The journey-horror take on RN (ud-pg4) - Page 2

Originally posted by: aarsow

hey plz contn,itz intrestn n super,



Aarthi

thanks dear for replying.... comments are really needed....
thanks ......
take care and keep smiling...
sheenu....😊

so now first part… do tell me ki kaisa laga…..

Part 1

There is a big hall full of army people and their family and sound of a person is coming….

Voice: ladies and gentlemen we are here to honor the officers who made operation chanakya successful… we are please to inform you all that operation chanakya lead by captain Rajveer singh Shekhawat is a great success…. Because of this operation we were able to expose all those political leaders who were working against our country by helping terrorists. These leaders have done many crimes and now we are able to expose them only because we have some soldiers like captain shekhawat.

A huge round of applause……………

Voice: so I request our honorable prime minister mr. Manmohan singh to please come here and do the honors of presenting medals to all the officers who took part in this mission………..

Captain Rajveer singh shekhawat please come up on the stage….

PM ties a medal on his uniform….. Again a huge round of applause……….

Voice: we are please to inform you that captain shekhawat is promoted because of his efforts to make this mission successful… he is now major rajveer singh shekhawat…. again *applause*….. Now I request major shekhawat to please come here and share his experiences….

Raj: aaj mera wo sapne sach hua hai jiske liye maine kabhi ye army join ki thi…. Operation chanakya hame tab mila jab ye rumors the ki army ke kuch log terrorists ki help kar rahe hai and tab hamne faisla liya ki hum pata lagayenge ki ye sab kya hai…. aur hame pata chala ki ye sab kiya hua un kuch logo ka hai jo ek safed libas pehen ke is desh ke logo ko kayi saalo se bevakuf banate aaye hai… tab maine aur mere sathiyon ne faisla liya ki hum in sab ko benaqaab karenge chahe hamari jaan hi kyu na chali jaye…. Aur aaj hum yahan pe is mission ki saflata celebrate karne aaye hai… mai apne sathiyon ka shukriya ada karna chahta hun ki unhone is mission ko successful banaya… aur meri har kadam pe madad ki….

*applause* applause*

Voice: thank you captain shekhawat…. jab tak aap jaise kuch soldiers is desh mei hai is desh ka future surakshit hai…..

Now I request captain Navin singh ahluwalia to please come up on the stage……

Again PM ties a medal on his uniform… and he also says a few words…

In this way whole process continues……

After an hour… we see 8 officers are sitting outside on the grass in the lawn…..

Guy1: yaar aaj kitna accha lag raha hai na…. lagta hai saare sapne poore ho gaye….

Guy2: oye abhi mujhe nahi pata that ere sapne itne kam hai ki ek mission mei hi poore ho gaye….

Abhi: nahi kunal matlab aaj hamne apne desh ko bachane ka sapna jo army join karne pe dekha tha aaj kuch had tak poora hua…ab hamare paas sab kuch hai… itne saare acche dost.. ek pyaar.. saying this he puts his hands around the only girl in the group….

Huda: haye….. sahi keh raha hai yaar tu… tere paas to pyar hai par mere paas toh ek janani bhi nahi hai….

Navin: oye huda… dukhi mat ho… akhir tu hi to kehta hai… is huda ke charm se koi ladki nahi bach sakti….

Huda: nahi navin ab to mujhe bhi apni is baat pe shaq hone laga hai… dekh na… hamare group ki teeno ladkiyon ne mujhe bhaav tak nahi diya… shalini, ritu, nandini koi nahi poochta mujhe….

Aalekh: nautanki saala… abe keh to aise raha hai jaise is duniya mei aur koi ladki hi nahi…. Ab shalini ne is yudiye ke saath, ritu ne is navin ke saath taanka bhida liya to tu kayko udaas hota hai… tere liye aur bhi ladkiyan aayengi… ab dekh na apne group ka itna handsome officer aur eklauta major raj bhi to khali hai….

Kyu raj….

Raj: yaar tum log fir shuru ho gaye… oye navin ye ritu aur shalini kab aayengi…. Tune hospital phone kiya than a… don one hamari ye ceremony bhi miss kardi… jo vo kabhi nahi karti….

