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Onir

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Posted: 12 years ago

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palindrome

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Posted: 12 years ago

#62

To be very honest,I don't have any words left to praise you bratty...Whole chapter was like watching a movie...Would you believe,if i say,i was hearing the sound of furious raindrops touching the ground in my head,while reading this chapter..!!!! You don't write but paint the chapters that too in 3D version...Hope you understood what i meant by this line...!!!!

Geet's anger towards Maan is totally justified..I am not against her hurting him again and again with her bitter words..!!! However just like Maan,Geet's stubbornness was new to me,in the similar way maan's soft side and protectiveness was new for me..But the way you have portrayed these two different characteristics of both the leads,I did not feel like they were out of their characters..It seemed like witnessing the "subtle changes" that circumstances and situations bring in one...!!!!

The last part was my favouritest...Especially when he came back to assure her that he would be back very soon...!!!!

Car is Maaneet's constant companion for such "lovely moments"...I am suddenly reminded of the chapter where Maan had taken different route for geet's sake..!! His care was hidden then but tonight,It was out in full form..He didn't hesitate to accept her his wife even...!!! you have perfectly described society's weird and unstable perspective towards such situations..!!!!

Lasya is connecting these two,and I hope geet would connect lasya and Maan too...!!!!😊

I loved this chapter dear...!!!

and me lubs you alot...🤗

Edited by palindrome - 12 years ago

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Posted: 12 years ago

#63

Your updates are like watching a show. It is poetry in every word. I could see him standing in her path in the rain stretching his hand out.

The way his eyes stuck to her face and then his eyes headed down a bit... hmmm Maan, noticing others notice her does not quite go down well with him.

There is a protection in that gesture as well as a hint of possessiveness. Voice curt, irritation present, bossiness in every cell and then he will have the nerve to dislike HER stubbornness...

I am still alive.. got a snappy angry response from her. Kudos Geet. More power to you babe. She does not hesitate to show him the mirror.

Wardrobe malfunction... poor Geet. From the pot into the fire.

His chivalry under the circumstances in spite of his irritation at her makes me love him. The person who shies from every relationship, who runs away to Mumbai just to not feel for her, is not hesitant at all in naming a relationship with her to protect her, in just an instant. This is why he steals my heart.

I mean no harm... over and over just so she stops shuddering. The quiet man who says nothing repeating himself for her.

The man who can take it all but her tears. I am blown away by this person.

The bond between Geet and Lasya always leaves me with a lump in my throat.

For the dedication 🤗. Tell me how to unlove you now...

I will be honest and say I will never stop asking for more.

Thanks so much for updating Shika.

❤️

Edited by dqno1 - 12 years ago

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Onir

@Onir

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Posted: 12 years ago

#64

Shika lovely update.. the stirring finally caused some storm to take place within their shackled selves.

Have you noticed the titles of the last 3 updates... Rains - stirred - storm... I don't exactly know why I went tangent but then I feel this link between the parts.. as if a flow.

I liked the progression you showed in his thought process... from gradual hate towards her stubbornness and defensive & always against him nature to actually finally liking it as against to her pained, shamed and vulnerable self. She means a lot to him... Even though he wants to make himself she means nothing to him yet each time he himself with his actions & thoughts goes against this his own fight to not feel affected by her.

Also he is very protective of her... wants no harm her way... and goes onto calm her too. He's such a sweetheart sometimes. ❤️ I know he does act like a khotta many times yet his few actions compensate for it all. 😳😆

He is somewhere liking that Geet is there for his Mom, she could be that someone who is there for to take care & show her concern,...which he is dying to do but his own views and shackles are preventing him from. So in a way she's fulfilling & living his role.

The whole scene with her dress malfunction due to khotta was I don;t know what... but loved the end result of him protecting her, comforting her when she was all lost & ashamed. 😳 And him calling her his wife ... (I know its just to save her from being further ashamed or become the talk among others...yet it was too good...) i so loved him claiming that right on her.

Why do I feel there's more to her vulnerability... her being so lost & dejected by this incident...

Anyways continue soon...

I wish Avi should always make you promise for us to get such back-back updates 😉 And for you troubling me toh woh toh haq hai na tera... Me lubs you more... 😳 🤗

Edited by Onir - 12 years ago