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Hiya Guys! Hope you all are doing well! It crossed my idea a lot of timesand i thought to pen it down.
Warning: Brace yourself for the world's biggest crap! N i m getting ready for rotten tomatos' eggs and chappals!

OS: Story behind the facade

He was the one to blame, everyone said that he don't have a heart. But how could he made people understand that his society,surrounding and his past made him like this, rude at all.
No one except him knew his story, he was born in an uncivilized backward Village of India, which was far away from humanity. The custom to sacrifice the women was tradition and they cursed their faith when blessed with the world's best gift: Daughter. His father being the Sardar of that area, had same thoughts.He was younger than his sister, and love her and her mother to the core. His sister was always bestowed with curses and swears and the day didn't pass if his mother was not beaten by his father whearase he was treated as the Lost prince who was founded after a decade. He was sensitive at heart and sharp and intelligent at mind. He didn't like the atmosphere of his family a bit. They were living a joint family and no family there was an exception. Life was passing by this until he turned 11, his sister 14 and his cousin siblings 12 and 14. That day a fake Scholar told his father the Sardar that he would become the wealthest of all if u sacrificed all your family girls in front of god. His father blindly trusted him and when the women of the family protested they were asked to gave him the amount of crores if they want their daughter. He witnessed the whole scenario of his sister and 2 siblings being sacrificed. His mother n aunt was caused to burnt alive and when he couldn't did anything else, he decided to ran away, run away from the area where people don't know the value of the women where only money mattered at all. He wished that he could have money so that he would save them.
After the week he entered a shop, the owner adopted him, who was a nice man but poor. He told him about everything and they both shifted to Lucknow to save him from the cruel family. But the fate wasn't on his side, this man whom he used to call Baabu ji was murdered by someone whom he had to pay back money when he was 15. Again MONEY! He thought, again he lost the most important person because of money.
He made his aim to gain the money though he had to lose his life. His sharp mind was then trained by another person who was evil at inside. His life was going on when..
When he met her, the so-called love of his life at age of 28 in Mandir. He was there for Pooja and he saw her. He liked her at instant, she was beautiful but not physically fit. Gentle, sweet and caring at heart.
But his life has taught him that no one in this world has been the good and u can't trust any. He find out that her brother was stepping in the world of wealth, famousness, and progress, he made sure to marry her. He made himself look like the world's best son-in-law and he was changing slowly for good but, he saw her, and lusted after her. He destroyed his life, his wife's, his brother-in-law and her, only because of lust. He was brought up the lusty and evil person, who had transmitted all his habbits into him. He needed money and for this he even killed her own unborn child. How cruel he could get, people asked. But why the fate got so cruel with him!? Yes! You have guessed right, he was Shaym Manhor Jha


A/N: i know, i know that was crap, but if you have read it then plz plz do tell me how was it! I m really sorry if i offended someone or there was any mistake in typos!
Please pass ur opinion. Looking forward to it. Critize is allowed whole-heartdly along with anything you want to throw!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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i srsly liked it!! good job!!
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Originally posted by: arvankhushi

i srsly liked it!! good job!!


Thanks! 😊
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Originally posted by: yappingduck

simply awesome.loved it


Its my pleasure that you like it! [:-)]
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Originally posted by: tushi0310

it was seriously awesome


Thankyou sooo much! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Great post!
Every evil person has a equally evil past, which probably is not his fault. I think Shyam is the best example for this. The show didn't reveal to which extent the feelings of his for Khushi and her family was real. I guess at least a tiny bit of them was real. He didn't treat Anjali badly, but he didn't have even a bit of a conscience that he's cheating her, lusting after another girl. That's his evilness. He's not the typical villain we see in movies, who beat, harass, humiliate women, kill people just for the fun of it. He has a brilliant mind, plans what he does, finds other people's weaknesses, and strikes at the right moment. PLUS he's sneaky. terribly sneaky. and snaky. that's why he was named snakewa.

Well i'm not saying sad past always make a villain. ASR is the best example for that. Suffered a lot because of his past, tried to turn ruthless... well he managed it with most people in the world, but failed with people so close to his heart. He failed to destroy the inherent goodness in him.

ok, this is getting long here, so i'll stop. but i have tell this:
Shyam was one of the best written characters in the show. Probably the best after Arnav. He took forward the story. that's why after his departure, the story got stagnant. Being the most important villain, he deserved a better departure. He's not that easy to break. Arnav, being the brilliant mind he is, should have given the chance to play the battle of minds there. After all, shyam played with the 2 most important women in his world, so ASR's revenge should be something brilliant.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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i guess every evil out there had a dark past
but did that mean he himself should turn so
but if that is all he saw what else could be expected
hmm but you did a great job of showing it from SMJ pov

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: aruni50218

Great post!

Every evil person has a equally evil past, which probably is not his fault. I think Shyam is the best example for this. The show didn't reveal to which extent the feelings of his for Khushi and her family was real. I guess at least a tiny bit of them was real. Hedidn'ttreat Anjali badly, but he didn't have even a bit of aconscience that he's cheating her, lusting after another girl. That's his evilness. He's not the typical villain we see in movies, who beat,harass, humiliatewomen,kill people just for the fun of it. He has a brilliant mind, plans what he does, findsother people's weaknesses, and strikes at the right moment. PLUS he's sneaky. terribly sneaky. and snaky. that's why he was named snakewa.

Well i'm not saying sad past always make a villain. ASR is the best example for that. Suffered a lot because of his past, tried to turn ruthless... well he managed it with most people in the world, but failed with people so close to his heart. He failed to destroy the inherent goodness in him.

ok, this is getting long here, so i'll stop. but i have tell this:
Shyam was one of the best written characters in the show. Probably the best after Arnav. He tookforwardthe story. that's why after his departure, the story got stagnant. Being the most important villain, he deserved a better departure. He's not that easy to break. Arnav, being thebrilliantmind he is, should have given the chance to play the battle of minds there. After all, shyam played with the 2 most important women in his world, so ASR's revenge should be something brilliant.

this is exactly what i thought. I want to see the same. The story could move forward by reaviling Shaym's past. They could also take it in a proportional. But unfortunatley it didn't happen.
And yep! A bad past can make a person what ever his brain take him! Both were determined to be sucessful and ASR was indeed the best example! I also want to see Anjali's true chracter not like this. And i m also planing to write another shot on this :D :p
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: chavvi16

i guess every evil out there had a dark past
but did that mean he himself should turn so
but if that is all he saw what else could be expected
hmm but you did a great job of showing it from SMJ pov



Yep! I agree. It always depand upon the person how he took his past for his present and future.
And i wanted to see some thing related to shyam so his chracter would be staisfied.!

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