Navin: yaar vo log nikal hi rahe the ceremony ke liye… par ek emergeny case aa gaya to unhe rukna pada… akhir dono dr. hai… aur dr. ki life bhi hamari jaisi hi hoti hai… pata nahi kab bulave aa jaye….

Raj:hmmm…. Sahi keh rahe ho tum… dekhte hai kitna intezaar karna padta hai… yaar ye ladkiyan bhi na bahut intezaar karvati hai…..

Navin:hmmm… par uss intezaar mei bhi ek maza hai mere yaar….a dreamy look in his eyes..

Raj: irritating…. Kaisa maza…

Navin: yaar tu nahi samjhega jab tujhe pyaar hoga na tab tu samjhega….

Raj: mujhe kabhi pyaar nahi ho sakta….

Huda: kyu tu kya is dharti ka nahi hai… yaar pyaar har kisi ko kabhi na kabhi hota hi hai….

Raj: mujhe jis ladki ki khwaish hai aur jo mere sapno mei aati hai na… vo ladki is duniya mei kahi nahi mil sakti….

Huda: aisa kya hai us ladki mei bata toh…..

Raj: uski aankhen… itni gehri ki unme dubne ke baad bahar nikalne ka ji nahi chahta… uski muskurahat… itni bholi ki usme khone ke baad raasta dhundne ka mann nahi karta… uski ….. pauses… shut up …. Tum log mera mazak uda rahe ho….

Aalekh: ab toh ud gaya… saale vo dekh udke ja raha….*pointing in the sky*

Raj: shut up aalekh and he starts running after him….

And in this game before he can catch aalekh he bumps into another officer slightly aged…..

Raj: sorry sir…

Person: its ok major… lagta hai kafi masti chal rahi hai… aur kyu na ho akhir aapne itna bada mission complete kiya hai….

Raj: vo sir actually vo aalekh….

Person (smiling) : its ok major… mai aap sab ko ye khushkhabri dene aaya tha,…..

All: khushkhabri sir……

Person (grinning): aap sab ki leave application paas ho gayi hai…… army ne decide kiya hai ki aap logo ne is mission mei kafi mehnat ki isliye aap logo ko aaraam ki jarurat hai…. so now be happy… coz no work for you guys for next 1 month……

All: what…….. yipeeeeeeeeeeeee……….. thank you sir…..

Person: no need… aap sab log deserve karte the….. to aap log enjoy karne kaha jayenge…..

Kunal: vo sir hamne vaise abhi puri planning nahi ki hai… par ham sochte hai ki raj ke farmhouse chale…. Waha kafi accha aur shant environment hai…. hume bhi relaxation ki kafi jarurat hai……

Person: okk all the best to all of you….

All: thank you sir….

And he goes…

All: hurray…… chalo raj tayar ho jao… is baar sabki khatirdari tumhe hi karni hai……

Raj: array tum log aao to sahi…. Mujhe bhi apne dad ka paisa udane ka koi mauka to mile…..

Kunal: accha raj ye bata tera farm house hai kidhar…..

Raj: yahan se bahut duur… karib 14-15 hours ki duri pe ek jungle padta hai… uss jungle ko cross karke fir ek ghante ki drive ke baad….

Huda: oye us jungle mei jungle jaanvar to nahi hai na….

Raj: pata nahi… mei kabhi us jungle se nahi gaya…. Us jungle mei koi nahi jaata… ek alag raasta hai sab wahi se jaate hai…

Huda: oye to tu kyu faaltu hamko darra raha hai… hum bhi vo sidha raasta hi lenge… kyu bhai log….

All: oye jarur…..

Tabhi another officer comes…..

Raj: oh no… colonel nair…. Yahan pe….

All (giggles) : ab toh raj gaya…. Raj tum apne hone waale sasur ji se itna mat daro….

Raj: shut up guys….

Col. Nair(CN) : toh major all set for holidays…..maine suna tum sab tumhare farm house ja rahe ho….

Raj: yes sir….

CN: who mujhe tumse kuch baat karni thi,….

Raj( tensed): kahiye na sir/….

CN: wo tum to jaante hi ho… aajkal Alisha ki bhi chutiyan chal rahi hai.. toh mei soch raha tha ki tum usse bhi apne saath le jao…

All giggles… while raj…. He was standing there like a dumbo….

Raj: what??? I mean sir uske to exam hai na aajkal….

