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Posted: 17 years ago
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no comments??? does ne one like it????? plzzz tell me if i should continue or not... 😭
Edited by Umam_Paracha_13 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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k guys! there will be a huge twist coming in my ff!...
Here is a promo:

There was a huge explossion
Prerna: NAHI! she breaks down
Soon the whole building collapes
Everyone is shocked
2 years later:

Prerna is gone shopping and she c's something really shocking!
who was in the building? who did Prerna c???

to be continued...
plzz comment! ill continue soon!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Sorry guys for the SUPER late update!!! But ill try and make this update long! okie

soooo....

Mukti wakes up and c's Prem next to her...going on...

Part 4

She sits there for a while remembering wat happened last night..she started to cry...she couldn't believe wat she did....she slowly got up and looks around the room...she goes to the wash room and locks the door.

5 mins later Prem wakes up and heads for the washroom and turns the knob but it was locked.
Prem: EYY kaun hai!
Mukti quickly opened the door and ran out of the room.
Prem quickly realizes that, that was Mukti...and turns to run after her.
Mukti doesn't stop running until she got to the ladies room, Prem enter with out taking notice of the gaurds around. There were other girls in there but Prem started yelling and told them to leave..soon wen all the girls left he locked the door.
Prem: Mukti...meri baa...
Mukti: Nahi Prem! Jao Yahan Se!
Prem: lsten to me Mukti...wat ever happened last night...ull have to forget...
Mukti: kaise bhool jao?
Prem: Mukti tumhari shaadi hone wali hai i dont think u want Rudraksh to find out ne thing baout this..and if he does then Mother India well be humiliated in front of her own sister...
Mukti: Prem...mein tumhe kaise batao?? Prem...pehli baath..mein Rudraksh se shaadi nain karsakti..aur doosri baath hai ke..i l...
They heard banging on the door the guards were trying o get in...
Prem turned around and opened the door, the guards came in..
" Wats happening here??? y did u come running into the girls washroom???" asked one of the Guards.
Prem: voh...voh...
Guards: if u came here with bad intentions then ill have to take u to the police station..
Prem: no sir..its nothing like that mein bas kuch ppochne aaya tha...(he turns back to Mukti) sorry
and he leaves.
The Guards ask if wat he said was right and Mukti nodded
The guards asked if she was ok and she nodded the guards left...
Mukti walked out and saw Prem standing by the door...Mukti was waling away wen Prem grabbed her hand and told her to stop...
Prem: tum kya keh rahi thi andar? ke tumRudraksh se shaadi nahi kar sakti..voh to tumhe karni parey gi... aur voh doosri baath jo tum kehne wali thi..voh mujhe batao...
Mukti: nahi theek hai mein Rudraksh se shaadi nahi karoongi kyon ki jis insaan se mujhe shaadi karni hai voh to kabhi shaadi nahi karega...Prem...jis insaan se mein pyaar karthi hoon voh tum ho!
Prem looks shocked.
Mukti: aur ab mein Rudraksh se shaadi nahi karoongi...mein ja rahi hoon...meine pehle se hi ek flight ki ticket book kiya hain...mein aaj hi ja rahi hoon...bye Prem...
she turns to leve again but Prem was still holding her hand.
Prem: nahi tum nahi jaa sakti..Mukti..Tumhari Maa-Baap ke bare mein to socho..
Mukti: tumhe kab se sab ki chinta hone laga?
Prem: voh..voh..
Mukti: nahi Prem...plz mujhe nahi roko aur...mujhe yeh bhi nahin pooch ke mein kaha jaa rahi hoon...kyon ki mein kabhi wapas nahin aongi..aur mere maa-baap ko yeh batana ke mein margi...bye
She leaves.

Basu house:

Prem was walking to the door and was thinking
Mujhe itni thakleef kyon ho rahi hai…mein use pyaar nahin kartha…sirf voh mujhse pyaar karti hai…toh aaj uske jane ke baad mujhe kyon thakleef ho rahi hai? Mere dil mein kyon dard ho raha hai? Kyon kyon???
He enters the house and c's everyone in the living room..
Kiran and Ramesh had tears in there eyes. Kiran went right up to Prem and slapped him.
Kiran: kahan hai meri beti! Badmaash! Meri Beti Kahan Hai!
She screamed as tears ran down her face.
Ramesh also came and slapped Prem
Ramesh: humhe pata hai ke voh yahan se jane ke baad tumhare saath club gayi thi…ab humhe batao ke voh kahan hai!
Prem was silent…soon anu and Prerna came and both asked him were she was…but still Prem didn't answer.
Prerna: Humhe Bata Ke Mukti Kahan Hai Prem!
"Mein yahan hoon"
Kiran turned around and ran to Mukti:
Kiran: meri beti…tu wapas agayi…
Prem turn around in shock…
Kiran: lekin yeh bags?
Mukti: mein jaa rahi hoon…
Kiran: kahan ja rahi ho? Aur…kaise??? Kyon???
Mukti: mein apko yeh nahin bata sakti ke mein kahan ja rahi hon…kyon ja rahi hoon lekin mein yeh zoroor bata sakti hoon ke mein rudraksh se shaadi nahin kar sakti…sorry Choti Ma but I can't ek aur baath…mein yahan sirf isi liye ayi kyon ki mujhe ashirwaad chaiye the…
She goes to Prerna-Anurag and Kiran-Ramesh then on her way out she stops and looks @ Prem…
"Mukti nahin jao…plz…mein tumhare aage haath jor thi hoon plz…nahi jao!"
Kiran came running from behind…
Mukti: nahin maa, mein jaa rahi hoon…bye…aur Prem ek aur baath…
Prem looks up…
Mukti: i..(she looks around)love you…bye..
And she runs out…
Kiran realizes something
Kiran: sab tumhari vaja se ho raha hai! Sab Tumhari vaja se!
She turns and slaps Prem again
Kiran: tumhari vaja se aaj meri beti apna ghar chod ke chali gayi! Tumhari vaja se!
She starts hitting him harder and harder…then Prerna comes and tries to pull Kiran away from Prem but she wouldn't move…finally she did and said…
" yaad Rakhna Prem…aaj meri beti tumhare vaja se ghar chod ke chali gayi…lekin ek din voh wapas ayegi aur tum pachtaoge! Yaad rakhna meri baath Prem! Yaad rakhna!"

