The journey-horror take on RN (ud-pg4) - Page 3

Originally posted by: fanatic 21

absolutely loved d part.............njoyed d convo btwn raj n nair............ 😆

thankuuu sooo muchhh dearr......
thankuu soo muchhh for commenting....
i need comments for encouragement and for continuing this fic... as i am getting very few comments.........

take care....
b bye....
keep smiling....
sheenu....😊

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Ok since I have been given the task!!!! ya dear sorry for putting you in so much troble but see i don't watch many serials so i simply can't decide alone and also ur suggestions are always best....

For Alisha...how about Robby's sister in Kasturi??The one who calls her husband "Puchki" !!!!She had done a similar role to your Alisha in Kahin Toh Hoga!!!The one who was after Abhisek Chauhan,Piyush's twin!!! he he... just as i said.... i never watched kahin to hoga.... i became raj's fan after watching LRL...... similarly i have never seen kasturi.... and i don't know about this girl.. can you post her pic....because i don't watch any of kekta's serial.... i simply hate the storyline and turning points of her serial.... ya i have seen half kutumb... after that i left ... so can you suggest someone from it....... but it totally depend on you.. so suggest some one quick.......and again sorry.....

And yes definately no Aamna!!! ok no amna...... i was just relating make up box with her.... if u said then no amna......

And for Kunal...I need to know more about his character and if he is paired with someone or what...can you PM me about this??? no he is not paired till now.... and i don't think i will pair him with anyone.... but ya he is important in the fic......


And this update was very good!!!thankuuu sooo muchhh dearrrr i seriously needs encouragement......especially for this fic....This kind of reminds me of the beginning of Kya Hadsaa Kya Haqeeqat____Kash-m-kash!!! ha ha.... again.. i never watched any of KHKH's episode.... ya i have seen only one scene in which raj was playing negative character ... but i dint get anything so i left it..... plus i don't know i think that his character was not portrayed well... he dint suit the role....(may be i am wrong because i watched only one episode..so sorry....)

And yes PM thoda zyada hogaya!!Should have stuck to Shroff as Vanistra Mantri!! arrey yaar nahi pm kabhi jyada nahi hota...... you can always pm me whenever you feel like.... i am sorry i think i dint reply to your one pm.... i checked it today once again.... i will reply to it.......

And you are writing All instead of Ali!!! Ali is not there till now!!!!!!... i will check.. i think i have made some other mistake.... ali will enter later......

Yes by Huda's words I am reminded of"Aa bail mujhe maar" saying.In every horror story they make such a mistake!!!! ha ha... yes huda's words are exactly like aa bhains(no bail) mujhe maar.......

ok thanks for commenting.......
i seriously need comments for this fic...... i don't think ppl are liking it.... i was actually thinking of stoping this fic... but then today i checked and i read rani's comment... so i thought i should continue it coz some ppl are waiting for it.... so i will continue it today.... i have started writing 2 part... will post it as soon as possible.......

ok b bye and take care....
keep smiling......
sheenu....😊

Originally posted by: sharmi06

no more updata??????????????//// plz cont......

sorrry dear.... i stoped writing this fic..... but i will continue it today itself......and then i will be regular
thanks for commenting......
take care....
b bye....
keep smiling.....
sheenu....😊

Originally posted by: RSZR

HEY UPDATE SOON YAAR 😭 .... I AM EAGERLY WAITING 😕

i am soo soryyyyyy.... i never thought that ppl will be waiting for this fic as well......i thought that ppl are not liking the concept... so i dint continue......i am sorry for making you cry.....😕........ sooo sorryyy....
i will update it today itself......ok smile now....

take care ......and keep commenting......
b bye.......
keep smiling....
sheenu....😊

Uff I was meaning Prime Minister!!!I meant woh thoda zyada ho gaya ...............you should have stuck to Shroff as Vanistra Mantri!!!!

And Kya Hadsaa Kya Haqeeqat did not have one but many stories!!!!Rajeev's was the first story!!!Kash-m-Kash was the third story!!!!Some of them were very good!!!

But yes the first story was dragged too much and ultimately made no sense but if anything it is still good to watch for Smriti Irani and Rajeev Khandelwal as the bro-sis duo 😊 !!!Seeing them share screen space is something!!!!Too bad we can no longer have them together anywhere!!!!

