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sheenu

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Posted: 17 years ago

#11

Its a very long part... have fun enjoy.......

PART – I
BC OFFICE:

Voice: May I come in sir?
BC : come in

BC : yes, major nair.

MC : sir, aaj KMA ka naya batch aane wala hai..

BC : I know that major.

MC : Sir, aapse kuch puchna tha

BC: Shoot major.

MC : sir, kya aaj se ek naya faculty member bhi KMA join karega??

BC : yes major.. Captain Rajveer Singh Shekhawat aaj KMA aayenge..

MC : lekin sir yahan ek aur faculty member ki kya jarurat hai??

BC : aap itna sochna chod dijiye major. Kma ko kiski jarurat hai kiski nahi ye decide karma hamara aur higher authorities ka kaam hai aapka nahi..

MC : sorry sir..

(Knock knock)

BC : come in

Orderly : sir vo KMA ka naya batch aa gaya hai..

BC : ok.. major nair aap un sab cadets ko eke k kar ke andar bhejen..

MC : ok sir..

(knock knock)

BC : come in

Person: cadet yaduvansh sahni reporting sir..

BC : at ease cadet..

Yudi : thanku sir

BC : Toh cadet sahni aap apne mata pita ke khilaf jakar KMA join karne aaye hai… I am impressed cadet..

Yudi: well sir mere mom dad chahte the ki mai MBA karu lekin u see sir mai
Hamesha se apne desh k liye kuch karma chahta tha kuch naam
Kamana chahta tha … ek mard I mean ek sakht insaan banna chahta
U see sir ek army captain ki kya body hoti hai, kya style hota hai, kya personality hoti hai…

BC : stop cadet.. aap army mai kyu aana chahte hai mujhe samajh aa gaya.. aap ja sakte hain… aapka room no. aap suriji se puch lijiyega…

Yudi : ok sir, thank you..

BC : Next..

BC : toh cadet pooja ghai.. aapko sports ke through admission mila hai.. aapko kya lagta hai aap is academy mei tik payengi>>

Pooja(muttered under her breath.. tikna bhi kise hai is academy mei..) : in loud voice sir mera connection bhale hi sports ke card pe charge hua ho lekin ek din mai is desh ka permanent security code banker dikhaungi.

BC : what cadet???

Pooja : mere kehne ka matlab hai sir ki mai ek din sipahi jarur banungi..

BC : dekhte hai cadet… ok u may leave now.. apna room no. subedar Lolita sen se pooch lijiyega..

Pooja : thankyou sir..

BC : next

Voice : may I come sir..

BC : Come in cadet beig

BC : toh cadet ali beig aapke pita ek subedar the.. aur aap apne khandaan ki parampara ko nibhane aur ek army captain banne aaye hai..

Ali : yes sir,

BC : ok aap ja sakte hai.. apna room no. suriji se pooch lijiyega..

Ali : thankyou sir,… jai hind sir…

BC : jai hind cadet..

BC : next

Voice : apun andar aa sakta hai kya???

BC : come in cadet sharma

BC : toh cadet sharma aap yahan jail se aaye hai… sudharne k liye..

Alekh: apun aaya nahi hai.. bheja gaya hai..

BC : toh aap sudharna nahi chahte cadet.

Alekh: apun ko sudhar ki koi jarurat nahi..

BC : aapne khun kiya hai cadet.. aur aap kehte hai aapko sudhar ki jarurat nahi..

Alekh : apun ne khun nahi kiya is dharti ka bojh kam kiya hai..

BC : toh aap yahan aana nahi chahte the

Alekh: apun sudharne k liye is desh k dushmano ko sudharne k liye aaya hai..

BC : well cadet jab authorities ne aapko yahan bhej hi diya hai to hum kya kar sakte hai.. jayiye apna room no. suriji se pooch lijiye..

Alekh : apun chalta hai.. jai hind sir.

BC : next

Voice : may I come in sir

BC : Come in cadet gupta.

BC : toh cadet gupta just one ques.. aapko kya lagta hai ladki hokar aap kuch kar payengi..

Simi : Sir ladki hone se is desh ke liye pyar kam nahi ho jata.. jaan dene ka irada kam nahi ho jata.. aur dushmano ko maat dene ki khwaish fiki nahi pad jati..

BC(thought) : (same lines pehle bhi ek baar suni hai lekin vo insaan ab mere sath nahi hai)

BC : ok cadet u may leave apna room no. subedar Lolita sen se le lena..
Simi : ok sir.. thankyou sir.. jai hind sir

BC : jai hind cadet..

