nahi chorege ...usne humari begum ko marne ki koshish ki hai...rasta choro humara mirza...

Mirza: - (held his shoulders...trying to calm him down) nahi bhai jaan...ye aap kya karne jaa rahe hai...aap ek shenshah hai...is tarah jaldbaazi(haste) aur gusse me aaker koi kadam mat uthayiye...

(but jalal was way too outraged to listen to anything...the only words that were ringing again and again in his ears were... "Benazir is responsible for jodha's condition...she doesn't deserve to live anymore"...before mirza could speak any further...he jerked his hands off...and pushed him aside in anger...and made his way out towards Benazir's chamber all fuming like a hungry tiger on hunt ... )

(Mirza knew his brother's anger really well...that it was really hard to control him when he was furious...there was no use of talking to him right now...but he had to do something to stop him...because at this time jalal was not in his senses...he had no idea what he was going to do...and what would its outcomes be ...he was really very scared and trying to find a way out to prevent him when suddenly an idea struck into his mind when he saw hamida coming towards him...)

Hamida: -(worried) mirza...beta jalal kahan hai??...hakim sahib ki baat sunker to wo bilkul tut gaya hoga...wo thik to hai na...kahan hai wo...

Mirza: - badi ammi jaan...bhai jaan ne hume sab kuch bata diya hai...aur us vishkanya ka bhi pata chal gaya hai...jisne bhabhi jaan ki ye halat ki hai...

Hamida: -(shocked) kya??...kaun hai wo??

Mirza: - Benazir...badi ammi jaan!!...wohi abul maali ke harem ki funqara...bhai jaan bahut gusse me hai badi ammi jaan...wo shamshir lekar Benazir ke kamre ki taraf gaye hai...use marne ke liye...hume kuch karna hoga badi ammi jaan...warna bhai jaan uski jaan le lege...is waqt wo apne hosh me nahi hai...hume unhe esa karne se rokna hoga...

Hamida: - (extremely tensed) ya allah...us baandhi ki itni zurrat...magar jalal is tarah uska katal(murder) nahi kar sakte...kya wo hakim sahib ki baat bhul gaye hai...agar use maar diya to jodha ka kya hoga...nahiii...mirza...jaldi chalo...

(and both hamida and mirza rushed towards Benazir's room...On the other hand...completely unaware of the volcano coming towards her to destroy everything...Benazir was resting on the couch situated at the middle of her hojra...was giggling and celebrating her so called victory...)

Benazir: -(smirking) kya baat hai zaakira...itni der ho gayi hai...aur ab tak us jodha begum ki maut ki khabar nahi aayi...humara zeher to pal bhar me logo ki saanse rok deta hai...magar ye jodha begum...pata nahi kis mitti ki bani hai...jo ab tak zinda hai...na jaane kab uske maut ki khabar sunne ko milegi hume...

(Her words got interrupted by a roaring voice..."esa kabhi nahi hoga benazir"...Benazir's eyes shifted towards the entrance rapidly...and what she saw ...left her totally dumbstruck...seeing jalal with his sword in his hands...her breath got struck in her throat...and she got up from the couch at once all shocked...her heart exclaimed...."oh no!! Did he listen everything"...a heavy drop of sweat made its way down from her forehead...but still she tried to handle the situation as she noticed that his sword was still packed in its cover...and before he fetch it out...she had to convince him...she quickly changed her expressions but couldn't stop herself from stammering... )

Benazir: -(hiding her nervousness...) ...AA...aadab shenshah...wo... hum to bus... (She gulped the saliva down as his throat had become dried completely)...begum sahiba ki sehat ko lekar fikrmand ho rahe the...suna hai unhe kisi ne zeher de diya...ab kaisi hai wo...??(jalal dint budge anything...just looking at her with fuming eyes...)...bataiye...thik to hai na jo...(but before she could complete her sentence...jalal rushed towards her all furious and in no time...the tightest ever slap landed on her cheek...that caused her to fall down on the couch...Zakira tried to run away from there but was caught by the soldiers...Benazir put her hand on her cheek and looked at jalal all frightened...she could make out from his burning eyes that he must have come to know about her truth...jalal looked at her as if he will eat her up for hurting his beloved begum in no time...)

