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Posted: 11 years ago
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PART 7

It had been almost 5 days tat they were in Darjeeling but there was not a single change in Geet. Her words started on whether he would get her Maan and would end on the same. Maan had tried his best to make her cry reminding her of their baby but Geet would just repeatedly say tat she loved Maan and he was not there with her. It was hard for him to constraint his pain within himself as now it was getting deeper. His each words tat he said to her were hitting him hard. He wanted to cry but the one person whom he would cry for was not ready to shed her single tear. He feared as each second passed remembering the words tat doctor said tat if she does not behave normally than she would be on the critical side. Maan wiped the lone tear from the corner of his eyes as he eyes stuck on her back as she lay with her back towards him. He could hear her murmuring something and he knew wat it was. He wanted to take and soothe her but he was unable to do so as he heard a say.


Maan, can you help me to get my Maan back Geet said looking with hopeful eyes as she turned towards him on bed while Maan's eyes looked at her with pain. He could not even part his lips to say something as her words once again made him to gulp hard with the realization tat she was far from his reach Do you know Maan.. main na apne Maan ko bahut miss karti hoon. You know he even forgot my cycles now... Pata hain he used to keep everything ready for me.. yaha tak meri painkillers bhi par ab koi nahi hain... Na Prem and Maan..Babaji ne bahut badi saaza di na mujhe. Mera Aitbaar jhoota tha Maan. Do you know she looked at him with some distant pain and said again you know when I was in school aur mujhe paani puri khane ka mann tha but my Maan was against it. You know my Maan knew tat m allergic to roadside foods par mera mann tha and then I gave puppy looks to Prem who tried hard to make Maan agree par Maan tho Maan tha na.. how would he let his Geet to eat all tat and get sick.. then you know.. wat my Maan did he dragged me home along with Prem and himself prepared paani puri and fed me.. par ab nahi kartha... I don't know where my Maan is lost.. Prem bhi nahi hain.. All say Prem died and you know I even cried but how could he break his promise...ushne tho kaha tha na tat he will get my Maan back..par dekho na Prem ne bhi mera Aitbaar thood diya.. pata hain I now hate this Aitbaar..najaane kyu itna Aitbaar tha mujhe apne Aitbaar par.


Maan did not say a word as her each word reminded him of their past. Those beautiful moments tat he had hidden deep within his heart were now pricking him like needles. Telling him tat he was the reason for her destruction. He slowly raised his hand to touch her when she moved closer wiping his lone tear tat he himself was unaware of and said will you help me Maan, to get my Maan back.. I will say sorry to him and ask him not to hate Prem na.. please.. you know I love him so much.. sirf mera Maan. Maan pulled her tight on him hugging and hiding her into his arms. Jaan, your Maan loves you Jaan. He is with you.. dekho na he is only with you. She pulled herself away and looked everywhere to see her Maan kaha hain.. My Maan is lost Maan.. woh tho abhi tak nahi aaya na.. please na Maan help me... mera dil na... it fears tat I will lose him forever.. Please can you get him for me?


He cried seeing her drifting away and not realizing tat he was with her. He pulled her hard on him saying why don't you behave normally Geet? dekh nahi sakthi kya tat m here right next to you. Pagal bana juki ho mujhe tum.. har ek din sirf Maan and Prem, do you even realize tat you have lost a baby.. why don't you cry for it. He stared with anger while she just kept looking at him and slowly leaned her head and buried it into his neck and slipped into a deep slumber. He pulled her more into him as his tears made way one by one. He never wanted to shout at her but she was making him helpless. He never wanted to remember the baby as it pained him and made him realize tat he was the reason tat they lost the precious gift but he wanted her to know wat she lost. He caressed her hair saying I wish I would undo it Geet par nahi kar saktha.. I fear the day when you will know the truth. The truth tat Prem had come to me. He made me understand tat you were only mine par mera gussa, I could not control Geet and than the heart tat loved you.. it made me do the thing tat I would never Jaan... maar diya maine Prem ko Jaan... humare Prem ko maar diya ishe haatho ne...I wish I could undo everything and bring him back to you but I cant and now I fear to lose you.. I will die if anything happens to you Jaan.




