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Posted: 3 years ago
#71

Originally posted by: Autumn09


Thank you so much ❤️❤️❤️. My name is Pragya. I'll make the index :)


Hey Pragya 🤗

Thanks :)

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Posted: 3 years ago
#72

Originally posted by: Autumn09

I would appreciate your feedback please

I liked this chapter. Do continue your story.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#73

Originally posted by: Shirsha90

I liked this chapter. Do continue your story.


Thanks a lot 💖💖💖

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Posted: 3 years ago
#74

Ohh damn! Paakhi too escaped 😲

Toh ab asli game shuru between 4.

Let's see who wins🤪

Amazing Chapter 🤗

🥳enjoyed it.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#75

Originally posted by: Sgayuiyer

Ohh damn! Paakhi too escaped 😲

Toh ab asli game shuru between 4.

Let's see who wins🤪

Amazing Chapter 🤗

🥳enjoyed it.


Thanks a lot ☺️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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I would appreciate your feedback please

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Posted: 3 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: Autumn09


Thanks a lot 💖💖💖

You can introduce a few strong supporting characters. If they play important roles in the story it will be interesting.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#78

Originally posted by: Autumn09

Chapter 6


Ishaan had just completed the rounds of the hospital when he got a call from somewhere.

"Hmm...tum tab tak sab sambhalo. Main turant nikalta hoon," saying that running down the stairs, Ishaan fished the car keys from his pocket.

Ishaan started the car hurriedly without realising a black car was trailing him. Ishaan was overspeeding though Yug tried his best to follow him. Ishaan took a sharp turn and in midst of this chase, Yug's car hit the wall which caused it to be broken. Finally Ishaan stopped a car in front of a dilapidated hospital.

"Are yaar ise hospital aana tha kaam se," Yug cursed under his breath, "Saala iske liye James Bond ki tarah fast gaadi kyun chalani thi ise."

Still Yug got out of the car and followed Ishaan. Suddenly Yug's phone rang. Tania's name was displaying on the phone.

"Valentine's Day vale din madam ko yaad nahi aai meri," Yug said, "Ab kaam ke beech disturb karna hai inhe mujhe. sorry Tania sweetheart, Yug never mixes work and love lapaata." Yug cut the phone but the phone rang again.

"Hello, vo Pa...Paakhi ka accident ho gaya h," Tania fearfully said from another side, "Please meri maa ko kucch mat karna. maine Nazar rakhi thi paakhi par magar....please."

Yug rubbed his forehead and said, "Jaa tu khud ko thodi chot maar le."

"Kya?" Tania said.

"Ab tere kaam ki baat kar raha hoon to," Yug said imitating Tania, "To tujhe #What, #WhyUniverse poochna hai? tujhe chot lagi hogi to main Boss ko bol doonga ki use bachane ke chakkar me tujhe lag gayi to vo Teri maa ko kucch nahi karenge."

Tania was surprised but still said, "Thank you."

"Haan theek hai theek hai," Yug said gruffly and disconnected the call.

Ishaan was sitting next to a hospital bed where a woman was lying with oxygen mask.

Ishaan removed her hair locks over her eyes and wiped her face with a cloth drenched with lukewarm water and then kissed her forehead.

"Dekh maa, main Tera kitna dhyaan rakhta hoon," Ishaan said, making a crying face, "Fir bhi tu mujhe chhorkar us Agasthya ke paas chali gayi. Is duniyaa me main sabse zyada tujhse pyaar karta hoon, tu jaanti hai, fir bhi mujhe chhor tu Agasthya ke paas chali gayi jo logon ki zindagi se gudde gudiyon ki tarah khelta hai. Tu jaanti hai na ki main tere aur mere beech kisi ko aane nahi de sakta, apne sautele Bhai ko bhi nahi. Ab tu yahin rahegi meri nazron ke saamne. itne saalon tak main jaise tere bina tadpaa hoon na, I promise, tu apni maut tak apne bade bete ki jhalak tak nahi dekh payegi. Teri nazron ke saamne sirf ek hi insaan hoga Teri maut tak- Tera ye Chhota beta."

Mallika was admitted to the hospital when Agasthya came to visit her.

"Kaise hua ye sab Paakhi?" Agasthya asked with concern.

"Haan Paakhi kaise hua ye sab?" Now it was Mallika's turn to be shocked when she saw Pakhi in oiled hair, thick glasses and braces sitting beside Agasthya.

"K...k...kaun hai ye?" Mallika asked.

"Are iska naam Sunaina hai," Agasthya said, "Iske maa baap ki death ke baad iska koi nahi tha fir bhi bina college gaye isne khud coding seekhi. Bina degree ke ise koi job nahi de raha tha to maine use job de di- magar is par taras khaakar nahi. iske talent ke base par. Main yahaan aa hi Raha tha to isne kahaa ki tumhara dhyaan rakhne ke liye ye bhi chalegi mere saath."

Mallika looked at the face again which was driving the car which had hit her and landed her to the hospital. How in the world did Pakhi manage to escape and how she met Agasthya? Mallika's head was throbbing with pain.

Sunaina bent over Mallika and whispered, "Abhi abhi to khel shuru hua hai Mallika. Tumhara sir abhi se dukhne laga."


No words to describe this progress.Its simply awesome.Continue with your marvellous work and conclude the same.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#79

Originally posted by: Shirsha

You can introduce a few strong supporting characters. If they play important roles in the story it will be interesting.


Great idea. I was thinking of introducing Agasthya's father and rest... I'm thinking of a way to introduce Mallika's rival singer at the bar or a visitor of hers.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: masked


No words to describe this progress.Its simply awesome.Continue with your marvellous work and conclude the same.


Thank you so much. Your suggestions gave a new direction to the plot.

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