FF- 'Wedded By Blackmail'part 8(pg18).!!

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Shaina_b

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Posted: 17 years ago

#61

Too good!!!Awesome!!!!!

Raj had disturbed her!!!!! Haan but always something about him that threatened her!!!!! 😕

Toh Raj ko Naina pehle se janti hai!!!! 😊 Lagta hai inka koi past hai!!!!! 😉

Naina ko Raj lion lagta hai!!! 😊 Haan ab lioness ki shaadi toh lion se hi hoti hai!!!! 😉

Ab uske sapne bhi aate hai!!!! 😉

Raj ne phone kiya aur direct dinner pe aane ko bola!!! 😛 Wow!!! 😊 😊 😊 I am impressed!!!!! 👏

Naina ko toh naa karna hi tha akhir itni asani se thode hi uske haath aa jati!!!! 😉

Ab flowers bheje!!! 😊 😊 😊 Naina thinks only Raj would have known aur Naina ko Raj ki handwiritng bhi pata hai!!!! The plot thickens my dear Watson!!!! 😊 😊 😊

Chalo kam se kum phoolo par toh gussa nahi dikhaya!!!!! 😉

Raj wants the thrill of the chase!!!!! 😊 Interesting!!!! 😊

Raj pahuch gaya function mein!!!! 😛 😛 😛

He touched her!!! 😳 Weeeellllll and she was reacting to it!!!! 😳

He said you have now turned!!!! 😕 😕 😕 Aur past mistakes!!!Kaisa past mistake?? 😕 Usse thukra kar jo kiya tha??? 😕 😕 😕

This mystery is getting deeper amd deeper!!!! 😊

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sana

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Posted: 17 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: aarsow
hey simply super n very diff plz do contn dear 👏 👏 👏 ,sorry 4 late reply, 😊

excelent realy 👏 👏 👏

Aarthi

hey aarti thnx 4 da reply............. sure i will cont soon

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Posted: 17 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: fanatic 21
wow!!!!!!!!!i'm speechless........superb!!!!! 👏

thnx

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Posted: 17 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: riyaa_1985
Absolutely superb👏👏
I don't have words to comment on your writing style!!!!
Fantastic👏👏
God bless u
take care.

thnx................

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Posted: 17 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: Shaina_b
Too good!!!Awesome!!!!!

Raj had disturbed her!!!!! Haan but always something about him that threatened her!!!!! 😕

Toh Raj ko Naina pehle se janti hai!!!! 😊 Lagta hai inka koi past hai!!!!! 😉

Naina ko Raj lion lagta hai!!! 😊 Haan ab lioness ki shaadi toh lion se hi hoti hai!!!! 😉

Ab uske sapne bhi aate hai!!!! 😉

Raj ne phone kiya aur direct dinner pe aane ko bola!!! 😛 Wow!!! 😊 😊 😊 I am impressed!!!!! 👏

Naina ko toh naa karna hi tha akhir itni asani se thode hi uske haath aa jati!!!! 😉

Ab flowers bheje!!! 😊 😊 😊 Naina thinks only Raj would have known aur Naina ko Raj ki handwiritng bhi pata hai!!!! The plot thickens my dear Watson!!!! 😊 😊 😊

Chalo kam se kum phoolo par toh gussa nahi dikhaya!!!!! 😉

Raj wants the thrill of the chase!!!!! 😊 Interesting!!!! 😊

Raj pahuch gaya function mein!!!! 😛 😛 😛

He touched her!!! 😳 Weeeellllll and she was reacting to it!!!! 😳

He said you have now turned!!!! 😕 😕 😕 Aur past mistakes!!!Kaisa past mistake?? 😕 Usse thukra kar jo kiya tha??? 😕 😕 😕

This mystery is getting deeper amd deeper!!!! 😊

hey i loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee urrrrrrrrrrr biggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg

comment & a detailed analyisis............. thnx............. & ur questions about there past...........well i cant reveil tht😉............ u will come 2 know as soon as possible with the coming updates..........

loveu

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ANANYA ROY

@yakkudimag

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Posted: 17 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: Shaina_b
Too good!!!Awesome!!!!!

