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Posted: 13 years ago

wow new ff yipppeee
lovely concept yaar though d picture is not very clear till now to jaldi jaldi update karo
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Posted: 13 years ago
Great update! Can't wait to read more!
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Posted: 13 years ago
when r we getting next update I mean updates :-)
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Posted: 13 years ago
Hey Safi..i just now read this new FF of yours..and so far so good😃

I love how u have created their characters..and to be honest...i feel sad for the both of them😭

I feel like maan has had a horrible past, and hence his lips are sealed, trying to hide his sorrow, while geet, poor girl has to deal with this rude boy😕

Do continue soon, can't w8 to read more😊

and yes hun i miss maaneet too...so much😭

Last but not the least, the title...hhmm well More Piya, could work but i don't know what your storyline is...so my suggestions would be:
1. Khamooshi Ka Dusra Avtar
2. Teri Meri Prem Kahani
3. Dushmani Ya Mohabbat
4. Chhaye Hai Tanhayee
5. Mohabbat ka dusra Naam
6. Na Tum Jaano Na Hum
7. Or More Piya works too..lol😉


Edited by maaneetfanatic - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
more piya
Part 3




"how are you feeling today?" maan kept quit. He hated talking to anyone els then Rano, and he hate how everyone was trying to pressurize him to talk. First that geet, won't shut up with her bak bak, sometime he really do feel like slapping her hard on the face, or shout.
"let's start from the beginning. You were in the orphanage for 7 years, did you have good time there? Or bad?"
Maan instantly snaps out of his thought, looking at mr Taylor with big eyes. He wasn't allowed to mention or reawaken his old memory. Usually family adopts kids when they are 2-3 months old, but mr handa insisted to adopt maan. It was to late, a 7 years old boy, god know what he went through at such a young age, and now a complete new environment, surly that will take time.
"alright tell me something about your new home... How is geet and sammer? Do you get well with them?"

Maan instantly stood up and walked out. He hated sharing parents... First mother nurse with all those children and now with geet and sammer. He banged shut the door of the small room and made his way to the play ground.

Geet observed him from the far, even though she always promised never to look at him, the rude and arrogant boy, something about him always pulls her close.

As the day came to an end, geet waited, she always gets worried when ever mr Taylor comes around. Maan always seems to be in foul mood, wish she could ask what bothers him, but he rather not explain. Something he likes. To be hones geet doubts if he ever took a single second to talk to her.

Few days have passed then to months and then to years... Mr Taylor never forgot to visit maan, and he always have been in foul mood. The one thing surprised geet was maan never spoke to her, not even a precise word...

It was a odd evening, Sunday when mostly all the family member of the house went out to some weeding party, leaving the kids.

Maan silently sat in the garden, digging soil to plant a tree. Sammer was busy talking to his new GF.
Geet walked out, she always find maans experiment interesting. She stood there, covering the area. Providing shade with her body. Maan found it irritating but he won't open his mouth to say move!
"can I help?" she takes her hand back, holding hand. Pointing out her small stomach. "I always wanted to plant a tree, per no one allows me. Can I plant one right next to you?"

Maan stared at his plant for sometime. It was a small tree. His brown trouser was covered with soil along with his white shirt. Maan went in deep thought, wondering how this will benefit him? If she plants, what if her plant will be better, and all the family member gives her all the attention and not him. He kept quit, rather not reply at all as he knows the future plan.

Geet starred at his blank face for while. Trying her best to read and make some prediction of his reaction. She was becoming expert in this. Geet have hard maan speak many time with the elder but never with her & sammer.
"it's been 3 years now that you never spoke to me! I am not all that bad..." geet sits on her knee and bends down to see his face. Maan looked way.

He always hates when she tries to talk. He hates sharing, that's the first point. He hates anyone els giving other attention except him.
Maan still did not reply.

He observed geets hand where exactly she was planting her plants. Right next to his. He felt like shouting , but that means if he talk once he probably have to talk again.

