RiKara SS - Catching Feelings Part 5 on Pg 16 (04/11) - Page 6

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Posted: 8 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: tasnimrodela

Genie dear...sorry for this maha late wali comment..but I actually took the time to read the update once more...and it was perfectly written..we missed Omkara's point of view during those times you described in this chapter...your every detailing about his thoughts and feelings at those moments was absolutely something that we wanted from the show..khair..I don't wanna talk about the show and spoil my mood...itna pyaara sa update ke liye thanks dear...it wasn't rushed..you described every single moment so beautifully..now we can read the further story happily as we have the idea of his POVs...continue soon..can't wait to know more about their catching feelings...


Tasnim yaar... 🤗

Seriously dude... your comments give me life!

I am so thankful for the lovely, articulate and awesome comments I get from you.

Omki's perspective is sorely lacking in the show na? Be it DBO or IB, the CVs just don't seem to want to give Omkara's mind a voice. We never know his persetive of things and I decided ki this time, I'm gonna give us all what we want. I'm glad you thought it wasn't rushed cuz I had a lot of material to cover...

Thanks again for the love and stay tuned for an update coming soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: arshifansiri

Awesome update.

Loved it.
Eagerly waiting for the next part.
Thanks for the pm:)


Thanks for taking the time to comment my friend!

There should be an update coming soon... so stay tuned!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: -Rhea-

Great chapters, Genie. You have penned down Om's thoughts beautifully. Eagerly waiting to see how the story unfolds. Thanks for the PM. Update soon. ❤️


Thanks for the lovely comment Rhea!

I'm glad you liked Omki's side of things... bande ko bhi thodi si perspective milni chaahiye right? Agar show mein nahin mil rahi to yahaan hi sahi.

There should be an update coming soon... so stay tuned!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#54
Your works are always a delight to read Genie 😊
Somehow the writers of Rikara FFs in this forum...always get the point which the writers of the production house miss
Can't you complain to someone about Plagiarism?...the global mods or anybody?

Awesome one ...

And I love your DP 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: Aarathi85

Genie what to write yar...u are impossible...again dil bole oberoi is playing here...so much emotional part it is...but its too nice...i have net problems so cant write a lengthy comment


Thanks for the lovely comment Aarathi!

I'm so glad you felt like the DBO vibe was back... because that was what I was going for. A little bit of a redo for the last two weeks or so to give them a good takeoff point for the RiKara building.

It doesn't matter if it's a lengthy comment or a short one (though I just love the long ones... so much more fun to read! ) I love the fact that you took the time to comment.

Thanks for all the love and stay tuned for the next update coming soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: sara1990

Ginie, this is great to read Om's POV. I wished they could show us how Omkie finally listened to the Voice message or even suspect Bua Maa. Thank you for the prequel. Yes, we need to know how Rikara solves their misunderstanding and issues. Let's see whether anyone gonna be their love Cupid. Waiting for your next update.


Thanks for the lovely comment Sara!

I'm glad you liked the idea of the prequel... We really needed Omki's perspective on things in DBO right?

Now that Omki has had some time to reflect, we can look forward to some developments.

Thanks for all the love and stay tuned for an update soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: A-Musing-Me

Genie 🤗... this is soo osm... Omkara isnt passive 😒.. what a big deal this is... not sure why the writer refuses to make the show interesting ... everything ends in linearity flat on its face... anyway their loss cause tv viewers are not enjoying this as well... but youve rehashed whatever happened on the show but in a way so muvh better that the viewers feel all paisa vasool... Omkara feels hes gone wrong in judging this girl... getting this dekho into Omkaras psyche n thats a hug huge deal for RiKarians... cvs have got Omkaras thoughts locked in some swiss bank account n refuse to let even a teeny weeny brain wave out.. kya pata ,.. but here we have him tje active participant ready to lool at his relationship in a new light... kitni khush hui mai yaar you have no clue... Thanks so much for RiKara... such potential needs writers like you elze everything comes across as bland n distasteful... had ShreNal been given this script then this show would've been something else entirely but nah nahi... anyway i wanna come off this on the show RiKara fascination since it leads to a headache n nothing more but at least got amazing writers like you who give me my RiKara dose n make md super happy... 😃.. n glad that youve started protecting your work... good girl... you deserve all the praise for taking time out for us n definitely not to be discredited n cheated... n yeppp... will definitely get in touch with ya if i wanna rant but trying to get off that phase ... doesnt really help... bas jo hai accha hai... :)


Neha... yaar one jhappi is not enough for you!
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Thanks for being such an awesome friend my luv...