CN: nahi vo actually aaj uska last exam tha…tabhi vo aaj yahan bhi nahi aayi… subah se ro rahi thi ki usse yaha aana hai exam nahi dena… bahut samjha bhuja ke colz. Bejha sir…

Raj(mutters) : vo rone aur make up karne ke alava aur karti kya hai sir….(loudly)… vo sir aap sabhi se puchiye na…

CN: array sab tumhare hi to friends hai… aur Alisha bhi to tumhari itni acchi dost hai… tum sabki….

Raj (in his mind dost ya chipkoo): ok sir…

CN: to fir tey hua…. Alisha bhi tum logo ke sath jaayegi… mei usse bata dunga to vo bahut khush hogi…

Nair goes…

All (giggles): aur raj bahut dukhi….

Huda: yaar mujhe samajh nahi aata jab tu us ladki ko koi bhaav nahi deta to vo tere sath itna chipakti kyu hai….

Raj: how do I know??(sad)… saari chutiyon ka maza kharab kar diya….

Kunal: oye aisa bhi nahi hai… ladki to bahut pyari hai…

All: sirf tumhe lagti hai…..

Raj: yaar chodo in baato ko… accha ye batao… ritu aur shalini ka koi phone….

And he stops coz he sees two beautiful girls in jeans coming there laughing….

Shalini: congrats raj….. sorry hame aane mei bahut late ho gaya… actually emergency case tha chod nahi sake…..

Raj: its ok shalini….

Ritu: congrats raj…. Accha ye batao hamne kya kya miss kiya…..

All update her with the info of raj becoming major and about Alisha…

They two also giggles seeing raj's exp….

Shalini ok ok stop…. Chalo raj ye batao hame kal kis time kahan pe aana hai…

Raj: at my home 9 am sharp….. ok people….are u ready????

All: yes sir…….. aur us Alisha ko bhi bata dena……..

And giggling they move from there….

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End of part 1

Ok now please do tell me kaisa laga???? Plz plz…. Waiting for your comments…

Recap: journey begins…. But will it end???

Ok now please tell me ur suggestions for the role of Alisha and kunal… waise my personal suggestion for the role of Alisha is amna sharif…(make up box …. Lol….no offense)… but if u don't like my choice then plz give ur suggestions….

Vl take ur leave now…

B bye…

Take care and keep smiling…..

Sheenu……

absolutely loved d part.............njoyed d convo btwn raj n nair............ 😆

Ok since I have been given the task!!!!

For Alisha...how about Robby's sister in Kasturi??The one who calls her husband "Puchki" !!!!She had done a similar role to your Alisha in Kahin Toh Hoga!!!The one who was after Abhisek Chauhan,Piyush's twin!!!

And yes definately no Aamna!!!

And for Kunal...I need to know more about his character and if he is paired with someone or what...can you PM me about this???


And this update was very good!!!This kind of reminds me of the beginning of Kya Hadsaa Kya Haqeeqat____Kash-m-kash!!!

And yes PM thoda zyada hogaya!!Should have stuck to Shroff as Vanistra Mantri!!

And you are writing All instead of Ali!!!

Yes by Huda's words I am reminded of"Aa bail mujhe maar" saying.In every horror story they make such a mistake!!!!

no more updata??????????????//// plz cont......

HEY UPDATE SOON YAAR 😭 .... I AM EAGERLY WAITING 😕

Originally posted by: quietrajpri1623

oooouuuuuutstanding starting dear.....convo and dialogues were too good and interesting.....love the pairing till now.....and please no Amna here......for Alisha and Kunal role,Shaina will consider the best.....and this ff is going to give real excitment to readers.hats of to u for writing this type of ff...and thanku soo much for this amazing update...

thankuuuu soooo mucchhhh dearr...... thank god that you like the pairing.... ok no amna will be here...... i will take shaina's suggestion for the roles.... ok ......... well ok to tell you the truth i don't think readers are liking it.... i have got very few replies... only 3-4 persons are liking it.... and i am upset because out of the 3 fics that i am currently writing this one is the toughest and most close to my heart...... but.... anyways...... i have started writing part 2... 3 pages i have written... if i will be able to make it long enuf then i will post it today itself...... otherwise tom pakka pakka.........

now once again thanks for replying.....

take care.... b bye......
keep smiling.....
sheenu....😊