OS: Humble request (update 6 last part on Page 6) - Page 3

Created

Last reply

Replies

56

Views

10.3k

Users

17

Likes

87

Frequent Posters

fict thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#21
Lovely story and very well written. His hesitation in asking her for anything and finally being helpless, asks her for some memories. Portrayed their emotions beautifully.
Santosh99 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#22
Where were you till now?Im sure the hidden writing talent that came out with this is not going to forgive you for not coming out till now.
Okay finally ... what a beautiful and different start imagine ... plz do continue it. This Nachiket-Ragini is so different from rest so would love to know him more and trust me for your first try this is superb so do focus on writing...Such a nice story ... waiting for the next part and story to unfold.
imagine43 thumbnail
9th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#23
Here is Part 3 for all the readers enjoying the story. Feedback as always was the motivation.. more the merrier..
PART-3 As the night unfolds

As they get closer to the room, they get a better look at each other, Nachiket is looking more handsome than ever in his white turtle neck sweater and Ragini's hands over his elbow. Ragini glowing bringhtly with her red lips in her red saari. As they approach the door, Nachiket takes the lead and walks in hurriedly to do the final touchups to his preparation for the special night. Ragini stands in the doorway, to have a good look the room that she was looking at after a long time. The room had not changed one bit, it had the TV with a 3 seater couch next to the door, followed by the big bed and the cupboards adjacent to a small kitchenette with sink on the far end. There was a table for 2 at the foot of the bed. She noticed the new microwave on the counter. For a moment, she could hear the giggles and laughters, aahs and ouches, moans and groans that were left behind by them which now seemed not so long ago. For a moment she trembled and was overwhelemed by the rush of memories and desires the view of this room had brought back. Unable to handle, she instantly turned around and walked away with tears in her eyes. She needed a moment to sink it all in remind herself of the current state.. what she was here to do and that she would not let her past intervene into she being just a friend tonight.

Nachiket, inorder to get everything perfect, switches on the Movie..sets up the table and dims the light to be just right. He then glances at the door, to give her a grand welcome, only to get nervous not finding her. He rushes out.. "Ragini...", she is standing in a corner, wiping off her tears (so he absolutely doesnt see them and know how much she was affected by the room). As he approaches her, she puts on a smily face and says "something in the eye..", Nachiket smiles.. "achcha? ab theek hai?, chale...suno..keep your eyes clear there is a movie waiting...". Ragini all composed and back to what she wanted to present herself as, with a cheerful smile.."haan.." and they get into the room
R (casually): Wow!! very good. nice arrangement. What should we do first?
N (leading her to the table): first food...
R, being the food freak she is..was super excited and cheering..
N (instantly): I knew it.."Pehle tank bhar doon, phir drive pe leke jaoonga.."
R giving that "very funny Nachiket".. look.
R: But we already had dinner..
N: First look whats on the table.. (He had set up a beautiful table for 2 with a candle and a Rose)
R (screams): Ras malai.. ooo my favourite. thank you, thank you, thank you Nachiket. I had been wanting to eat it since many days.
N pulls the chair for her to sit.. she can see the TV from her chair
They both enjoy Ras malai.. R looking at the movie and commenting about it. N..just staring at her.. without missing even a single expression that appeared on her face. R was chattering more than usual, to hideaway the feelings that kept knocking continuously.

After they finished the RasMalai, Nachiket takes the bowls to sink and puts the popcorn in the microwave, while Ragini sat in the same chair watching the movie.. Nachiket returned, just when "Koi Mil gaya.. mera dil gaya.. " starts playing.. Nachiket gestures his hand for hers for a dance. She, in her mind, checking on things she could and could not do, said to herself.. "Ek dance hee toh hai".. and takes his hand.

They start off as soft salsa, smiling at each other (for their craze for dancing).. Slowly N starts pacing the moves, he takes the lead and guides her more vigorously, she responds to his increasing pace with faster moves. It is as if N is saying "you are mine and I wont let you go to anyone" in every beat. He is staring right her eye..the thought of "anyone aka. Dr Aman" turns him into a revenge seeker, moving her into and away from him rapidly. She responds with equal grace (to show that she can handle anything), and can answer him back. She gives him complete rights to do what he was doing. Soon the revenge changes itself into agony.. he is spinning her into and out of his arms, making her fall, picking her up, letting go of her and then catching her at a fast pace, tiring her, as if trying to seek answers to all those sleepless, cold, teary nights.. How much he has missed her and is longing for her can be clearly seen. She, understanding his assualt completely, reciprocates with the same vigor, her body langugage telling her side of the story which is no different. They are in no way just dancing but reading and conveying their heart, mind and soul at the same time. Their love, desires, passion, agonies, longing, jelously everything portrayed in the rythemic movements of their bodies. The dance turns out to be the best way for both to communicate what they have been wanting to say all along but have never been able to put into words. Ragini's legs are giving in, but she wouldnt stop, there is so much to say and hear. He is in complete control and is making her move, rapidly. They see completely different sides of each other that has not been surfaced anytime recently. After 5 full minutes of onslaught, the storm ceased when the song stops playing.. Nachiket makes one final move on the final beat and lets her go.

