MG SS ~DILRUBA~ {BY:NELU} COMPLETED - Page 11

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Posted: 12 years ago
part 14
nice part...
so Daadima and Geet talked...
cont soon...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: aanya84

😃awesome update

👏geet never knew that maan had a dadi too😲
aww maaneet are so cute plsss don't separate them in any circumstances😕
hmm so geet madam still confuse about her feelings hope she realizes her love soon 😳
maan going to delhi and geet reading diary very interesting 😆
waiting waiting waiting 😃
plzzz update soon 😳
thank u so much for the pm 😃
love aanya😃
p.s don't get disappointed cheer up ur likes will increase remember u r an awesome writer .
I will always comment on ur thread .keep writing 😃


thnk u so very much dear...😊😊😊
u comments means a lot to me...
... nd MAAN & GEET KO
separateNAHI HONGE 😃😃...
it's a simple maneet story... no twist+separation...
nd now i'll not get dissapointed... will write this story only for u wants to read this 😊😊

love nelu...
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Posted: 12 years ago
aanya84 replied u in page 19 plz check 😊
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thnkss u so very much everyone...
... u r likes & comments means alot to me...
~~here is part 15~~



...MG SS ~DILRUBA~...
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NIGHT IN AFTER DINNER AT KHURANA HAVELI...

GEET: SIR, yeh diary parke mujhe toh apke bara main pata chal jayega.. par aap nhi toh mere bare main kuch nahi jante...
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maan: jitna janna chahiye utna janta hu...
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geet: kya jante ho aap??
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maan: tum apne dad bohot pyar karte ho... apne family ko dislike karte ho...
ek honest... innocent... lovely... cute ... helpful ladki ho
nd most important a beautiful heart... nd start to like me...
...i think itna kafe hain janna...
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geet {blush} : par phir bhi... bohot se batein hain bata ne ko
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maan: woh sab shadi ke baad bata dena...phir toh time hi time hoga hain na??
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geet: maine abhi tak ha bhi nahi bole or apne shadi ka bhi plan bana liya...
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maan: tumhare entry mere zindagi main hone se pehle he yeh sab plan kar liya tha...
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geet: kya???
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maan: haaa... as i was waiting for my dream girl... maine pehle se soch rakha tha woh kese hoge...
maine yeh bhi socha tha pehle sirf usse thore baatein karunga... woh mujhe pasand kare ge toh...uske family ko janunga.. or direct shadi... or baki sab jo janna hoga uske liye toh pure zindagi hoge... hain na???
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geet {smiling} : i must sAy aap bohot jiyada advance ho😊😊
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maan: woh toh main hu...😊 dadi or annie bhi mujhse humesha yahe kehte hain...
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geet: woh bhi yeh sab jante hain???
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maan: haaa!! unko mere bare main sabkuch pata hain...
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geet: humare bare main bhi???
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maan: oh toh humare bich kuch toh hain... jise tum bhi mante ho... right???
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geet😳 : aap ne jawab nahi diya...
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maan: tumne bhi toh... wese choro u take ur time...
nahi abhi tak nahi pata hain, par ghar jake pehle yeh baa bolunga...

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geet: agar maine naa bolo toh??
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maan: i know the answer... tum haa he bolo ge>...
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geet" itna confidence...
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maan: haa of course!!! MAAN SINGH KHURANA ke charm se koi bach nahi pata...😃😊😛
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geet: really???? toh main apko abhi naa bol de te hu...
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maan: nahi manta main ke tum mujhe naa bolo ge...
dekh na jab main dehli se wapas aaunga tum dor ke ke aaoge or mujhe hug karo ge...

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geet: aacha jii?? thik hain dekhte hain...
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maan: i will be waiting...
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geet: khuli aanko se sapne dekhna baan kar do aur so jaoo...
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maan: baan aankho se wahe nazar aata hain... par bhir bhi GOOD NIGHT... Meri diary likhna bhi khatam..
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geet: toh mujhe dijiye mujhe parna hain...
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maan: abhi nahi jate waqt dunga... thora intezar karo princess... 😊😛
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geet: good night... { geet went to another room 4 sleeping}
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... IN MORNING...

GEET wake up early & make breakfast for them...
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geet goes to maan's room...
maan was sleeping...
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geet: { koi sote waqt itna cute kese lag sakta hain???}
drooling drooling drooling...

