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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting prologue.waiting for the first update.
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Brilliant loved the first part
Want and waiting to read further
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome prologue :-)
Though it's lil painful one.. But it seems to be different concept..
Geet is mystery here..
She came like angel for maan n went away just like that..
May be when she came know he was a very rich person.. She would have thought to leave him..
As a normal n person with self esteem will do...
Hope Maan finds her soon... :-)
Continue soon...
It's an interesting story.. :-) :-)





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Posted: 8 years ago
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AWESOME PROLOGUE
ITS NEW FF
I WANT TO READ FURTHER
THANKS FOR THE PM
WAITING FOR NEXT UPDATE
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AWESOME PROLOGUE
ITS NEW STORY
I WANT TO READ FURTHER
THANKS FOR THE PM
WAITING FOR NEXT UPDATE
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice prologue maan vot and accident and geet help him in his recovery but left him suddely maan searching geet all tell him that she is a illusion but he belive that she is in real nice continue soon dear
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Very interesting prologue!!!!
Will manage to find out who she is???
Waiting!!!
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Interesting prologue. it's only Maan who believes in the mystery girl but what about the people who were taking care of him. No one saw her or are they hiding her identity. waiting for next. Thanks for pm.
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One word commentators plz keep ur views with u.. I m writing this for IF not on pw protected update or blog...So read n leave instead of spending ur valuable time. I don mind.. As here Access is for all..not like blog for limited readers only..




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Chapter 1




MAAN'S POV


After 5 years I am again here ..To inaugurate new building of same council hospital. Where I spent six months of my life.Even if medical treatment I got here...couldn't improve my condition. But yes I kept on breathing .. People think I helped to renovate this hospital coz doctors saved me atleast. So this was my gratitude in return. With joint effort of Khuraana trust n KC it took one and half years for this work.



But how I tell this world for whom I did all this ? At least to give little condolence to my heart that she gave life to just a breathing body.Its for my love..Who brought my lost hope to live again..In that whole haunted darkness she came as ray of hope. When I felt I was not alone.I had someone besides me. I felt if my family will never trace me. I had her. Ironically I didn't know even name of her.. But she is angel of my life..


I remember when she kept my hands on her belly..my fingers fluttered first time after months.Our baby a tiny life was there inside my angle..Who gave me new definition of love. She was happy I know otherwise why she did so? Why she made me aware ? Coz she was in love with me too. But Why she didn't share it with words. ? If she was mute..I don't know..


My family n close ones think I am cynic. But yes not in front of me.. Many times Daddi feds up with my madness. Hearing about that unknown girl who never talked to me. After search of 4 years, even I didn't find her. In every hospital around , every maternity ward of private to council hospitals.To find such girl who was mute n might have given birth to a child.. Just because she never talked to me ..So I felt her mute..Quite possible if she wasn't mute how could records show it.


I always counted number of days ..when I assumed she tried to tell me about our baby. That day when she kept my hand on her belly n I found existence of a new life My flesh n blood. I didn't know date.


But now when I look back .. I had records at what date Dev found me .. then I went back 34 days from date which I counted.Making that base I tried to search in hospitals records after eight months of Dev took my discharge.. But...but...but my hands are still empty.. Yes my hopes never faded away..


How could I tell Daddi about any such relation. That we moved ahead of just touch They might have sent me to mental asylum. They knew just about touch. Not about our physical union. I don't want her selfless love to define as lust.


I am standing in balcony of this hotel room .. What a mesmerising view is in front of me.. Such a great treat for eyes... reason to cherish at heart...Nature always smiles in summers of hilly parts.. Those tall oaks are standing silent n still.. Witnessing blossoming flowers .. When Oaks dance with strong winds they also spread scent of those flowers.. But couldn't express ever.. Same way I felt her, smelt her but couldn't express what I think. Still I am same oak tree.. I can feel her inside me but can't express..


Please come back to me.. Why u left ? Gave me life..Brought back me to senses.. If u had thought to leave then what right u had to enter in my life ? I m not human any more. I am like any tree who could blossom. could feel pain.. But can't express when someone cut it.. Like u did to me.. I blossomed with u.. m in pain without u but couldn't express.



Dev's POV

As always I am watching my Bro struggling with own self.Even he doesn't find my presence around.. When I came to his room ..called him so many times. But couldn't break his spell..


I accompanied Bro ..He was denying me to bring here . I didn't want to leave him alone with his haunted past. He couldn't forget n it brought him here.. I don't know what he says that is truth ? Or effect of that mental trauma he suffered from...Trauma due to which he had lost hope to reunite with family.


I think he assumed any such girl through his imagination.. Who was close to him. To give assurance that he was not alone.. It was his virtual fantasy n any such girl was an illusion.I think from voices he always heard around of nurses or doctors..he created this imaginary girl I can't c my brother breaking down bit by bit.