Raj had disturbed her!!!!! Haan but always something about him that threatened her!!!!! 😕

Toh Raj ko Naina pehle se janti hai!!!! 😊 Lagta hai inka koi past hai!!!!! 😉

Naina ko Raj lion lagta hai!!! 😊 Haan ab lioness ki shaadi toh lion se hi hoti hai!!!! 😉

Ab uske sapne bhi aate hai!!!! 😉

Raj ne phone kiya aur direct dinner pe aane ko bola!!! 😛 Wow!!! 😊 😊 😊 I am impressed!!!!! 👏

Naina ko toh naa karna hi tha akhir itni asani se thode hi uske haath aa jati!!!! 😉

Ab flowers bheje!!! 😊 😊 😊 Naina thinks only Raj would have known aur Naina ko Raj ki handwiritng bhi pata hai!!!! The plot thickens my dear Watson!!!! 😊 😊 😊

Chalo kam se kum phoolo par toh gussa nahi dikhaya!!!!! 😉

Raj wants the thrill of the chase!!!!! 😊 Interesting!!!! 😊

Raj pahuch gaya function mein!!!! 😛 😛 😛

He touched her!!! 😳 Weeeellllll and she was reacting to it!!!! 😳

He said you have now turned!!!! 😕 😕 😕 Aur past mistakes!!!Kaisa past mistake?? 😕 Usse thukra kar jo kiya tha??? 😕 😕 😕

This mystery is getting deeper amd deeper!!!! 😊

very much agree with you Shaina..

but I have one question to the writer..

Naina aaj ki ladki hai..aur is generation k log itne modest aur itne Saint type nahi hote k.. Baap ki kamai hui jaidad ko aise hi kisike hawale kar k nikal jaaye samaj seva k lia..

arre bhai paisa hai toh hai..unke baap ne kamai hai..bhai jaidad uda raha hai... aur bahen ne abhi tak kuchh action nahi lia?

aur achanak se woh isi jaidad ko bachane k lia kya Raj se shaadi ya affair.. aisa kuchh karegi?agar Walia Empire ko bachana tha toh bahut pahle hi kuchh karna tha..

and Raj aur Naina ka past..secret hain...par 21st century ki ek raees aur khandani ladki.. is tarha darr jaaye ..ek naye naye bane hue ameer se..its a mismatch.

TO THE WRITER:-

agar yeh story kisi aur fic se inspired na bhi hoti,toh bhi thik tha.

but story ko aisa banao,ta k readers k assumption k baahar ho, story ko assume karna.. bahut asaan lag raha hai..kuchh aise turns and twist laao,padhne me aur maza aayega..ek modern ladki aise hi Saint nahi hoti,jo pahle baap k business par koi zimmedari naa samhale..baad me usi business ko bachane k lia..you know what I mean...

mujhe pareshaani ho rahi hain padhne me...kyonki main samajh rahi hoon ..k aage kya hoga..aur kya kya hone k chances hai...mujhe guess karna bilkul achha nahi lagta...twist laao..please.. aisa modh laao kahani me..k readers ki saanse rook jaaye...ultimately kya hoga yeh jaanne k lia..mujhe betaab hona hai..

MUJHE BETAAB BANAO..

story achhi hain..update karo..aur actually long update do..big font nahi chahie.. more and more words likho.. please...😭

Edited by yakkudimag - 17 years ago

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Posted: 17 years ago

#67

👏 Story is going great...i don't find any problem with naina's character..it's fine...she is simple girl at heart who wants to lead a peaceful and simple life away from the dirty world... ..she too has desires like all other girls but she hides it from the world ....she is not ready to bear anymore hurt after alekh's episode...deep down she needs a partner to share her feelings but she hasn't really found any one ....that's how i have analyzed her character..... 😳

If u want u can spice up the story but please don't bring some shocking and unpleasant twist about RN's jodi......u know what i am saying......as far as RN are together and both don't have third person in their lives..i don't mind any twist...at the end of the day it's your story ..these are just suggestions ..u can pick if u find it useful....

Yes please decrease the font size...it's really hard to read with big fonts...and update soon

Edited by yyyy - 17 years ago

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sana

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Posted: 17 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: yakkudimag

very much agree with you Shaina..

but I have one question to the writer..

Naina aaj ki ladki hai..aur is generation k log itne modest aur itne Saint type nahi hote k.. Baap ki kamai hui jaidad ko aise hi kisike hawale kar k nikal jaaye samaj seva k lia..

{i 2 agree wd u dear but here in ma story naina is a sweet character & this samaj seva & all is started by his father & she is carrying the process..........}

arre bhai paisa hai toh hai..unke baap ne kamai hai..bhai jaidad uda raha hai... aur bahen ne abhi tak kuchh action nahi lia

aur achanak se woh isi jaidad ko bachane k lia kya Raj se shaadi ya affair.. aisa kuchh karegi?agar Walia Empire ko bachana tha toh bahut pahle hi kuchh karna tha..

and Raj aur Naina ka past..secret hain...par 21st century ki ek raees aur khandani ladki.. is tarha darr jaaye ..ek naye naye bane hue ameer se..its a mismatch.