He silently stood up and walked off. Leaving confusing geet. She stared at him then at the two plant that laid below...

...

As usal, geet silently flowed maan. The summer was coming to an end, and walking in to the autam. All the trees started to shed there leaves. It was a beautiful view. "don't you think it's an amazing view? I was wondering if mama would buy me a camera this birthday..."


Maan ignored. He silently looked at the other direction. The school gate laid in fraction of 3 minute walk. They can see how each and every children making hassle, craving for the last minute attention. Maan observed from one boy to another. Mostly all were from his class. The girls eyes him first then the boys. They all looked at him every morning because he is so isolated and odd one out, he also had this weird attention lingering in his eyes. The facial expertion was almost "who cares!" but that did not help with the attention his eyes was begging for. Those big light brown eyes almost looked so beautiful, a wanted feeling of warmness always suddenly without a second question walks in. Maybe that's why geet always have this soft corner for this boy even after almost 3 years of no word. She still member the first day when he walked in to there house.
"why do they always look at you?" geet leaned forward. Trying her best to see his face. Even though he is only 10, but very tall.
"do you like attention maan?" maan still kept walking without any reply. She looked at his hand for a moment, staring at it, for the first time she had this urge of holding his Hand and stopping him, forcing him to talk to her. It's always almost like she don't exist. Invisible to him.
Geet slowly took her shaky hand and holds his tightly, stopping him in the middle of the path. Maan instantly with an angry eye looked at her. Geet was frighten and at the same time was about to take few step back to let go but kept her ground.
"why do you always act like I am not there?" geet pleadingly looked at him. She have never done anything beyond that will upset him nor sammer or any member of her family, but he always the one decides never to blend in.

Maan jerks his hand, taking 5 step back, his pink lips parted to shout but then closes back again. A anger of disgust clearly visible but it only made geet confused.

Maan ran in to his classroom, almost everyone looked at him, while teacher curious what made him out of breath first thing in the morning. It's usually after play time, playing non- stop football or after those kick boxing class.

"what happen maan?" the teacher wondered. She looked at all the other children who was looking at him with immense concentration. Everything about maan exited all the children. It wasn't a nice way, but in a mean way. It was like a exiting animal in the zoo.

The teacher looked at the class, and quickly shouts "everyone take your spelling book out!"
As everyone started to get busy, mrs moony looked back at maan. Whos'e spelling book was out, neatly placed on the table with a pen. "do you want to go out and relax. You breathing very heavily!"
Mrs moony always worry about maan. The whole local are probably knows about him and always looks after his need. From the local shopkeeper to the bus stop.

next part please scroll down :)
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Edited by FIRESafiReFIRE - 13 years ago
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"shall I call geet? Maybe few minutes with her make you feel comfortable!"
Geets name made maan breath even heavier. Wasn't she is the one at the first place is responsible for this? Asking him weird question that he possibly don't have any answer to.

Maan slowly parts his lips, it was a surprise for mrs moony. A expression that he actually may say some words. Teacher eyes widens, she almost leans forward to have a clear view, it probably was a merricale.

"n-no!" maan looked down at his spelling book, while the whole class suddenly became silent. Everyone started at him with a big eye while teachers mouth fell right open. Maan actually pronounced something!

...

"language, it's probably was hard for him to speak English!" mr taylor suggested.
"no! No! He always talks to me. I mean, in English to."
"but Romania speaks a complete different language!"
"yes, but he ..." they did not have any explanation or reason behind maan being so quit. The social care clearly knew it was more in to what happen in that orphanage over the 7 years of his life but the question was what exactly have happen? If maan him self decided not to answer there are no other way To help him.

Rano walked out flowed by geet and maan. Maan clinched him self to Ranos hand, when geet tried to hold her maans hand, she was pushed way. Rano couldn't say anything, as geet have the ability to understand, maan clearly did not posses that power.

