SS- HUMSHAKAL, last part updated on 16/2/14 on pg 31 - Page 22

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Posted: 11 years ago
nice part meera
loved it
waiting for next
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: naina..

Too good meera... Loved the last part, hope the same happens in the show.. Revenge vivenge chodo n think nirma... 🤣 😉 Loved ur story 😊



thank you so much dear😊
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: niki795

nice part meera
loved it
waiting for next



thank you di😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
last part


Shlok : mein astha se pyaar nahi karta!! Do you understand, mein ... astha... se...pyaar...nahi kartaaa
[shlok emphasized on each word as if he was convincing himself]
Inner voice: acha toh tum use pyaar nahi kartey??? Are you sure???
Shlok: kya bakwaas he??? Ofcourse am sure.
Inner voice: then me tumse kuch savaal poochunga. Uska tum ha ya na me jawaab dena... uske baad hum decide karenge kit um sahi ho ya me! Deal?
Shlok: deal. Shoot...
Inner vouce: kya tumhe astha ko irritate karna pasand he??
Shlok :ye kaisa sawwaa...
Inner voice: sirf ha ya na shlok!
Shlok: ha ha ha ..
Inner voice: am not deaf shlok. Ek baar bolo yahi kaafi he.
Shlok: okay! [he pouted like a small kid]
Inner voice: jab ussne kal raat restaurant pe tumhe pehchan ne se inkaar kiya tha tab tumhe gussa aya tha?
Shlok: ha
Inner voice : jab tumhe asli ananya ke bare me pata chala kya tumhe astha pe gussa aya?
Shlok; ha
Inner voice; jab tumhe ye pata chala ki astha aur uske dosto ne milke tumhe ullu banaya he, did you felt betrayed???
Shlok: haan..[his voice was low,hurt was clear on his face]
Inner voice: jab uske dosto ne use gale lagaya , did you felt a jealous???
Shlok: usske to me haat kaat du..
Inner voice: haan ya naa shlok.
Shlok: haaa
Inner voice: jab astha ne unse kaha ki uske liye tumhe bhulana mushkil he, did you felt haapy?
Shlok: haa [this baought a huge smile on shlok's face]
Innervoice : kyat um raat ko uske kamre ke baahar aake use chup chup ke nahi dekhte?
Shlok: haa
Inner voice: jab bhi who tumhare saamne aati he tumhare dil ki dhadkan teez nahi hote?
Shlok: haa, kabhi kabhi toh mujhe lagta he ki muhje heart attack aa jayega! Specially jab who green saree pehanti he! Uff !!!
Inner voice: [laughing a little] jab bhi tum use kitchen me kaam kartey dekhte ho, use peeche se hug karne ka dil nahi karta?
Shlok: haa... roz... [he had a dreamy expression on his face]
Inner voice : kyat u use se pyaar nahi karte??
Shlok : haa karta me use pyaar... beintehaa mohabbat karta hu me apni astha se!!! bas darta hu ki kahi me usse pyaar kar lu aur usse bhi bappa mujhse cheen le. Me usse khona nahi chahta.
Inner voice: you wont loose her shlok, vishwaas rakho apne pyaar pe. Apni galtiya sudharo, isse pehle ki bohat der ho jaye. Keh do astha se apni dil ki baat. Tum apne aapko ab aur nahi rok paoge shlok, abhi thodi der pehle tumne usse gale lagaya, aur usse kiss kiya kyuki tumhara sabar ka had toot raha he!!! Wake up shlok! Wake up..
[shlok felt some body shaking him. He opened hi eyes and found astha shaking him and telling him to wake up. He looked around to see where he was. He was actually sleeping on the stairs.]
Astha: shlok aap yaha kyu so rahe he???
Shlok; pata nahi...
Astha : pata nahi??? Jayiye apne kamre jake so jayiye!
Shlok: tum bhi chalo!
Astha: kya???
Shlok: I mean tum .. tum jake so jao. Me bhi jaa raha hu!!!
[shlok quikly got up and nearly ran to hi room. Closed the door with a loud thud. He went to the bathroom and closed the door. He stared up at the mirror. ]
Shlok: Mrs. Astha shlok agnihotri aka my sweet astha, ab tak tumne mera nafrat aur gussa dekha, now its time for you to see my love and passion for you sweetheart! So brace yourself because shlok agnihotri tumhe apne pyaar me duba dene waala he...

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Edited by meera.rajeev - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
that was the end of this story.. thank you all who supported and liked and commented... thank you so much...
love,
meera😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
wow lovely endingg thanks for the pm👏👏👏
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: lachii

Loved the ending dialog



thank you😊
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: xayeshax

wow lovely endingg thanks for the pm👏👏👏



thank you😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
very nice ending meera... it doesnot seem like a first attempt u wrote it really well... 👍🏼👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
oh so finally he admited to himself
loved his pov
thanks for this story
keep writing
u r a good writer

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