arshi ff: without you... #2, chapters 14 - 27 **completed**

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nisha_mehta

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Posted: 11 years ago

#201

Nice part.
Arnav need to learn to control his anger
Continue soon

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#202

Originally posted by: IronButterfly
Quite a vision you created in the start.

He's a victim of a bitter past.

His longing for her has come out well but her reaction is also justified. She will not settle for anything less.

He shouldn't have shouted at her but his unpredictable temper is what makes him who he is.

He wanted a truce because that would keep her near him.

She understands him so well that his anger is forgiven and forgotten.

Honeymoon? Bring it on.

hi ironbutterfly,

why am i so happy to see your gold type on the first comment 😳. what you say of asr, that anger, so right. got to love him as he is, take the crazy with the deep, thats' what makes him so uff sexy.

glad you liked the vision. and his longing, sometimes it fills me, what pure need for another. i think khushi is beginning to grasp the implications of it and needs him just as badly. i am always intrigued by what might happen to her as a result of this intense relationship... without either changing radically, would be good to see its imprint within them, in the way they handle each other, in the way they feel each other.

yes,a truce, anything... he'd do anything to keep her with him... at that point marriage was not is thing, so his offer actually is the best the most he can make. but of course, she wouldn't.

thanks, sir. always good to see you. honeymoon sochtey hain. 😆

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#203

Originally posted by: IssPKaur
Smooth fine read, Indus, and it felt really good to spend time with these two! Will be back for more...
Hope the new abode is exciting you with possibilities...I know you mentioned it's been chaotic moving homes but to me, your storytelling has a gentler feel today! Isn't that amazing!!

and i see issk in neat black. kya hua? asr red not in vogue anymore? so lovely of you to read it so quickly, i know work is all over you... when did you find the time? i of course, posted at some 4.30 am or something. junoon yesterday... have to have to update, so sat among packing cases and wrote, then ran away from a party and wrote... no way was i sleeping without sweet sixteen in place.

you like? smooth? maybe i was yearning for that. i am falling in love with this man and this woman, i hope not a single false note or insincere adjective from me mars these guys. have to say, it is absorbing to write fiction. scary too.

thanks, dear one.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#204

Originally posted by: slakhani
hey, welcome back. Hope all's well and settled with the house move. Wonderful update as always. I loved they way he so cutely appologises for shouting at her. And, I do agree without reading your update one definitely would never get to know what one can do with a 'ber' and 'lips'😉 - nice one:)
Please update the next chapter real soon.

Thanks,

Sony

hi slakhani,

good to see you.

aww you like the ber tactic... really the mind boggles, my knees go weak at what he might get up to with that little tangy fruit in her mouth. ahem.

house nowhere near settling down ywe, but will be fine in a bit no doubt. thanks for asking. 😃

i am dying to write without you now, hoping to update early next week.

thanks for reading.

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anonyasr

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Posted: 11 years ago

#205

Well written chapter. Wish A would stop and think before he accuses his devoted wife. Sigh.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#206

Originally posted by: anonyasr
Well written chapter. Wish A would stop and think before he accuses his devoted wife. Sigh.

thanks, anonyasr,

you enjoyed? i know, if only he'd think at times... but when it comes to his wife and his sister he's a bit lunatic always... the most obvious sign of his extreme love i guess. she's beginning to get that i think. and who knows maybe some day he'll surprise us and count till ten before yelling. 😆 but let me confess, i was missing his gussa, his i don't care, his asrness... so er made him fight with her. haw.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#207

Originally posted by: anu1017
Awesome update!!!

anu,

thank you so much. 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#208

Originally posted by: ...SaRun...
WOW what a treat before going to bed update by indi di.Gulzar's poetry and maddy's edit at the start was enthralling .
You really built up the scene well at the start,his bitter past,mother'helpness,how he tried to keep those thoughts away from his mind as a growing boy.
Love the kitchen scene and when he took her to the magical poolside.He can't bear to see tears in her eyes.Today on tv they aired the episode where Khushi made him bring La back and when he hugged La she started to cry and that surprised him.She was always the focus of his attention.I connect with both of these scenes.
His anger is unpredictable but she understands him well.He also understands her happiness as he brought ber for her.
I just love this line
What one could do with a ber and a pair of willing lips.
Honeymoon mere kaan khare ho gaye hain 😆.Already started to dream about it especially what destination indi di will pick for this special occasion ☺️.
Hope you are done with your moving and have settled down now 😊
Take care and thanks for the pm.

lizzie,

i love a happy reader 😃

gulzar and sunshine's edit... nice na?

how he struggled with her tears in the initial days. i used to love it. we discussed elsewhere about that la and tear scene... though the story line a bit strange, ohhh the look on his face when her tear rolled down. also she, so unconscious and thus telling that lone drop of salty water.

i am just going to be totally delighted that somewhere in your had, the kitchen and poolside and that scene connected.

i look for asr and khushi all the time when i write, if i get them... it's pure joy.

hmmm honeymoon. where should he take her, sorry run away with to? 😆

home settling down slowly thanks.

see ya soon.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#209

Originally posted by: priyanka1998
awesome update

priyaka,

thank you so much. 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#210

Originally posted by: Preety_Nebula
Nice Di
especially this one had me😳

what one could do with a ber and a pair of willing lips.

Arnav and his bitter past made him say things to Khushi which he regrets later but his love is what she cares and adores.Her Shaitan and Prince is same .

hello goofy,

how are you? lovely to see you.

want a ber? 😆

you say it wonderfully, shaitan and prince both are the same and he is completely hers. what to do. she does adore him, you feel that don't you? he is heady and different and makes her feel and do things she'd never even dreamed of. khushi is as forward looking and ready for adventure as he, otherwise surviving this man ha ha. thanks for reading.