{i know ki raj naya hai nahi naya bhi nahi bol sakte kyunki use is buisness pe aaye sirf kuch din nahi hue saal ho chuke hai....... aur jaha tak baat nayee nayee ki aayi hai to the older ones is died means his father is died........ & naina isnt taking care of da buisness naveen is taking care of.........& da past relations i cant reveil it now}

TO THE WRITER:-

agar yeh story kisi aur fic se inspired na bhi hoti,toh bhi thik tha.

but story ko aisa banao,ta k readers k assumption k baahar hostory k assume karna.. bahut asaan lag raha hai..kuchh aise turns and twist laao,padhne me aur maza aayega..ek modern ladki aise hi Saint nahi hoti,jo pahle baap k business par koi zimmedari naa samhale..baad me usi business ko bachane k lia..you know what I mean...

mujhe pareshaani ho rahi hain padhne me...kyonki main samajh rahi hoon ..k aage kya hoga..aur kya kya hone k chances hai...mujhe guess karna bilkul achha nahi lagta...twist laao..please.. aisa modh laao kahani me..k readers ki saanse rook jaaye...ultimately kya hoga yeh jaanne k lia..mujhe betaab hona hai..

MUJHE BETAAB BANAO..

{betaab to tum banogi........ but starting story u cant reveil everything isnt it......... u cant judge a book by its cover isnt it........ so u have 2 weight sweety}

story achhi hain..update karo..aur actually long update do..big font nahi chahie.. more and more words likho.. please...😭{ok as u say but 4 tht i want long comments as well}

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sana

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Posted: 17 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: yyyy
👏 Story is going great...i don't find any problem with naina's character..it's fine...she is simple girl at heart who wants to lead a peaceful and simple life away from the dirty world... ..she too has desires like all other girls but she hides it from the world ....she is not ready to bear anymore hurt after alekh's episode...deep down she needs a partner to share her feelings but she hasn't really found any one ....that's how i have analyzed her character..... 😳

If u want u can spice up the story but please don't bring some shocking and unpleasant twist about RN's jodi......u know what i am saying......as far as RN are together and both don't have third person in their lives..i don't mind any twist...at the end of the day it's your story ..these are just suggestions ..u can pick if u find it useful....

Yes please decrease the font size...it's really hard to read with big fonts...and update soon

ok dear i will surely update soon & thnx 4 da comment & i will surely decrease da font size

love'sana

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Posted: 17 years ago

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Part - 5

For the rest of the evening her stomach churned, as though she had eaten something that did not suit her appetite. The feeling was horrible.

"Naina" Pooja sat down with a thud gripping her arms. "He's gorgeous and very sexy" she said excitedly. "Now, I want to know everything about him"

Naina looked at her with exasperation "There is nothing to tell, Pooja. Please don't make a big deal out of this. I don't intend to have anything to do with that man"

Pooja stared at her with incomprehension.

"You are completely mad" she said staring at her "What's wrong with you…That man is gorgeous" glancing at her sideways "Anyways, he doesn't look like a man who will give up that easily"

"Well, he better give up on this one…" Naina snapped in anger.

For the rest of the evening she remained quiet, just waiting for an opportunity to escape. Today, she had driven her car so she could leave at anytime.

She saw people moving towards the dinner buffet. Now, was the perfect time to make my escape, she thought. Picking up her bag quickly she headed out.

Climbing into her car she blindly drove towards the ocean. Usually the noise of the primitive waves soothed her and gave her strength but today it just churned out a Tsunami of emotions she could not control.

Parking her car, a BMW, her father's last gift to her near the beach she got out of the car, locked it and turned around to walk towards the beach.

She was dressed in a white salwar with beautiful rose patterns around the neck and sleeves. The dupatta was carelessly swung around her neck. Her hair was loose today and she had worn a beautiful tear drop diamond earring and a matching bracelet for tonight's event. The dress fit her curves perfectly and accentuated the beauty of her body.

Removing her sandals and picking it up in her hands she walked towards the beach. The breeze from the ocean lifted and hair and gently blew it across her face.

Not mindful of anything, she walked barefoot across the sand to her usual place. There was a dozen or so fishing boats docked on the sand. She approached one and sat down besides it with her back resting on the side of the boat.