She ate wat he fed her with her eyes searching for something. It had been like this since they were here. If not fed she would be left starving and her health would get affected. Jaan, let's go out today Maan said waiting for her response but she just kept staring at him. He fed her another morsel saying Do you know where we are he sighed and said again Darjeeling Jaan. You remember we were here to celebrate your 18th birthday woh bhi cancelling our Paris trip. I still remember Geet how you forced uncle and others to cancel the trip saying tat you wanted to be here with me and Prem. Maan saw a slight change of expression on her face. His clutched his fist tight knowing the reason for it. He was helpless and angry tat something tat could make her react was only Prem and not him. He still envied and tat evilness wanted to rip and wipe of Prem from their life.


You remember how you had forced Prem to do a pole dance for you here he said still remembering the challenge tat Geet had won after everyone agreed for Drajeeling. Prem was sure tat their parents would never cancel the trip to Paris as it was something tat they were planning since long but Geet had smartly blackmailed the three families and finally they were here. Jaantho hain you even asked him to strip the way pole dancers do but then Dadima ne sab bigaad diya as she got all three of us. He could see a small smile playing on her lips and next he was surprise to hear her speak and then Dadima told everyone the next morning wat we all were doing and poor Prem he was stuck in all with glares. You remember Maan we even went to tat temple.. woh yaad you carried me all the steps as it was my birthday. I still remember Maan sab ne mana kiya tha but you said tat it was my 18th birthday and you would not let me keep my foot on ground and so did Prem. Yaad hain I was enjoying being carried in your arms..it was so amazing na Maan.


And today is the same day Jaan, my Geet's birthday and she looked at him with questions as she saw his tears wetting his cheeks. She wiped them off as he fed her another morsel but ab Prem nahi hain na Maan and my Maan too is lost so who will carry me and take. Do you know I still cant understand tat why my Maan never acknowledged my presence in Delhi or never did he take me out with him for his parties.. but when we all went for family trips he was like he never would leave my side. Maan choked as he understood wat she meant but now I know and she walked while he sat there with tears and pain.

His arms held her close as they climbed those steps of the temple. He wanted to live in those moments and so he brought her here. Their families had called them but Maan did not let anyone to talk to Geet saying she was sleeping. Each step he climbed he could feel something strange in his. A fear tat he could not understand and same was with Geet. Though she was quite but she had her eyes on the steps tat they had climbed. She looked again and she saw him but then next moment there was no one there. She looked at Maan and then back and again she saw him calling his name softly tat was not even audible to Maan who was so close to her. Maan placed her down the moment they reached inside the temple but the moment she felt the ground she ran back towards the stairs saying Prem.. Prem scaring Maan .


Geet ran from one corner to another searching for Prem. Maan could not understand wat she was up to and seeing her running from one corner of the temple to another than back to the steps made him fear for some unknown reasons. He tried to hold her but she was least bothered tat she was dashing and bumping into the people who were giving her weird looks. She just kept screaming and calling out for Prem making Maan stand still realizing wat she was doing and calling for. He could not move as for the first time after the miscarriage he had seen Geet reacting to something so much but next moment his world crashed feeling her grip on his hand. Maan maine Prem ko dekhe.. did you see. He is here Maan. I know Prem will get my Maan back.. dekha aapne he kept his promise but you did not . He could not understand anything but just tat she had seen Prem here but he knew tat it was impossible. His heart feared as his mind told him tat his Geet was losing everything tat kept her strong until now. He saw her running again from every corner to another and seeing people giving weird looks at her he grabbed and pulled her towards him in anger the moment she reached near him again to say something.


Pagal ho gayi ho kya. Prem is dead. Do you get, he is bloody dead but his words choked inside his throat seeing the figure pulling his possession away from him Zinda hain iska Prem, Maan Singh Khuranna. Prem is bloody alive. Maan stood frozen as Prem hugged Geet tight into his arms hiding her into him. Prem's eyes in fury with rage anger and hatred to kill seeing his Geet, the girl who meant everything for him. The girl for whom he had sacrificed his love and life, the girl who made Prem to smile his best friend Geet. Do you get Maan m alive. His jaws tight as he pulled Geet more into him and she pushed herself more into Prem unaware wat was going on Maan. The two men's were fighting with rage through their eyes one to see his love in some other men's arms while the other with anger and hatred to see his best friend dying. Prem wanted to pull and stab Maan for wat he did as the moment he had heard everything wat happened he could not believe it. His heart for a second had stopped beating and his fears came true when he saw his Geet like tat. He had been following them the moment Maan and Geet had left the cottage and then he could not stop himself after seeing Geet like tat. He hugged her tight hiding her into his strong arms as she found some solance but Prem's heart stopped again the moment he heard her say Did you meet Maan, Prem. Did you tell him tat his Geet only loves him and not anyone else. Kaha na tumne ushe ki ush raat humare beech kuch nahi hua.. did you tell him tat I will die if I don't get Maan.


