holy Crap... I stopped as soon as I saw A heart M and I knew what was coming... Shit shit shit ...why?
I just have to go finish reading the chapter... But m too shocked for now.
*res*
*unres*
First of let me tell you I love your writing...you are an amazing weaver of words and ideas and always pull me into your world. I generally do not respond, not because I don't wish to, but because I do not really have much to add to the flow of your story.
Now coming to this update, I have so much to say, so much to ask and hence I was compelled to write. Finally!!!
When the story started, I was looking forward to it because I really need to see Shivaays repentance and then his redemption. But now I am very very confused. Shocked I would not say, there were hints you left, for example the coffee vs tea thing, but I did not really see this coming until this chapter. I just chalked up the changes in Shivaay to his repentance and wish to change himself and his ways for her because he suddenly realised her importance.
Now where do I start???š¤
Let's start with Anika since she in the centre of this mess. She is so happy and so blissfully unaware of the storm coming her way. How did she not realise that this man is not HER man? Wasn't she always aware of him? Or was she just so wrapped up in her new feelings and the her surroundings that she did not notice that something is amiss?
I am sure you will end up explaining this in the story, but what is bothering me the most is how she will react once she finds out Mahi's or maybe it is both Mahi and Shivaay's deception. I understand having exes, but spending so much quality time in such close proximity with a man who looks exactly like your husband, thinking he is your husband and then realising that he really is someone else. How that is going to break her!!! Had it been another man, another face, had she moved on and then come back to Shivaay later, the physical proximities would maybe okay with her I guess. But I am just not sure any type of explanation will help her with the guilt she will face on learning that it was Mahi and not Shivaay. Unless (hopefully I am not revealing your plot here) it was always Shivaay except for a few instances when he had to be elsewhere and he put in the duplicate to keep the ruse going.
Coming to Mahi- you said he is positive. What kind of a positive man would spend so much time with another mans wife? And being so close to her, almost a man and wife except for doing the deed that is. And it does not seem like he is just pretending, not with the carving of A and M and the way he asked her to since the "Mahi" bits of the song. š
Shivaay - what should I say? We haven't seen or heard from him yet. or maybe we did. How is he being redeemed when all the wooing is being done by another. Or will he be bringing Anika out of her miseries when this drama is over? But can he really do it, when his face, voice, everything will be a constant reminder of Mahi and his deception?
I am just too confused right now and thus rambling. I do trust you as a writer and so will keep it going till the end of this story. I was expecting you to throw a curve ball somewhere and am excitedly waiting for the same. Please continue soon and end my miseries.
Will try to respond later when more happens...until then ciao!! Lots of love. May God keep your creative juices flowing and you keep churning out gems.
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first time replying to ur threads... But love all your work..
Rivs
Edited by GoodGoneWrong - 8 years ago
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