BC : next
……..
BC : next

MC : sir vo cadet amardeep huda abhi taka aye nahi hai

BC: kya pehle hi din late..

MC : sir vo

BC : ab us cadet se kehna ki use yahan aane ki koi jarurat nahi.. vo yahan se…(interrupted)

Voice: may I come in sir

BC : come in

Person: cadet amardeep huda reporting sir

BC : cadet aap late hai

Huda: o jee toh kya hota hai.. vo to apni bike hain na uski been baj gayi aate aate toh ab isme ye jat kya kar sakta hai..
BC : cadet itna over confident hona achi baat nahi..kyuki aaj aapka pehla din hai isliye aapko jane diya.. aainda se late mat hoiyega..

Huda : ye huda na jananiyon ki kasam khata ab kabhi late nahi hoga

BC : aap ja sakte hai cadet.. apna room no subedar suriji se le lena..

Huda: ok sirji..

BC : is year ka batch kafi interesting hai..

MC : sir vo captain aane wale the..

BC : I know major bas pahunchne wale honge..(kash captain tum ne hamari beti ko hamse dur nahi kiya hota.. )

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KMA ENTRANCE

Person : ye hi vo jagah hai jahan tujhe gaddar kaha gaya tha navin… mai &nb sp; &nb sp; &nb sp;
tujhse vada karta hun ki is baar tujhe insaaf jarur milega… us din
main ek nahi do sabse ache dost khoye the ….. Is baar mai tujhe
begunaah sabit karke rahunga aur sath hi apne aap ko bhi…..

orderly : aapko kahan jana hai sir??

Person : BC office and I know the way I will manage

Orderly : ok sir..
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BC OFFICE

Person : may I come in sir??

BC : come in

Person : captain Rajveer singh shekhawat reporting sir..

BC : at ease captain

Raj : sir..

BC : toh captain … aaj teen salo baad fir mulaqat ho hi gayi.. kaise hai aap??

Raj : I am perfectly fine sir.. thankyou

BC : fine toh aap honge hi dusro ko dard dekar kaun khush nahi rehta…

Raj:………….

BC : well captain … aap jante hain aap yahan kyu aaye hain???

Raj: yes sir..

BC : ye file lijiye.. is file mei aapko aapke mission ki sari details mil jayengi..
.. baki sab details aapko aapke officers ne bat ahi di hongi…

Raj : yes sir..

BC : Toh captain aap yahan strategy and communication padayenge…aapka
Fav subject I see….

Raj : yes sir..

BC : you may leave now captain.. you may ask your number from suriji.. He
He is in mess right now..

Raj : ok sir
………….
BC : aap kiska wait kar rahe hai captain???

Raj : w..wo sir… I want to ask you something..

BC : shoot captain

Raj : sir, Naina….(interrupted by BC)

BC : CAPTAIN (in loud voice)… aap apne kaam se kaam rakhiye… Naina
Kahan hai…. kya kar rahi hai.. apko batana mai jaruri nahi samajhta
………aaj aapki wajah se hi mai apni bacchi Naina se mil bhi nahi
Sakta… aap ja sakte hai……….

Raj : sorry sir, I will take your leave now sir… thankyou sir…
…….
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BC : pata nahi Raj tumme aur Naina mei aisa kya hua ki vo apni shadi k eek din baad navin ki maut ke din hum sabse dur chali gayi………
Aur yahan kabhi laut kar nahi aana chahti……..

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Raj : kash Naina tum samajh pati mai bekasur hoon … maine Navin ko nahi
Maara…. Kaash us din tumne mujhe explain karne ka ek mauka diya
Hota …. Kaash us din tum mujhse mile bina kahin chali na jati..kaash..
Jab mujhe mere sabse acche dost ki jarurat thi tum to yahan thi hi nahin.. kaash tum yahan waapas aa jao…………

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END OF PART I

Kafi lamba tha… uffffffff.. I m tired now… plz tell me how was it…

Preview: flash back of what had happened in life of Raj, Naina and Navin…
And some good moments of new cadets….

