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Posted: 6 years ago
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Hello friends so here is the first part
Chapter 1

Morning in jindal house in the mandir savitri ji doing morning arti after finished the puja she look at her back and singh heavily everything changed in the house once where the whole family gathered to do puja now it is only savitri ji who doing arti alone

A- hey krishna meri lalla ko thik kar do varna ye parivar pura bikhar jayega

On the other hand in the kitchen servants are making breakfast then Durga the badi bahu of jindal entered inside the kitchen and start to checking the food then she saw something missing and call the chef

D- main ne aapko tost bhi banane ke liye kaha tha kanha gaya Jameen nigal gayi ya aasman kha gaya

C- sorry madam bhul gaya

D- tumhari bhulane ke bimari ke liye kya hum khana chhod de nikal jao iss ghara se dobara

She cut of in the mid sentence by dadi who come their with arti ki thal

S- durga bahu isse choti si galti hui he aise kaam se nikal na thik hai kya

D - thik hai dadi aap kehe rahe to isse rakah leti hoon suno dobara aise galti ki to tum dekhana ye durga jindal kya karti hai

Dadi then give prasad to her just then laxmi come their and behind her vardaan come like a puppy following it's master

V- sweety suno na galti ho gayi

L- nahi tum ne kal mujhe promise kiya tha mujhe movie leke jaoge aaur raat ko der se laute mein maffa nahi karungi
Both come to dadi take her blessing she gave prasad to them

S- laxmi bahu vardaan ko mafa kardo bichara akela restaurant sambhal raha hai

L- ha to inhe kisne kaha tha mahan bane ko jetha ji ki tarah kahi aur job nahi kara sakte the

Dadi don't say anything they settled in dining table just then saru come their and saw everyone ready to eat breakfast

Sa- aare aap sab loga breakfast ke liye betha gaye papa ko kaun breakfast dega aapko pata hai na hum mein se koi unhe kahana na de to o khate nahi

D- tum ho na aj ki payari beti tumhi dedo na hume bhi alag kaam hai

Dadi and saru know about this kind of answer from them as they don't care for Akshat so saru without any argument went Akshat's room to give him food she and dadi only the person who looking matter him

After rahul left saru even her parents abandon her it was Akshat who take her responsibility and said she will be his daughter and even keep her in a job on his friends company so saru start to call him papa and after his mental illness saru start to take care of him

Akshat's room saru entered inside and saw akshat setting on the bed complaining to his teddy whom he never allow to toch anyone and no body know who give the teddy to him

A- chotu saba kitne bure hai dekho koi merko khana nahi de raha mere peta mein na itne bade chuhe kud rahe hai

Sa- kisne kaha ke saba apko bhul gaye apki beti hai na aapke liye khana layi hai

Showing him the tray

A- saru tum kitni achi ho do mujhe jora ki bhuk lagi hai mujhe aur chotu dono ko khana hai

Saru place the tray infront of him he start to eat in between talking to his teddy after he finished his food

Sa- papa mein office ja rahi hu jab tak mein na aau kisiko tanga mat karna good boy ke tarha rahiyega

A- ha mein good boy hu mein kisiko taang nahi karunga paar o chudail durga ya dayan laxmi aaa gayi to

Saru laugh at the name akshat give to durga and laxmi

Sa- nahi o nahi ayenge aap sirf dadi se baat kariyega ok

A- ok aj promise

Then saru take the tray went from their after breakfast everyone went to their respective work

Afternoon durga laxmi are sitting in the hall durga is checking some list and laxmi chatting with her just then akshat come out of his room and silently going out side durga's eyes fall on him

D- aj kanha ja rahe hai aap

A- o mein bahar ja raha hu chotu ko ghumna hai na o bore ho gaya hai ghar mein

D- kanhi jane ki jarrorat nahi apne kamre mein jaiye

A- nahi mujhe jana hai

D- main ne kaha na andar jaiye

Just then savitri ji come their hearing the sound

S- durga bahu jane do usse bahar kamre mein uuse aacha nahi lag raha hoga

L- dadi durga di thik keh rahi hai inhe akele bahar nahi choda sakte pata hai na kya kya kaand kiye the inhone bahar

