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Posted: 14 years ago
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Pooja 🤗

These lines say it all -

"The night has a thousand eyes, and the day but one;
Yet the light of the bright world dies with the dying sun.
The mind has a thousand eyes, and the heart but one;
Yet it lights up your whole life when you are in love with someone."


Caught up with the last two updates just now. Awesome girl!! You have a way with words and that was just perfect. Their friendship or date seemed too soon to me but I am sure you have a reason for that. Waiting to read more. Just lovely!!

Love,

Ash

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Posted: 14 years ago
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cute update ls cont soonnnnnnnn
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Pooja! I remember reading this OS of yours, the first part, last week and i wanted to comment but the thread got lost in this forum..
I really love the verses u put in your OS n the poems u come up with! They r just beautiful! It says so much! All of them! 🤗
Your story -- The characters Maan n Geet are so simple yet so warm n full of life. It's an interesting story with Geet not being able to see..and i love how Maan is so in awe of her.
What Geet mentioned here :
"U know what when u cant see thru yr eyes 'u begin to see thru yr heart"
Loved it! Do continue soon! I got the privilege of reading three parts at one go just only but i so want to read some more! Hoping u would update soon! :))
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey i am new to this forum..but love ur ff its amazing plzz update soon and btw my name is Irum :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey Just came across ur FF its awesome...loved it
plzz do add me to ur PM list...
con soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@kashndsel4eva-Thanks a ton

@Kiran-thnk u

@Parm-Thanks yaar ,glad u liked it .....will cont soon

@shah10- Thankyou

@Sona-Thankyou , Will Pm u for sure

@Sheena_12-Thankyou so much

@shreya_satish- Glad u liked it

@shradhav- Its always gud when a fellow devil comments...Thankyou so much

@sameeha- I try to make it long ...but it turns out short everytime .....but thanks for liking it

@sweet_cherry- Thankyou ..n will pm u

@Pushpi- Thankyou

@Sadiq- Thanks

@sharmake11-Thankyou

@anufa- Thank you

@Irum- Thankyou

@Shona- Thankyou

@Ash-Thanks for yr lovely comments ..🤗...now that u r posing the question i'll have to look into it as to why they are so free with each other so quickly but for the moment I'll say' Love without Reason lasts the longest'

@Vini-Awwww Vini 🤗...thank you so much for the appreciation...i am overwhelmed ...and I am truly glad that u liked it
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Posted: 14 years ago
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its superb.... pls add me to yr PM List
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Posted: 14 years ago
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very very very awesome....

Loved the way u started their journey that last lifetime....

very cute update

n not to forget ur beautiful lines at end of the part
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Posted: 14 years ago
#59
Thankyou all once again for yr kind words and appreciation they mean a lot 😳

Chapter 5

"Listen to the Exhortation of the Dawn! Look to this Day! For it is Life, the very Life of Life. In its brief course lie all the Verities and Realities of your Existence. The Bliss of GroW*H, The Glory of Action, The Splendor of Beauty; For Yesterday is but a Dream, And To-morrow is only a Vision; But To-day well lived makes Every Yesterday a Dream of Happiness, And every Tomorrow a Vision of Hope. Look well therefore to this Day! Such is the Salutation of the Dawn!"

Kalidasa

Collins Apartment,Melbourne 30th July 7.30 am

Maan was up and ready way before his usual time '..the morning bright sky energized him further '.he had suddenly started living again 'the suffocation had all gone 'and he was breathing in the free air again. He was surprised in all these years he had never felt this way '..life for him had been all about work ,work and work 'and whatever limited time he got while he wasn't working he spent that with Dadi'things changed a bit when Sameera entered his life and then life itself came to a halt when Sameera left him ''he felt cheated '.did she never even consider him a good enough friend that she chose not to tell her life's biggest truth to him '.despite knowing the feelings he harbored for her 'strange is the game of love they say '..it was turning out to be stranger than he thought 'if what he was feeling now for Geet is love 'then what was that feeling for Sam ''cause the feeling is definitely not the same ''but the way Geet had cast a spell on him '..well Sam never had that effect!!Also the moment he had seen her it seemed he had a connect with her 'like Dadi would say pichle janam ka rishta ,her beauty left him spellbound '.and the wall he had made around his heart just crumbled away , when Raji set him up with Geet ..he took the opportunity with both hands ....he actually felt like a beggar being offered a 100 dollar bill'.no solid reason except that he was spellbound '.and for once he had decided to leave the future of his heart to fate and that he was willing to risk himself to pain 'cause the more he got to know her the stronger her spell became

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The day at work had gone off pretty well for Maan ,and it was time for him to head for his second date 'at least that's what Raji chose to call it when she spoke to him earlier in the day '..she had called to tell him that Geet would meet him near the river side that evening .