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geet: sir subha ho gaye uth ye...
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maan: itne jaldi uth ke kiya faida... sare raat tum wese bhi sone nahi dete...
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geet: { o shape mouth} : main kya kiya??
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maan: saare raat sapno main aake mujhe saata rahe the..😊😊
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geet: { blush} : main niche jaa rahe hu aap ready hoke breakfast ke aa jana...
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maan: okkk princss...
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both take breakfast nd talk for sometime...
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now time for maan to leave...
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maan: jaa raha hu... mera intezar karna or designs complete kar lena... apna khayal rakhna... diary mere room main hain bed pe par lena... koi problem ho to mujhe phn karna, or agar tum mere aane tak yahi ruko ge toh mujhe aacha lage ga...
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geet just stood silently...
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maan: kuch toh bolo..
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geet: aap maat jaoo na... { so innocently}

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maan: plzz princess mera jana or muskil maat karo... jaruri nahi hota toh main sach main nahi aata... sirf ek din plzzz.
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geet: okkk!! par aap promise karo apna khayal rakhoge..
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maan: promise... aap main jau??
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geet: hmm...
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maan: thik se bye to bol do plzzz.
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geet immedetly hug him...
.maan also hug her back...
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geet: i will miss you...

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maan: me tooo... love you...😊😊
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geet: aab jaiye apko lateho raha hain {with a smile}
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maan: bye { nd give a forhead kiss to geet}😊😃
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geet: byeee

... MAAN left & geet run to his room...
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she take the diary nd kiss it...
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open the diary:

... HEY PRINCESS, please don't be sad i will come 2morrow...

{geet smiles...}
so here is my intro:
I'M MAAN SINGH KHURANA...
AGE: 26
height: 5 fit 10
family: dadi nd sis annie
office: KC
post : owner
fav colour: white... but after seeing u waitng when u'll wear red lehenga as my bride😊

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{ geet blushes}
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Aab itna blush maat karo... main phir se aa jaunga...😊
wese kuch khass nahi hain mere bare main batane ko phir bhi as u want to knw...
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i'm a simple guys... aways dreamt for a my dream girl...
usully yeh sapne ladkiyo ke hote hain... but as i'm different i was waiting...
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nd suddenly geet's phn start ringing
...MAAN SIR...
GEET: HELLO
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maan: hii princess... diary parte parte lunck karna bhul rahe ho... pehle lunch phir design baad main diary...
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geet: par mujhe bhuk nahi hain..
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maan: plzz pehle khalo aur designs complte karlo JAAN
{{GEET HAYEEE JAAN}}
Acully dadi ko bhi designs dekh na hain iss liye jaldi ready
karna hoga... plzzz
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geet: ok... byee
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maan: gussa maat karna...
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geet: nahi hu... bye..
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maan: bye
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precap: reading diary & maan meeting...

... read like nd comment


Edited by nelufar10 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome part
maan dialogues were superb MSK ka charm hai hi aisa oh I so much loved it
geet jaldi apni feelings maan ko bata do
maaneet were amazing
You are really a good writer
Edited by preeti555 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
lovely update
thanx for the pm
cont soon dear
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Posted: 12 years ago



wonderful updates...

sorry for late response...

saare pms padte padte late ho gaya...

this is very simple and beautiful love story...

Geet is Maan's dreamgirl and Maan is Angel in Geet's life...

but Geet bhool gayi and Maan bhi ki Maan ko uske Dad ke doctors se baat karni thi...and how is her dad in all these days ...he is completely forgotten...does Geet started living in KH ?...how can she ?...she is living in village and these all things can create problem...if her dad get his conscious back then what will he feel if others will tell all these rumors to him...what they are doing inside nobody knows...people see from outside and can create rumors...

thanx for pm...


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Posted: 12 years ago
😊😃Thank u nelu for such a warm reply
See u again proved that u r a fantastic writer by giving us a such an awesome update
Aww It feel so good to see them all happy happy 😃😳
maan allowed geet to read his diary this shows their immense trust on each other😃
aree maan is going to delhi hope he comes soon 😆😃
geet is such a cutie 😛so enthu for reading her lovers diary 😆😆
maan is seriously so advanced he planned every aspect of his lihe with geet cant wait to see his dreams coming true 😉\
waiting waiting and waiting
plzzz update soon 😃
😃thank u so much for the pm
love aanya 😃

Edited by aanya84 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
wow superb
maan going to delhi nd geet missing him
hayee kya diary hain
geet drooling on maan in sleep
awsm .thnx 4 long ud.waiting
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Posted: 12 years ago
part 15
nice part...
cont soon...

