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This chapter for me was about realizations and understandings, especially the first part. I really loved Khushi's thoughts as they drive down to that sign. She's thinking about what was missing. You did it so damn well, without using many words- like right here:

"Yes one can. But in the ten years I have known my wife... she has never thought about the weather for ten whole minutes in silence."

"Maybe that's because I have never told you..." She shrugged. However she bit her lip, as he nodded, continuing to look straight ahead.

Just after that sentence, that sharp pause is so poignant for the reader to feel along with Arnav and Khushi. And you follow it up with a sentence that has both of them understanding why it hurts, why there's that gap between them. This is what you do so well, Di! You make us take this journey with them, have all of those realizations. And those led to an ease in their conversation that I hadn't seen in this story- a comfort, a sense of what it must have been like for them. The light teasing and the subtle touches and the warmth that has been gone is slowly seeping back, and I just love it!

And with that warmth... came that kiss. Hell, that was some kiss. It was heady, passionate and so very very short. You really, truly bring it with the sexual tension between them- that husky whisper in her ear... uff. But beyond that, it was the smile that filled her face that really did it. That was such a powerful moment, when he notices that her smile is just so happy, and so genuine, and you feel how that affects him and ah, you did such a good job!

I loved the glimpse of Sofia- I can't wait to see her more. In that brief excerpt, you could tell that she was someone that mkes a difference when you meet her. Maybe not overtly, but somehow, in her own subtle way, she changes lives just by spreading her warmth.

I loved this chapter. I liked the tentative warmth that's made an appearance after so long, the fact that they seem so much lighter in this update. You've shown that subtle shift so well. They aren't out of the woods yet but... one more step forward :)

Except you left me with that goddamn cliffhanger. That is my only complaint. Hmph.

Love you always,

Your Choti.

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After long time made it to same page as the update. 😊

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A very light chapter👏

Beautiful updates! Loved every bit! 😊

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Full on emotional n touching update jigs 😊 the way you carved words to express each n every emotion is treat !! Arnav n khushi both are strong characters & you have wonderfully described how they are facing the circumstances either related to their marriage or their child ...!! It is very difficult for parents to lose their unborn child but still they are trying to overcome pain for each other... I am feeling content after reading that they are opening up to each other, they are coming closer, giving their real smiles..!!

"HOPE" that is mere word but it is giving life to marital relationship of arnav n khushi ... Love their teasing,their laughter and every emotion that you put into this update 😊 well i also hope that they sort out things and come together... The old memories of their first parent meeting, their marriage are lovely 😳

I wish everything goes smooth in their relation now ..!! Thanks for such great update jigs, you are magical writer.. 👏 will wait for next tuesday to read more 😛