Her legs pulled up, with her hands resting on her knees her head tilted to the sides she rested her chin on her arms and stared at the ocean.

With her head tilted back and eyes closed, old memories assailed her.

She remembered it like it had happened yesterday.

Memories took her back to the fateful day five years back. She had been all of nineteen at that time. Too into her own mind and very quite even at that age.

Hema had come to their house to invite her for her wedding to Arjun. She had been very excited. Hema was getting married to her high school sweetheart whom she knew very well. Even though Arjun had passed out a few years ahead of them he had always been protective of hema at school.

Once in school, the girls had joked around that he was a protective mama bear. An automatic smile tugged at that thought. But now it looked like cupid had struck them and they wanted to get married before both of them went to the U.S for further studies.

The wedding was to be in madras as Hema's family had relocated there. Hema had wanted Naina to come for the wedding.

Even after refusing several times she wouldn't take no for answer. Naina had really wanted to go but couldn't agree because she knew that her father was very protective of her.

Naina knew that her father would never allow her to travel alone. He was very protective of her that way.

But Hema had insisted. After Naina's refusal she had gone directly to her father and gained his permission.

Naina couldn't refuse. Hema was her best friend. Both of them had studied together from their school days. She was one of the few friends she had besides Huda.

Now, she wondered, why did I give into the pressure to attend her wedding on that fateful day? Why couldn't I have simply refused? Why didn't her father refuse? Was it fate that had led her to go to Madras?

Questions, those were imponderable with no answers which gave nothing but heartache.

***********

Her father had made all the arrangements for her stay in Madras for a week. A driver and car had been arranged for her use. He had booked a suite for her at the Sheraton.

Naina had flown into Madras with a couple of other friends and as prearranged Hema was planning on meeting them at the airport with her fianc.

The three of them had gotten out of the plane chatting and laughing because of a joke one of them had uttered.

They had collected their baggage and walked out of the airport when Hema came running and gave a big hug to Naina as she said hi to the others.

Smiling at them and standing besides Hema was her fianc Arjun.

"Hi Arjun" Naina said smiling shyly at him.

"Hey Naina, hope you trip was alright?" they both made small talk.

There was also another guy who stood there besides Arjun without a smile on his face. Naina after giving him a cursory glance had turned back to Hema.

The other two girls were tidying themselves to make an impression on the stranger standing close by.

Naina looked at them and gave a mental shrug. Why would anybody want to impress some stranger? She thought.

Hema made the general introductions. As she introduced them she could see that the man besides Arjun was totally uninterested in getting introduced.

"Let's get moving shall we? The traffic is going to become bad" he said indicating his watch with a smile.

Naina felt like he had slapped them. Well, if he did not want to get introduced who cared, definitely not she. Lifting her chin she followed Hema towards the cars that were parked in the parking lot.

As per her father's instructions a driver was waiting for her in front of the airport.

"Naina Ma'am"

"Yes"

"Ma'am, Inder Saab just called to see if you have arrived safely. Could you give him a call once you reach the hotel?"

"Sure" saying to the driver she looked at Hema.

"Naina, why don't you come with us to my house? You can go back to the hotel later" she said pleading with her.

"Hema, but my luggage…"

"Rajveer, please could you place Naina's luggage in her car? So that she can come with us"

"Sure" Smiling he came to collect her bags from her hands

"No, Not necessary" she said rudely.

His eyes furrowed as he looked at her. Shrugging his shoulders he stood away letting Naina handover her luggage to her driver.

They had come in two cars. While the love jodi's got into Arjun's car, she and the two of her other friend's were left with no other option other than to go in the stranger's car.

Naina waited for the two of them to get in before she scooted inside. He waited for her to sit comfortably and then hesitated a few seconds before he closed the door. She knew that his eyes had assessed her before he had taken the driver seat.

She had learnt later that he had watched her through the mirror during the entire drive. Naina had sat there fuming at his dismal treatment of women.

Well, she did not want to know him either.

The car came to an abrupt halt in front of Hema's house. Everybody got out of the car one by one. When it was her turn to get out he had extended his hand but she had ignored it and refused his help.

From the corner of her eyes she could see his hands stiffening in anger.

Giving a small shake of her head she followed all of them inside.

Naina slowly came back to the present and memories bombarded her. Standing up, she shook the fine sand out of her salwar kameez and walked towards the car as tears slowly slid down her eyelids.

Later, when the mistake or was it fault! Had been made, who was to blame her or him?

Or was it his intention all along to teach her a lesson for showing her disdain of him.

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