New FF - Maaneet 'Are we 'US'?' part4/page5

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi all 😃

I am a Big Fan of MAANEET 😳

Just came across a concept in my mind randomly and thought to right a FF on it.

Will edit this post with character sketch soon.. That is when I get the story on track.Right now i am very very eager to post first part of this FF 😃


Do read and comment.

Comments/Criticizms all are welcome! 🤗

Love,Minnie ❤️

NB: I am not big of a writer. But i promise with each update i will try to improve. 😳 And for that need all of your's help 😃


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Part 1 Page 1 (just scroll down)

Part 2 Page 2

Part3 Page 3

Part4 Page 5

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Part 1




The Sun was going down! There was a shade of red everywhere...One could see birds going to their nests! In one word it meant the end of the day for all activities. Everyone seemed to be in a hurry to get to their means of shelter to take good rest after the tiresome day. There was a certain rush in this hour. Soon it will be taken over by a certain calmness.

There is the sound of a door opening slowly. The door opens and we see a small figure slowly putting his head out as if examining his surroundings. He is actually checking if everyone has slept off to bed that if his coast is clear for his adventure.

He slowly goes across the BIG MANSION. First outside his parents room. After making sure there is no sound coming from inside he goes to his Daadima's Room. Daadimaa is also sound asleep. He sighs a sound of relief. His coast was perfectly clear now.

He goes to his room. Dresses himself quickly like this.




Then slowly through the trap door at the back he peeps outside. After making sure none of the guards are around he decides to go out. He climbs a tree slowly and then manages to give a slow jump with minimum noise to the other side outside the walls of his BIG MANSION. Yes finally he was out of his Big Mansion to the world which was waiting to be explored by him. He was feeling happy and felt too High of Himself on his success on getting out from His Mansion successfully.


He started walking into the Woods. He takes out the sword that he has and starts doing some pose. He indeed started feeling very Royal. Our boy isn't less Royal. He is from the richest family in Delhi. The Eldest Son and the Heir of the KHURANA EMPIRE. He was showered with everything right from the time he was born. There was nothing that he lacked. He had parents who poured him with love. His daadima who pampered him. His younger brother was really small..Just 6 months now..And our hero loved babysitting for his younger brother. Not baby sitting in fact anxiously daydreaming about the day when his Vicky will be old enough to play and fight with him.

Now he is walking through the woods.. He won't get lost because he just have to turn around and look towards that one bright light. It was the light coming from his Mansion. There's a BIG Lamp on top of the Big Mansion which shines all through the night. Even if he gets lost he just have to walk back keeping the direction of light and he will be safe and sound back home.

As he was walking deeper into the woods. He suddenly heard noise of leaves being disturbed..He heard the running sound of footsteps..It was getting closer.. He is a boy aged 6 years,so as a reflex action he positioned himself behind a tree,he wasn't scared or anything but somehow his legs led him behind a tree. Then to his shock..He heard a laugh..Out of curiosity he peeped out.. And then he saw a girl dressed like this.







She was laughing like she owned the Woods. The ego of our Hero got hurt thinking he had gone to hiding due to this little girl.Shame Shame Shame he thought to himself. He has to rectify this mistake or else how can he be the proud boy again? The little devil in him awakened. He decided to pay back to the girl who did make him go to hiding. Poor girl she was all happy in her own world of fantasy enjoying dancing, running and laughing like a maniac in the Woods. He had seen many girls in his KG class but never came across one like the girl in front of him now.

The girl was slowly standing looking towards the river. Our hero went to her making heavy steps. He was forcefully stamping on the ground so that the girl will get scared. She looked least bothered. He thought maybe she didn't hear due to the sound coming from the waterfall nearby. He cleared his throat,then patted the girl's shoulder.

"WHO ARE YOU?" "How dare you intrude the privacy of the Pirate Prince?" the Boy asked with attitude.

The girl looked to the face of the boy. A little taller than her. And she made out that he was dressed okay okay. She couldn't see his face clearly because well it is moonlight and you can't see as you see in daylight.

He stood there shocked. He had just now shouted at this little creature and was she looking least bothered? He thought he should use simpler lines to scare her and get even with her,maybe she didn't understand his other big big words included sentence. He is one proud lad with so much attitude.

He don't know what got into him just then. He asked her in a soft tone this time but with enough sound to tell I am the Boss "Your Name"

She looked at him for a second and then said "Call me Shera" with equal attitude.

He was taken aback. This girl did match his attitude. She is something. He bought back his mind telling himself how can he forget that she is the girl who send him into hiding and he has to get even with her at any cost.

"Why you silent? Want a name?"

He got shocked hearing the last sentence from her. What did she just say? Want a name? Oh Yeah Yeah! Get it now. This little devil has told me her made up name. I will play with her on her court itself.

"I am Pirate Prince VEER" he said holding his sword for her to see with attitude.

