OS: Beautiful Girl - Page 12

Originally posted by: Boogleton.Schiz

@Jaz- And I thought you has a soft spot. You truly are the ultimate Sadist :( We need a stamp to make it official. Because you know, without stamps things are incomplete :|

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever

The return of the CHEATER...tsk tsk...😆

Originally posted by: hindu4lyf

Note to self: Never ever read an OS written by Jaz on the tube because when your eyes start tearing up and you struggle to hold back tears, then people will look at you funny! :| lol...aww...i got scared at the beginning cuz i thought you were going to say NEVER read an OS by jaz period 😲😲...but yes...its not the best idea to read my OS's while in public...they dont go so well!! 😆😆

I somehow knew this would be a depressing OS, yet for some crazy reason I still read it. This was amazing Jaz and OMG 45 pages on MW? That's freakin' amazing! Those letters that Geet wrote touched my heart. Especially that bit about her wanting Maan to remember her a strong, independent woman, not as a weak, fragile lady. :( Beautifully written. yeah...i tried to shorten it...but i couldnt...as it is i left it to the bare minimum...i wanted more on Maan-Nandu but that would have just been crazy...thanks for liking the letters...i think that was the essence of the story ...or at least a huge part of it...😳😳

I hope you write a sappy OS soon though! :P yes...im working on it...just...happy thoughts arent flowing 😆😆

Originally posted by: hopehot

MY GOD!!😲😲

i knew it!!!! 😡😲

i suspected something like that knowing u by now !!!he he...see...you're learning...good job!! me so proud!! 👏👏

right from :

You have no idea," Maan said as he put his hand on top of hers. "I can never watch someone I love die in front of me'my heart couldn't take it."

"I hope you never have to," Geet said with a reassuring smile.

some people caught on to this early on...some not until after her final letter...😳😳

will edit later ..

ok..i'm back and have decided that whenever i read something written by u to keep a box of tissues next to me just in case...😉 smart idea...👍🏼

But really!?!? 😲45 pgs in MW ..well it got u the longest comment written by me ever!😃 aare...you call this long...this is tiny...he he..j/k..thanks hun...appreciate it 😳

LOVED it

it was beyond describeable... 👏 aww...you're making me blush!! ☺️

well at least the good part is that nandani knows about maan and geet... thats why i put them together...cuz any other girl wouldnt fit properly

and it was interesting how u thought of the ending before the rest of the story 😆... usually my OS's start out that way...😆

LOVED IT!

Originally posted by: hopehot

feel free to use :

Originally posted by: Boogleton.Schiz

45 FRICKIN PAGES?! OMFG!! And I thought 5 pages was long. Are your fingers okay? Hope they are, they must be aching from all that typing. Okay now please kindly ignore my grammar/spelling errors, I'm sick and tired 😆 5pgs...thats how long my updates used to be when i started...but as i kept on writing..my imagination began to take over and i got out of control 😆😆...and eeks...you're sick...hope you feel better soon 🤗

OMG OMG OMG!! <I only do this when I'm extremely happy or sad. It is the latter! My heart is literally aching. Literally! And this is a girl without a heart we're talking about here. You have made a hole hurt. That's not even possible. what are you talking about...no heart...hmph...dont say such things!!

So I opened this FF thinking it's going to be all happy shappy (the title, prologue and beggening is VERY misleading. Well even if it was...uhh...leading [😆] I'd still read it and then crib later) and what do you do?! You break my fragile little heart/hole thingy. lmfao!! 🤣 im glad i was able to pull one over on you...some people figured that something was wrong from the beginning...at least i had my desired effect on you...i like to lull the readers into thinking everything is ok...then..BAM!! 😉😉 someones DEAD!! 😆

I must I absolutely loved the beginning, it was as sweet as jelabi's 😆 Why is it all people meet in libraries? But I guess with your concept, it fits in the story but in other shows and stuff they just go to library and knock their teeth out get a concussion from banging their heads and stare into each others fricking eyes!! Doesn't dust ever get in them?! Okay I ace staring concepts, but for me in real life it's just freaky if two people stare into each others eyes 😆 all people meet in libraries 😲😲 who told you...that was just me fulfilling a little fantasy...i wanted to meet a handsome hunk in the library...4yrs of college and nothing 😡😡 just my luck!! lol...and LMFAO!! and the part in bold!!! 🤣 but yes...if in real life someone started into my eyes...id call security for sure!! creep!! 😆😆

