OS: Where's My Girl... - Page 2

Beautiful Jaz...simply beautiful...👏 👏 👏 👏
OMG i loved it so much..!!!
oh god poor baby had to go thru so much wen she is so young...my heart winced in pain seeing her bundled up with those things hooked up...the pipes n all...ok m bad at describing the equipments used there..🤢
Mahi was in pain but maan was in double pain seeing his girl lying in the hospital bed..he cud not help her out of the pain she was going thru...he simply cud not do nything cz that was not in his hands n he was missing his girl cz wen she was recovering she wud not be herself n that wud shatter maan as he was used to seeing her smiling wen he came home from work...he wud get the world's best smile n giggles from his angel of his life..!!
fathers can not simply see their daughters in pain... they say that girls are more close to their fathers then their mothers...here maan n mahi were just awesome...u described the pain so well..what mahi was going thru n maan too n geet too of course...i cud imagine mahi giggling all the while wen maan used to play with her "peek-a-boo"...choo chweet..!!😳 😳 😳
Tremendously beautifully marvelously splendidly written Jaz..👏 👏
awesome...awesome...awesome...!!
loved it to the core yaar..!!😳 😳 😳
Jaz u write so well man...👏
loved it alot..!!

Reserved :P

Acha me is back 😆
Yaar im truly amazed by your writing skills. 👏 😳
Its so beautifully written 👏

Yaar only YOU can make me emotional.
Stop your emosional attyachar with me yaar 😆

Yet cant blame you since u made a hapoy ending. Or should i say a cute ending. 😳

Ok lets get into details.
Loved the way you accurately described the disease 👏
Poor Mahi. She had to suffer a lot
Yaar yahan se yaad aya. Do u by any chance do medical studies. Coz many of your ff or os includes diseases that are so well described and diagnosticed 😃
2nd off topic note. How is your niece. Hope she is ok now 😊

Despite his important meetings. He stayed in the hospital for his girl. 👏

Loved the cute scene u wrote as flashback. Esp when Mahi peaked from the door when Maan was taking too much time to show his head. Awww loved that 😳

The part when the 2 nurses removed the mucus ( is that what u wrote. Lemme check lol ) was heart wrenching.
You depicted Maan's helplessness so amazingly. 👏

The ending was a great relief. Maan and mahi moement was a pure kodak moment.
Mahi kissing his cheek and touching him with her tiny hands. Awww. 😳

You are amazing Jaz. 😃 Truly amazing.

Just like " just ordinary " ( i still have to comment on
Btw lol ) you manage to write such beautiful stories out of small words or experience that happens with you.

Keep up your great work jani.

Sad Os nahiiin. Do u want a sad VM again or what?? 😆

Love ya girl 😃

Humera. *hugz*

Ok since im replying through my phone. Editing the long post i made is a task. Will make a fresh post lol.

It was indeed a mucus. Man that was a horrendous scene :s. The nurse didnt show any pity :o

Oh yeah forgot to mentionned that i loved when Maan "made a mad dash" to reach the 7th floor using the stairs instead of the lift. He was like getting very impatient. Liked this bechaini of a father. :)

Ok my phone has 3% left so me is stoping my bak bak lol.

Love ya.

Humi. ;)

aw..this is the cutest OS ever!!!loved it Jaz..simply amazing👏and you better stick to happy OS😡..otherwise you make me cry buckets😔

completely loved it!!! brilliant piece of work!!!!!

nice os... loved it to core!

lovely touching OS dear...
happy one...
u better from now on keep writing only happy ones...
u r known as what?

Jaz ko kisi ne kidanap kar liya hai pakka..yeh kaise hua..i was toh 100% sure u gonna kill Mahi...somethings pakka wrong...

very cute OS..wished they showed something like this in Geet!