Jalal: -(gritting his teeth...in a husky voice) khamosh gustaakh...agar ek bhi lafz aur nikla tumhari zubaan se humari begum ke liye...to hum ye bhul jayege ke tum ek aurat zaat ho (I will forget that you are a women)...tumhari itni zurrat...humare hi tukdo per palker humse hi gaddari... (How dare you backstab me...?)

Benazir:-(crying profusely with terrible sobs)...magar humne kiya kya hai shenshah...ye kya ho gaya hai aapko...humne kab gaddari(betrayal) ki aapse...hume kuch samjh nahi aa raha...aap kya keh rahe hai...hum to jodha begum ka bhala....(but before she could speak further...jalal grabbed her by neck and pinned her against the wall...her words worked like Redding rag to a bull for him...Benazir tried really hard to remove his hand from her neck but his clutch was way too hard to get rid of...Jalal busted out in a thundering voice...)

Jalal: - (with profound indignation) sab kuch karne ke baat puchti hai ke kya kiya hai tune...humari aankho ke samne humari begum per humla kiya...unhe marne ki koshish ki... aur ab bhi tujhme me itni himmat hai ke tu humse zubaan lada rahi hai...hume maarne aayi thi na tu yaha ...to phir humari jodha begum ko kyu dasa...unhone kya bigada tha tera...tune apni maut pukhta kar li hai Benazir(you have confirmed your death)...hum tujhe nahi chorege...na hi tujhe...aur na hi use jiski tu wafadaar hai...

(and with it he tightened his grip on her neck...he pressed it so harshly...that it caused Benazir's wind pipe to get chocked almost...and in no time she was struggling for her life...she couldn't breathe properly...her nerves throughout her body got really stiffed...tears started flowing from her eyes involuntarily...but jalal had no mercy left within himself for this women...he just wanted to see her dead...Benazir was about to take her last breath...but at the same time...Hamida and Mirza entered the room...as soon as they watched her neck captured by jalal...they rushed towards them ...)

Hamida: -(holding jalal's arm...tried to remove it from her neck) ye kya pagalpan hai jalal??...chor dijiye use...wo mar jayegi jalal...chor dijiye...

Mirza: - (equally tensed...trying to pull him back) bhai jaan...humari baat suniye...chor dijiye ise...aap ek shenshah hai...ise saza zaroor dijiyega magar is tarah nahi bhai jaan...ye aapki shaan ke khilaaf hai...humari baat maniye...chor dijiye ise...

(but jalal was not in a mood to listen to anyone...he dint pay any attention on whatever they were saying...as he was not in a state to understand anything...his temper had crossed all its limits...Finally seeing jalal having no impact of their begging...Hamida left his arm and spoke out loud in frustration...)

Hamida: -(in a very loud voice) theek hai jalal...jaisi aapki marzi...maar daaliye ise...magar ek baat yaad rakhiyega...agar aapne ise khatam kar diya to jodha ko bhi kabhi nahi bacha paayege aap...iski maut ke sath sath jodha ki maut ke bhi zimmedaar honge aap jalal...

(Hamida's words worked like an electric shock for jalal...suddenly he remembered about what hakim said to him...his grip loosened on her neck automatically...and she fell down on the floor and started coughing loudly...with her fingers on her neck...finding it really hard to breath...)

(jalal faced away in disgust...then again looked at hamida...all fuming)

Jalal: - to kahiye isse...agar apni zindagi chahti hai to bataye ke us zeher ka tod kya hai...

Benazir: -(coughing loudly...breathing hard...) kaun...kaun sa zeher...hume kuch...kuch nahi malum...

Mirza: -(sternly) ab jhut bolne ka koi fayda nahi hai Benazir...hum sab jaan chuke hai ke tum ek vishkanya ho...aur tumne hi bhabhi jaan ki ye halat ki hai...ab tumhari bhalai isi me hai ke tum humari baat mano...batao kya ilaj hai tumhare zeher ka...