You have no idea what this comment means to me... And you've the nail right on the head about the CVs locking up Omki's thoughts in a bank vault... kuch bahar aane ki sambhaavnayen bhi nahin hain.

But never fikar... All the cray cray writers of the RiKara fandom are haazir to give you a hundred different perspectives on Omkara's thoughts, feelings, emotions and such.

I hope you like the rest of the non-canon part of this story as much as you liked the story so far.

Ranting is actually good for the soul... ander ki saari negative feelings nikaal doge to you'll feel better... offer is always open yaar. Pm karo aur shuru ho jaao... 😆

Thanks again for all the love... and stay tuned for an update coming real soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: priya_86

Your works are always a delight to read Genie 😊

Somehow the writers of Rikara FFs in this forum...always get the point which the writers of the production house miss
Can't you complain to someone about Plagiarism?...the global mods or anybody?

Awesome one ...

And I love your DP 😊


Thanks for the lovely compliment Priya!

I'm glad you liked the story so far...

We're able to objectively look at the story with the idea of clearing out the flaws from it... the CVs are just trying to skate by with the least amount of effort put in to get the script done and shot for the week. I don't feel any particular effort put into even ShivIka's story arc nowadays... its the same old, some old served up on a relatively new platter.

The plagiarism issue cropped up on Wattpad and that site isn't as concerned about dealing with this particular issue. A few other writers and I have complained and reported that user but I honestly don't see it going any further.

Thanks for the concern, support and the lovely comment!

Stay tuned for an update soon!

p.s. Thanks for liking my DP... though its just a random image I found somewhere a couple of years ago I think. I still don't know what painting this mage is a part of.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#59
Hello my lovelies!

I'm back with yet another chapter of Catching Feelings...

Lets see if this chapter involves any one catching any feelings so far... It's a comparatively shorter update but things are moving... and fast!
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03

With that decision arrived at in the middle of the night, Omkara had since spent the morning thinking of ways to broach the topic with his not-yet-but-possibly-soon wife. And that was when he realized that she had been quietly and very efficiently avoiding him in the intervening couple of days. Now that he wanted to find her and talk things out with her, she either seemed to be nowhere in sight or right in the thick of things with her family members... almost as if she was using them as a shield between her and him.

Well... if she was Gauri Kumari Sharma... soon to hopefully be Gauri Omkara Singh Oberoi, then he'd been an Oberoi all his life. Whatever games she played, he could go one step better. Nodding to himself at the bare bones of a plan forming in his mind, Omkara quickly made his way to their room and pulled out a duffel bag for himself from the closet and randomly threw in a bunch of clothes and other necessities. Glancing to the side showed him where she'd stowed her perpetually packed bag and grabbing that along with his own, he quietly made his way to his car and stowed both bags in its trunk, all the while making a promise to himself that he would provide Gauri with the security she needed to make a home for herself with him, to make her feel that she belonged where she was, enough for her to make her own space in the room they shared.

Then, a short drive provided him with step two of plan GOSO. With a box of packed ingredients ready to be consumed at their will stacked away securely in the back seat, Omkara made his way back to Oberoi mansion, to get his penultimate step of the plan out of his way.

A couple of messages to his brothers had the three of them convening in Shivaay's room about five minutes later.

"What's up Om? Hum donon ko yahaan kyun bulaaya hai?"

"Haan O! Main apni pushups chhod ke aaya hoon... to jaldi bataao kya baat hai?"

"Ek minute... koi problem hai? Kya tum ne Gauri ke saath phir se jhagdaa kiya? Om... abhi bataa deta hoon tumhein ki agar tum ne Gauri se jhagdaa kiya hai to uska bhai hone ke naate main Gauri ke side pe hoon"

"O! Bulbul bhabhi ko kyun itna sathaa rahe ho? Dekh lena wo ek na ek din aap ko ek jhaap mein deewar se sataa dengi..."

"CHUP! Chup... ab ek word aur nahin. Both of you... express train ki tarah bhaagte hi jaa rahe ho! Let me speak guys... Maine tum donon ko yahaan is liye bulaaya hai because I need your help."

"To bolo na Om... We'll do everything we can. Tell us... what do you need?"

