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Posted: 7 years ago
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Very nice concept!! Eagerly waiting.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#22
Hey
Great start , very well written 👏
Very very interesting , yaar jab ghost ka topic ho toh logic gaya tel lene 😆 😉
So maan can see ghosts
But prefer to ignore them
Very eager to know what happens now
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nav2010

Very nice concept!! Eagerly waiting.

Thanks for reading😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Khushibloom

Hey

Great start , very well written 👏
Very very interesting , yaar jab ghost ka topic ho toh logic gaya tel lene 😆 😉
So maan can see ghosts
But prefer to ignore them
Very eager to know what happens now


Glad you liked it
thanks for reading!😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
#25
Part # 1


Despite of your mood and having your mind wandering thousands of miles away life goes on. Bringing his gaze away from the window he noticed the meeting was almost finished and his boss seams to be satisfied with their progress so far the absence of scowl from his face proved his point.


Exchanging pleasantries with his boss he went back in to his cube. It was almost lunch time so everyone was busy in their own world and he pretty much had nothing to do except think back to the awful breakfast he had with his family. His father kept sighing loudly shaking his head every now and then while his mom tried to calm down the heavy atmosphere and finally he couldn't take any more when his father picked up a fight with his mother for no reason, so he left abruptly.

He was walking among the crowded market trying to locate his friends who just disappeared into some random shop. There was a chill in the weather which was kind of soothing amidst the hustle bustle of the city.


It was the festive season he knew it would be crowded but this was way too much. People were every ware kids cribbing for candy, families shopping, and few of them even wandering aimlessly.


Pulling out his phone from his pocket he thought of sending a message to one of his friends to know where they are, it was better than roaming aimlessly. He finally found a less crowded shop so that he could have a quick chat without being pushed by people.


Busy in his phone he didn't notice the ere silence which surrounded him nor the mist in the temperature and then he looked up to the most horrifying sight of his life time. just a few feet away from him was a man whose face was half covered with blood his three-piece suit was crumpled, his shirt out of place with patches of fresh blood which was still dripping drop by drop from his fingers by his side.


And when he looked into its eyes it made a sudden moment towards him that he blanked out shutting himself from the world around him


Breathing heavily, he came out of his thoughts looking lost around the now empty office. His breath were coming in short spams and could feel the unease in his being, picking up the bottle from his table he took few gulps of water down his throat.


Looking at his ringing phone he thanked the caller whoever it was for bringing him out of that fateful day. It was almost an year since that incident and he felt from that day that his secret was not going to be a secret for long.


Throwing his head back on the chair he thought to gather his thoughts, he knew it was the last nights accident which was trigger to his memory. Now the continuous ringing of his phone was beginning to irritate him.


Frowning he picked up the call to blast whoever it was before he could say a word words were thrown at him with full force


Why were you not lifting your phone?

I have been ringing you for so long... its your lunch time I know you weren't busy.

Tell me... now why on earth are you so silent?


If it was anybody else in he place he wouldn't have thought twice before snapping, but it was her! so...


I just came out of the meeting love, sorry to keep you waiting... he tried to cover up his ignorance


Oh okay, I called you to discuss about our celebration plans for the night.

And do not forget to get my surprise gift and also...


She went on and on.. as all she demanded was his undivided attention until she had it she wasn't bothered about the rest but did she have it at the moment was the question


His eyes wandered out of his office building looking ahead at the busy midday traffic and people moving on with their working day to certain person who was walking behind a group of business men with a trail of blood following him, that's when he heard the scream


MAAANNN!!!!!



Fear! that's what the chill down his spine is called or was it?



To be continued...



Edited by sporthy_smile28 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#26
you have started your job to scare us
one year hmm long time
would give him credit to hide this horrible things from everyone
his mystery gf !!!!!!!!
last part gets my attention most ...waiting waiting
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Keepdreaming

you have started your job to scare us
one year hmm long time
would give him credit to hide this horrible things from everyone
his mystery gf !!!!!!!!
last part gets my attention most ...waiting waiting

were you scared?
even a little bit?

well for now picking up the curiosity was my only aim
if i have yours then i feel I'm on the right track😆

Thanks for reading!😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
#28
Naah I am not scared...but not sure let me read few more parts and hope for daily updates
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Posted: 7 years ago
#29
WOW!!
This was really a nice one..
usually as the time passes mysteries start to unfold, but in this story I felt with each line the chapter was turning more & more mysterious..
Maan seeing those dead people with such fashion disaster would be a horrible experience I guess..
What he saw outside the building was a figment of his imagination due to reminiscing about the past incident or was it real??
His girlfriend is another mystery..
Why did she scream?? did she get attacked by any ghost??
Going by the name of the story, the upcoming ghosty in their life should be a female..
So why do I feel this enchantress is Geet??
Really wanna know if my guess is correct..
Waiting eagerly for the mysteries to be revealed & also the mysterious girlfriend of his..

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Posted: 7 years ago
#30
Very well written and little scary too.

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