I know all the charity he did here that was not for hospital staff..That people atleast kept him alive and doing all those he was obliged . But this is for that illusion of My Bro.


Dr. said to keep him away from this stress. Otherwise swelling inside his brain could cause nerves breakdown.. He can handle business but not emotional turmoil . So Daddi also suggested me to be with him.. To divert his mind little bit.. To keep him occupied with different activities.


Hope some day My Brother ll come out of this agony

***

Maan n Dev they checked in yesterday only .. That hospital where Maan was ..It was bit away from Shimla. KC was starting a new hotel venture in Shimla. So they had already planned to visit side by side for that work.How many times Dev had tried to bring Maan out of room.To visit near by places before their meeting day after tomorrow.. But Maan had locked himself inside room... Nothing worked on Maan ever like now..


In Maan's room

Dev tugged Maan from behind " Bro ! Bro.." he screamed at last..When his every attempt failed. What he could do now..


"Ha ha Dev..tum kab aaye.." Maan stuttered looking back..


" I always remain with you ..u know " he teased..


" Yup u always remains with me.. But she is not..She left me Dev.. She cheated me " His flooded eyes were enough to tell how much volcanic emotions wanted to erupt from deep inside his mind n heart..


Dev hugged him tightly close , very close to his heart. He always wanted to take away all his pains but never succeeded


" Its enough now. We are going out .. First we ll visit Shiv Mandir then will go to our favourite Delight Cafe ..Which we always visit during Shimla Trip.Kyo .. !! " Dev cheered him up..


How could Maan say no to his brother who was trying hard to keep him happy.What was Dev's fault. So both brothers were going out now.. At last Maan had given green signal..They were going to visit Delight Cafe after six years. Last time when Maan came to this cafe ..he was 21 now he is 27 n some months..


It was already 5 . Days were little longer due to summer...


So Delight Cafe was in front.


He didn't want.. Still unwillingly his feet were dragging him toward cafe..


Left corner table their favourite sitting place..Lots off things had been changed.. Furniture Decor..Why not business was expending rapid..So totally new services n arrangements were also needed for that..." Much has been changed Bro. But feeling is same " Dev grinned looking around..


" Okey instead of looking here n there place an order.." Maan taped behind his head. He was bit in good mood after visiting Mandir n little outing...He prayed almightily to listen him too. Like he hears other's prayers he also showed mercy on him..


Last time he also visited here..Daddi asked so... Quite possible he overcame from that brutal accident due to those heavenly blessings..


Here came the waiter . Wao in uniform .Last time there was not this much formal approach.. Really things had been changed.. Professional attitude comes first..


Dev was in good mood . Still inspecting well dressed waiter from head to toe..What Maan could do now ? Chirp of smile was there on his lips.. Its like a miracle.Waiter was feeling awkward but what he could only wait.. After all customer was in front "Ur order please.."


" Huh ! I found everything has been changed.. Good very good I liked it.. Obviously menu is also new .. But I gonna place same order.. Which is speciality of this cafe..One Latte Macchiato for me and Long Black for my brother." Dev atleast has placed order. Pushing his spects back with finger. Frame was loose now ha ha ( me thinks Dev change it now)


So a little relief for Waiter . Such a Namuna customer was in front of him.."Sir anything else? I mean any food item ? " in such a decency he asked..


" Actually hum khate nahi.. pette hai " Oh what happened to Dev ..he was behaving crazy.. What was poor waiter's condition. His mind was boggling .Any time he could fall on floor. If Dev kept on confusing him.


Maan why he was mum till now.. Was he really enjoying his bak bak.. Or Dev was doing all to divert his mind. If it is willingly by Dev so he is at success.


" Calm down . calm down Dev ..." so Maan felt pity on confused soul " Waiter he means we come here to enjoy drinks ..Which is speciality instead of food.." In hurry to run away waiter nodded in front of Maan's explanation..


Maan glared..Lol same famous stupid grin on Dev's face...Which D always found on his face...


10 Minutes had been passed.. Here another waiter came with their order..Dev was at success ..Sipping coffee they were discussing on light topics..Cloths..Weather , Cricket ..


Who was there on phone.. Maan's phone was buzzing "Bro Daddi is here..Pick up " Dev was right.This number was for Dev n Daddi or some times Addi.. But Addi had talked half n hour back.. So who could be else ? Obviously " Daddi "


Maan gave tough look to him " Yes she is ? But why u r grinning like fool ? "


"Nothing ? U also know Daddi is gonna talk ur class.. Why u didn't talk to her since morning ?" Impressed ! Maan was impressed how his brother could read him n Daddi..