Hamida:- haan Benazir...agar tum jodha ko bachane me humari madad karti ho to shayad hum tumhari saza bhi kam karwa sakte hai....(Jalal gave a really angry stare to hamida as there was no way he is going to spare that vishkanya...hamida assured him by blinking her eyes...signaling that she knows what she is doing...)

(Benazir dint utter a single word...just gazing at the ground...Oh god...this women was getting on his nerves...dint she want to live??...jalal pulled out his sword from its cover in a single stroke and turned with a jerk...Benazir got extremely terrified seeing jalal's action...she shrank a bit in her place as her body began to tremble in fear...)

Jalal:-(gritting his teeth) isse baat karna waqt ko zaya karna hai ammi jaan...ye ese nahi manegi...ise to hum...(and with it he raised his sword high and was about to aim it at her neck...when suddenly her chocked throat got released and she spoke out loud...)

Benazir:-(absolutely fearful voice) nahi...hume mat mariye...batate hai...sab kuch batate hai...(she looked at zakira now who was held by soldiers...) zakira...jao...jaldi se wo dawa(antidote) lekar aao ander se...(Jalal signaled soldiers to leave zakira...and she rushed inside to bring the antidote...and returned in a flick of second with a bottle in her hands...Benazir quickly snatched the bottle from her hands and handed it towards jalal...) ...ye lijiye shenshah...yehi wo ark hai...jo humare zeher ka ilaj kar sakta hai...ab to hume jaane dijiye...baksh dijiye hume...

(jalal put his sword down but yet he was not able to believe her...what if its again a part of her evil plan...he took the bottle from her hands and looked at it doubtfully)

Jalal: -(in a serious tone) fauran hakim sahib ko bulaya jaaye...hume is aurat per zara bhi bharosa nahi hai... (a soldier rushed to hakim sahib's chamber to call him...as per his order...jalal looked at Benazir with questioning eyes...pointed his finger as a warning towards her)...aur ek baat Benazir...agar isme koi bhi saazish hui to hum tumhara sar kalam karne me zara bhi der nahi lagayege...samajhi tum...

(After few minutes...the soldier returned with hakim sahib...jalal quickly handed the bottle to him...and asked him to check whether it's the desired one or not...Hakim opened it...and pour a drop from it on his hand...smelled and observed it...)

Hakim: -(in an assuring tone) ji shenshah...ye wohi dawa hai jiske bare me hum baat kar rahe the...it is used by the vishkanyas when the poison in their body overboard its normal ratio...ye sach keh rahi hai...ab hume lagta hai ke shayd hum begum sahiba ko bacha sakege...

(Hakim's sentence caused a faint smile on jalal's lips...he looked at hamida and asked her to leave with hakim sahib for jodha's chamber right now...and provide him all necessary things important for the treatment...)

Jalal: - (anxeious) ab der mat kijiye ammi jaan...jaldi jayiye...

(Hamida left with hakim sahib...meanwhile Benazir was continuously shedding her crocodile tears ...trying to convince jalal not to punish him...she held his feet lamenting poorly...)

Benazir: -(crying bitterly) ab to humne aapko sab kuch bata diya hai...ab to hume muaff kar dijiye shenshah...hum to bus apne malik ke gulaam hai...unhone jaisa kaha ...hum waisa hi kar rahe the...vrna wo hume maar dalte...hum jodha begum ko kabhi bhi maarna nahi chahte the...magar hum kya karte...wo baar baar humare raste me aa rahi thi...humse bahut bada gunaah ho gaya shenshah...hume muaff kar dijiye...

(jalal drew his feet back causing her to fall down again...and looked at her with strong revulsion and hatred in his eyes...)

Jalal:-(with resentment) muaffi use di jaati hai Benazir...jo uske layak ho...aur tum to humari nafrat ke bhi layak nahi ho...tumhare liye to itna hi kaafi hona chahiye ke tum abhi tak zinda ho...tumhare gunah ke liye sirf saza mil sakti hai tumhe...muaffi nahi...(now he looked at the soldiers)...in dono ko le jaker kaid khaane me daal diya jaaye...aur chahe ye jitna bhi tadpe...jitna bhi girgidaye(beg)...magar kisi bhi halat me is tak zeher ki khuraak nahi pahuchani chahiye...ab inka faisla bhi diwan e khaas me sabke saamne kiya jayega...hukm ki taamil ho...