Next part will be on Tuesday…

Thankyou…
C ya…
B bye.. take care…
Sheenu…

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sheenu

@rogerfan

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Posted: 17 years ago

#12

[Quote=friend forever]hey that's really interesting.............nice plot....chalo kuch to different milega.....and my rn..woh !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! kya baat hai!!!!!!!!!

plz continue

thanks a lot dear..
i m glad u liked the plot.......
and RN wo toh sabke fav. hain toh fic bhi unhi k upar hi hai......

keep commenting....

ur comments mean a lot to me....

take care...
gud bye....
luv ya...
sheenu... 😊 😊

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Yasmin

@Yazzi

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 17 years ago

#13

the first part was wonderful, good to see you kept all the cadets the same.
btw simran reminded of naina, does she by any chance know her, any ways great job 👏

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Usha Rani

@quietrajpri1623

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#14

the first part was quite interesting.love the whole part.u r rocking in the 1st part what will happen when u will give the next part.great update.thanku sooo much for this fabulous update

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koolarch2001

@koolarch2001

Explorer

Posted: 17 years ago

#15

👏 👏 .. and very good that you are goin to update regularly.. thanx...

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fanatic 21

@fanatic 21

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#16

nice start............it really sounds good............loved d first part.....

updt soon

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Shaina_b

@Shaina_b

Trailblazer

+ 2

Posted: 17 years ago

#17

Very nice!!!Very good!!!!

But that last line was frm KKHH na??

And one thing ...some things I would like to tell you.

Its Subedar Major Lolita Sen.KMA is of two years and after passing out they become Leiutanents!!!!

And yes update regularly!!!

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VEETI

@VEETI

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#18

nice update..... 😊 really liked it continue soon

well finally i have deciced to start reading these FFs coz i was really missing out sumthing by not doing so

your's is the first that i have ever read

my father would be happy that i finallly developed some reading habit 😆 😆

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sheenu

@rogerfan

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#19

[qoute=friend forever]wonderful........................................
update soon

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thanks dear........
i m updating right now....

and keep commenting.... your comments mean a lot to me....

luv ya...
take care....
sheenu 😊 😊

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sheenu

@rogerfan

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#20

I m sorry guys… my net is creating problems…. I m not able to reply you all…. But I promise I will reply to all of you tomm….. but I think right now you all must be more interested in update… so I am updating……… thank you all for bearing with me…

Anyways can anyone please tell me how to edit the title of topic after updating it…. I just don't know it……

Enjoy reading…

PART - II [COLOR = BLUE]

[COLOR = BLUE] After talking with BC, captain Rajveer move towards mess. In mess we see a middle-aged person shouting over some orderlies with his back towards gate..

Person: Oye khotyo aaj KMA ka naya batch aaya hai… kuch hi der mei vo log khana khane aane wale honge aur tum logo me ab tak koi kaam shuru nahi kiya… chalo jaldi jaldi kaam mail ago warna tumhare dono kaano mei sar kar dunga…

Raj smiles and move towards that's person and says
Raj: Chalo Chalo kaam mei lago warna Suriji ne jo kaha hai vo karke dikhayenge… waise bhi ab inhe is umar mei itni takleef nahi leni chahiye..

Suriji turns and says
Suriji: Raj puttar!!!!!........ tu yahan….. kab aaya???? Kaisa????? Kaisa hai???

Raj: Suriji itne saare sawal…. Chaliye eke k karke batata hun… mei yahan abhi ek ghante pehle aaya hun…. BC se milke sidha idhar aa raha hun aur haan ab mei is academy mei teacher hun aur strategy and communication padaunga…

Suriji: matalb ab tu is academy mei rahega… vadiya hai puttar……. Chal pehle tu fresh hoke aa.. tera rum wohi hairoom number 5 jisme naveen rehta tha jab vo yahan aaya tha..(becomes sad for a moment) and then says… chal ja aur jaldi aa …tab tak mei tera manpasand aaloo parantha aur dahi tayyar karta hun…In khotyo se to kuch hoga nahi….

Raj smiles and turns to go when
Suriji: Raj puttar…

Raj: Ji Suriji….

Suriji: Tu Naina se mila???

Raj: (sad) nahi Suriji aurab mai bahut thaka hua hun aur aaram karma chahta hun..(tears in his eyes but he prevents them from flowing…. Typical Raj….)

Suriji: chal ja puttar.. aur jaldi aaio.. varna khana thanda ho jayega…

Suriji(in his mind) – Janta hun puttar vo tujhse naraj hai.. lekin vo teri sabse acchi dost reh chuki hai aur mera dil kehta hai ki vo ek din tujhe jarur samjhegi… mujhe aaj bhi yaad hai vo jab ek mahina yahan rahi thi to tum aur naveen kitne khush huye the…

When Raj moves towards door he saw our new six cadets entering the mess. One of them gets shocked seeing Raj over there and thought( Captain Rajveer yahan pe itni jaldi… mujhe usse batana hoga…) and soon that cadet get involved in the conversation…

Huda: Oye Simran ji… mei aapkko apni Rajesh se milvaunga…

Simi: What nonsense!!!!!!!! Rajesh naam to ladke ka hai par tum baat ladki ki kar rahe ho…

Huda: O ji… Rajesh na to ladki hai na hi ladka….
Simi: WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!

