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kabslocks

@kabslocks

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Posted: 10 years ago

#21

Lovely update. A flirty Maan.

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khwaishfan

@khwaishfan

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+ 9

Posted: 10 years ago

#22

awesome emotional prologue! feeling 4 Geet! Maaneet separated by his friend! Geet in tears! she faints! Part 1 -terrific update! well written! Geet n Meera were sisters n lived at an orphanage! Meera married Mihir! they had Tia! Bt Mihir n Mia died n Geet nw takes care of Tia! Geet late 4 wrk! she meets Maan who shouts at her! he insults her! Geet shocked! she leaves n Maan teases her with a flying kiss! Geet stunned! she finds him handsome! update soon! well written! please do pm me! Thanks! can u also post character sketch! pls include page no in post thread!

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Sudha

@babelicious

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Posted: 10 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: gurmeetfanatic

Wont sweetheart...u r d first person to comment on ma writing..nd I am writing 4 d first tym...thanku...I vll mever forget u:)...do support nd I promise I vll write regularly

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Edited by maan-ki-jaan - 7 years ago

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Sudha

@babelicious

Dazzler

+ 7

Posted: 10 years ago

#24

Ok my review of the update. 😳

Your writing is really good n I can see the story goin sumwer. But wat I din't like is there was not much connectivity in the process of Maan falling for Geet.. Some more scenes could have been added before they started making out. It looks like attraction at 1st sight for Maan.. And loved Maan's character he's such a naughty flirt ☺️

Also one more tng is there is no punctuation or gaps between the lines, it's not differentiating any dialogues from the narrative. Ok I think m giving a lot of unwanted feedback 😆..continue anyway .. I have liked ur story already so suggesting some things that cud be added so I would enjoy reading it even more 😳

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neel11

@neel11

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#25

Love it now what waiting for the next update

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cutical

@cutical

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+ 5

Posted: 10 years ago

#26

Awesome update is ma'am playing with best feelings or he really loves her

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nadia khan

@nakh5683

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#27

lovely update geet reached only to be welcomed with paniky pinky geet somehow setle her she was thinking abt the company it was owned by royal family a king owned it man was running the company though she has never met him i think she had a spat with him early morning she heard maan had witnessed his dads murder she finally nmet him though he didnt say anything but the moment they were together he pounced on her though she tried to avoid but he wouldnt have any as his kisses were a drug for geet lets see it was dream or reality

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kabslocks

@kabslocks

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Posted: 10 years ago

#28

Nice update. Does Maan knows Geet. Why is he behaving like this.

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gurmeetfanatic

@gurmeetfanatic

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#29

PART 3

Maan suddenly felt a push and stumbled back. Geet stood up,tears flooding out of her eyes and feeling ashamed of her act she rushed out of his cabin to her office. No how could you loose yourself geet, I cant work here any more I vll resign right away.Geet hurriedly typed her resignation letter and went back to office of maanvender.

Geet:sir my resignation letter.Maanvender snatched the letter and tore it into pieces.

Maan: what the hell,u arent resigning and dats my order an order of a prince.I admit I shloudnt have kissed u but what can I do, I havent met some one this beautiful.I saw you at traffic signal and my senses were bowled and then seeing you at my office I couldnt control.I seriously am sorry, and dont expect me to apologize again you are the first person in my whole life to whom I have apologized. I AM A prince and people apologize to me whether its there mistake or not.

Geet: back to arrogancy jerk muttered geet

Maan:so friends..maanvender forwarded his hand and said hi this is maanvender

Geet: Hi this is geet handa..sir I shall take your leave now..

Maanvender: wait a second call me maannvender, we r friends so maanvender would be ffine.and haan dine with me tonight.Dont refuse these are the orders of a prince

Geet: rolling her eyes ok maanvender bt on one condition at my place at nine.I know place would be small for prince like you but I cant dine outside I have some personal commitments.

Maanvender: ok then meet you at 9

Be continued

Precap: who is dis princess?

I Am tia and who are you?

I am a prince...and she is your??..before geet could utter she is my maasi maa.