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Yarra RiverFront,Melbourne,6pm

Maan- Hi

Geet ' 'Maan You are 15 mins late '

Maan'Uhmmm Both Life and time are precious and one shouldn't waste them while being angry 'that's what I think rest is up to you

Geet'Baat karne mein to no one can win from you 'apni baton se tum kisi ko bhi manaa sakte ho 'people can learn this art from u , But since u r late 'well u'll have to pay the price for that ,punishment to mile ga , well and yr punishment is that u'll have to treat me somewhere now

Maan' O man u r innocent 'aapko to punishment bhi deni nahin aati 'no body shud learn this frm you I guess'.so where do you wanna go Maa'm

Geet' Punishment 'diya 'so I am gonna tell all or what 'but how abt some Icecream?

Maan cudnt help but smile '.'Sure Sounds Good and Cheap as well 'I was thinking this wud be an expensive punishment 'trust me u r too sweet

She wrapped her arm arnd his left arm and they both headed to the Baskin Robbins joint near by.

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Baskin Robbins ,Melbourne, 6.30pm

Geet 'Maan can I ask u something?' as she continued to have her chocolate chip ice cream

Maan' Sure u don't need to ask before asking ''as he enjoyed the same flavor as hers even though everyone knew Maan never liked ice cream

Geet-'Have u ever fallen in love 'or did u like some one ?'I don't want to sound intrusive but

Maan ' No its ok 'I did think I was in love but now that I look at I doubt my own feelings back then 'maybe it was love or it wasn't '..I don't know '.Sometimes I feel guilty like I am cheating on my feelings back just bec the person is longer there 'but then again I question did I actually love them '.they didn't for sure '.neway lets drop it 'now my turn to ask 'let me see what can I ask u 'ok What is yr Dream?

Geet-'My dream shall always remain a dream'''It must be getting late 'lets go 'else Raji's mind will start to work overtime

Maan 'Sure ..as for Raji ..I wont be surprised if it isn't already'

With that they left for Geet's home

Maan-' U still haven't answered my question '.I did answer yrs'

Geet- My dream is that for one day I get to see the world with my own eyes

Maan-'If this dream was to come true 'what is that one thing or person that U'd like to see first

Geet moved closer to Maan and then gently touched his face with her palm '.Maan had always heard about actions speaking louder than words'but today he was experiencing it for the first time '.he was both touched and elated 'the range of emotions that he felt were beyond explanation..and therefore finding words to describe them impossible

Geet ''Chup kyon ho 'don't worry tumhein dekhke reject nahin karoongi'

Maan- 'Accha ab der nahin ho rahi 'now u r not getting late for home'.and waise for yr information main dekhne mein itna bura bhi nahin hoon

Geet 'Mujhe pataa hai ..ab chalo'

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Raji- Aagaye aap dono what took u guys so long'itni lambi walk u guys are crazy

Geet'Shuru ho gayi tu'

Maan was abt to leave when Raji stopped him and said 'Kya Di ko walk se hi kaam chalaana padhega no official date or nething ..how unromantic Maan '.mujhe tumse ye umeed nahin thi

Maan'Well then how abt I take yr sister out on Saturday nite '.wud that be ok Ms Raji'aur lets forget abt yr Sis 'tu chal mere saath

Raji gave him a little whack on the shoulder .'U r too smart 'aapse koi nahin jeeth sakta but Sat date is on

Maan' Ask yr Sis 'wait lemme ask her'''Geet Sat night dinner ..thats is if u r ok with it ''he asked nervously

Geet' Ok '..'

Maan ' That was easy '.I thought I'll have to say more 'give some incentive'

Geet 'Trust me Maan going out with u is an incentive itself 'with that she left leaving a dumbstruck Maan behind '.and all he cud do was stand there feeling numb while a huge goofy grin lit up his face

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Collins Apartments,Melbourne ,9pm

Maan was feeling on top of the world , the feeling was indescribable '.to put it plainly he was brimming with Happiness 'her one action had given his life a new dimension and direction '..she had given his life a new meaning all together '.shud he tell Dadi abt her '.he thought 'maybe it was a little too early '.how abt Rohan 'na who to peeche hi padh jayegaa'..so he decided to call Dadi but not tell nething as yet

Once the call was done Maan was back to his fav spot admiring the beauty before him '.every aspect of nature had so much beauty to it only he had never had the heart or the eyes to see it 'but now he did 'so he continued to stare at the moon and the stars '.leaning against wall 'with a huge smile plastered on his face '..and a new found happiness flowing thru his veins

A blessing from above, this story is told
A love to last a lifetime and a hand to hold
It was no accident that this came to be
Now you must realize that it really takes three
So, go hand and hand to a future unknown
Knowing that with the Lord, you will never be alone😳


So that's it for this part tell me what u guys feel abt it was it good bad or pathetic and shud I stop or what ....let it out cause waiting to hear /read.Next part official Dinner Date ....😉

And PMs shall be sent in due course😆

Edited by rdfan - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi,

i read ur FF and loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!
I loved the way u carried the story, it was so cool and mild,
please add me to your PM list,
will love to read and comment
(i hope i am the first commentor)

And haan, you should continue writing.....

Love
lakshmi

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