She just rushed and hugged him and told him "
And I am your Pirate Princess Shera"

He was shocked. What had this little devil just said? His Pirate Princess??

He didn't know what got into him then. As he felt her petite figure hugging him he also hugged her back. And ran his hands through her hair. She was soft he felt. And he liked it.



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NEXT PART 2



I know it is short as i always demand my writers to write bigger bigger parts 😆 but this was the starting..so spare me...please 😳 promise will be back with a bigger part within a day or two 😃


Do like and comment and criticize! 😛

It will make my day and i will update fast! 😳


Lots of Love, Minnie ❤️


Edited by *Dakoo_Minzy* - 13 years ago
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wow i just loved it !!! so so so cute ..
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wow dear loved it plz add me to ue buddy list and pm me
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plz add me in..sounds interesting
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that is something wowww
i read many child based ff on maaneet
and you surely stand out of them dear

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That was a cute update..!!
add me in too...!!
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Sounds interesting, cute update.

Continue soon and hope to see the character sketch soon😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@ audiwala 😳 thanks dear!

@ mrk_1..im happy you found it cute 😃

@abhinash079 i will pm you once the story gets to track.. right now im too too lazy yu know 😆 😆 continue reading...😃

@Dreamy_Mystique awww good to see your comment 😃

@9n9i9s9h9u9 your comment really made me smile 😃

@bansipatel thanks for commenting and reading 😳

@Ahlaam5 i will post the character sketch one i get the background for my story set 😳


Thanks everyone for the likes 😃 It really encourages me to carry on! 😳 I am sorry for the delay in the update..


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Part 2


They stood there hugging each other feeling a kind of serene warmth amidst the cool windy night. They didnot know what they felt but they just knew it felt so right being in the embrace.


There was one person who was watching all this from a safe distance. Ramu kaka. He was there to keep an eye on Shera,to make sure that she was safe. Ramu kaka allowed Shera to be a free bird. Didn't keep her under restrictions,gave her the freedom that any 5 year old child requires. The people whom Shera interacted where the basti people and she even went to the small school near by the basti. As a result there was this typical basti style that had developed in Shera's talking and style. As Ramu kaka saw the new boy talking with Shera he still maintainted his distance, but made sure his eyes were on both of them. On one side he was curious as to what the two little kids will do next. One look at the conduct and style of the new boy,Ramu kaka knew the boy had to be from a wealthy family. No boy from the basti could make Shera understand anything or control her. She was wild in her own way.


Ramu kaka saw a new ray of hope in the form of this boy. Shera should have been interacting with boys like Veer,but due to the bitter happenings that occured in her family here she is away from all of them. He watched them being in a hug. There seemed that even the waters paused falling for a second as if absorbing in the purity of the hug between the boy and girl.


Shera broke from the hug asked him again "Kaisa laga humaara ghar?"


She hasn't even showed him her house. He thought in mind this girl is fully pagli. "Dikaaya nahi phir kaise batao?"


"Pehle bina hamaare permission ke hamaare ghar mai entry maari..uski baad pooch rahe hai dikaya nahi?" Shera said making a grumpy face and folding her hands. Belive me she was looking damn cute.


Veer couldn't control any more he understood the girl was fully pagli. He started off laughing. Launging like a maniac. Just then it clicked him anyway his night was going to be eventless so why don't he keep himself busy with this new found partner. Good idea boy! Chal Go ahead.


Shera looked at him in amusement. Infact she seemed to be staring at him with open mouth and without blinking her eyes.


Veer asked "Ab kya hua?"


Shera didn't say a word. So he waved in front of her eyes.

"Dekne do... tang mat kar abi" the little girl replied.


Veer was shocked. He looked behind him to see if there was anyone behind him.. No one then what is this little girl staring at?


"Kya dekh rahe ho itni interest se" You can't say he was jealous. But yes he was curious very very curious.


"teri hassi mai kuch kala tha...woh dekh rai thi.." she replied


"kala aur meri hassi? Phir tera tho ekdam white white hai kya?" he asked her


"mai thodi na apni hassi dek sakti hoo...too padaai karke phir apun ko baa dena.." she told him unbothered.


"Mai kyo? Mere paas faaltoo cheej keliye time nahi hai" he said in attitude looking the other side.


"darta hai to woh bata..baat ko ghumao mat " she said standing in front of him again.


He was secretly enjoying fighting with his princess. But no his ego was not going to give up yet. He will fight till it goes till infinity!


"Mai kisi se nahi darta.." he said crossing his arms


"Tu darta hai"


"Nahiii"


"Haaaiii"


"Nahiii"


"Haaan"


they started shouting at top of their voices.


Some boys came rushing to the site. Shera quickly hid behind a Rock. Veer was shocked in not finding Shera in front of him shouting back. He saw her hiding behind the Rock. Now he was more curious to see what was she upto and why was she hiding.