Huda: O ji fikar not…. Rajesh to meri bhains hai… badi pyari.. sundar aur dudh bhi khub deti hai… jab tum mere ghar aaogi to mai tumhe vo dudh pilaunga.. taki tumhari bhi kuch sehat ban jaye.. vo kya hai na meri mammiji kehti hai ladki to hari-bhari honi chahiye…

Simi: Shut up and get lost…
Huda: O ji lost to hun hi mei tumhari in pyari aur khubsurat aankhon mei..

Suddenly Huda who was walking without seeing bumps in a table and falls on the ground….
Aalekh( while drinking): Nautanki saala… Gira hua insaan…

Yudi: Dude tum itna hi lost rahoge aankho mei to yahi hoga na apna rasta bhi bhul jaoge..

Pooja: Oye jat tu hamesha itna hi girta hai ya kabhi kabhi isse jyada bhi gir jaata hai..

Ali: Aap sab inka mazzak udana band karenge.. ye gir gaye hai.. chaliye guru uth jayiye

Aalekh: Apun ko ye insaan itna gira hua lagta hai ki kabhi uth nahi sakta..

Huda: Oye kaidi( while standing) dekh mei to uth gaya ab kya bolega…

Simi: Vo tumhari nahi tumhare character ki baat kar raha hai.. jab se aaye ho sab ladkiyon ke piche bhaag rahe ho tum..

Huda: Oye kudiye tujhe badi jalan ho rahi hai… chal aaj se Huda sirf tere piche bhaagega..

Simi: huhhhh…. Impossible……..

Suriji: Oye khotyo kya ladayi kar rahe ho chalo chalo khana tayyar hai chalo sab khana kha lo… by the way I am Subedar Suri…

All: Hello Suriji…..

Suriji: Oye hello hai ji hello….chalo sab apna naam batao aur apne khane ki plate lete jao….

………………………………………………………………………..

Meanwhile in Raj's Room:

Raj: Navven yaar jab se yahan aaya hun teri aur hi yaad aane lagi hai.. kaash tu is waqt mere paas hota.. mujhe teri bahut jarurat hai yaar…. Aaj mujhe apne bachpan ke din baar baar yaad aa rahe hai…

He leans back in the chair, closes his eyes and then lost in the past.

17 years ago:

We see a 9 yr old boy shouting
Mann…. Mann……… Ruk na mann……

We see a 6 yr old girl running towards house while crying…

Girl: sob sob……. Mamma papa… auntyyyyyyyyy……….uuunn uuuuuuuuuuunnnnn

We then see two ladies sitting on the chair. One of them picks up the girl and says
Lady: Alle alle Naina beta kya hua???? Tum ro kyu rahi ho?????

Girl: uuuuuunnn uuuuun nnnnn……. Aunty *sob* *sob*…. Veer aur Bhai ne meri doll ko paani mei phek diya…. Uuuunnnn uuuuunnnnn……….

Another lady shouts: …RAJJJJJJJJJJJ….. NAVEENNNNNNN…..

We then see two 9 yr old boys coming there (running)
Boy1: mamma aapne bulaya….
Lady (holding his ears) : mamma ke bacche .. ye Naina kya keh rah hai…. tune iski Gudiya paani mei kyu pheki….

Boy2: Aunty vo hamne socha ye apni gudiya ko bhi apni tarah nahi nehlati.. to hame bechari pe taras aa gaya aur hamne use paani mei nahane ke liye chod diya….

Lady2: Naveennnnnnn …. Vo tumhari behen hai…..

Naveen: haan haan.. isi baat ka to gam hai…… Ye Naina ki bachi meri behen hai…

Naina: BHAIIIIIIIIIIIII…… uuuunnnnnnn… mamma dekho na bhai kya keh raha hai……

Raj: kyu kya galat keh raha hai…. tum yahan ho is baat ka to kitna bada gam hai….

