arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#431

^^^ goofy, slowly, baby, slowly... we all get there... if we want to. and if we are willing to be a bit silly/nutty/you know. and some of the fights the two have, esp the 1st august one... so reminds me of me.

i promise you, he will be back and having tonnes of nok jhok with chamkili... also some ahem ahem. he is just recharging. okay? 😳

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Cadence_12

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Posted: 12 years ago

#432

indi di itz gettin' better and better and believe me am not given to praising so much. but i love the way this story has its own soul and yet its skin is the original tale we all fell in love with. I loved the rabba ve section.. took me straight back to a cracked, almost thin voice but not quite, saying "you know Khushi, I don't need anything."

am really looking forward to anjali's tale as well in your story...she was totally shortchanged in the original.. there was so much potential there.

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Crazy4IPK

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Posted: 12 years ago

#433

superb Indi.

Again a heart wrenching update.

You again made me cry. I just can't bear Khushi's pain any more. I'm with your husband and daughter. Make Arnav well soon and let him be merry with Khushi again.

So Anjali is suspecting, that Shyam can be behind this accident.Her story is really painful. Dr. Vijay seems interested on Anjali. Good. we really need a good guy to enter her life.

Loved how you portrayed Payal in your tale. The cvs showed her as a strong woman at the beginning, but later just ruined her.

looking forward for the next update.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#434

@mashira

"indi di itz gettin' better and better and believe me am not given to praising so much. but i love the way this story has its own soul and yet its skin is the original tale we all fell in love with. I loved the rabba ve section.. took me straight back to a cracked, almost thin voice but not quite, saying "you know Khushi, I don't need anything."

am really looking forward to anjali's tale as well in your story...she was totally shortchanged in the original.. there was so much potential there."

rashmi,

thanks so much. i am glad to hear you are tough with your praises. and that you are enjoying the story. it's kinda slow i know, a bit sombre... thanks for being here despite that.

oh gah that thin cracked voice. i need it so bad. i wonder what he'd say to khsuhi when he came out a coma... i wonder what khushi would say.

soul and skin, why am i smiling reading you use such words.

by the way, tyou wrote in an earlier comment how barun's portrayal of asr brought to mind a stage curtain... dark with light shining through... took me to a most interesting word... chiaroscuro. popped up out of nowhere as i thought about what you'd written. and i was thrilled to read its exact meaning... his performance indeed was a heartstopping rendition of chiaroscuro... using bold contrasts, light and shade, to create a whole man in all his dimensions... in between minutely subltle shading.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#435

Originally posted by: sohara
superb Indi.
Again a heart wrenching update.
You again made me cry. I just can't bear Khushi's pain any more. I'm with your husband and daughter. Make Arnav well soon and let him be merry with Khushi again.
So Anjali is suspecting, that Shyam can be behind this accident.Her story is really painful. Dr. Vijay seems interested on Anjali. Good. we really need a good guy to enter her life.
Loved how you portrayed Payal in your tale. The cvs showed her as a strong woman at the beginning, but later just ruined her.
looking forward for the next update.

hi sohara. thank you, dear girl.

cry? now i am really beginning to feel like little jack horner... isn't he the one who made all the girls cry. 😆

ah, a supporter of the two dagaabaaz family members... durga calls them producer and channel incarnate. trp trp trp is all they care for. but what about feeling, arnav ji, feeling. teehee.

ok ok he's up and dancing prancing holding saving soon...

glad you like the other stories alongside. see ya soon.

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Horizon

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Posted: 12 years ago

#436

Originally posted by: indi52

thanks, horizon, sweet again.

nah, not really hassled about who read or didn't. asked myself, who do i write for... yes, for the reader and for me. i am here. the reader will come if there's any need for them to. in the meantime, each one that comes by, v v v precious.

a strange thing happened. i was on the barun fan club when i realised 5 july was the anniversary of rabba ve. i had no idea. and yet, that was the day my mind decided to write a portion i think of as rabba ve... so came about the first part. something said to me, it's more than music, it is the stroke through which the beyond here and nowness of ipk was painted.

That rabba ve thing surely seems to be a telepathy Indi... happy anniversary!

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Putija

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Posted: 12 years ago

#437

"shh. sh... sh. khushi? khushi?

i can hear you always... hamesha. always. remember?

i hear everything you say, even those you sometimes don't. i hear your rhythm, your cadence, your breath, the hush of your lashes falling across your cheek, the stir of your touch, the hope in your smile. i hear you in my heartbeat.

Are they Arnav's thoughts in coma he cant bear Khushi blaming herself even then how beautifully you are taking the story forward loved reading it Indi your style is superb

usually I don't have the patience to wait for the update and only read completed FFs but with blasters I am making a exception

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#438

Originally posted by: chalhov
"shh. sh... sh. khushi? khushi?

i can hear you always... hamesha. always. remember?

i hear everything you say, even those you sometimes don't. i hear your rhythm, your cadence, your breath, the hush of your lashes falling across your cheek, the stir of your touch, the hope in your smile. i hear you in my heartbeat.

Are they Arnav's thoughts in coma he cant bear Khushi blaming herself even then how beautifully you are taking the story forward loved reading it Indi your style is superb

usually I don't have the patience to wait for the update and only read completed FFs but with blasters I am making a exception

thank you so much, chalhov.

sweet of you to read our stories as we update... exception ke liye bahut sare hugs.

you know about that conversation and what is "actually" happening, i really don;t know. i feel when people are very connected they can feel and hear each other... especially when the heart is without barrier, open and roaming the universe free... something like that is what it is i think. it's a rabba ve, beyond here and now, thing.

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IssK.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#439

You spoke to me there, Indi! And you have just as easily spoken FOR me. So many beautiful thoughts...and those words...this is so much more than a story unfolding!

It really is strange how many tears a girl can have... a little girl, she lives in all of us. In women and in men. We're forever taught to suppress her but she is there. In our emotional core...
...And then to know that our man in coma, he can hear everything! Things she says and ones she doesn't. I died and went to heaven there! This is why the man does it for us perhaps...

So much finds it's way to us, you say... just like that. So damn true. And so intuitively, beautifully said. This world we share right here, in these pages of bright spirited writing, or feeling, or both...this world found us just like that. A tv serial of all things... How does that happen? I believe in this weakness we share... This weakness gives me strength.

You write with passion, my friend. With craft and with empathy. It's a delight.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#440

^^^ hi issk,

does it really reach you? hope it does. always walking a strange narrow edge, between maudlin sentimentality and the huge scape/scope of real emotion. went into the story without thinking much... not a fiction writer, no idea of how to "fix" things, but that picture... so much of my life is spent with this serial, and hoping for that boy... somehow i couldn't look away when the pictures kept popping up. so i took on a bout with death. trust me, i would have killed asr if i could... but nothing would let me. not even when i knew these things happen. now trying to feel my way around this terrible situation... wondering what all really does happen when you're here.

so happy to read your words. as long as there's a sense of connection, of something that lingers, maybe flows to other thoughts and has some relevance, me thrilled. the moment it doesn't i will need someone to tell me, halt, sir, you are going nowhere... hope that is you.

thanks again for feeling things and enjoying yourself.