New York Times Part 31 Updated in Thread 2 - Page 13

Avi 🤗...hi dear...tell me about busy Saturday's 😕...btw which blue shirt ...the full sleeve or the half sleeve one 😆

Originally posted by: 6th.Element

Yeah...I'm pleasantly surprised that you have all the numbers memorized...I mean they didn't even lend themselves to the story much, expect the Gym floor may be.

What did you mean by the highlighted line? Are you asking if there is a term to reference the POV style of writing?

Well, I'm glad you like it. Because I'm already getting PMs about folks not wanting to read this NY times anymore...😕

Originally posted by: --Ratna--

Avi 🤗...hi dear...tell me about busy Saturday's 😕...btw which blue shirt ...the full sleeve or the half sleeve one 😆

Hasini ...will read and comment 😊

Originally posted by: 6th.Element

Yeah...I'm pleasantly surprised that you have all the numbers memorized...I mean they didn't even lend themselves to the story much, expect the Gym floor may be.

What did you mean by the highlighted line? Are you asking if there is a term to reference the POV style of writing?

Well, I'm glad you like it. Because I'm already getting PMs about folks not wanting to read this NY times anymore...😕

Originally posted by: had2bu

Not read the last chapter yet so bear with me if you changed it. Regarding your question, I meant in the previous version of the story it was more of their self thoughts; 1st Geet's then in the meeting chapter Maan's. You missed out on her dropping her papers and him touching her for the first time which was embedded in my brain etc etc. I am not complaining so do know that but yes it is different, very well written but different. Feels like a movie where I have to move the actors around to different shots in my brain. Love it either way so do continue. 👏

That part hasn't come yet...It's when he troubles her with that first assignment. - A day in the life of a Jr. Analyst.

Hmm! surely its their first time their fingers touch, but if you gather, she'd already helped him to get up at the airport and he also dresses her leg after the gym incident.

Glad that you still like it...

Originally posted by: had2bu

In the story it was full but my fav is the light blue with the jewellry scene. Anyone reading this convo is going to term both of us insane or maan-iacs...😆. I take that happily, you be prepared!

🤗I love love love the re-write of this chapter. You made all that so visual the way you wrote it.

Originally posted by: 6th.Element

That part hasn't come yet...It's when he troubles her with that first assignment. - A day in the life of a Jr. Analyst.

Hmm! surely its their first time their fingers touch, but if you gather, she'd already helped him to get up at the airport and he also dresses her leg after the gym incident.

Glad that you still like it...

Oh! good...This scene was just a blah! when I read it from the original draft...So, you see I had to put in the details and perhaps that is why you feel you have to move them around in your head.

Now that I think of it, I think its really the lack of details in the initial updates that must have made you all imagine them a certain way and now that you actually see it through my eyes (given that the ellipses have gone 😆) it feels like a lot of shuffling. But hoping that all will settle down soon.

I will also go so far as saying that there are more POV details in the new version (self thoughts as you called it) than in the old one, but that could just be me...

@ R, A, J

You girls can trouble me all you want...what with your pics of Maan and KK, but I can still only write what comes to me. So bear with me, if its not the story you have been asking for an update. I will try and write something for Spanish steps today. Again, I don't guarantee it.

I'm enjoying reading this story! Thanks for the updates!