PART II - OS: You Need To Know

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Hi guys! 😊

This is the second version to my OS 'You Need To Know'. This version ends on a highly different and interesting note compared to the first version. A heart-felt Thank You to my friend Jems (Jhalak) who provided me the outline for this unique ending. For those who have read the first version, let's see if your reaction differs after reading this one! 😉 For those who have come straight here, well, enjoy it, and feel free to read the first version here: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/59135897



OS: YOU NEED TO KNOW... (II)



She took three steps toward the Castle door, stopped... turned around... went three steps back, paused... turned around, and waited. She took in a deep, calm breath and then, took three firm steps toward the Castle door and opened it.

The room was filled with soft lights, red flowers adorning little tables set at intervals, a lingering smell of freshly watered leaves wafted through the air, and twinkling golden stars decorated the ceiling.

She walked in, slowly, hesitatingly, as her stunned self acquainted itself with the soothing atmosphere. She heard the sweet tinkling of wind-chimes, gyrating to the gentle wind blowing through the open windows, and it awakened her from the magical stupor.

The lights and shadows played on her eyes, and her wandering eyes settled on a figure standing in a dark corner of the room. All she could see were the eyes. Strong, powerful eyes, that filtered through hers and reached down to the depths of her soul. Those eyes that conveyed the conversation of love to her, of longing, of understanding and care.

She stood there, rooted to the spot. The figure slowly detached itself from the darkness and walked toward her - toward the light.

Slow steps, each of them measured, teasing, taunting, confident steps that led right up to her.



He stopped, three feet in front of her, and waited, knowing and testing her.


She couldn't resist and hide it anymore. She quickly closed the distance between them with a run. Her arms went around his neck as she pressed her body onto him even as he entwined his arms around her in a loving embrace.


They remained like that for some minutes. Exchanging themselves, breathing in their love, sharing the flaming passion of their hearts. One in spirit and soul.

Slowly, their eyes sought each other, and they loosened their hold on one another. A soft smile flitted around her features on seeing his eyes soaking her in.


"Khushi," he said, breaking her reverie, "I can't wait any longer!"


A small shallow smile etched the corners of her mouth as she said, "No more waiting for us. We're almost there."


She ran a finger from his temple to his chin teasingly, knowing that this wasn't enough for him. Sure enough, he brushed her finger away lightly and asked, "When?"


"Soon", she replied softly, "When my name receives the signature of trust, and the value is attached to my name in writing."

Her words were mixed with gleeful laughter causing him to smother her in a powerful hug. She responded by lifting her feet off the ground, content to be held in his secure arms.


He nuzzled against her neck, breathing in the pleasant scent of her hair and whispered huskily, "This is why I love you so much Khushi!"


The golden stars reflected in her eyes as she whispered back...

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"Me too, Shyam!"



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Well, well? Stunned, startled? You are free to express your feelings here, and feedback is always welcome! 😊 Also, if you liked the ending, please credit Jems (Jhalak) for it, as it was her brainwave! Thank guys...

Link to the first version of OS: You Need To Know -
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/59135897


LINK TO MY OTHER OS

My Best Friends' Wedding




Love,

Nia





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gowri1712 thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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yaay

I'm first!!!

BTW why do keep bringing Shyam in the end???
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Originally posted by: luvbarunsanaya6

yaay

I'm first!!!

BTW why do keep bringing Shyam in the end???



Haahaa, Shyam keeps coming in the end because I and Jems tried experimenting with the first idea of Khushi and Shyam being together. 😃 The first OS had a different tone to it - it was more about Khushi apologizing and Arnav's pain being shown, while this one is outright a dark shade of Khushi who is using Arnav to get to his wealth!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Ha..ha..The ending!😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMGEEE!
that was shocking
perhaps if Shyam was a man caught in a loveless marriage, i would have sympathised, but as things stand now...
if Khushi too was gray, then i would have said they deserved each other

hi! Nia

the above comment was my response to Jhalak's PM forwarding me the link to ur OS
the first version hinted at something redeemable in Shyam, while the second - this one is a shocker indeed
i applaud ur ability to think of an alternate circumstance
and initially, in the series, Shyam does evoke some sympathy, being married to a "punya aathma" like Anjali, until they did away with his good side completely and made him what he is today
i have always loved ur writing style
i have told u before, u make me float, this time, i liked the thump u provided at the end too👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: smitar

Ha..ha..The ending!😆



Definitely didn't expect this reaction 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nia ...

Loved this .. must thank Jhalak for sharing this with me ... always wondered why u dint write FF or OS .. got my answer .

Have been a fan of ur writing ... u have the most gentle & romantic way with words ..,, whether its a review or your thoughts about the episode or this wonderful OS ...its the poignancy in ur words which touches me ...absolutely loved it.

Hey WHAT THE ... .. ... why can't Snakewa have a lead in someones thoughts ...😃 .. do try developing this further would love to know ..





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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sonshine

OMGEEE!

that was shocking
perhaps if Shyam was a man caught in a loveless marriage, i would have sympathised, but as things stand now...
if Khushi too was gray, then i would have said they deserved each other

hi! Nia

the above comment was my response to Jhalak's PM forwarding me the link to ur OS
the first version hinted at something redeemable in Shyam, while the second - this one is a shocker indeed
i applaud ur ability to think of an alternate circumstance
and initially, in the series, Shyam does evoke some sympathy, being married to a "punya aathma" like Anjali, until they did away with his good side completely and made him what he is today
i have always loved ur writing style
i have told u before, u make me float, this time, i liked the thump u provided at the end too👏👏



Hey Appu 🤗

I only thought of Khushi being in love with shyam, it was Jems/Jhalak who suggested this shocking ending! 😊 She felt that Khushi in a darker shade would work really well, so I just built the ending on that line.

It would be interesting to actually poke further into this relationship between Khushi and Shyam, na!




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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: redwine1

Nia ...


Loved this .. must thank Jhalak for sharing this with me ... always wondered why u dint write FF or OS .. got my answer .

Have been a fan of ur writing ... u have the most gentle & romantic way with words ..,, whether its a review or your thoughts about the episode or this wonderful OS ...its the poignancy in ur words which touches me ...absolutely loved it.

Hey WHAT THE ... .. ... why can't Snakewa have a lead in someones thoughts ...😃 .. do try developing this further would love to know ..



Hiya Ruby!! Thanks so much girl! I wasn't actually sure about this since I'm writing a story after nearly a decade... I'm glad that people are liking it, and are receptive to Shyam and Khushi together 😃

I actually feel sad for Shyam sometimes. Would love to dissect his mind and then build on that! Dekhte hai... but thanks so much for reading and appreciating! 🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago
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eeewww creepy🤢😕
de idea ov khushi n shyam bein together iz vry hard to digest



neverthless nicely written!!!!!!!!

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