He saw that their intruders were mere boys. He felt proud of himself and felt himself powerful as though he could rule them and they will obey him with no objection. He felt surprised the Shera who was till now speaking big big words have suddenly gone to hiding. There's something mysterious,he wanted to find out that.


The boys started speaking themselves. "Maine uski aawaz suni hai"


"haan haan apun ne bi suna"


"shera yehi kahi hai..."


"yeh ladki bi na..ek minute mai phir gaayab ho jaate hai"


One of the boy saw Veer and came upto him. "Aapne Shera ko deka?"


Veer thought this was time to pay back. He said "Kaun.. sunai nahi diya"


The boys shouted aloud thinking he was deaf "SHERAA"


Veer said "Mai deaf nahi hoo..chillao mat"


Veer continued "SHERA??"


they said "Haaan SHERA dekha usse?"


Veer thought for a moment then looked at Shera who was hiding behind that rock in casual manner. Then told them "Mai kissi Shera ko nahi jaanta..."


they were confused now. They said among themselves. "Shera kaha hogi ab?"


"Kahi chupkar dek rahi hogi...jungli billi" as soon as he said jungli billi he felt as though a weight landed upon him.. And next second he was on ground with Shera on top of him with a murderous glare ready to attack. Shera couldn't control the moment she heard jungli billi. How dare this new boy call her jungli billi that too in front of her basti boys on whom she used to rule and showed attitude.


"Kyaa kaha tuune??" shera asked with full anger


"Jungli Billi" Veer replied enjoying. He was glad that he was finally able to repay her.


"Phir se bol" Shera told him


"JUNGLI BILLI" this time veer shouted loudly


The basti boys started laughing hearing the name jungli billi. No one knew more than them how right this name was for Shera.


Shera lost it fully this time. "Tum kya samajte ho apne aap ko??"


Veer said "Mai?...tuje kya lagta hai jungli billi?" This irritated Shera further.


"Bigde rais..Samjha??" Shera told lying still on top of him. And she started beating his chest with her soft hands.


For a second Veer couldn't believe. This little creature his jungli billi could say this much?? None of the girls ha had met till today had this much attitude and no one ever called him names like her.


Veer caught both her hands. He was strong and Shera had to stop beating him. Shera told him angrily "Mera haat chodo..warna..."


Now Veer was in full fun mood... "Warna kya?"


"Warna...warna...pehle chodke to dek" shera teased him.


Veer knew she was planning some mischief..something evilish was going on in her little but dangerous head..Veer was in some thought and his grip on Shera's hand loosened.


Shera took that opportunity and pulled Veer's cheeks! "Tum gussa karthe hue bahot cute lagthe ho". Veer was in shock for a moment,he just couldn't understand this mysterious girl at all.. Shera jumped off from his body and started running.. The basti boys started running behind her! Veer also got amused with the happening he too ran behind them.. It is like this Shera running madly followed by the basti boys who have no other interesting thing to do than to watch and follow Shera.. Veer found everything intersting he was a curious lad who wanted to know the reason behind everything so he too ran behind the basti boys..


Soon Veer could see that the basti boys slowed down.. They looked tired and stopped their running to take rest in a rock..Soon Veer reached them..Veer wasn't tired yet because he was full of excitement and thereby had a special energy which resulted due to it..


"Kya hua? Ruk kyo gaye? Ab shera?..."Veer asked them panting..


Basti Boys said "Shera ab basti pahuch gaye hogi..peeche jaane se koi matlab nahi"


Veer asked them "Shera basti ki hai?"


"Haan...Haan...woh hamaare basti ki hai"...


Veer wondered...Hmm no wonder she is ekdam jungli billi..She is used to this atmosphere 24*7..He smirked on the new finding about the girl..


"Chalo...tum bi aake dek lo hamaare basti" One of the boys invited him..


Veer was an adventerous person.. He suddenly got excited.. Soon the boys along with Veer reached Basti... It was late night now... Almost 12 past...But we could see light coming from some huts in the basti..Here and there some work was still going on..The boys led Veer to the biggest hut in the basti... One of the boys peeped through the door and came out fast...

"Shhh!!! Shera is asleep...Let us not disturb" he told them..


Veer wondered.. Jungli Billi slept this fast? He couldn't believe the girl who was full of energy and jumping around in front of him till last minute was now sleeping silently..


"Chal chodo usse...we will show you our basti.." In the faint moonlight the boys started walking taking Veer along with them..


Suddenly an elderly person came to view.. The boys ran to him.. He patted the basti boys.. Veer saw that the boys were now busy with the elderly person..he took the opporunity and swiftly made his way back to Shera's hut.. He opened the door and entered the room without making any nouse.. He looked into the bed.. Veer's.. He was shocked at the view he saw inside..


NEXT : PART 3



Comment Criticize and press the like button if you like my update! 😳


If there are more people to read i will update asap.. 😃


Love,

Minz 😳

Edited by *Dakoo_Minzy* - 13 years ago

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