Naina: … VEERRRRRRRRRRR…… Mai ab tumse kabhi baat nahi karungi…
Raj : accha accha sorry… mai tumhare liye nahi gudiya leke aaunga…

Naina: nahi tumne kaha ki mera hona bahut bura hai… mai tumse nahi bolungi…

Raj: Please aisa mat karo…. Tumhe pata hai mei veer sune bina nahi reh sakta aur Rajveer singh Shekhawat ko veer bulane ka haq to sirf Naina singh Ahluwalia ko hai… hai na….

Naina smiles a little and says: pata hai… jaisa Naina Singh Ahluwaliya ko Mann bulane ka haq sirf Rajveer Singh Shekhawat ko hai…

Naveen: Rajjjjjjjj… tu is chuhiya se mil gaya…

Raj: nahi yaar naveen is chuhiya ko bevakoof banana kitna asaan hai…

Naina: VEERRRRRRRRR……….

She starts running after the two boys…

Mrs. Shekhawat: Ye bacche kitne pyare hai… ladte hai par ek dusre se pyar bhi bahut karte hai.. aur ye Raj aur Naina ne to ek dusre ke liye nick name bhi rakh liye hai jise koi aur use nahi kar sakta…

Mrs. Ahluwalia: haanab dekho na… abhi lad rahe par shaam ko ye dono khud hi Naina ko apne haatho se khana khilayenge…. Aur fir usse jaake uske teddy ke sath sula ke aayenge…

Mrs. Shekhawat: In baccho ko kisi ki nazar na lage….

A tear drops from Raj's eyes and a sad smile appears on his face as he says
……………..Nazar to lag gayi mom tumhare baccho ko………….

15 years ago:

Two 11 yr old boys and an 8 yr old girl were sitting in the lawn….

Raj: Mann ye tu kya kar rahi hai……itni badi hokar mitti se khelti hai

Naina: veeerrrrrr… ye mere plants hai… jab ye bade ho jayenge to bahut sundar lagenge..
Navven: Yaar chod na ye theri paagal.. aur tujhe pata hai ki paagal kuch bhi karte rehte hai…

Naina: BHAIIII…. Mei paagal nahi hun..
Raj: Haan naveen kyu paagalo ki beizzati kar raha hai…….
Naina: VEERRRRR………..

Raj: Kya mann…. Mai sabit karta hun ki tum sabse badi paagal aur rondhu (who cries a lot) ho….. ye dekho….
And he started destroying all small plants….
And Naina as he said shouts and starts crying….:…. Veerrrrrrrrrrrr …..uuunnnn…..uuuuuuuuuunnnnnnnnnnn………….while the two boys started laughing…….

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Meanwhile we see that a person is talking on phone
Person(P1): Captain Shekhawat academy mei hai…

Person on phone(P2): WHAT???????? Kab se?????

P1: I don't know lekin lagta hai aaj hi aaye hai..
P2: ohkkkk…. Mujhe lagta hai mujhe bhi KMA jaldi aana hoga…

P1: kab tak……..

P2: pata nahi lekin jaldi pata chalega… mujhe uncle se baat karni hogi…

P1: ohkkk……

P2: chalo.. bye…. Aur tum apni padayi ka dhyan rakhna…. Yaad hai.. mujhe kitni mushkil huyi hai tumhe wahan bhejne mei… ab apni padayi puri karo aur is desh ka naam roshan karo.. Make a good soldier out of yourself…

P1: jarur bye….and cuts the phone…

P2: mujhe lagta hai aaj teen saalo ke baad KMA jaane ka waqt aa gaya haiab mai puri tarah se tayyar hun aura b mai bhai ki maut ka sabse badla le sakti hun…. Captain Rajvver tumne chahe job hi kiya ho…chahe mai tumse kitni bhi nafrat karti hun…lekin ek baat to tai hai ki tum bhi bhai ko begunaah mante ho aur tum meri madat kar sakte ho… and then she turns and we see her face…. She is……………………. Captain Doctor Naina Singh Ahluwalia………………..

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In Raj's room we see that he is still lost somewhere in his past but with a sad smile……………………

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End of PART II
Uffffffffff…. Finally finished writing this part………..
I know this part was not up to the mark…
But next time I will try to write a good part…. Actually I am writing for the first time in my life so I am still in very beginning stage…. But in future I will try to make the part more interesting……

I think next part will be on Friday coz I have 2 presentations on Thursday and 1 on Friday plus an assignment is due to submit on Friday so please bear with me……

Preview: Flashback continues…………..
Thankyou…
C ya…
Luv you all………
B bye.. take care…
Sheenu…

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