OS: Sajna Aa Bhi Jaa - Page 7

Originally posted by: ShyNomad

Loved this so much, will be back later with more worthy feedback 👏

Originally posted by: metoyou

Thanks Nidhi... me waiting haan 😉

Originally posted by: ShyNomad

Loved this so much, will be back later with more worthy feedback 👏

Ok updated:

Nargesss

This was sooo good (I think I used phenomenal earlier)

You were able to illustrate Ragini's thoughts and insecurities so beautifully, so many things that she has been through as a wife, a single mother, and now a wife once again in this sham of a marriage.

She had always thought Nishi was her little princess, but her daughter proved her wrong by accusing her of taking away her happiness. Ragini was not shattered then nor broken; she was just nothing. In her own eyes she had become a big failure; a good for nothing mother.

Truly one of the worst things for a devoted mother to go through - to fight to provide everything for her children and then watch them be unhappy, and then on top of that be blamed for their unhappiness 😭

He had this different kind of love in him which would overwhelm her every single time. He made her feel alive, he made her feel worthy for someone. And she did her best to give that love back to him; she loved to dress up with nice matching bangles to go with her saree, her payal (he just loved the sound of it) and her hair open. He didn't like her to see with a bun, it made her look old he had said once. Only if he knew that in the years after she would carry that old look' every single day.

Ok seriously stop breaking my heart with this, she is just a shell of who she used to be 💔

She missed his eyes which always conveyed a silent message; she missed his voice whispering that it will be fine. She missed his lips which would sooth her entire body. She missed his strong arms which would hold her in his embrace and wherein her worries would go. Nothing of that was left and it was during moments like this that she missed him the most...

This is out of order but I forgot to mention my other favorite part... of course at some point there is only so much she can handle on her own with no one to lean on.

..but the moment she would close the door of her bedroom, she would became a different woman. She wouldn't be Ragini the mother or the daughter, but his Ragini. This was the only time she would allow herself to cry it all out. No fake smiles, no fear of hurting people, just she and his memories. She couldn't exactly remember when she had slept peacefully. Often her sleep would get disturbed by the feel of his presence. She had dreamed about him a lot; how he would kiss her forehead after she had dozed off before he could even lie in bed, how he used to take care of her when she would fall sick, and of course, how they would cuddle the night away after making love.

She needed him to be at home waiting for her after a long day of work, she wanted him next to her in bed on a lazy Sunday morning, she wanted him to make the kids understand whenever they wouldn't listen to her, she wanted to see him spending time with Nani, she wanted to take away his stress after a surgery, she wanted him for her own selfish reason. He was the only one she had given permission to touch her, and he could do that in such a way and on such spots which were even unknown to her...

Have no words for this 😭

And the hope at the end, with them reaching out for each other for comfort in the middle of the night, expressing what they are themselves unable to say...just beautiful.

Truly this is one my favorite stories I have read here, thank you for sharing. ❤️

Now I want MORE

Originally posted by: metoyou

OMG Nidhi! 😲

No don't do this to me...this is so embarrassing yaar. How do I even thank you for this WONDERFUL comment?!

You pointed out almost everything yaar... I never knew this would touch you so bad. Shayad there is something good about this after all 😆

Ragini was and still probably is one broken woman and we haven't seen her deepest emotions and feelings yet. She keeps herself strong but even she is allowed to break down once in a while.

You saying this is your favorite means A LOT, especially because you are such a maha talent yourself 😳

A bug huggy for you 🤗

And this is where the stories stop... 😛

Originally posted by: ShyNomad

You're right, it will take something special to thank me...

🤔 Hmm...

Still thinking...

😲 Wait a minute...

How about another story?? 🥳

I will accept an update to Joyride, a sequel to you know what, or a separate OS as beautiful as this one. 😃

Didn't think you would get away that easily did you? 😆

🤗

A big hug to you once again for this, I'm just going to ignore your modesty regarding your writing talent 😉

Originally posted by: AngelsFlyAlone

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Originally posted by: ShyNomad

Yaaayyy 🤗

Originally posted by: metoyou

For the sake of SK 😉😳

Originally posted by: ShyNomad

😳

Now I know how to persuade you for next time 😆