He came and sat at the front seat and geet at the back. Rano drove to the supermarket then home with shopping.
"you have never mentioned about your favorite dish maan..." Rano spoke to him as he and geet sat on the dinner table and later joined by sammer. Who was in hurry, the puberty was hitting him hard, unexpectedly growing tall and then change of voice.
"sammer why have your voice changed?" geet innocently questioned. She loved teasing her brother. He was easily teased and he also was little mischievous.
"shut up you idiot!" sammer replied in annoying tone.
"enough!" Rano instantly glared at sammer angrily.

Maan dint like the little fight, specially how both sibling was successfully at getting Ranos attention.

He dropped the plate with a sudden noise which made everyone jump. He made a innocent face like no one would guess it was in purpose.
Rano smiled, comforting with her eyes not to worry.

Geet glared at him, and could see a almost smile on the corner of his cheek. Geet moved close and angrily glared at him. She somewhere knew his intention. "I know you are acting. I have seen that smile..." geet angrily suggest.
Maan did not reply instead staid quit.

...

Maan 12
Geet 10

It's maan last Primary school year, in matter of few more week and then the summer holiday he will be in high school. Geet was supper exited. 2 whole years without maan. She was counting the days. After two years they will most likely will be in same high school but she have two years to look for that.
"do you know maan, I will be so happy once you leave for high school. First I don't have to wake up early, 2 nd I don't have to be late home." geet fully suggested which maan barely cared. He walked in to his classroom, not even looking at her once.

Summer holiday...

Summer holiday did come very quick and geet was beyond exited about what she will be doing...

The morning maan did not say much at all, instead he kept quit. Sitting on the side. He silently looked at geet. She and sammer somehow was going well. And he was also giving her attention. It was about an hour before Rano came up broke maans silent meditation.
"it's everything alright?"
Maan nodes but kept looking at the two siblings. Rano always did worry about him, since the day he walked in to this house. He just can't form any attachment with anyone. Except the elder of course.
"why don't you go and ask, I am sure they won't mind you playing with them!" maan with big eyes looked at Rano for a minute before opening his pink lips to reply.
"I am fine!"
"you will become board. It's a long 6 weeks holiday."
"no I am fine."
"maan.." Rano sat next to him. Brushing his messy hair back. "they are your family an friends. I know you never knew what family exactly is, or to be precise friends... But it's time for you to make that friend. I won't be there all the time, or anyone els. You will go to your new place, a new life.."
"just like the new school?" maan questions.
Rano smiled and simply replied "yes..."
"what If they leave me?" there was certain pain, certain fear running through his vain. A fear of person leaving was far greater then fear of a inviting a person in.

"then leave them before they decide to leave you!" sammer suggest and laugh. Rano gave an instant glare, but before she could open her mouth everyone els walks in.

Maan observed sammer for while after that and then flows him. He sometime do talk to him. But that was rare.
"leave them before they leave me how can I do that?"
Sammer mouths fell right open, did maan spoke to him? No- no... More then one or two words.
"you want my advice?" sammer wonder with big eyes.
"I guess so!" maan looked here and there.
"well, yes that's the easy option. I do that with my girlfriends!"
"girlfriends?"
Sammer rolled his eyes. "Just wait until you come to the high-school dude!"

Maan was rather confused.. He went out with sammer sometime during the summer or satires at geet playing video game. For him, summer was supper slow, every minute was stuck its place. It would not move.



next- maan speas to geet😲
i hope it creating a god pic...
i will update double again tonight :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part 4


omg the boy finally spoke. he is growing now. hope sammer does not give him loose advice. he would do anything for not being seperated. whats up maaan..i think you need to talk to geet and she will shower youwith full on attention.
jaans..
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Posted: 13 years ago
Loved this two parts update more :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
awesme update
loved it
precap is exciting maan talking with geet
continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
Interesting... Wonder wat Maan will say to geet.. Hmmm x

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