And yes I had got it why you wanted Aamna!!!But this one suits the role!!!I will try to find a pic till then ask someone else if she can get a pic!!!!

And yes its really no trouble at all!!!! 😊 I am glad always to be any help!!!

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Uff I was meaning Prime Minister!!!I meant woh thoda zyada ho gaya ...............you should have stuck to Shroff as Vanistra Mantri!!!! ha ha.....i thought private messenger.... ok now i don't have any more PM's scene..but i furute i will stuck to that shroff (waise who is him???) and what is this post Vanistra Mantri???

And Kya Hadsaa Kya Haqeeqat did not have one but many stories!!!!Rajeev's was the first story!!!Kash-m-Kash was the third story!!!!Some of them were very good!!! yaar i dint watch any of the story.... i saw the re-telecast of rajeev's story on 9Xm just 1 month ago.....strange kekta gave good stories!!!!!!........

But yes the first story was dragged too much and ultimately made no sense (ha ha i saw just 1 episode.. and that too because of Rajeev.... i also tried to see kahin to hoga but i just can't stand him crying for that stubid make up box....)but if anything it is still good to watch for Smriti Irani and Rajeev Khandelwal as the bro-sis duo 😊 !!!(seriously even i think that kekta has only one good actress in her lot..... i also want to see them together..... mom-son duo bhi chalega..... but i want to see them together......and i was seriously very upset when smriti rejoined kekta...)Seeing them share screen space is something!!!!Too bad we can no longer have them together anywhere!!!!

And yes I had got it why you wanted Aamna!!!But this one suits the role!!!I will try to find a pic till then ask someone else if she can get a pic!!!! ok i will wait for the pic .......you can send it to me online......if it is not allowed to post her pic here....

And yes its really no trouble at all!!!! 😊 I am glad always to be any help!!!
thankuuu sooo muchhh dearrr....... you seriously help others a lot.... thankuuuu

so now i am going to post another part......
thankuu and take care....
keep smiling...
sheenu....😊

Hello friends…… I am back after long time…….ya I know ppl who were reading this fic are very angry with me for not continuing but its just that I was disappointed with the response… and a little bit upset too…. So I stopped writing this one…. I thought if no one is reading then why continue…. But then I saw 2-3 ppl are really waiting for me to continue this one… (thanks rani… agar tumne aaj comment nahi diya hota to I wouldn't have continued….) so here is the next part…. Enjoy reading….

PART 2

Next day:

At 8:30 in the morning someone rings the door bell of raj's house……..

Raj opens the door and shouts: tum…..*guess who was there… yes alisha* …… but time is 9 and not 8:30…

Alisha: I know I know…. But I thought that I shouldn't be late…. After all you are an army person.. and I should have the habit of coming on time… warna future mei problem hogi……

Raj: what??? anyways I was just getting ready… you sit here… huda will be here at 8:40…..

Alisha: I will come with you na… I will help you get ready……..

Raj: no need… you sit here huda and kunal will be here at any moment…… excuse me…. And he practically runs away from there…..

Alisha: ek baar shadi ho jaye… then I won't let you go anywhere…….

At 9 all of them were present at raj's house……

Huda: accha raj bata hum sab kaise jayenge…. Hum sab 11 log kaise ek gaadi mei aayenge……….. ya tune koi bus – was to nahi ki…….

Raj:array bas ki koi jarurat nahi hai……..dekho tumhare aur kunal ke paas bike to hai hi aur mere paas open jeep…… to aisa karte hai tum aur yudi tumhari bike pe…. Kunal aur abhi uski bike pe… aur mai, navin, aalekh, ritu, shalini, Alisha aur nandini mere saath meri jeep mai aa jayenge…… thik hai……

Huda: hamare liye to thik hai… par yudi aur abhi ko dekh kaise shakal latak gayi unki…… ab unhe apne pyaar se poore safar alag rehna padega……..

Abhi: array nahi…… ye huda bhi na aise hi mazak karte rehte hai… hame koi prblm nahi hai…… hum kunal ke saath aaa jayenge……

Raj: thik hai…. so lets go… and I will keep my jeep ahead of you because I know the way….. ok so all the best to all of us….

