F.F. Rishtein part 27 and 28 page 19

Hey everyone I have got an idea for a fan fiction but I just want to give
everyone a run by to see if you guys would like me to even bother starting
it. Please give your honest feedback. Ok here goes:
]This story is about 4 sisters and thier family.
The first family consists of:
Suryakant Garodia: the head of the family and the owner of a multi-
millionaire business empire. He is very strict and serious and doesnt have
much time for his family.
Savitri Garodia:From a wealthy family, Suryakant's wife, She is quiet and
scared of her husband. they have 4 girls and one son.
Saraswati: She is the oldest daughter of Suryakant. She is studying
medicine at an all girls college that is in front of an all boys college. She
is very pretty and nice. She loves her family more than anything and
would do anything for them. She is quiet and romantic.She later falls in
love with Shitij, She believes in arranged marriages.
Gauri: The second oldest daughter- she is clumsy and loud and goofy.
she does not take much seriously and is very lazy-which makes her not
good at school. She doesnt belive in love at all and would rather stay
alone. she is also studying at the same college as Saraswati. She would
like to leave her family and be "free" asap. she dislikes her sisters adn is a
sidekick to her stepmom menka.
Durga: 3rd oldest daughter- she is quiet and an introvert. she likes to
imagine adn dream about the world around her. she enjoys the company
of her loved ones and does no want to leave them becase of a bad
childhood experience.
Laxmi: she is a very modern girl with modern thoughts. she believes in
love and cant w8 to fall in love. laxmi shares a special bond with everyone
because she is the youngest. she is in her second last year of high
school.
Raj- there oldest brother who died at a young age..you will find out more
when the story starts
Menka Garodia: Suyankants second wife- she is a greedy mean lady who
wants to take over the house. she plots against the sisters with durga.
Yuvraj: menka and suryakants son-he is spoiled by his dad and mom- his
mom wants him to hate his stepsisters but he loves them dearly- his dad
wants him to marry the daughter of a wealthy family from delhi but he
has already fallen in love with some else.
The second family consists of:
Siddanth Mahlotra: wealth head of an influential family
Rimi Mahlotra: his modern younger wife. she is an aspiring actress
Tina: there daughter- they want her to marr yuvraj to seal a business
contract- she is very hip and modern and a flirt on top of that
other characters:
Kajri: a dancer in a brothel- yuvraj falls in love with her
Shitij: A boy who studies in the college in front of saraswati's- he is a boy
with no family-he craves love and falls in love with saraswati
Satyakam: laxmi falls in love with him- he is a boy at her school- he is
arrogant and stuck up
Mini: Satyakaams girlfriend
Bhavishya: he is a rich boy and saraswati wants to marry him bcuz of his
status
Well thats it so far..obviously more characters will come in as the story
progresses? well plz give me feedback so i can see if i should continue!!
😊

thanx nidmister110 and rukhaya i will start asap 😊

if anone has any other comments or criticisms pl feel free to put them
up...the first part will be up later today or tomorrow

thanx jaanlover i have started the first part

PART 1:

MONDAY MORNING IN CHANDIGARH:

Saraswati opened her eyes and groaned. This was in her opinion the
worst day of her college year. "Oho aaj toh switch day... main college
nahin jaana chaati. Woh stupid larke saamnewaale college say humare
college aate hain." She was thinking of a way to get out of going today
when the maid came into the room.
"Choti Sahiba utho na aapne college nahi jaana?"
Saraswati got up in bed and looked at her friend Reetu. Reetu was the
girls' maid but she was also Saraswati's good friend. "Yaar mujhe choti
Sahiba na bulao. Tumhe suit nahi karta!"
Reetu looked down and blushed. She knew her status very well in the
house and if someone else heard her call Saraswati anything other than
Choti Sahiba she would be in big trouble.
"Sorry woh main...aap college nahi jaari?"
"Reetu aaj toh mera bilkul dil nahi kara jaane ka. Woh aaj switch day
hain..or tumhe toh pata hai? I HATE SWITCH DAY!!
"Par Kyun? Maza ka din hain." Reetu took out a black shalwar kameez for
Saraswti to wear.
Saraswati gave Reetu an agitated look, "No its not Maze ka din! I hate it!
Last year meri kismat achi thi key mujhe kisi larke ka partner nahi bana
para. Par is sal meri kismat mera saath nahi degi...I just have a feeling."
"OK chalo na ...sab doosre tyaar horehain or aap abhi unthi bhi nahin ho."
Reetu changed the subject. She hated talking to Saraswati about college
becasue that was one of the many things Reetu didnt have.
Saraswati got up and headed into the bathroom.

In the next room Gauri was getting ready. She put on a pair of jeans, a
pink tank top and a corduroy blazer.'Not bad' she thought to herself. She
was just about to leave when her step-mom walked into the room and
shut the door. Menka paced up and down and had a worried expression
on her face.
Gauri looked at her and said," Kya hua Choti Maa, kis baat ki parshaani
hain?
Menka looked up at her partner in crime, "Oho Durga Main tumhe kya
batao, woh main vaise parshaan hoon. Is ghar mein koi nahi sunto
mera...She realized that Gauri was getting annoyed and quickly added,
"Sirf aap meri baat sunti hain...tum toh itni achi ho.
Gauri smiled, "Woh to main hoon! Anyways g2g Choti Maa. Bye"
Gauri got her bag and left the room. Menka smiled 'wow that girl is
gullible' she thought to herself.

In the next room Durga was sitting and reading book. She had 5 Minutes
until she needed to be downstairs. She put her book down and looked in
the mirror. Her pink churidar suit looked even worse today then it did
before. "Mere toh koi kapre ache nahi lagte!" she flopped onto her bed
and lay there upset.

