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poetic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1241

Awesome updates girls, this is going on so well.

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loveleen3

@loveleen3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1242

Originally posted by: jagrawal

Ha ha... i cant write with the same intensity n depth as u guys do
M very straight forward n has no sense of romance, very boring n confusing
But i can give d feedback

Haha.. Just try sometime... And keep the feedback coming please... :D The fact that there are still a few people reading this story keeps us writing. :)

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poetic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1243

Shabbo, I cab't concentrate till Feb end. So you guys have to write pl

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loveleen3

@loveleen3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1244

Originally posted by: imagine43
@Loveleen, that was beautiful. It was a completely fresh take on the track, very original. As a writer you made the whole thing feel so heavenly, so pure. It was ingenious to weave the context that converted vulgarity to purity. Anywhere else, even a husband saying such things to his wife would be offensive, but here, it was sheer bliss. Thats the magic of your writing... It is a true masterpiece from you.
On the other hand, what Nachiket did/spoke is very surreal..In the real world, if guys had even 1% sensibility of this Nachiket, even if they just took them to that bench and didnt say anything, it would result in so many more happy marriages/wives and so many lesser divorces. Ah well. fictions are here to fill that gap and you did a great job.

You have no idea how relieved and delighted I am that you liked it. 😊

Usually, I relate to R's character more than N's. But when you brought this track, I just wanted to explore N's character. I felt for the poor guy. 😆 Writing his dialogue was a sheer delight. I enjoyed every moment of it. Although it took me one full day to convince myself that writing 'I love your body' was the right thing to do here.

And yes, this is fiction. I kinda felt bad for myself after writing this. 😆

And yes, thank you, thank you, thank you, Chaitali!

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loveleen3

@loveleen3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1245

Originally posted by: ronitfan
Please write, Loveleen! :)

Working tonight, Sukh. :) You please continue.

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imagine43

@imagine43

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1246

you two!! 😡

Edited by imagine43 - 9 years ago

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shabana

@shabz50

Dazzler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1247

Chailtai you write please and i will update after you please

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sanakinzzz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1248

"what im going to say, will make these 2 weeks even harder than they already are, but i know you are getting restless"

nachiket anticipated for her response

"saach hai, ke i also crave your touch, your warmth, your voice...just you in general, there isnt a moment where i am not thinking about you...about us"

nachiket felt really happy already that his doubts were cleared but he let her keep talking

"and you know when you just come out of the shower, and your towel is wrapped just below your torso...oh my god, that drives me crazy!
and also when you hug me from behind or even call my name, the whole world stops from me and it's just us...main jaanti hu, mai itna express nahi karti tumse especially infront of the kids,but i love it every time you unexpectedly hug me when nobody is looking"

ragini ended up saying a lot more than what she planned and nachiket loved her even more now, if that was possible...he was in complete awe of his wife and ragini was right, these 2 weeks just got a whole lot tougher!

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shabana

@shabz50

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1249

Nachiket sat staring at ragini his doubts cleared she felt the same as him "ragini look at me" she turned and looked at him he caressed her cheek "i love you soo much" he kissed her she closed her eyes and kissed him back she then broke the kiss "i love you too nachiket" she put her head on his shoulder he wrapped his arm around her waist. "Maybe i shouldn't have said all that" "why ragini" "because its hard enough staying away from you now its going to be harder these 2 weeks" he smiled "you don't have to stay away" she looked at him "nachiket i want you healthy" "i know and i want to be healthy for u and our family so as hard as it will be i will try to control myself" she smiled and kissed his cheek. They sat for a while in each others arms when ragini got up to go to bed "you coming nachiket" "in a bit"

Ragini went to bed nachiket got his laptop out he was going to make this honeymoon special for his ragini. He went to bed she was asleep he hugged her from behind and kissed her neck "hmmm" he smiled she turned and snuggled into him he wrapped his arms around her and went to asleep.

It was morning ragini was getting ready nachiket came out after having a shower he was dressed she looked at him with raised eyebrows "i don't want to make it harder for you darling" she smiled "thank you" she went to make breakfast nachiket sat down when nishi came in "morning papa" "morning beta" "morning mum" she sat down rest of the kids joined them nachikets phone rang he went to answer it

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loveleen3

@loveleen3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1250

When Nachiket came back to the table after the call, Aagham, Aarav and Suhani were arguing.

"To theek h, test kar lete hain abhi," said Suhani and everyone stood up from the table except Ragini.

"Kya test karna h ab tum logon ko?" asked Nachiket, not understanding what was happening.

"Dad, mom is saying ki vo hamein hamari aahat se pehchaan sakti hain. We are just testing," answered Suhani.

Nachiket looked at Ragini, who was smiling and shaking her head.

"Haan to main bhi kar sakta hoon ye. Mere bachche ho tum," said he, while Ragini sipped her tea, smiling.

"Awesome! Lets do a competition then. Hum sab aapki aankhe band karenge ek-ek karke, jo sabse zyada sahi pehchanega, vo jeetega," said Aagham excitedly.

"Jeetne wale ko kya milega?" asked Nishi.

"Jeetne wale ko kuch nahi milega. But jo harega, vo hamein aaj raat ko drive pe leke jaega," suggested Aarav.

"But Ragini can't drive.." said Nachiket.

"Ma won't lose either, Papa," said Aarav, making Ragini laugh. Nachiket narrowed his eyes at her and she shrugged in response, saying, "Maine kuch nahi bola"

They started the game with Ragini. One by one, all the kids used their hands to shut her eyes and Ragini told them whose hands it was. She got it right, each time. Ranbir had just touched her when she said his name. She took a bit longer for Aagham and he was sulking because of that. She kissed his face a couple of times to tell him that she loved him equally. It was only when she whispered something in his ear that his face broke into a wide smile and he stopped sulking. Everyone insisted on knowing what Ragini said to him but neither Ragini nor Aagham said anything.

"Chodo vo. Dad ki baari ab," Aagham said and they started the same game with Nachiket. Nachiket got everyone's name right too. Although he took much longer than Ragini to decide.

"Ho gaya tum logon ka? Can I go to the hospital now?" Nachiket asked, to which Nishi replied, "Papa, aapne ma se zyada time lia h.. aapko hamein drive pe leke jana hoga"

"Haan, nahi to hamein permission dedo jane ki," said Aarav, to which Aagham and Suhani nodded.

"Nahi. Tum log raat ko akele nahi jaoge kahin," said Ragini, and their faces fell. Nachiket noticed that. "Raat ko dinner ke baad chalenge. Aisi rone wali shaklein mat banao ab," said Nachiket and got shouts of excitement in return.

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