And they start their never ending journey………..

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Raj was driving the jeep and navin was sitting beside him…..

Alekh was at the back with four girls…….

Ritu and nandini were standing and shouting……

And Alisha was just looking towards raj…..

After 1 hour inside jeep:

Alekh: raj ye kya spend se gaadi chala raha hai tu… apun kabhi is speed se bicycle bhi nahi chalata………..

Raj: shut up aalekh…… hame do bikes follow kar rahi hai.. hame unka bhi dhyan rakhna hai,……

Alisha: haan alekh… raj is right…… agar vo log picche chut gaye to jimmewar kaun hoga……. Waise aaj huda bhi kafi slow bike chala raha hai……..

Alekh (shouting): oye jaat kya ho gaya aaj tujhe…… itna roti hui speed se bike kyu chala raha hai………

Huda (shouting back): oye kaidi tu huda ki speed se bakwaas na kar…… ek to pehl baar huda kisi ko life mei follow kar raha hai…. upar se ye yudiye kha kha ke itna mota ho gaya hai ki iska bojh huda ki pyari bike ram pyari utha nahi pa rahi hai…… bechari pehle jahan 100 ke speed se chalti thi aaj 40 ki speed se chal rahi hai……..

Yudi (shouting): dude…… tum mere khane pe nazar na lagao…… mei itna nahi khata jitna tum…… tumhari khurak to ek bhais ki khurak se bhi jyada hai…..

Huda: oye yudiye tu huda ki bhais ke khane ko nazar lagata hai…… dekh huda kuch bhi bardaasht kar sakta hai… lekin koi huda ki bhais ka mazak banaye ye usse bilkul pasand nahi……..

Raj (shouting): chup karo tum log….. aur huda tu bike to tej chala nahi pa raha…. Bakwaas kare ja raha hai……. chup chap aage ke raaste pe dhyan de…. Ye raasta itna bhi sidha nahi jitna dikhta hai…… kahin koi musibat na aa jaye/………

Huda: array musibat aage se nahi aa sakti kyuki vo mere saath mere picche baithi hai………….

Raj: shut up huda…….. bike jara tej chalao…. Kunal bhi tumhari vajah se dhire chala raha hai…….. agar hum isi speed se chalte rahe to raat 12 baje ke baad jungle ke paas pahuchenge…….. jungle abhi bhi 13 hrs ki duri pe hai…. aur abhi sirf 10 baje hai…..chalo jaldi chalao……..

Yudi: kya 12 baje ke baad jungle…….. nahi raj…… huda tu bike tej chala…… raj vahan jungle safe to hai na……

Huda: oye nahi yudiye…… wahan jungle mei bahut saare bhut hai…… vo tujhe chodenge nahi…….

Raj (shouting): HUDAA……. Nahi yudi aisa kuch bhi nahi hai……. waise bhi hum jungle se nahi jaane waale…… uske saath jo alag raasta haina hum wahi se jayenge….. mai bas isliye keh raha hun… taki hum 10 baje tak jungle pahunche aur fir 12 baje tak farmhouse…. Warna kafi late ho jayega……

Huda: raj kyu baccho se jhuth bol raha hai…… pata hai yudi maine kal hi ek news suni…… usme 4 log gaadi mei ek jungle se gujar rahe the….. par vo log dusri side nahi pahunh paye…. Subah unki gaadi police ko jungle ke kinaare mili aur unki bodies ka koi pata bhi nahi chala………

Raj (shouting): huda….. tu apni bakwaas band kar aur bike tej chala….. yudi tum iski baato pe dhyan mat do….. ye tumse faaltu bakwaas kar raha hai……..

Yudi: don't worry raj……. Mujhe pata hai ye huda jhuth bol raha hai….. mujhe pata hai bhut-whut kuch nahi hote…… huda tum gaadi tej chalao…. Raj sahi keh raha hai….. hum kafi late hi jayenge teri is speed se……

Huda: jitni tej chalti hai utni chalaunga ab khush……….

Alekh: nautanki pehle chala to sahi fir boliyo………..

In this way they continue their journey….. laughing, talking, eating and much more…… coz it might be their last time together……..and also last time when they are happy……..

