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Posted: 17 years ago
CHapter 8: O Meri Jaan
Ranbir consumed his drink, staring murderously at Armaan. His blood was boiling and every pore in his body was screaming at him to go take what is rightfully his. Ranbir stood up and walked to the dance floor with a determined look in his eyes.

R: Armaan, if you don't mind, kya main apni BIWI ke saath dance kar sakta hoon?
A: (sounding sad) Oh, biwi ke saath...sure

He let go of Kanya and walked away. Ranbir slipped his hands into Kanya's as the song switched from 'Aaj Ki Raat' to 'O Meri Jaan'. Ranbir stared into her eyes, unfalteringly.

Dil khudgarz hai,
Phisla hai yeh, phir haath se,
Kal uska raha,
Ab hai tera, is raat se


K: Ranbir, stop it.

He tightened his grip around her waist.

R: Stop what?
K: Tum jo kar rahe ho, thik nahi hai.

He tightened it more.

Tu aa gaya, yoon nazar mein,
Jaise subah, dopahar mein,
Madhoshi yoon hi nahi, dil pe chhayi, niyat ne li angdayi
Chhua tu ne kuch is tara, badli fiza badla sama


R: Kyun? Humari shaadi hui hai. Main tumhare saath dance nahi kar sakta?
K: (frustrated) Pehle tum bolte ho ki tum is shaadi ko nahi maante ho, aur phir koi aur ladka mere saath dance kare toh tumhe bura lagta hai!
R: What's your point?

Ranbir has now pulled her so close, he was whispering in her ear. His lips brushed against her ear. She wanted him to stay with her like this for as long as possible, and hold him this close forever, but then, the memory of the suhag raat flashed in her mind. She abruptly pushed him off of her. He felt as if he'd been ripped in half.

K: Tum mujhse pyaar karte ho ki nahi?

Ranbir took a deep breath and said, "No,".

Kanya turned around and left, but not before Ranbir could see a tear sparkling against her cheek.

R: Kanya...

He ran after her, searching for his Kanya in a throng of people.

Kanya burst through the front door, gulping in the crisp night air, wishing she would wake up from this horrible dream and find her self snuggled in bed with Ranbir's strong, protective arm around her. As her feet met the gravel in the driveway with a crunch, her bubble of hope burst and confirmed her sad perception that this was, indeed, reality.

She ran out to their car and sat on the hood and cried all her sorrows away.


* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * 1 hour later* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *


Ranbir had frantically searched for Kanya around the entire party in vain. Now, the last few couples were departing. Ranbir watched them, looking at their happy smiles. Boy's arms around girls. Private whispers in each other's ears, blushes and hugs. He remembered the day he declared Kanya 'mera chand' and smiled. That was probably the best moment of his life yet. He took a deep breath and walked out.

There was Kanya. Sitting on their car, looking pristinely beautiful, but sad. He decided to go up to her and apologize. He walked up to her.

R: Kanya...
K: Ranbir, kuch mat kaho. Mujhe abhi kuch nahi sunna. Let's just go home.

Ranbir got in the car and so did Kanya. He saw her hastily wipe her tears as he started the car. They sat in silence for the next few minutes as Ranbir pulled out of Ashutosh's driveway and took off down the road.

K: (thinking) Bhagwan, yeh mere saath aisa kyun ho raha hai?
R: (thinking) Oh god, yeh mere saath aisa kyun ho raha hai?
K: (thinking) Maine pyaar kyun kiya?
R: (thinking) Maine pyaar kyun kiya?

Ranbir pulled off the main road and down a dark, deserted road.

K: Yeh kya kar rahe ho tum?
R: Yeh shortcut hai mera.

They drove in silence for the next few minutes, with an invisible wall between them, blocking out emotions.

BANG!

Ranbir and Kanya were awoken from their thoughts by a loud noise.

R: Lagta hai, tire phat gaya

Ranbir heard a small whimper next to him and looked down to see that Kanya had grabbed his hand in surprise. He stared at it for a few seconds until Kanya realized and withdrew. Ranbir got out of the car and Kanya followed. He rounded around the side of the car to find his front left tire busted.

K: Yeh kaise hua? Aaj pura din thik tha!

Ranbir's mind flashed to a few hours ago, outside the party when he had kicked this very tire in frustration before going inside. Saying nothing, he bent down to examine it.

R: Kanya, phone de na.

Kanya fumbled in her purse and pulled out her phone.

K: Arre, is mein network hi nahi hai!
R: Umm...Kanya?
K: (worriedly) What?
R: I don't know how to tell you this but...hume yahaan se chal kar jaana padega.
K: K-kya? Is s-sunsaan raaste p-par?

Ranbir put his hand on her arm reassuringly.

R: Darro mat. Main tumhare saath hoon.

Kanya angrily pulled her arm away.

K: Main darti nahi hoon, okay? Aur mujhe tumhari madat ki koi zarurat nahi hai!

With that, she stormed off down the road. Ranbir sighed and followed her.

What happens next?? Comment if u liked!
Edited by simplyinluv - 17 years ago
Multani90 thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago

I didn't like it Krish, I loved it, just loved it! Loved the way you bring in a little bit of everything, I just love my bad boy sexy, and Kanya is keeping strong too. I loved that. Awesome update, please continue soon, I will be waiting. Its just plain brillant, and I just love the way you write, the flow is amazing.😳👏

And I also want to add, the way you bring in the dard, is awesome!

Edited by Multani90 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Great Update!
Loving this FF.
Please Continue really really really SOOOOOOOOOOON!
👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
i loved it... it was brill... pls do continue sooon... i love ranbir's bad biy attitude and Kanya's strong on the outside but weak on the inside character...
pls pls continue soon
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Multani90

I didn't like it Krish, I loved it, just loved it! Loved the way you bring in a little bit of everything, I just love my bad boy sexy, and Kanya is keeping strong too. I loved that. Awesome update, please continue soon, I will be waiting. Its just plain brillant, and I just love the way you write, the flow is amazing.😳👏

And I also want to add, the way you bring in the dard, is awesome!



multani90 says it all.
thanx for update.
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Posted: 17 years ago
Awsome!!!!! but yaar how cum we had wait so long yaar plz plz continue fast u leave us hanging its so fun to read it plz plz continue soon plz plz!!!!!!!! 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
intezar ka phal bahut meetha tha . Again u gave us an awesome update. Kaisey likhti ho itna badhiya.Mazaaa aa gaya. As for comments as yogitz puts it - multani 90 has made it easier for us. We just echo what she has written.
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Posted: 17 years ago
Absolutely loved the update.Beautifully narrated.How hard it is to act as hating someone whom we really love.Ranbir is a good example.Feeling jealous,telling no when the heart screams yes,wanting to apologize......the hardship has been brought out well.Then Kanya....her pain,her hope,her disillusionment everything is decsribed well.Way to go Karishma!
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Posted: 17 years ago
awesome i love it it was
really good man plz plz don't take
too much time for part 9 like before
plz plz plz upadate soooooooooooooooon
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Posted: 17 years ago
ooo excellent part! love dis ff mix of everything!
continue sooon!

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