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Ally

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Posted: 8 years ago

#11

Awesome ine shot dear.

I loveed how you wrote Prinku's uncertainty and confusion regarding our resident ACP. And him and his unruly thoughts. I just adore these two.

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Innika

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Posted: 8 years ago

#12

Absolutely loved it!

Ranveer and Prinku were both portrayed so realistically in the story, and I hope that something like this happens on the show as well. It was nice and subtle, and yet very impactful 😊

I can't wait to see Randhawa actually show his caring side, because I feel like when he loves someone, he's going to love them to the universe and beyond!

Also, I loved the quote at the end. It was beautiful 😆

Keep writing!

With love,

Innika

ps. When are you going to update the Masquerade? You have some fans awaiting it desperately! 😃

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kancht

@kancht

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Posted: 8 years ago

#13

Wow that was awesome :) Loved the way you brought out the emotions for both of them

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1002384

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Posted: 8 years ago

#14

twerps this is just amazing...😳😳👏
such a lovely piece it was...😳😳

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Nabila

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Posted: 8 years ago

#15

wow, great job twerps, such amazing writing. loved it. i loved the underlying attraction between them they themselves dont even relaized and how they are being pulled towards one another. what a sweet and soft moment between the two toward the end in the corridor.

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SRKian

@SRKian

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Posted: 8 years ago

#16

gosh twe,i luv da way u write him❤️ i can totally c him doing all dis ths😎 fab OS👏

i usually want da guy should fall 1st bt dk y he makes me wish da opposite 4 his luv story😕🤣

nd dd i tell u basketball is my fav sport😳

Ati keep asking twer 2 write ob dem so dat we gt 2 read as well😉😆

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sparkle2015

@sparkle2015

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Posted: 8 years ago

#17

Amaazinggg.

Please do write more.

I hope CVs concentrate on this story too which they themselves started.

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Arshi

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Posted: 8 years ago

#18

Such a lovely piece ❤️ you describe things beautifully! perfectly written... do write more and more

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xerxes12

@xerxes12

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Posted: 8 years ago

#19

Hi !
I had been a silent reader of your priVeer ss... it was awesome and now this is the next I have just read...you know what I wasnt planning to read priveer stories as I havent fall for them yet and thought it would need few more scenes of them to get me into liking them but trust me your stories influenced me to ship them...not harder though but I have started looking them as a pair.

You write amezing...even without romantic touch and romantic looks they were so romantic...you described them really well!
Hope to read more on them from you

Love
Thiya..

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twerping

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Posted: 8 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: smitar
PriVeer and Hamlet and Ophelia? You rock, Twerping!
Waise, Prinku does have an Ophelia feel, doesn't she? An ephemeral quality to her? And Randhawa seems to be carrying a load on his shoulder like Hamlet dear.

Awesome story.

Meep! you read it!

And yes, actually his track has a very Hamlet-like feel to it. Since I am expecting him to fall in love with Prinku, then he will be caught in a dichotomy over whether he wants to take revenge, whether he doesn't, whether Prinku is really guilty of the crime he thinks she is, whether she isn't... so his doubt over his plan of revenge might play out in that way. But then obviously I am hoping that it will not end in tragedy. So, yes, I used that quote because in the play, it was the last time Hamlet came to Ophelia with desire before he took on the garb of madness and pushed her away from him. Thank you for noticing! 😳

And as for the ephemeral quality about Prinku... I didn't think of it at the time, but now that you say it, yes, she is quite Ophelia-like, in her naivety, her sheltered existence, her ignorance of the harsh reality that life holds in store or the masks that people around her wear.

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