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After 13 hrs………….

They were near forest when…………

Yudi: raj raat ke 11 baj rahe hai….. aur tumhara jungle abhi tak nahi aaya…… tumne kaha tha 13 hrs. mei aa jaayega…..

Raj: yudi maine kaha tha ki jungle 13 hrs ki doori pe hai tab jab hum continuously drive kare…. Par bich mei ye huda khan eke liye….. fir pet saaf karne ke liye 4 baar bike rokega to yahi hoga na…… don't worry hr mei jungle ke saath waala raasta aa jaayega…..

Yudi: KYA?????/ abhi aur hr lagega……..

Alekh: to nautanki tere ko kahe ki fikar hai…… subah se drive to raj, huda aur kunal kar rahe hai…. thake hue to vo log hai…… tu kayeko pareshaan hai…… waise bhi hum jungle se nahi uske saath waale raaste se jaayenge…….

Yudi: nahi bro… vo .vo… actually haan…. Actually mujhe laga ki tiger aur lion jaise khatarnaak jaanwar raat ko hi bahar aate hai to agar vo galti se jungle se bahar nikal ke road pea a gaye to…… vo to jaanwar hai na……..

Alekh: abbe nautanki….. bhale hi vo jaanwar ho par unme bhi itni akal hai vo tujhe kha kar apna pet nahi kharab karenge……..

Yudi: BRO….. accha thik hai ab mai kuch nahi bolunga……

Huda: badi meherbani hogi aapki.,….. ek to waise hi subah se drive kar raha hun….. upar se pet bhi gadbad hai….upar se teri bak bak…….. raj next time se hum ek bus aur driver ke saath aayenge……

Raj: array pehle aaj to pahunch jao…… next time ki next time dekhenge……

In a way he was correct….. because it is not necessary that they will reach their destination…… even if they will then it is not guaranteed that they will want to come again……….

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After hr…….

Raj: lo aa gaya jungle…… par hum jungle se nahi vo jo raasta dikh raha hai na wahan se jaayenge…… ok …….chalo ……….

But their was a check post over there and it was closed……

Huda: oye raj….. ye ki hoya…. Raasta to band lagta hai……

Raj: ek min….. let me talk guys…..

Raj: officer……raj asks from a man who was sitting on a chair…….

Off: yes sir…. How can I help you???

Raj: dekhiye officer…. I am major rajveer singh shekhawat from Indian army…. Can I ask you why is this way closed???

Off: (saluting) sir….. vo actually a truck was passing through this way today but suddenly its break stopped working and I went through an accident…..

Raj: ohhh…… any causality…….

Off: thankfully no sir……. But police is investigating over there…. Also the truck was loaded with nails and ironic materials…. So until the road is clear we can't let any vehicle go from there…….

Raj: its ok officer….. but we need to go on the other side…….

Off: sir you can take the way from jungle…. Or you have to wait till tomorrow's afternoon…….

Raj: no need off…. We will go via jungle….. Thanks officer……

Off: happy journey sir…… all the best…….

Raj: thank you officer…….

Raj (returning): guys there is a problem………

Navin: what is the matter raj???

Raj explains everything to them and also that they have to go via jungle….. listening this…………

Yudi: WHAT????? NO…….. we can't go from jungle…….

Raj: and why not????

Yudi: raj jungle mei jungli jaanwar bhi honge…….. nahi hum yahan ruk jaate hai…. kal din mei is raaste se hi aage chalenge……..

Raj: paagal mat bano yudi…… hum itne saare log hai….. jungli jaanwaro se darne ki jarurat nahi….. waise bhi main suna hai is jungle mei jyada jungli jaanwar nahi hai……..hum yaha jyada der kaise rukenge…. Hum sab itni lambi drive karke yahan aaye hai… ab bas farm house pahunch ke aaraam karenge…. Usse pehle nahi….

( I think they should listen to yudi this time……oh god… I am tensed aage kya hoga..)…….

Navin: haan yudi…. I think raj is right…… hum sab thake hue hai…. ab bas farm house pahunch ke aaraam karenge usse pehle nahi……

Huda: aur tu kyu bechain hai yudiye….. drive to is huda ne karna hai…..

Raj: nahi guys…. Drive nahi kar sakte……

Huda: KYA????