Across the hall was Laxmi's room. She was dancing to an old Bollywood
song while brushing her hair.
"Chura liya hain tumne jo dil ko Nazar nahin churana sanam." Everyone
knew laxmi had an amazing voice. As she passed her mirror she stopped,
Ooo Kab mera dil churake koi leke jayega? she put on her purple skirt and
pink shirt. She thought to herself ' Agar koi mera dil churake ley jayega
toh main yeh bhi nahin kahoongi key nazar nahin churana-main to sab
kuch deydoongi.' She heard Reetu call her name and grabbed her bag.
She went running out of the door but quickly turned around. She walked
back into a room and stood in front of a poster of Zayed Khan..O Zayed
wish me luck..aaj to mera pyaar miljaey. She kissed the poster and went
down the stairs. Everyone was already seated except for Saraswati who
hadnt come down yet.
"Good Morning!" Laxmi smiled as she sat down in her spot. Her mom and
Yuvraj smiled at her and said good morning back. Her dad was busy on
the phone, documents in hand and didnt even realize what she said.
Durga was caught up in her own world and was too distant to even realize
laxmi came to the table.
" Tumhara chehra dekhe kaise good morning ho sakta hai?" whispered
Gauri to Menka. They both laughed and gave Laxmi a dirt look.
Everyone ate breakfast quietly. When it was time to go Yuvraj offered to
give his sisters a ride. Menka looked up disturbed, "Yurvaj beta yay toh
driver ke saath jaa saktey hain.. Tum Tina ko phone karke poochlo agar
woh ride lena chatee hain? Saraswati, Laxmi and Durga looked up and
left, they knew there was no point fighting that they would much rather
go with Yuvraj. Gauri had already ran to sit with the driver in the front
seat.
Yuvraj knew that this was a set up and looked up angrily, " Mama Tina koi
aise larki nahi hain jiske paas driver na ho. Agar di sare driver ke saath
jaa sakte hain toh I am sure key Tina bhi apni driver key saath jaa sakti
hai. He grabbed his books and keys and ran out the door to stop the
driver.
Savitri knew that it was her turn to be yelled at.
Menka looked at angrily at Savitri, "Tumhare in betiyon key vaja sey mera
beta meri baat nahin manta. SHe looked tearfully at Suryakant and got up
and left.
Savitri stood up to leave." Tum apne bete ko sambhal nahi paye par kisi
ore key bache ko unke khilaaf karna bhi teak nahi hain. Suryankant got
up and left.
Savitri started to cry.

Wow Great!!
It's a very nice begin!!

Can' wait for more..keep continue

great work Mahiya...i told u u will do great! 😊

thank you jaanlover and bheegi

PART 2
Laxmi and Durga got out of the car in front of their high school. They
waved goodbye to their sisters as the car drove to the college a block
away. Laxmi grabbed Durga's arm and dragged her into the college.
"Durga di mujhe aapka schedule dekao. Main tumhe tumhari class tak
leykey jaati hoon." Laxmi knew that Durga got sidetracked quite easily
and sometimes never made it to her class. It would be better to make
sure she gets there. Durga got her schedule out of her bag and handed it
to Laxmi. "Hmm physics ...woh to building key doosre side pey
hain...chalo Durga di agar main tumhe chorkar aati hoon toh main late ho
jaoongi..aap plz khud jao."
"Nahin Laxmi main khud nahin jaana chaati...please don't leave me."
Laxmi saw the tears in Durga's eyes. She knew it waas hard for Durga to
be separated from her family so she agreed. "Theek hai ..jaldi
chalo."They ran down the halls but Laxmi knew she would be late because
Durga was especially slow. "Durga Di please jaldi chalo na!" They got to
Durga's classroom with 2 minutes to spare before the bell. Laxmi quickly
said bye and ran off without waiting for the response. She knew that
Durga wouldn't reply.Laxmi ran through the halls.. as she turned a corner
she crashed into someone.

Saraswati and Gauri walked into the college and immediately went their
own ways. Saraswati ran up to her friends and started discussing the
events of the day.
"Saraswati tumne list check kee hai..shayad is saal bhi tumhara naam list
pey nahi hoga."
"Meri kismat itni achi nahi hai key main is saal bhi alkeli rahoon." She
walked acroos the hall and stood in front of a the list. she scrolled her
finger down and mumbled the names until she came across hers.
"Saraswati Garodia." She looked directly across her name, "Shitij Kumar."
She sighed, "toote kismat meri."
All the girls entered the assembly hall where the boys were waiting. the
task was simple, show the boys around and be nice to them. But
Saraswati hated these boys. She scanned the line of boys looking for
someone who perhaps recognized her. She was about to give up when
someone tapped her on the back and she turned around.
"Hello, Saraswati Garodia? Am I right? She nodded blankly and gave a
disgusted look at her friends who were laughing. The boy continued,"Hi i
am Shitij, Shitij Kumar. Or yay na poochna key mujhe kaise pata tah key
aap hee Saraswati hain? He gave her a wide grin.
"Don't worry, I wasn't going to ask." She gave him a look and sat down.
"Hmm playing hard to get! I like it!" He grinned and sat down beside her.

Laxmi looked up and saw a hand extended to help her. She took hold of
the hand and was pulled up gently. This was the moment Laxmi had seen
in movies and read about -a stranger comes, takes your hand and you
look him in his eyes and tell him you love him-she looked up and saw
that her perfect moment was ruined because this mystery man was
wearing sunglasses.
"Thank you," she whispered.
"No Problem," and he walked off.
Laxmi was dazed, never in her life had she imagined that being late for
class had its upsides. She stood there watching the stranger walk off and
hoped he would turn but he turned the corner and vanished from sight.
"Chura liya hai tumne jo dil ko, yeh nazar bhi churana sanam." she
giggled and ran off.


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