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Posted: 13 years ago
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She loved you when you were terrible.
She loved you when you were a monster.
You left her crying.
She fell from a cliff dying.
She gave all she had for you.
And never had any hopes from you.
What more can you ask
From a girl so pure?
Still she gives
Without asking for nothing.
Can you give her what she needs?
It isn't riches or treasure, surely you must know!
It won't cost much
No more than a soft whispered word.
Will you let her fall,
Thinking her to be strong?
Can you not see?
Are your eyes so blind?
Or do you simply chose to turn away?
She will break one day, surely.
She isn't so different from a glass doll.
She may seen to be very strong
And it is true that she is.
But even rocks crumble
When put under stress.
Heed my friend, for it is
A lesson to remember:
Once more you hurt,
She may very well be gone.
Gone from your world...
Gone from your soul...
Never to be seen...
Only felt from the contours
Of a heart so cold.
Can you bear it once more?
If you haven't learnt your lesson by now, dear friend,
Then I will have to say:
You no more deserve her,
Than the man called the "Snake".
I may sound harsh.
No, not may for I am being harsh.
But if you haven't learnt your lesson till now
Then why should she stay?
Why?
Why?
Why?

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A really crappy attempt at poetry. Tell me what you think!

Thanks!
Nazifa
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow this is really good! so intense. i would love to see arnav recite these lines as an internal monologue or something on the show.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Loved it. It was very intense. You portrayed Arnav's pain and confusion perfectly!! Please write more!!


Krishika
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Posted: 13 years ago
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a good attempt for first time! I write poetry for school magazine. have tried to do something for IPKKND in poetry but i fail miserably!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#5
Very nice !! Loved it.. He should know by now that she also gets hurt.. It shouldn't be a vicious cycle of hurt-Placate-win her back!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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loved the poem very truth thanks for the pm

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Woah!That was really beautiful!So intense and the emotions weaved gently but surely through the words..I have tried writing poetry but sadly all I can do well is rhyme.''A lesson to remember'' for Mr Raizada indeed! Loved it :D
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow... that's awesome! loved it!!! put it up on their website or something, just so they'll get the hint! ;)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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That is not a crappy attempt at poetry!
That was amazing!

Manal <3
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow beautifully written dear n thnx 4da pm...

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