Falling Stars UPDATED Pt 3/Pg 23 @ 17 Jan - Page 3

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Posted: 12 years ago
#21
Awesome prologue. Waiting for Falling Stars.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#22
lovely prologue buddy
do start soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part 1



"Maan Beta.. What're you looking at?''

A elder woman asked to her grandson who was looking up to the sky with targeted eyes. He, the Maan, was in his age of Nineteen, was laying in lap of his grandmother, Savitri Devi, who was stroking his thick black hair with her motherly love and cares which was pouring out on his grandson, like drizzle.

"Close you eyes son and sleep well. See the dreams which would take you away, far from all the worries you carry with you, inside your open eyes '' SD spoke dearly.

Maan smirked , as if this words were not even worth for touching his ears.



"Dreams!!'' .. he mocked the word,

"Dadima dreams are nothing for me. It doesn't exist in my life. For me everything is only reality.. Reality of this nasty world. Reality of mine, who has nothing but all those vexes which snatched away all my happiness of life. And the reality is Dadi, that we are living in this small house because, we have nothing to spend on a better life. Dreams are garbage Dadima...nothing else! ''

"kaisi baate kar rahe hai Maan aap. Whatever we have is enough for us Beta.. we don't need anything else.. more!''

"Really!!'' ... "Dadima .. if this insufficient life is enough for you then why do you dream? Why did you say me to dream for a better tomorrow Dadi.. !!''

SD was quite. She knew there was no use of this conversation. Making him understand of anything was, just no hope as he, was own a self- creator. Never in this little life, he needed anyone or anything to give him support or help. The only wish she had, was to see tenderness on his grandson face. A single mark of happiness on his stone-tough face and a smile on his dried lips...

Dadi looked out from window of their little house. She was waiting for something, perhaps!. Maan lifted his gaze up to her and watched her expressions.. He could see wait in those wrinkled eyes. He smirked , brought back his gaze on previous position.

"Dadima.. you again waiting for broken stars !'' spoke crossing his arms across his broad chest.

"Not broken star Beta.. say falling stars. '' she smiled, like got lost in somewhere in past. "Aap jaante hai Maan. My father used to tell me that if you wish something, looking at this falling stars, God must complete them!''

"And you wait for those stars to come and show you.. that hey look!!.. I'm going to fall for you!! be ready for a wish!!'' he laughed out loud on this rubbish. "Dadima the day I would need for any star to fulfill my wish ever.. I will break them myself, with my bare hands.. will not wait for them to fall for me..!!!''

Dadi got scared to sense a deadly determination in his voice. She instantly kept her warm palm on his both eyes, made it closed. "So jaaiye Maan!!'' A drop of helplessness fell on her own, back of hand..

"Dadima.. you don't need to cover my eyes for hiding your tears from me..!! ''

And he slept... undesirably walked in.. the land of Dreams...

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At the same time.. on same night.. Somewhere far from here...From Maan!!

A twins of eyes were closed, were impatient. The roundness of inside eyelids were running randomly, fast. Like something not very pleasant was screening behind those shut eyes. The small thin lines of wrinkles were appearing very visible between the small places of both eyebrows, due to this the smooth forehead started sweating. The connected slop of small nose was breathing, making nose trails vibrated in unease. These all movement made a fair face, red.. complete red like the blood travel had got disturbed. Her long, thin, curly eyelashes fluttered, indicated that at any moment it will be open and when it happened...

"Mummaaa!!! ''... "Papaaa!!! '' "Mumaaa!!!!!!! '' a shaky sound echoed within the shinning walls of Handa Mansion. In sudden a man and a woman had been seen running , ascending stairs toward the direction of that female sound.. in hurry the door got opened and both run to a bed which was covered with the white net drapes all around, in round shape. Man , The Mr. Handa did switch on lights and both did aside the drapes and sat on both side of a girl who had screamed. And now, was breathing fast sitting on a pink round shaped bed with tears on her face.

"What happened Guddi!!! '' The woman, Mrs. Handa took the girl in her arms, with schoked and wide eyes she was wiping her tears trailed face. "Shh.. chup.. dont cry Beta.. !! ''

"Kya hua isse!!'' Mr.Handa worriedly looked his wife. "Nightmares!!'' Mrs. Handa , Rano breathed to him. He nodded. "Geet.. Guddi.. bura sapna dekha!! '' He asked dearly.

Geet nodded sobbing. Her eyes became puffy and red due to cry. "I-I saw some..someone is taking me..aw..away from you Papa.. '' She spoke meekly..

"Shhh Beta..kuch nahi hua.. so jao.. we are here beta.. '' Rano tried to make her lay down..

"Promise na Mama''

"Yes Guddi.. you sleep.. I sing lullaby for you okay!!'' and Mr. Handa started "Guriyaa si ..meri laadlee !!!'''

"Ohh Papa please dont... I cant sleep.. Mama bolo na Papa ko dont sing!! '' She pouted in annoyance covering her ears with pillows...

"Aap chup rahiyeji.. let my Guddi sleep peacefully'' she stared caressing Geet head, her long hairs, patted to send her in beautiful dreamland...



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Edited by MonaSWrites - 11 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#24
lovd it a lottt
Edited by Tarina.R.Totine - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#25
Congo for new ff ...waiting for update ..
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Posted: 12 years ago
#26
That was a wonderful start..
Loved the way u showed his disbelief in dreams and then her nightmares..
when dreams becum bad they r called nitemares..!! we have to fight against nitemares not dreams...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#27
beautiful banner loved it
congrats !!! for the new story
& part 1 was awesome 😃
it's looks geet is rich & maan is poor nice concept :))
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Posted: 12 years ago
#28
nice start maan dont believe in dreams and is from poor family ...geet having nightmares...loved the start continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#29
Omg,, i dnt like it,, i love it...
Mai to totally fida ho gayi hu is pe... :*
each n every line is awesome...
Plz plz plz dnt be late in updating this one,,
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Posted: 12 years ago
#30
Nice start

Very well written

Maan n Dadi covo was very emotional

Geet having a nightmare

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