I really like your Nandu, maybe even more than Geet. She is a fiery girl who lives on sarcasm and attitude. RAWR. Me likey! 😉😆 Ignore my pervishness 😆 But yeah...I've always preferred strong characters to girly girly ones. But that's just me. Maybe because am so vulgar and unsophisticated (not to mention a tad rude, I tend to lash out a lot 😆) i loved Nandu too...she's the outspoken girl i always wanted to be but never way...but i think the level of comfort Nandu has teasing Maan...i have more or less with my friends hubby...he's a sweet heart!! 😳😳...saved shagun for me even though i missed the wedding...😃😃

Wow that's a lot of laugh emotions for a sad story. This is me laughing at my own jokes, anyhoo...moving on... lol...just what i was thinking...if anyone saw the comment thus far...they'd think i wrote a comedy...which isnt a bad idea totally 😛

Another thing I like about Nandu is that she is smart, she completely turned the tables on Maan when he was blackmailing her. Good going! yes!! this comes from years of me being a saali to wonderful..yet gullible jijus!! 😉

I'm not surprised Geet ditched him on the date! That was the most cliche thing ever. Like ever! Maan needs to read 'how to create an interesting date that won't offend your date and make you look like spoilt rich brat' 😆 I mean I get Maan, he was just trying to create the perfect atmosphere but the stupid little bwoi!! Did he turn deaf when N said G is a simple Indian woman! Well I guess he didn't take it literally. I really did feel like smacking him on the head then! lmao...the title of your book sure is long...you should write it...people would buy it just to get the title right 😆😆...ha ha...he was so busy impressing a girl...he forgot that girl was Geet! even Adi knew better...and he was just an observed!! 😛😛

Geet is too nice to give him a second chance! I would be like 'screw you sucker, you got your chance' 😆 I did say I'm heartless 😆 But then again if she didn't give him a second chance, we probably would've attacked you! The author never wins, sad, sad truth. i know...i cant win ever...unless i make a super happy-shappy story...and thats just not me...most of the time 😉😉but hello...he's MSK...his looks alone is enough to make her look past date #1 and go for it any way!! 😳

Now here comes the start of the 'sad phase' yes...here is comes!! 😛

Oh how terribly awful for M, he had to witness his mother passing away. I think watching a parent die is really the most traumatizing thing for a child. I really do feel for him. When my dad passed away I didn't know until a whole month later! He was on holiday with my mum and they didn't want me to find out when my mum wasn't there to support me lest I break. omg...🤗 im so sorry to hear about your dad...but one month...wow...how did you get through it...omg...i cant even imagine it...im currently in a phase when im not speaking to my dad...its been nearly one month..im thinking i should break the silence 😭😭

Okay now I'm going to skip to the sad part and my cribbing... lol why...is this part of the missing million and one things? 😆

When she arrived at his apartment and they made love, I knew she was going away. First I thought she maybe going to a different medical school or something, I didn't guess she was sick! But when she said I'm having breakfast with Nandani and Goodbye I started to get my suspicions. he he...you're suspicions grew at the exact part i wanted them too 😆 ...good guess on the different medical school...thats brilliant!! 👏👏👏
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The letter made me teary, seriously. I was like 'NOOO DON'T GOOO GETT DON'T GOOO!' Not a pretty sight 😆 And it was all because of you! YOU YOU YOU! Evil lady :( Making innocent bacha's cry. what is this "innocent baachas"...none of you on IF are innocent in any way...i know it...its the innocent ones that are the worst! 😈

Uhh...I forgot what happened next. See I'm so upset I'm having short term memory loss *goes back to check* lol...that happens to me all the time...thats why i usually comment on stories as i read along...or else im going to forget everything

It was really heartbreaking seeing (well reading) Maan so desperate to get her back. You could feel his pain and desperation in every word. very well written Jaz! But the thing I loved the most was he stood strong, he didn't break, didn't screw up- no, he went back to work and lived. And that is what I appreciate. Drowning your self in pity is a weakness. yes...he knew that if he just gave up...and became a sorry excuse of a man...Geet wouldnt be impressed...she'd run away for sure...no second chances!! he had to focus on his career and life...and just wait for her...he didnt know she wouldnt ever return 😭