A- mein good boy hu mein kuch nahi karunga

But durga laxmi don't listen to him drag him to his room they lock him inside the room Akshat pleading to them but they don't listen savitri ji just seeing everything helplessly she went to the mandir

S- kanha aisa kyun kara rahe ho mere lalla ne kiska kya bigada tha usse iss narak se bhara nikaldo mein aapke samne hatha jod ti hu

On the other side gupta house Kaushalya is packing some cake for it's delivery they have bakery shop in the house

K- guddan khana hai tu jaldi aa ja tujhe yeh delivery bhi karne jana hai knaha reha gayi ye ladki

Then entered guddan looking beautiful as usual

G- ji ma aabhi le chalti hu aap tension mat lo

K- thik hai aaur ha ssun kala tujhe dekhane ladke wale aa rahe hai to ek achi si dress le aana apne liye

Guddan face fall hearing this she don't want to get married

G- ma meine kitni baar kaha hai mujhe shadi nahi karni please aap unhe mana kar do

K- kyun shadi nahi karni ha hara baar tu ladko ko bhaga deti hai iss baar ye rishta ho kar hi rahega

Just then bhusan ronak come their bhusan in his wheel chair and ronak is pushing it

B- aare aagar o mana kar rahi hai to tum uuse kyun zabardasti kara rahi ho

K- aap chup hi rahiye beti jaban ho rahi hai uuse jyada din ghara main rakhna thik nahi

R- ma di itni bhi badi nahi hai ki aap uski shadi ki baat kara rahi ho please unhe shanti se rehene do

Guddan run to her room can't tolerate it ronak try to stop her but she is gone inside the room guddan went to her cupboard open it take out a photo which she hide between her clothes

G- main kis aur se kaise shadi karoon mein to aapse pyar karti hoon na bhale hi apne inkaar kardiya par mein sirf aur sirf aapse pyar kiya hai kal jo bhi chahe aye mein usse sabki tarah bhaga dungi

She kiss the pic then again hide it inside the cupboard and went to deliver the cake
Mere Haathon Mein,
Na Teri Lakeerein,
Hai Bahut Alag Si,
Aopni Takderein...

Mera Zamin Pe Chalna,
Tera Hawa Sa udna,
Hoona Namunkin Hai,
Tera Mera Milnaa...

So friends please comment how it is
Edited by Angelsanvika08 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#12
Really interesting. So Guddan loved AJ before he lost his mental balance and she still does. This Durga and Lakshmi r so rude to AJ. Luckily, one Bahu is good here. Glad to see Saru positive here. Will be waiting for d next update.
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Posted: 6 years ago
#13
Really interesting update dear
Oh AJ nah kya classic names rakha for Durga and Lakshmi
Wanna know who gave that teddy bear to AJ
So guddan loves AJ kya
Plzzz do continue soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
#14
Sanvika! This is such an interesting concept and on top of it ... u wrote it so well!
Akshat and Guddan are leading a sad life ... 😭

Loved Saru and Dadi 😳

Update soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Superb update
Love it
Continue soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
#16
Aj acting as a cute kid is freakin adorable *squeal*
Does Guddan know that Aj crack ho gya?
Is aj's family aware of Guddan?
Kaushalya doesn't look like a chudail in ur story?
So Aj rejected Guddu's love!!!
So many queries!!!
Update soon ;)
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Posted: 6 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: randomfancrics

Really interesting. So Guddan loved AJ before he lost his mental balance and she still does. This Durga and Lakshmi r so rude to AJ. Luckily, one Bahu is good here. Glad to see Saru positive here. Will be waiting for d next update.


Thank you will try to update soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: kusharberry

Really interesting update dear

Oh AJ nah kya classic names rakha for Durga and Lakshmi
Wanna know who gave that teddy bear to AJ
So guddan loves AJ kya
Plzzz do continue soon


Thank you so much
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Raglak_akshan

Sanvika! This is such an interesting concept and on top of it ... u wrote it so well!

Akshat and Guddan are leading a sad life ... 😭

Loved Saru and Dadi 😳

Update soon


Thank you for appreciating my writing I am from odisha I thought I don't write the hindi dialogue properly will update soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: plmzaq

Superb update

Love it
Continue soon

Thank you so much

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