FF- DEEWANGEE: Ch18 'Its 8 pm on pg 55 - Page 2

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Already i am finding it breathtaking Ramona .... i just adore it ..Do update soon!!!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi Ramona 😃
First of all Congo for ur first FF on Avita👏 😊 The intro is very impressive. The way u've portrayed Avi (rich spoilt brat), sounds really interesting. Looking forward to it. 😃
Plz do continue 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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very different ........ will b waiting 4 u 2 continue ............ 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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love the intro,....................all teh characters in new avtaars sound relly interesting.

pls continue...waiting to read ur ff
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Posted: 14 years ago
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You've got a good intro,sounds interesting, looking forward to the FF.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: shefads

Already i am finding it breathtaking Ramona .... i just adore it ..Do update soon!!!!!

Okay di... will surely update...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: _nandini

Hi Ramona 😃

First of all Congo for ur first FF on Avita thanks a lot 👏 😊 The intro is very impressive. The way u've portrayed Avi (rich spoilt brat), sounds really interesting. even Im lubbing it Looking forward to it. 😃
Plz do continue 😊 yes ofcourse...

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Originally posted by: coolguy3

very different ........ I know dear... will b waiting 4 u 2 continue ............ 😊 wait wait...

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Originally posted by: danno

whatt an ideaaaaaaaaa sirji Bole toh jhakaas.... 😆😆

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Chapter 1-
Arpi's house: Its 8.00 am & Arpita is bed cuddling under her pink blanket... Suddenly she hears some one yelling?

"Ab tak so rahi ho kya? Wake up lazy bones.. College nahi jana hai kya? Im getting late" . . . . It was Jagat, Arpita's elder brother who was getting late for office.

Arpi, still struggling in bed, manages to wake-up and gets ready in 15 mins. Meanwhile, at the breakfast table-

Jagat- Mummy, humne kaha na Aapse is ladki ke karn hum aaj phir late ho jayenge.. Everyday Im late because of her?

Aparna,who was busy serving aloo parathas did not pay heed to Jagat.

Aparna- Toh kya??. . . . she said casually.

Tumhri choti behan hai? tum ye sab nahi karoge toh kaun karega??

Jagat- Ghar mein sirf hum akele hai kya? Papa nahi le jaa sakte use? Jab dekho tab humiko sab karna padta hai. . . . He said angrily?

Aparna was just about to say sumthing but stopped when she saw Arpi coming. She greeted her with an embrace, kissed her on her forehead & said- Arre wah!!! Humri gudiya toh aaj bahut sundar lag rahi hai?Yeh lo jaldi se naashta karlo.

Arpi, who by now had noticed an angry Jagat sitting beside her, tried to change the topic for she knew he was fum9ing with anger?

Arpi- why are you yelling early morning.. its not good for heath. . . . she chuckled.

Aparna served Arpi some toast and a glass of orange juice. Soon, Subodh entered the dining hall and took his seat besides Arpi..

Subodh- "Yeh kya bachhi? tum sirf toast kha rahi ho? U'll feel hungry. Chalo eat these Parathas jo tumhri Mummy ne banaya.." he began feeding Arpi some parathas.

Aparna- " what are you doing Sharmaji?? She wont them"

Arpita- "Papa, hum yeh sab khayenge toh? I'll put on more weight." She said shyly.

Aparna- "kya aap nahi jante.. she's quite Health- conscious!!!"

Jagat who was now fuming with anger suddenly roared-

" Agar Aap sab ka pyaar-dular Khatam ho gaya hai toh kya hum jaa sakte hai?? Im getting late"

Arpi hugs both her parents and gives Jagat a slight hug and says- "Sorry Bhaiyya.. chalo lets go."

Next update: AFTER CHRISTMAS 😆
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Edited by KriYa_life - 14 years ago

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