Good Morning Bing/Shika (found out through the story lol)
Btw nice name.
Just One day
As promised here goes nothing. I do hope you're not pulling your hair by the end of this, because my comments are anything but well-thought out lol (as you probably have already witnessed).
OK evidently I didn't like Sisir in the first chapter, he had this aura; the exact aura that annoys me. Big-headed, well aware of his power over the opposite gender (ok I take that back not power, as that's too big of a talent, charm or attraction sound better) and his interest lying in one thing (the 3 letter word I am too shy to utter lol, I prefer my young juvenile mind even if I am a science graduate lol).
But however annoying I found him in the first chapter, I liked him as much in the second and the ones after that. Of course I believe in the saying do not judge a book by its cover', or rather here do not judge a character in the first chapter itself' however I never seize to learn and yes my feelings fluctuate a lot, hence I am ... ahha I was about to say I'm a girl but that is such an extreme thing to say especially being a feminist lol. So I retract from saying that although I typed it up. At times I feel my fingers have a mind of their own. Anyway coming back to Sisir, he has this enigmatic feel to him, like an onion peeling exercise or how Maan is in WOL, I bet these two would fall in love the minute they meet. Since both are so alike, however I respect Maan for not being a womaniser, obviously the same cannot be said for Sisir. But the actual catalyst for me was Mina, due to her liking Sisir; so did I. I loved the text conversation between the two (can I just add Sisir was such a nobleman, him staying until her friend arrived was one of the many acts that changed my heart towards this man), it showed his trying ways to make her comfortable. I loved the ease which flowed after that, Sisir deliberately trying to fit into her life in the most undeliberate way of course here I'm talking about the silent unknown watch he had on Mina, it's a tricky situation he has this image and now delving into another, that of a lover boy almost awww. I suppose my feelings first started during this phase and then to know Avni cheated on him with Karan; though I don't agree with her ways. I do not like cheaters, no matter what she should have come clean (if you watch Bepanah then you'd know I'm referring to Adi's wife here, the diary justification was like bla bla bla for me) but I do understand it wasn't Avni's aim to fall in love with someone else. It just happened and for the longest she tried and so did he, to stay away from their new found feeling. But I'm happy in a way that they found one another, and Sisir was gentleman enough to let it slid. I suppose this increased my liking for him, whereas Avni and Karan are just two characters I am indifferent to. However can I just add, Avni is a great friend.
The instant Mina uttered her first word, I realised she had speech difficulties (call it intuition or psychic intelligence lol, I do belief is self-promotion too lol). Then her shy or almost zilch attempt to talk to Sisir, an acquainted stranger, sealed the deal hence when Avni mentioned the same I wasn't exactly shocked. Mina is fast becoming a woman I'm growing to love. So far I've liked all your females from Naina, to Tweesha and now Mina. Of course it goes without saying I love Geet and Maan's mother. What's more commendable is how you've intermingled all these stories, that in itself is a remarkable mark of intelligence and great writing capabilities. You know I like this different character, Mina and her stuttering have made a place for themselves in my mind and heart. I have this overprotective feeling towards her, which is quite new because the only characters I feel like that is Geet (whom I dearly love) and Rebecca Bloomwood (so when you compared my writing to Sophie Kinsella, I was off the walls but that's for another day lol, I can't wait to reply to your comment).
The midnight conversation about Sisir's grandparents' house is when their relationship took to new heights; she for the first time realised how alone he is and maybe even him, prior to this he was the man who made her uncomfortable and worsened her condition. Avni must have had a little blow seeing the emotion she wished to see for herself but instead it was Mina in Sisir. Again she so far has come across as a good friend. Good both Sisir and Anvi had understood what they shared was a physical relationship and nothing more or less. Makes matters easier for both. The entry of junior further added foundation to their already developing relationship, it gave Mina reasons to be within his parameter, and that is a huge advantage for Sisir at least. Or else Mina is a woman who would prefer to stay alone or at least that's what is looked like. Oh I loved the sight you created, of Sisir running through the pounding rain and then stopping to smile at her and then the hug. Secretly I was missing him and the return was worth it, obviously until Mina decided to call it quits. I had half the mind to ask him to follow her and then I respected his decision to respect her space. Sisir had really come a long way, the delay in reading the letter annoyed me if I am truly honest. If I had the power I would have jumped into my computer and slapped (that's a little harsh, isn't it) or shaken him up a little and urged him to read ASAP. Man was that letter emotionally ridden, she had finally opened up and what I loved was her notion of Sisir being her listener, the I knew you'd listen from the bus stop incidence' blew me away and quite literally. So she was equally affected and then starts his fight to make others happy just like her. The wedding of Avni saw to it that his act was rewarded and I liked that touch, absolute firm believer in good happens to the good'. Mina is a saree, must have been a sight and she coming over her guilt or whatever is was, was well shocking but truly glad she grew over the year and so did Sisir. I liked I didn't get your letter' and the decision to leave without giving them' a try because frankly speaking neither did I? Glad all is perfect in the end. These two truly deserve one another. BTW can I just say I loved her friend, he was a true. The friendship they shared was so real, but he loved her didn't he? I'm happy he didn't pursue it though, maybe he was aware that she'll never reciprocate, a wise man (now they're hard t find lol, ok just joking my early morning jokes really do suck).
Mina being Sameer's sister was an interesting finding, I had guessed she would be related to WOL somehow. For any sister, the news of her brother's death would be heart-breaking esp for her, considering her impairments and general closed personality. I won't mention nothing of Sameer's act, I advocate against self-harm, it goes against my religion and personal belief; so usually I'd be an emotional wreck and choose a few dozen names but I understand Sameer's stance and more so because of Flame, Tabby and Spoorthi's comments on an OS I wrote a long-time ago based on the notion of abuse/suicide etc. I believe I grow wise with each comment my readers make, and hence I understood Sameer's dilemma a little better.
However I fail to recognise why my heart feels so much for this faceless Mina, though there's a cartoon in my head finally filling the void lol. Someone similar to Chloe from totally spies, yep due to Easter hols my baby sister's been binge watching all her show's and I like any useless older sister I sat beside and indulged in it myself. How old am I? My friends would be like Sisir however is Adi from Bepanah for me, they're characteristics matched quite a bit lol. Don't ask how a love story can be carved between a carton and actual human character, somehow my brain made it work lol. Andy returns with more confusion, I really liked his character the last time I read him and again I ask the same question, who is this Andy? Last time I had thought it to be Maan and now I defo know its him thanks to the current update. However I must admit Vicky's reference to Andy to help Mina recognise him was a blow and for a sec, I was like is Vicky it. But his character never matched that of Andy's for me anyway.
Just a day, I told you already I love the title but what a title! It has hope and anguish, all at the same time. It's just perfect for this story, a story of a girl with so much baggage yet a little optimistic. I mean why else would she open up to Sisir, if she had no hope in the first place. I believe she did hope, although that has fallen short now but soon they'll have a perfect ending. Well hoping they do anyway.
Thank you for an awesome story, and yet again forcing me to read FF's outside of Maaneet world. Honestly I wouldn't dare, for the reasons I need faces lol and no one surpasses my love for Maaneet. But Sisir and Mina were an good find and so where Sameer and Naina. Maybe next time I wont be as apprehensive to give non-maaneet FFs a try. O who am I kidding, I'd always be the same lol, no maaneet equals no reading or at least forced reading lol.
But thank you and sorry for the waffle.
Beautiful story and beautifully told, you were right when you said satisfying story' it truly is one.
Edited by DaftGirk - 7 years ago
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