THE LOCKET (1) - Page 37

bak bak updated on page 32😊

Sheen🤢

Originally posted by: palindrome

First of all,I kept on staring at the picture you have used as "banner"for a pretty long time avi..This was the second and last genuine hug of Maaneet in the almost 400 episodes..I really really loved it alot... and finally "locket" has made its appearance...😃

Now coming to the chapter..The woman Dev is talking about,whoever she is, I have fallen for her{not in that way ofcourse😛}..If i could be like her even 10 percent,my life would have been much better...alas,its easy to wish and very very hard to do...!!!!

I am loving your new writing style, avi..Your heroine have not made her presence yet and all your readers are already aaawwweeed by her...Its totally the magic of your presentation..Chapter was entitled "Dev" and it was actually about "Dev" but his girl stole the lime light...Dev seems quite genuine to me..He is certainly not a "villain"...😊..

You know,I personally love a certain "thing" in your writing and I don't know how to name it..umm..I can call it the "artistic streak"..or "Avimism"...There were certain "sentences" in this chapter which were full of "avinism"..for example...

He smiled to himself again as he realized that his ship that was floundering in a sea of wealth and cronies, had found a direction when he found her.

Being used to drooling females and feminine pink powder-puff girls, she came as a shock to his system.

Thank you for giving us this wonderful story and sorry for late comment..

eagerly waiting for next...😃

Avi-isms 😊 ... me likey..

@underlined: me too... I love spunkiness in females.. there is a fine line between being rude and standing up for herself and I am trying hard to keep her not sounding rude... More on her coming soon..
Dev is Abhinav for me... This Dev I am hoping everyone will love..

Originally posted by: Loquacious_Aash

Sheen🤢

Avi..thap thap thap

Coming soon...

*Smirks at everyone around*

Second spot again... Never mind in Sweety's words Ab aadat ho gayi hai mujhe. Destiny.

And you call yourself that you lack imagination? Someone fetch me a rod please. Avi, I would be honest, you just wiped off a smile from my face and left me with wet eyes. I can't tell you how moving this was.
I am speechless Avi. The song was cherry on the top. I am listening to it on repeat and I want to kill someone. Rulane ka irada hain kya? Now I seriously am embarrassed and privileged at the same time that a writer like you is reading something written by me. I am hiding under my bed, never coming back.
You know the mother son bonding, I have seen it from close and every time I just look at the duo in wonder. They play, fight, and waltz around, and when you described the teenage son taking her mother in his arms with adoration and love, and reverence, I could almost see them swaying to the music around me, and knowing that those moments would remain moments from now on, made my heart clench.
I would forever hate you for naming the adorable couple Raj and Kiran. After knowing you from up close. I can't help but notice someone in the couple's place and now after knowing you killed them, though it is a story, I tell myself repeatedly, I swear I want to, scream, cry and do something between both of them.
Avi, this fic has jumped into one of my favorites because of the emotion emitted from it. Take a standing ovation Avi, you deserve it.👏

that was one lovely update, with succint and entrancing descriptive details

I'm really loving this pattern of sort-telling. The way you take one character for each chapter and we get an insight of that character, letting us see things through the character's eyes, it makes the story all the more engrossing.

First of all, the name 'Geet' did drop my stomach a bit. I don't know what to say and what to expect...

Maan, for me, is becoming more and more loveable with every chapter. His sacrifice for his brother is makin me respect him as an elder brother. I feel for him, so much that by the end of the chapter, reading about a son's attachment with his mother who he lost all of a sudden, it left me with wet eyes. Try however hard as anyone can, a mother's absence can never ever be replaced by another person's presence. Never.

Even though the song playing in the background was overwhelming and my throat was clogged with emotions, I couldn't help but smile at the scene which played not only in front of Savitri Devi's eyes, but mine too. I smiled at the lovely couple that Raj and Kiran made, waltzing around and singing together, I smiled at the young teenage boy trying to dance with his mother, learning gentlemanly ways from his father. Alas! The thought that right at that moment, the teenage boy - who's turned into a man now - sits all alone, recalling memories of his parents and trying to dissipate his pain in solitude, made me cry.

I loved this chapter for the bitter-sweetness it brought out.

Thanks for updating Avi! 🤗

Originally posted by: sdlife19

nice update