FF#1: A love to kill - Page 6

Originally posted by: sumz_d

Hmmmm very intriguing 😲

who will end up with who? 😆

Such confusing and complex characters

Thank you. Please give any suggestions you have for the characters and story. I would really appreciate them.

Would appreciate your feedback and suggestions.

Wow...such an amazing idea and interesting setting! Everyone is grey which adds to the intrigue. Please continue soon I'd definitely like to read more 👍🏼😊

Originally posted by: monalidp

Wow...such an amazing idea and interesting setting! Everyone is grey which adds to the intrigue. Please continue soon I'd definitely like to read more 👍🏼😊

Thanks a lot 😊

Originally posted by: Autumn09

Chapter 5

Inside a godown

Ishaan was at the end of his wits when he couldn't make Paakhi eat food even after three days.

"Bas karo Paakhi," Ishaan shouted, "Kab tak khud ko bhookha rakhogi?" Finally Ishaan composed himself and said softly, "Dekho Paakhi. Meri tumse koi dushmani nahi hai aur main nahi chahta Agasthya aur uske baap ki kartooton ki sazaa kisi begunaah ko mile. Please zid chhor do aur khaana khaa lo."

When Ishaan brought the food plate near Paakhi and removed the cloth from her eyes, "Paakhi, Agasthya to ye tak nahi pehchaan paaya ki uske saamne jo hai vo asli Paakhi nahi koi aur hai. Uske pyaar me khud ko fanaa karne se kya milega tumhe?"

"Bandhe haathon se main khaana kaise khaoon?" Paakhi said sweetly, "Tum apne haathon se ye khaana khilaaoge mujhe?"

Ishaan tore a piece of roti and with sabzi, as he put the morsel near Paakhi, he took a sharp breath and then put the morsel back in the food plate and said, "Main tumhare haath khol raha hoon magar dhyaan rahe koi hoshiyari nahi."

Ishaan untied her hands and Paakhi started eating. Hiding from Ishaan's gaze, she unclasped the necklace hanging across her neck and then tried to choke Ishaan with it. On being unsuccessful, she aimed at Ishaan's belly and kicked him real hard. Finally as she tied Ishaan with his mouth gagged with a cloth and blindfolded, someone hit her head from the back and after untying Ishaan tied her back.

After coughing, Ishaan asked, "Tumhe yahaan kaise pahunchi? Ye address kaise Mila tumhe?"

Mallika said, "Tumhe apni car ka peecha karte Hui motorbike nahi dikhaai thi kya? Obviously, jab tumhe itni akal nahi hai ki kabhi jise kidnap kiya ho uske haath nahi free karne chahiye to ye sab tumne kahaan observe Kiya hoga?"

Ishaan pouted, "Jab tum yahin thi poore time jab ye Paakhi mera band baja rahi thi, to tumne pehle meri help kyon nahi ki?"

Finally Mallika smiled, "Vo isliye Doctor sahab, ki jo aap mujhse itni cheezein chupaate hain, mujh jaisi bar dancer ko ek use and throw Mohra samajhte hain to uski thodi punishment tumhe bhi mile."

"Tum use and throw nahi ho, Mallika," Ishaan said, "Mere liye to bilkul nahi."

Mallika put a finger on Ishaan's lips and said, "Shh...bahut bolte hain aap doctor sahab."

And finally fishing a scarf from her purse, Mallika wiped the blood near Ishaan's lips. Ishaan shivered at the tenderness he was getting from someone other than his mother whom he lost because of Agasthya's father.

Mallika didn't know why she felt so protective towards Ishaan. He thought he was using her and she was using him. That was the only relationship between them. Mallika didn't know from where in her heart the softness for him was flowing. However she wanted to wipe away every emotion except hate and revenge from her heart, there was still some of her sister left in her. But she can't feel even a bit of compassion for anyone, especially a man. She must focus on only one thing. Mallika didn't realize when Ishaan fell on her lap. In between his sleep, Ishaan began trembling and moaning, " Ma, ma...kahaan le jaa rahe ho meri maa ko? Please unhe chhorr do." Ishaan was growing more restless.

"Shh...sab theek h Ishaan. Sab theek hai," Pakhi hushed and caressed Ishaan's hair. She started singing the lullaby her sister used to sing in childhood whenever she was afraid of dark. When Ishaan was deep asleep, his head still in Mallika's lap, Mallika placed a soft kiss on his forehead.

https://youtu.be/x6OV1G9-YKM

Continue with your flawless story,Eagerly waiting for other Chapters and conclusion of the same.

Originally posted by: masked

Continue with your flawless story,Eagerly waiting for other Chapters and conclusion of the same.

Thank you so much 💕💕💕

Enjoying it so far. Btw please give a name to your ff too. 😁❤

Originally posted by: Autumn09

Thank you. Please give any suggestions you have for the characters and story. I would really appreciate them.

Some of the suggestions which can be taken up if its feasible and appeals to the current FF-

1- "Thanks a lot. Paakhi and Mallika are different and so are their face but as Agasthya and Paakhi fell in love seven years ago in an internet chat group, they had not seen each other's faces. The tied girl is real Paakhi who's as much obsessed with Agasthya as he is with Paakhi."