PS - add the title dear...anyone can use that...always keep editing ur first post of this thread and change the title adding the update and page numbers...need help ask me or anyone...
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Posted: 12 years ago
~~note~~
" YOU ALL MUST BE THOUGHT GEET KE DAD KE BARE MAIN MAAN NE DOC SE BAAT KYUN NAHI KI?? but kya maan yeh baat bhul sakta hain..???😊😊😉
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wow... thnkss alot guyss 4 ur big big comments...😊😊
love you all & tight hug to you all...😊
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so here is part 16😲 { i never ever thought ke main part 16 tak likh paunge} all thnks to you guys...
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...MG SS ~DILRUBA~...
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PART--16...
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Geet take the lunch & start to making design for school...
when she thought mujhe dad ke pass milne jana tha, so she was about to go when maan's watchman come...
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WM: maam apse koi milne aaya hain...
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g: mujse?? kaha hain??
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wm : bahar hain bula unhe??
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g: jee...
...watchman came with a man.
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man: hello madam... aap geet handa ho na???
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g: jee kahiye???
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man: woh main hospital se aaya hu MR.KHURANA ne kaha tha apke dad ko handa haveli main shift kar de .. so apko humare sath chalna hoga... formalites or apke ghar ki keys ke liye...
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g: sir ne apse kaha?? lekin kab??
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m: aaj duper ko woh aaye the unho ne kaha unke doctor s ne kaha hain, hospital jiyada woh ghar pe rahenge toh response karna jaldi start karenge... that's why...
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g: { sir mere liye kitna soch hain} { thn her phn start ringing}:aap ek min rukiye main abhi aate hu..
.geet received the call frm MAAN
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GEET:to maan aap itne ache kyun ho??
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maan: aap maine kya kiya???
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geet: dad ke kiye doc se baat kisne ki??
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maan: ohh... maine wa he baatane ke liye phn kiya tha... ke tum aaj mere ghar nahi ruk sakte... SORRY woh aaj dad ko tumhare jarurat hoge... wese bhi shadi ke baad toh sath main he rehna hain.. toh aaj ka rukna cancel... .
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g: {bushing} : Aap nohot jiyada baat karte ho...😊 main baad main baat karte hu... apna khayal rakhna..😊
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m: okk princesss u too take care...
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cut the call...
geet WENT TO MAAN'S ROOM TAKE THE DIARY WITH HER...
nd important things to make degigns complete...
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she lock maan's house & went with the wordboy of hospital...
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... they 1st went to hospital then handa haveli....
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THE WORDBOY & nurse help to shift mr.handa in his room...
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all thinks get settle...
nurse is taking care of mr handa & geet is completed design... nd now AT NIGHT she went to meet his dad..
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NURSE: madam main abhi jaa rahe hu kal morning main aa jaunge...
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g: okk!!
nurse went ourt & geet sits beside his dad
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geet hug her dad..
geet: i'm very vry sorry dad... main kal apke pass nahi aa paye... woh maan sir ka accident ho gaya iss liye mujhe unke pass rehna para... dad u knw woh bohot ache hain... or mujhe se pyar bhi karte hain...
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i knw dad kise pain itne jalde barosa karna acha nahi hain... iss liye maine unse time bhi manga hain... or apko pata hain dad main kal raat unke sath ruki the...
{dad must be shocked😲}
par hum aalag aalag kamre main the... i promise dad main apko bharosa khabi nahi to runge... lekin dad woh sach main bohot ache hain... aap thik ho jayenge phir aap ko bhi yeh baat yekin ho jaye ge...
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aab aap aaram karo main baad main aate hu... GOOD NIGHT😊
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... GEET WENT TO HER ROOM...
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SHE slept in her bed & cry alot for her dad...
geet: plzzz babaji dad ko jaldi thok kar do... I NEED HIM in every step of my life... plzz babji...
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after sometimes later she calls MAAN.
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RINGING Ringing ringing...
maan:
hello angel...
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geet: hii sir... kese ho?? pohoch gaye?? aur ha
medicine li aapne?? .
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maan: yes nw in my room,,,, medicine bhi haa le li... tum batao kiya kar rahe the?? dad kese hain??
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geet: kuch nahi... dad tik hain... aur apke designs bhi complete ho gaye...
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maan: that's great princess... diary parle??
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geet: nahi abhi parunge...
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maan: okk... toh main abhi rakhta hu kuch kaam hain...Kal meeting hain na isliye... u take care & good night LOVE YOU...
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Geet: ok bye gd ni8...

... call cut...
geet open the diary to read...
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mere bare main kuch ase baat hain jo tumhare janna jaruri hain..
1. mere ek engegment toot chuke hain... samera sergil ke sath... dadi ne usse mere marriage fix ki the... i never ever love her { promise} as she was dad's choice i agree but i never felt she is my dream girl... after our engegment i came to knw she was a cheater & only want my money so broke up with her... { dadi don't knw about this... i tell him that i don't like her} cuz dadi ko sache baat bolta to woh tuut jataa... but i hv no relation with her her promise...😊
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2: mujhe gussa bohot jaldi aa jata hain... aur gusse main kabhi drink bhikarta hu but kabhi apne hosh nahi koye...
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3: my work is very important for me...
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4: dadi & annie r my life... nd i mean it my true life they are...
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5: now most important i'm in love... with my true dream girl GEET HANDA MY PRINCESS, ANGEL, LOVE ,
SHE IS MY HEART & MY HEARTBAET...
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it was late night & after reading this line geet slept...
& dreaming with MAAN
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too be continued...
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note: DO READ LIKE & COMMENT IF U WANT NO FORCE😊😊
6n6s6k6i6r6a6n6. aanya84. aditi,preeti555 replied you plzz see below...😊😊
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love NELUFAR GURTI AAZMI (NELU)
Edited by nelufar10 - 12 years ago

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