" Dev I think weather garam ho raha hai.. Instead of talking to her.. here in between people .Main bahar ja kar baat karta hu " He teased thinking about annoyed Daddi . Who always remained worried for him..He knew.. She would do drama now..crying , shouting on him..His pitch instantly rose while in convo with her..So better to be decent n search a isolated place.. Dev again was grinning .. Even didn't look at Maan once coz he needed not to worry.. Its his brother who was in danger zone not him..


Maan sighed n came out putting phone on ear.. " Daddi ! Daddi ! before u start ur Drama I say sorry.. Bus theek hai.." Daddi occuoied his brain such that ..He didn't look around n bumped into fat man.. But man seemed nice n left without arguing..


He was still busy to pacify his GM.. Now he didn't notice cleaner...who was busy wiping cafe windows from outside.. Daddi was not any atomic bomb .. But she was everything for him.. In reverse gear...taking steps backward he was on .phone


" Hum pagal hai na.. Per aapko koi fikar nahi..Thats why I sent Dev with u.. At least he doesn't forget to call me or pick my call.. Even today he talked to me.. So I m bit relieved.. Per kya kare aapse baat kiye binna nahi reh sakte na.. So disturbed u Mr. Khuraana" Daddi regretted .. Just Maan's voice always convinced her..Five years had been passed but wounds were still fresh. In which condition he was..She prayed god to keep her life in return of Maan's recovery..A mother won at at last..


In return of Daddi's wrath some times Maan spent whole day to clam her.. But sometimes only sorry was enough like at the moment.. Daddi didn't want to spoil his mood. As Dev had already informed Daddi that he was taking him out.


But Mr. Khuraana was still in reverse gear.. Even after talking to Daddi..He was checking mail.Fixing eyes on phone..Immersed in mailbox..Definitely he was gonna crash on that tiny frame cleaner


" Oh ...oh ..oh.." Maan shouted..Like some one attacked him from back.But he attacked that poor girl with his back..Who was busy with her work with full commitment..


No word came out of her mouth..He was on her.Instead of her he screamed. Even after smashing her tiny frame with his bulldozer body..


No movement..Still both were laying in same posture..He was on her ..Like her body had no sensation.. Her hazel eyes were glaring him shockingly..If her mind was totally numb..


" Oops Oops .. Sorry ..." her flooded eyes at last brought him back to senses..He got up.. He felt he was at fault..It was his mistake..Which was surprising.. He never accepted mistakes .. Its his attitude.."Utho..." but why she was not talking his hand for support...


He was confused..What she was doing ? First trailed fingers round own neck.. Like she had injury around neck..But how ? When not neck her back hit ground.. She was on back Maan's hand was around her neck.. As he lost his balance n fell on her.


"Hey hey what r u doing? kuch gum gaya hai kya ? " Maan had been frustrated now.. What she was fumbling around.. From both of her sides.. Like was crawling on floor on knees n elbows..


" Ha ha ha.. I think u have lost ur mental balance.. But such fast..It is first case when after getting jerk on back .. mind has injury " Resting hands on waist ..he laughed lungs out after ages..How was she acting any one had responded so..


Tu Tu hai Wahi Dil Ne Jise Apna Kaha

Tu Hai Yahan Main Hu Wahan

Aab To Yeh Zina Tere Bin Hai Sajja


She came to feet.. Struck dumb first she gazed him unblinkingly..But suddenly she started to take back steps.. Her eyes were flowing.. She scared of him when he moved forward..To check if she was alright.. After all he was at mistake..



"I said I am sorry.. Don't cry.. If u have back pain or other injury u r feeling.. Get money for treatment .. Go to doctor.." He took out his wallet " How much 5000 ? ..fine " He counted five hundred notes n forwarded toward her..


Maan shrunk brows still she didn't not convince.. Uttered not a word from 15 minutes.. Just nodding her head..7 thousand..No response..


"Listen , I don't have more cash.. There is no cash machine I think around.. Nahi to aur money de deta.. But for just one minor injury it is enough.. Such money minded u r ? Aab kaya puri empire de du tumko.." he yelled as she continued her act to move reverse


Suddenly "tuh " her body hit against glass panel n head made noise...


He fixed her against glass panel.. There was just gap of milli meters between them..She turned face to other side.. Maan who always hated foul smell of sweat.. He was holding a dirty sweaty cleaner.." Main kya mehsoos kar raha hu... Kya hai yeh.. " he closed his eyes.. He couldn't understand " Jaise kuch khoya hua paa liya hai maine..." he took a deep breath thinking.. Her fast beats near to his ear were a familiar rhythm like he was hearing from ages.."Tum ..tum.." he glared her shocked..Her silence was something known to him..


But she pushed him hard on chest ..He was about to lose his balance some how he took support from wall..


She irritated him , Annoyed short tempered Maan .. He needed to show her now who really he was ? What her real position was.. How dared she to mess with Maan Singh Khuraana with her silence With his fuming read eyes n aggressiveness He trembled her.. Her sighs turned to inward hiccups without any voice..