Raj: haan huda…. Is jungle se drive karke nahi nikal sakte….. this jungle is very densed…. So hum prblm mei aa jaayenge agar gaadi se gaye toh……

Huda: to fir hum log jaayenge kaise……

Alekh: nautanki saala abhi bhi nahi samjha….. abbey 11 number ki bus se jayenge aur kya…..

Huda: kya paidal…. Par fir hamari gaadi aur saman vo kahan rakhenge…..

Raj: dekho us officer se bolte hai…… abhi hum chalte hai apna jaruri saman lekar….. aur usse bolte hai ki jab raasta clear ho jaye tab vo hamari gaadi hamare farm house pahuncha de….. farm house waise bhi 1 hr. ki doori pe hi to hai…

Huda: par raja b to mujhe bhi darr lag raha hai…… jungle se aur vo bhi paidal……

Yudi: dude maine kaha tha na….. ruk jaate hai yahi pe…. Kal din mei chalenge……

Alisha (first time against raj): raj mujhe bhi lagta hai ki yudi sahi keh raha hai…hum kal chalenge …………..

Shalini,ritu: nahi hum aaj hi chalte hai na….. waise bhi yahan kahan rukenge….. farm house pe jake aaraam karenge…..

Abhi: haan hame bhi lagta hai aap sahi keh rahi hai..….waise bhi yahan pehle hi kayi musibate hai….. hum chalte hai

Yudi: lekin dude…. Agar sach mei iss jungle mei bhut ya jungli jaanwaro jaisa kuch hua tho….

Navin: paagal mat bano yudi bhut-vhut kuch nahi hota…..aur tum ek army officer hoke mamuli jungli jaanwaro se darte ho….tumhare paas tumhari service pistol nahi hai kya….

Yudi: hai to sahi…..

Raj: to bas fir hamme se 8 log army mei hai… sabke paas unki service pistol hai to fir darna kaisa….. dekhna bada mazza aayega……chalo….ye safar hame jindgi bhar yaad rahega………..

(yaad to rahega par vajah kuch aur hogi mazza nahi……)

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After talking with officer they were on their way to jungle and were about to enter…… when suddenly someone shouts………….

Person: NAHINNNNNNN……… please don't enter….. please don't enter this forest…….. agar apni jaan pyari hai to don't enter this forest…… chale jao….. you will regret your decision otherwise…… CHALE JAOO……

But this voice was not enuf loud to reach those happy and cheerful 11 people…… coz this voice was suppressed by another hand……….

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End of part……

I seriously don't think that this part was upto the mark…but I am continuing this after 1 long month so I will try to write more interesting part next time…. But plz if u r reading then comment ….. tell whatever you want to….but comment……

Comments are necessary for me to continue……

Thanks for reading….

Take care….

B bye,…….

Keep smiling……

Sheenu……..

HEY THE PART WAS REALLY GOOD 👏 ..IT REALLY HAD ANY EERY FEELING.. KYA MAZZA AAYA.. ITS LOOKS LIKE A PUZZLE, A MYSTERY (BHOOT).. IT WILL BE LOVELY.. SO PLS CARRY ON YAAR.. I WILL BE WAITING


LOTS OF LOVE
RANU 😃

Too good!!!Mindblowing!!!

I just hate this Alisha!!!Jab dekho chipakti raheti hai!!!! 😡 😡 😡 Fevicol hai kya???

Aur yeh Huda bhi naa.........jab dekho bakwas karta rehta hai!!!Aur Yudi ko chedta rehta hai!!!! 😡 😡 😡

Par yaar I am still very much getting reminded of Kya Hadsaa Kya Haqeeqt ___ Kash-m-Kash!!!Kuch friends .... jugle...uske par ek farmhouse!!!!But continue!!!!

Yaar inhe bhi naa ........... raat ko hi jana hai!!!Kaash Yudi ki baat man lete!!!Unhe kuch hogaya toh!!!!

Yeh bahaduri dikhana zaroori hai kya??? 😡

Oh and by the way I hve thought of another option ofr Alisha!!!How about Sanaya of Kucch Ish Tarah and Jwala of Kasautii Zindagi Kii???

Continue.....you are going great!!!!