Her each word stabbed him deep while his eyes stuck on Maan who was seething with anger and hatred for Prem and this hatred made Prem to smirk as he said He is not meant to be loved Geet.. kahi dur kho juka hain humara Maan. Maar diya Maan ne tumare pyar ko humari dosti ko Geet. His each word killed her as she let her body loose while darkness covered her eyes taking her once again into a deep sleep. Geet Maan screamed seeing her unsteady and falling down but before he could reach and touch her Prem scooped her into his arms glaring at Maan stepping away from his sight Don't Khuranna... don't dare touch her. Prem's eyes filled with tears as he looked at the pale structure of Geet. He fought hard to fight with them but he could not stop nor could he stop the anger tat was boiling inside him she was meant to be loved not to be dead Maan... Maar diya na ushe.. you killed the heart tat loved you.. maar diya uski har ek khushi and you bloody murdered your own baby Maan Singh Khuranna. Maan stood shocked and frozen as Prem's word reached deep into his soul hitting every nerve and cell tat ran into his body a bloody cold murderer. Pyar ki saaza di hain and now you lost the very right on her Maan Singh Khuranna... maarne ko bahut shuaq hain na but hell see m alive here Maan and now you will see wats hatred and love for me and he walked carrying an unconscious Geet away from her own love whom she has been searching since on while Maan stood with his word echoing back into him A bloody cold murderer of his own baby.


NEXT : PART 8

This update is for my sweet little friend Mani24 as its her birthday on 24th September. Happy birthday in advance dear. I know you want Dangerous love with Love and Hate update too but I can't promise it dear. Will try to update dangerous love if I get time for it but no promise from my side as m busy with work but right now a gift in form of Aitbaar update for you on your birthday.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY DEAR

MANI




I WISH YOU HAVE ALL THE HAPPINESS IN YOUR LIFE!!!




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Edited by sdlife19 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#22
OMG prem is Truly alive! I hope he doesn't takes Geet away from maan! Somewhere Maan deserved it! He killed prem.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#23
intense emotional update! Prem is alive! Wt will happen nw! update soon! Well written! Pls pm me! Thanks
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Posted: 11 years ago
#24
so atlast prem came. want to know wat wil b the reaction of their family and heer. hope geet get wel soon frm this depresion. lovely update and pls update other ff also.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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prem is alive.. now he has taken geet away... now what will happen...
feeling sad about this update...
it was a superb emotional update...loved it...plzz try to post next soon...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow prem is alive and angry on geet ab kya hoga? jo bhi hoga manjure writer hoga tab tak walekum alam.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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At first let me do a Bhangra dance
Yippi my wish fulfilled!!!!!
Prem is alive!!!! Dhinka chika dhinka chika :D
But how ? :\ scratching my head :\
Maan killed him with his own hand na thn how!!! :O
Chalk koi nehi zinda hai aur vaapas vhi aa Gaya...
Now he hates maan to his core
As usual geet's speeches made me cry :(
Update soon :) ab to prem vhi zinda hai :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
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What prem is alive...and all these days maan and geet's life was living hell..everybody was sad of his death and cursing their fTe..but how come he is alive..realy confused ...plsss get our geet back to normal..our maan and geet shud get a peaceful life...update fast..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Fantastic n very emotional update ...

Thank god prem is alive n he came back atleast nw geet will nt hold herself reason of his death n will nt feel guilty abt it ...bt he took geet with him ...

nw wht maan will do n geet ka kya hoga ??

will prem tell everybody tht maan tried to kill him n hw geet will react on this ...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome dear...
prem is alive...
ye kaise hua...????
now d story bcums more interesting...

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