(Soldiers arrested Benazir and Zakira and dragged them outside as Benazir had held jalal's feet really tight and was begging for her life to him...but there was no impact of her false prays on jalal...he was looking completely unaffected...and strictly ordered the soldiers to take them away from his eyes...and finally after much difficulty...The soldiers took them out of the room and made their way towards the jail...)

(As soon as they left...Mirza came forward and put his hand on jalal's shoulder so as to console him...)

Mirza: -(in a very soft voice) shaanth ho jayiye bhai jaan...jo kuch bhi bhabhi jaan ke saath hua...uska hume bhi bahut afsos hai...kaash hum kuch der pehle aa gaye hote...to shayad ye sab na hota...magar aap fikr mat kariye...ab to dawa bhi mil gayi hai...bhabhi jaan jald hi durust ho jayegi...

Jalal:-(now sounding a bit calm) apne aap ko kaurwaar mat samjho tum mirza...balki hum to tumhare shukrguzaar hai...agar tum sahi waqt per yaha na aate...to shayad hum kabhi jaan hi na paate ke sachaai kya hai...

Mirza:- shukriya bolker hume sharminda mat kariye bhai jaan...acha ab chaliye...aapko bhabhi jaan ko dekhne nahi jaana...hum wohi jaa rahe hai...chaliye humare saath...

Jalal:- nahi mirza...aap jayiye...hum nahi aayege...hume kuch zaruri kaam hai...hum apne hojre me jaa rahe hai...(he thought to himself...."I know mirza...you must be thinking that what kind of husband I am...who dint want to visit his ill wife...but I have promised to myself that I will go to see her only when I will get to hear the news of her coming in conscious because I can't see her in this state anymore...")

(and with all these thoughts...he left from there for his room...without arguing any further...leaving his younger brother all perplexed and flabbergasted...)

Precap:- jalal doing his azzan...praying for jodha...and jodha comes in conscious๐Ÿ˜ณ

thanku friends...๐Ÿ˜ƒ

don't forget to like and comment๐Ÿ˜‰


Pallavvi thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: PrincessNancy

LOL!๐Ÿ˜† Thankss!! Yar I give you such review Coz u DESERVE it !!๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

I am sachi mein in love with your writing.. I have been like crazyyy for ur stories from the time I had started reading Ishqzaade.. Your writings are readers' delight !!!๐Ÿ˜ณ
Therefore, you deserve such reviews!!! Love ya babes...Update sooon!๐Ÿ˜ƒ

aww...nanu my chashmish...๐Ÿ˜Š
thanku so much...u r my sweet not so little angel๐Ÿ˜ƒ
shahbhavini thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 11 years ago
๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘UnRes.. Party time๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†. Kitne din ke baad me so paungi... Dil khush kar diya!!!!
Love u Pallu.
Amazing writing skill๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘... Yaar... teri writing ki kamal se jaan dal di is chapter me...๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
superb!!!!!!!!!!! I love it when Jalal felt so much guilty for ignoring their fight... Everything happened in front his eyes... I was thinking the same... why Jalal is not thinking that... thanks you clarified... I love Hakim and his understanding for his brother... You have really rocked this chapter... his anger was powerful... finally he got the medicine for her... amazing love it Pallu...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
Edited by shahbhavini - 11 years ago
Peacefulmind thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 11 years ago
nice one hope jodha will be alright soon
dkorumilli thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
wow Pallavi.wish we couldsee something like that in show.

Related Topics

Jodha Akbar thumbnail

Posted by: nushhkiee ยท 7 months ago

Ehsaas The night unfurled its velvety embrace over the grand city of Agra... The towering walls of the Mughal palace stood bathed in moonlight,...

Expand โ–ผ
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".