"Mujhe Gauri ko manaana hai...aur-"

"Bas! Itni si baat?! Ye to yoon ho jaayega. Aap meri baat suno-"

Rudy's enthusiastic plans were stopped mid-word by his older brother putting a hand over his mouth and forcibly shutting him up

"Shhh... Tum donon mein se koi nahin bolega. Sirf main bolunga. Tum donon bas sunoge. Just nod yes..."

At their obedient nods, Omkara continued

"I already have all the plans I need... Ab mujhe tum donon se bas thodi si cooperation chaahiye. Gauri has been avoiding me for the last couple of days aur mujhe us se baat karke hum donon ke beech ke misunderstandings ko door karna bohot zaroori hai."

At their fervent nods to that, he went on

"I need to take her out for a couple of days or so, so that she doesn't have other people to use as a barrier between the two of us. Also, she might open up more and react better if she knew that there was just the two of us. I don't want her worrying about the family and their feelings about our confrontation or any possible resolution. Gauri ko agar pata chala ki ghar waalon ko uski wajah se koi bhi takleef hui to wo unhein khush karne ke chakkar mein apni problems bhool jaayegi. I don't want to distract her with anything else until all the issues between us are resolved."

"What do you need from us Om?"

"Keep the family distracted and busy for a couple of days. Take care of everything here while I take care of things between me and Gauri. Also... abhi ke liye just find a way to send her out to my car... I'll handle everything after that. Best thing to do would be to tell her that I have to go out for something regarding Svetlana. Can I count on you guys?"

"Of course O! It's all for one and one for all... Hum yahaan sambhal lenge. Aap jaao aur bhabhi ko manaao. Aur haan... bina saari problems solve kiya waapis mat aana... samjhe?"

At Omkara's resolute nod, Rudra pulled both his brothers into a long hug, which both brothers instantly started squirming to get out of

"Rudy... moment nikal gaya. Ab chhod de..."

Shivaay clapped a supportive hand on his brother's shoulder

"Good Luck Om! I am sure ki tum donon saari problems solve kar loge. Believe in each other and that you are meant to be together. Okay? Aur haan... koi bhi problem ho, kuch bhi chaahiye, get in touch with me."

Nodding at Shivaay and quickly hugging both his brothers once more, Omkara almost ran out of the room while Shivaay and Rudy looked at each other and smiled at their brother's newfound enthusiasm and thanked whatever divine force had been responsible for bringing Gauri Kumari Sharma into their brother's life.


While Omkara went and got everything ready for the impromptu trip, Rudy was given the job of convincing his bulbul bhabhi that O was leaving for something to do with Svetlana and might need some help. Rudy stood grinning at his own awesomeness when he saw Gauri flat out running out to the carpark even before he'd finished his story about O and Svetlana.

Omkara's face broke out into a huge grin the second he spotted the Bareilly ki chiraiyya running toward his car... she never could resist a challenge. He hurriedly schooled his expression into something resembling a frown, which is what his face should've been like had there really been a development with the fake Svetlana case, and started his car.


Gauri had promptly forgotten her reasons to avoid her patidev at the mere mention of the words Svetlana and problem. Here she was, running to his car to make sure he didn't leave without her in tow and there he was, trying to be a hero and deal with this all by himself. Omkara had almost pulled out of the lot when Gauri stopped a few yards in front of his car, forcing him to brake in time. What she was unaware of, was the fact that he'd been expecting such shenanigans from her and was happily prepared for such an eventuality.

As she opened the passenger side door, which in itself should've set some alarm bells ringing in her mind, because Omkara never drove his car without locking the doors first, Gauri slid into the seat and put on her seat belt. She turned to her jatadhari with a challenging expression, all prepared to fight him on his decision to deal with the Svetlana problem alone. But all she received was a benign smile from him

"Oh... Tum bhi aa rahi ho? To theek hai... chalo"

With that he quickly drove the car out of the Oberoi mansion lot and they were off.

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That's a wrap on that chapter folks.

Please like and comment your ideas, thoughts and suggestions.

I would love to hear from you!

p.s.

Let me know how many of you lost it over the last couple of episodes of GoT... And what's your impression on the season finale? How do you plan to sustain your excitement over the next two years till season 8?
Edited by writergenie17 - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Genie I understand...plagiarism really hurts
One of my works was copied around 4 yrs back on IF itself
Your DP give me the Victorian feels...😊

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