She didn't want to look at him.. First her hands were rolling around her neck. Then fumbling road...On which she fell n now rubbing her stomach. "She seems mad.. Like trying to rub out my touch. Maine isko impure kar diya kya.. Girlz die for one touch of Maan Singh Khuraana.. But she is showing me attitude..."Her hand gesture on own stomach made him restless..


" Arre Geet...?" Who was there back calling .. Maan looked back.. A worker from cafe was there.. From his dress it was not hard to find..he worked in cafe.. Even girl had same dress.. He rushed toward Maan ..So she was Geet.."Where is she ?" Maan's eyes pop out.. She disappeared in blink of eye..He rooted to spot..


" Saab agar us bejubaan se koi galti ho gayi hai kya.. Plz forgive her.. She can't speak.. But she is really hard working.." Why this worker was asking for mercy binding hands On her behalf when she did nothing.. Worker was shivering..


" Nahi nahi ..Its okey..That was my fault..I was on phone didn't notice her.." Maan's heart melted with his gesture.. It meant she was not responding coz she was not dumb.


" She is dumb ?" curiously he asked .


" Ji saab ..? Geet naam hai uska.. Bol nahi sakti to koi kaam per nahi rakhta.. Na itni padi likhi hai.. I requested our owner to give work to her.. At least cleaning job.. Ek char saal ka chota bacha hai uska..Whole responsibility is on her.. She has no one " He cried his heart out...Narrating in which misery she was .


" Don't u worry.. No body will fire her " Maan sooth his pain.. Actually it was for girl..His heart ached.. In which miserable condition she was in such a young age .


Convinced worker felt relieved n left.. Maan still stared him from back.. Until he disappeared


" Huh " he sighed deeply " Lol is sabh main dekha he nahi mera phone girra padda hai..Yeh Daddi aur unka drama " he shrugged off looking at phone which was still teasing him at some distance.. When he collapsed on her..


As he picked phone from a corner ..Near to water bucket that girl had .. Also found a thin chain with small pendent.. " Oh I think she was searching for this..For a poor girl it matters alot.. " he thought.He grabbed gold locket in his hand brought front to his eyes.. It swung to n fro with slight moment..


Past half n hour event flashed back in his mind..Stunned he glued there...Illiterate mute girl.. with four years old child.." Why her sweat ? Rhythm of her heart beats.. her mute sighs n that gesture she was continuously rubbing her belly.. Usko mehsoos karke.. Uski khamoshi sun kar ..aisa lagga maine apni zindgi pa li ho " Maan dropped down to floor there.. His mind was numb.. " Yeh pendent ..which always pierced my chest ..My angel...my baby.. I need not any proof.. need not ..Just closing my eyes with a slight touch I can recognize you" he hid his face in his hands..



Tu Tu hai Wahi Dil Ne Jise Apna Kaha

Tu Hai Yahan Main Hu Wahan

Aab To Yeh Zina Tere Bin Hai Sajja

Mil Jaaye Is Tarah Do Lahrain Jis Tarah

Ho Mil Jaaye Is Tarah Do Lahrain Jis Tarah

Fir Ho Na Juda Yeh Vaada Raha



" U left me.. But now I ll not allow you to get out of my life.. No you have no rite on ur life..Like mine is urs..Urs is mine..Destiny met us to create a tiny life out of us.. Why u did that to me.. U have to answer Geet.. ?" he screamed aloud.. wiping his over flooded eyes..



I think 2-3 parts r enough to wrap. But I wanted to write a full fledge fiction...Due to other works it is not possible. Plz tell me what u want...

Note -Keep in mind He couldn't c and was paralysed...She was illitrate n dumb...So locket walla part. Dont think he had seen it so n so...Its just touch..How he felt she was searching for it...And so it could be same material who always touched him when she was with him..He never saw her face.. She was worried not finding locket means it mattered alot..


His touch on belly also matters alot...It was also a point...So just memory n touch matteres for Maan specially. As according to him he needs no proof. Just needed to close eyes n feel her... He didn't know anything about her .Just smell , heart beat , her hand over tummy n her restlessness for chain , being dumb with 4 years old baby r points from which he estimated...


His memory is stable always not lost. As he didn't know date but counted number of days when she put his hand over belly n added to the day Dev took him back...So she was preggy 34 days back But how she made relations in hospital..?


Sonia


Tense liberties are always here due to rules of contemporary writing


What I ll do next...ll be here on blog up to u ..Tell me frankly if this concept is good.. What u want with this concept...How I should deal it...


Besides comments hit like too...To get better next update



Edited by Sonia.KN - 8 years ago
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Different strokes of life.
Maan's feeling at its finest
Pl continue

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