However more than Maan, I felt sorry for Nandani. Maan knew G for a few years but N knew her for a nearly a lifetime. Nothing is stronger than the bond of friendship (and you explained this really well in your other OS) She was with her threw her good and bad, she knew her secrets and they shared such a special bond. Really do feel for them. Nandini here was basically my best friend Guli...she's like her...we both are like Nandu and Geet combined...we'd die for each other...we talk every day...there is nothing hidden from us...NOTHING...i'd be so lost without her...when the drama went down with my dad...she was on her flight to india...it was a horrible 3 weeks without her...but she's back!! 😃...😃😃😃...
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If the situation was different when M read the letter G gave N (see that's how tired I am, I'm writing initials instead) and it stated that did 'it', it would have been so awkward 😆. But like I said the situation. lol...yes...that letter was meant for nandini only...and maan knew by then that the girls hid nothing from each other 😉😉

Geet's love for M was so strong. She went through all that pain herself just so he doesn't suffer. She was a heck of a woman! she's a trooper...through it all...she tired to stay strong...but in the end...the damned disease and me *cough cough*...took her away from maan 😆

The last letter made me all teary eyed again, she wants to of her most loved to heal each other. Aww!! < That's a sad aww. It really touched me. She was absolutely correct about N being alone, if not a lover at least now she will have some support. The only other person who knows what she is going through. yes! that is why i put them together...because only they understand each others pain...they both grieve the loss of Geet 😭😭...and Geet knew that they could get through this if they were each others support...or else they'd both be lost

Overall a completely epic, and heart-breaking OS. You have done it again Jaz, you have made this stone hearted girl teary eyed (I rarely cry when reading, so teary eyed is a big big thing) I can't get enough of you're writing, your just epic 🤗 thanks hun!! loved the comment...even though you were feeling sick im so happy that you commented...and what a wonderful comment!!! 😳

Wow...this was long. My longest comment ever on I-F wow...! Well you deserved thing, or should I say am honoured to write this. i am honored to have received it!! 🤗

Hate from,

Boogleton Schiz 🤗

P.S I so did not imagine MP as Nandu 😊 who did you picture...cuz in my mind she was faceless...😆

Originally posted by: jnawaz

Lolz...and i empty my dad's wallet as it is...i don't think he will be very excited over tissue funding 😆...so ppl...get ur own...🤣

Originally posted by: jnawaz

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GRRR...my whole reply is done...and then i hit the back button by mistake...and everything is gone...😡 ..isn't that perfectly dandy

anyways...what i had said was...thanks...i am sure ur jappi will make me well soon 😆😳

he he...good good...same here...the whole time i was reading your OS...i was just waiting for the other shoe to fall 😆 see the disadvantage of being sadist partners...we can't enjoy a piece in peace (lolz...piece and peace 😆) but what i was saying was that we think, think and think rather than simply reading to find out 😆
me too...i just loved the part when she says his name and he just closes his eyes...like he can finally breathe knowing she on the other side of that door!! 😳😳😳 hayyeee that part makes my heart melt...i watched that bit so many times...after so long...we have seen maan's emotions loose...😳

thank you!! thats what i was saying...forget the name and look at the character...the was the typical bff for geet...😳 in a comment u said u imagined nandu faceless...i was being me and being nosy and putting it off as stalkerness...lolz...but i imagined Meera time...i don't know why...maybe cause recently i made Meera Geet's bff..and then Best friends u wrote...Pari or Meera...these two remain my absolute favs for the bff title 😆

ya...but now that family (kids and all) are suffering her loss...here...its just maan...and he would never want his children...their children...to loose a mother...know what i mean.. 😉 im just trying to blame you more...ha ha 🤣.clearly i can see that 😡

lol...we are a pair arent we...me waiting for comment...you waint for reply...the me waiting for reply to reply! ha ha...the circle never ends!! 😆 and here me is done my reply 😆...and if u wouldn't mind...maybe we can know the 'names'...we have kinda be waiting..rather patiently...

and i was being nosy again..and read that u weren't on talking terms with ur dad..and clearly it's not my place to tell u..and i don't even know anything...but i can't even imagine not talking to my dad for even a day 😭...think abt the love and bond u two share..and maybe u will want to break the silence😳...but again...me is sorry for being nosy 😳

Originally posted by: jnawaz

aare...im totally on board...give me a stamp...or in IF cases...a siggy...ill totally use it...im proud to be Maneet Sadistic Queen 😛
JAZ