So Agasthya and Paakhi are obsessed about each other.If that's the case then hate to say that Mallika is clearly the Kabab Mein Haddi here between the two.

Both of the jodis would look good-Agasthya/Pakhi or Agasthya/Mallika but since Mallika is closer Agasthya/Mallika might be the preferred option.

2- As revealed in the past episodes Agasthya's eyes are on the nooks and corner of Paakhi's house and his eyes tracks her movements too in the serial.In this case the victim is Mallika but she's much sharper and aware of the same.

So Mallika could be shown planting a hidden camera within Agasthya's CCTV premises to get back at him.Both would watch and monitor their tracks but Mallika could be shown as having the upper-hand with regards to being a Hawk-Eye.

3- Either Mallika or Paakhi would have to turn into a vamp so that Agasthya gets reunited with either the 2 of them.Or both could be grey and it can be revealed that Paakhi and Mallika are actually real siblings who are playing a joint game to trap the actual offender.

As planned by Mallika/Paakhi depending on whoever is the brain Paakhi started stalking Agasthya so that she could gather more information about the Raichand empire while pretending to fall in love with him.Paakhi's obsession could be just a classic act to fool both Ishaan and Agasthaya.

Mallika on her part decided to enter Agasthya's world as Paakhi to further muddle the waters.

4- Like Kabir Ishaan's hidden motive needs to be revealed in using Mallika as the chess-piece programmed for Agasthya's downfall.

5- If Agasthya is indeed proved Innocent and he comes to know about the real truth behind Mallika's Love-Drama what will he do? Let's suppose it gets revealed that both the girls were taking the 2 boys-Agasthya and Ishaan for a ride as per their joint plan Ishaan could be made to feel like a total fool but perhaps Agasthya who has a dark past connected with the losing of his mother let's name her Sunita Raichand-his emotional turmoil can be depicted.

6- Agasthya reveals that he already knew about Mallika's plan and was just playing with her in order to know Paakhi's location.

7-Ishaan is revealed to be Agasthya's half-sibling step Raichand.He wants to usurp the entire property for himself and wants Mallika to marry and then either/divorce or perhaps kill Agasthya for this Business Empire.

Originally posted by: masked

Some of the suggestions which can be taken up if its feasible and appeals to the current FF-

1- "Thanks a lot. Paakhi and Mallika are different and so are their face but as Agasthya and Paakhi fell in love seven years ago in an internet chat group, they had not seen each other's faces. The tied girl is real Paakhi who's as much obsessed with Agasthya as he is with Paakhi."

So Agasthya and Paakhi are obsessed about each other.If that's the case then hate to say that Mallika is clearly the Kabab Mein Haddi here between the two.

Both of the jodis would look good-Agasthya/Pakhi or Agasthya/Mallika but since Mallika is closer Agasthya/Mallika might be the preferred option.

2- As revealed in the past episodes Agasthya's eyes are on the nooks and corner of Paakhi's house and his eyes tracks her movements too in the serial.In this case the victim is Mallika but she's much sharper and aware of the same.

So Mallika could be shown planting a hidden camera within Agasthya's CCTV premises to get back at him.Both would watch and monitor their tracks but Mallika could be shown as having the upper-hand with regards to being a Hawk-Eye.

3- Either Mallika or Paakhi would have to turn into a vamp so that Agasthya gets reunited with either the 2 of them.Or both could be grey and it can be revealed that Paakhi and Mallika are actually real siblings who are playing a joint game to trap the actual offender.

As planned by Mallika/Paakhi depending on whoever is the brain Paakhi started stalking Agasthya so that she could gather more information about the Raichand empire while pretending to fall in love with him.Paakhi's obsession could be just a classic act to fool both Ishaan and Agasthaya.

Mallika on her part decided to enter Agasthya's world as Paakhi to further muddle the waters.

4- Like Kabir Ishaan's hidden motive needs to be revealed in using Mallika as the chess-piece programmed for Agasthya's downfall.

5- If Agasthya is indeed proved Innocent and he comes to know about the real truth behind Mallika's Love-Drama what will he do? Let's suppose it gets revealed that both the girls were taking the 2 boys-Agasthya and Ishaan for a ride as per their joint plan Ishaan could be made to feel like a total fool but perhaps Agasthya who has a dark past connected with the losing of his mother let's name her Sunita Raichand-his emotional turmoil can be depicted.

6- Agasthya reveals that he already knew about Mallika's plan and was just playing with her in order to know Paakhi's location.

7-Ishaan is revealed to be Agasthya's half-sibling step Raichand.He wants to usurp the entire property for himself and wants Mallika to marry and then either/divorce or perhaps kill Agasthya for this Business Empire.

These are really amazing suggestions. I love all of them especially suggestion #2 would increase the tension so much. Ishaan and Agasthya are half brothers though I was trying to find a way to make both of them sympathetic anti heroes. Pakhi I thought to make her the ultimate villain.

Originally posted by: Susmitasumi96

Enjoying it so far. Btw please give a name to your ff too. 😁❤

Thanks aot. I'll do so.