Spinning herself through, she ends up at the edge of the sofa, leaning against it. He stands still by the table. Both, emerging out of the storm that had just wrecked havoc to their hearts... stood wondering, what had gotten over them, they had done what was completely forbidden for them, atleast tonight. Although they had danced together many times before, but nothing like this one, they let their heart out, loosing themselves completely to the beats and eyes of the other. They had not experienced anything like it (even close to it) in the last 18 years.

Still panting for breathe, sweat all over and partly wet hair, she turned around slowly to look at him with a smile, surprisingly proud of her performance, having matched his pace and proven that she is no less. He, all sweaty.. smiles back, appreciating her, as if he always knew what she was capable of. They stood there staring at each other... now their eyes doing the talking... When the "Ding" of the microwave brings them back.

Nachiket signals her, that he is going to get the microwave, Ragini silently approves and still trying to breathe normally and gain consciosness of the situation, occupies the middle seat on the sofa as if watching the movie. Her mind is all turbulant, with all those thoughts that had emerged in the last 5 minutes, she is almost into tears reminiscing what she had just gathered from him. The pain in his eyes.. makes her heart sink. Pretending to watch the movie, she tries to clear her thoughts and convince her mind that it was just a dance and nothing more, and makes futile attempts re-coach her mind and bring it back to the same state that it was in when the night had started. But her heart is slowly taking over and is more than willing to listen. She is worried of what lays ahead, she settles for a more normal and natural Ragini.

Nachiket on the other hand is now completely convinced that His Ragini has not changed one bit. She is truely his, he could see it. All those years of separation, differences they have had and the people standing between them seem irrelevant, their love for each other beyond these things. He is gained back his confidence and returning to joyful, mischivous, Ragini's Nachiket. He has found himself. The last 5 minutes with her had reinvigorated the dead soul in him.. For him, it was now just a matter of she realizing that no one can stand between them.

He grabs 2 glasses of water and walks towards the door..

TO BE Continued...
poetic thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 9 years ago
#24
Thanks Imagine. Another cute and sweet update which revealed so much to NR about each other.
👍🏼

Ras Malai - my favourite to


Willw ait for next update
loveleen3 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#25
The dance.. It was surreal! <3 <3 Thank you for updating, imagine. Loved the update! :D
ronitfan thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 9 years ago
#26
Imagine!
This was sooo good... that dance was perfect.. all the passion, the romance, the love, the longing... wow! Completely got to me..
This is the NR of your story in my head :


Fantastic - thank you for this treat :D
shabz50 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 180 Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 9 years ago
#27
Loved the update all that pent up passion finally coming out loved it
hamna19khan thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#28
Imagine, Great start...
U r a beautiful writer and this story is superb.
Please update soon because I can't wait to read what happens next :)
imagine43 thumbnail
9th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#29
Here is part 4.. I didnt have the patience to write in detail today.. but knowing N and R, you should be able to fill in the gaps.. Let me know if it is getting boring.. I will end soon.. Criticism welcome..

Part 4 - The Movie

Nachiket walks to the door with 2 glasses of water.. "Like to catch some Air.." All composed, Ragini walks behind him.

N (handing her a glass of water and smiling): "Kafi achcha tha"
R: "Thanks"
They stand their sipping on to their glasses of water for some time.. taking there time to come back to normal..
R (casually) : "Bahar kyon le aaye?"
N (removing something out of is pocket): "Iske liye"
R: yeh kya hai
N: "America se laya tha. Jab main US louta, Suhani mujhe ek din shopping le gayi.. tab ye ghadi mujhe bahot pasand aayi.. liya tha, tumhaare liye.. par kabhi dene ka mouka nahi aaya"
R (with emotional eyes..): "looks at him" . Hesitates, if she should be taking it..
N: Ignoring what her eyes were saying.. very casually..: "pehen ke dikho..", "main pehna doo?"
R : "Its ok, main pehenloongi"
N: "Ghadi aur sundar hogi hai.."
R (trying not to blush): Thank you..but you didnt have to..
N: takes her hand into his by surprise.. and pretends to get a closer look at the watch
R: "Kya kar rahe ho?"
N: holding up her arm in one hand, moves the other slowly from the watch to the tip of her fingers.. "Ghadi dekh raha hoon Ragini.."
Ragini stands still with his touch sending currents in her body.. Her response to his touch was exactly what he had expected..
R: snaps her hand back.. Nachiket, "we were supposed to watch the movie..lets go.."


They walk back inside.. Nachiket in an all flirty mood..
R (with a stern look): "chup chap movie dekho"
Ladki badi Anjani hai song starts playing..
N (slightly irritated): mocking Ragini and shaking his head.. "Movie dekho..." "yeh kya hai?" and starts doing the "Ooo, Ooo, Ooo " action..
R: looks at him and laughs as he looks funny shaking his head for "ooo"..
Ragini is still looking at him, her laugh subsiding to a smile..when this part plays
"Paas rehke bhi thi doori
Jaane kaise thi majboori
Vaqt vo bhi ajeeb tha
Jab tu mere kareeb tha"

she keeps looking at him with her smile diappearing.. and sadness taking over..as if the lines were coming from her heart..

Nachiket senses she getting emotional, and sings the next 2 lines
"Kho gayi tu ye kis jahaan mein
Main yahaan hoon dekh to zara" and does the "ooo"..
It cheers her up and she is smiles back..
Nachiket is lost in her smile and is staring at her, when the next part of the song plays..

"bheed mein bhi thi tanhai
Yaad har pal teri aayi
Roke koi mujhe zara
Bhar na aaye ye dil mera"

Ragini senses a tear at the end of his eye..takes the turn to cheer him up with

"Behke behke mere kadam hain
Aise mein tu sambhaal to zara" pokes at his chest..and completes it with an "Ooo"

they both laugh and almost want to hug each other as "Kuch Kuch hota hai" plays in the background...

Their facade breaking down little by little every minute, and their longing and desires are taking over..But both trying hard to keep the Facade, as if there is nothing between them.

R (getting back to normal.. playfully): "Nachiket ab movie dekhne do mujhe.. this part of the movie is very interesting.. aur tum bhi dekho"
N: looks everywhere, but the movie.. Ragini is fully into the movie now.. as the part that is playing is on similar lines to what is happening currently in her life. He notices Ragini's hand with the new watch, that is peacefully rested on her thigh. He adores it for a moment, noticing how her slender fingers and still the same, as they were before when he loved to play with them..
N Moves his hand slowly over Ragini's, and starts playing with her fingers... he curls is fingers around hers and holds it tight..
Ragini, as if she knew it was coming.. knowing the Nachiket he is, takes a moment to cherish it, how she had missed holding his hands and had only dreamt of it. she closes her eyes for a moment to feel his hands completely, before coming back to reality..
R: "haath chodo mera.."
N: "Movie dekho bola tha..kar raha hoon na.. haath pakad ke bhi movie dekh sakta hoon.."
Ragini, pulls her hands out.. and with a teacher look and finger on her mouth.. "Chup chaap movie dekho.."
N: shaking his head in approval..looks at the screen and suddenly goes "Wow!!" (bending forward and eyes popped out and caressing Ragini's thighs..) "Thanks Ragini, I would have missed this otherwise..", looking at Kajol's Rangeela dance..
R: slapping his wrist.."ooofff"
N: "Kya hua? tumne he to bola dekhne ke liye.."
Ragini rolls her eyes...
Nachiket... sorry..movie.. adjusts himself and as if obeying her completely.. starts watching the movie..

little did they know what was coming up in the movie..

SRK and Kajol's rain dance, literally taking them back to the day they had danced to the same tune.. Rushing all the memories of their wonderful days to the forefront... both instantly looked at each other..their eyes locked..
Ragini's eyes are full with tears.. with the thought of, those days will never come back, they have lost thousands of such wonderful moments. Thinking.. This could possibly be their last meeting... A tear rolls down, Nachiket with his teary eyes, says "No..dont.." and moves closer to her, puts one had over her back and pulls her closer. Ragini is looking into his eye..stays still with all those thoughts churning in her mind.. he moves his head closer and kisses once on her lips, as if to comfort her.. he kisses softly again, this time as if saying "i am here for you"...Ragini slowly brings her one had on his cheeks..
he is trying to make his way though.. when "Kajol says "Aman"" and Ragini instantly pulls back..

She looks down, stands up grabs the glasses and walks away with them towards the counter, way at the back of the room..

Ragini is all agitated.. her mind unable to comprehend what just happened.. "what am i doing..This is all wrong..I am engaged..This cant be happening..", the other side of her argues.. "I have dreamt of this moment for all these days.. and here it is..this is what my heart has been yearning for all along.. to be with him.. to feel him, to touch him..to find that solace in his arms..how can it be wrong.."
She stands by the counter thinking... arguing against herself.. when she feels a warm hand encircle her waist.. almost instantly she closes her eyes..leans back..partly in pleasure, partly to find peace, as if Nachiket knows all the answers to her questions, as if handing herself to him, as she cannot think anymore.. Closing her eyes and resting her head on his broad chest.. holding his hands on her waist and heavy breathing.. She whispers "Nachiket.. I am confused..."

TO Be continued...



loveleen3 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#30
Oh imagine! You have such a brilliant imagination! And how perfectly have you weaved KKHH with N and R. I am in awe!
The lyrics.. Kajol saying Aman.. Brilliant brilliant! I am looking forward to the next part like anything! Thank you! :D

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".