Sorry its not as long as I wanted but this much is fine for now and ill try to update a lot during these couple of weeks…and there well be no Valentine spcial for my ff…so hope u liked and plz comment!!!! Luv ya

Umam
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey wonderful update. please make Mukti come back & Prem fall in love with her
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Posted: 17 years ago
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finally updated..haan newayz thankx 4 da lovely update and please continue sooon.....luv ya raym 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hey guys, here is the next update!!!

Part 5

6 months later

Ever Since Mukti has gone Prem has felt nothing but sad...he wanted her back and had fallen in love with her, he has got feelings towards his family and relatives…Simi and Ruhaan got engaged and the next month is there shaadi…but sadness has crossed there paths as Kiran and Ramesh both die in a car accident.

One night Ruhaan was going out somewhere when he saw someone walk past the outhouse. He runs towards the outhouse and see's a lady standing there looking up @ a window.
Ruhaan: Hey! Kaun Hai!
The lady starts to runs away. Ruhaan looks @ the window were the lady was looking and it was Prem's room.
Ruhaan goes back inside and goes to Prem,
Ruhaan: bhaiya…kya aap Kisi lardki ke saath aaj raat kahin jaa rahe hai?
Prem:….shayad tum kyon pooch rahe ho?
Ruhaan: bas mein bahar Gaya tha…aur koi lardki aap ke kirki pe aapke intezaar kar rahi thi…mein use kaha ke kaun hai aur voh bhag gayi…
Prem: oh lekin mein koi lardki ke saath kahin jaa raha hi nahi toh…mujhe nahi pata ke voh kaun hai…
Ruhaan: okay mein bas pooch raha tha…acha theek hai….bye…he leaves.

Outside:

The Lady is still leaving…and she bumps into someone…it was Prerna
Prerna: Tu! Yahan kya kar rahi hai….chali ja...agar kisine dekh liya toh??? Jao yahan se….
The lady runs off

The next Day Prem heads out for a jog, and notices something on the ground…its was shiny so it caught his attention…it was a necklace…her couldn't figure out were he had seen it before and just picked it up and left to start his jog.

Breakfast Table:

Prerna: Sneha! Theek se kha beta!
Sneha: nahin mama I'm fine…waise hi mujhe itna khana ki kya zuroorat???
Prerna: tujhe nahin pata…lekin pregnancy ke doran(throughout) khana zaida khana chaiye…
Sneha: lekin mama…
Prerna: nahi beta…
They keep arguing.
Yuvraj: are are are…kya ho raha hai…
Prerna: dekho Na yeh kuch khati hi nahi!
Sneha: Yuvraj inse kaiye ke yeh Aram Karen mein to abhi 2 mahine ki hoon…abhi se itna khana khilayengi to….kya hoga mera!???
Yuvraj: nahi Sneha aise nahi kar the apni mama ki bath suno...aur khalo! He starts laughing…
Sneha: tum bhi Na! She leaves.
Ruhaan and Simi come down to breakfast together…
Yuvi: wah bhai wah! Dono love birds saath saath kya nahi karein ge???
Ruhaan: are mama plz aap bhaiya ko samjaye…ke log yahan khana khane ke liye ate hai…hasne ke liye nahi!
They all start laughing and Yuvi was quiet…
Yuvi: theek hai…chalo khao!
Simi: ek minute….she runs to the mandir… (You know the area in the house were they pray right…) she goes and takes ashirwaad….
Thank you Mama…Papa! ...aur haan...Mukti ko theek thak rakhein! Then she goes back and they all have breakfast.

Soon Prem arrives home and was walking inside when he saw the lady walk by…yeh toh nahi hai voh lardki jis ke barein mein Ruhaan mujhe bata raha tha?? Mein abhi ja ke dekhta hoon (thinks) he goes and see's the lady standing by the window, looking @ his window…
Prem: excuse me?? Kya aap mujhe doondh rahi hai?
The lady turned around as soon as she heard the voice…but her dupatta kept her face covered.
Prem: kya mein aapko janta hoon?
The lady turned around right away and started running towards the gate.
Prem: ek minute! (He grabbed her hand before she could go any further.)
Then the scene when Mukti left @ the hotel flashed in his mind
Prem turns her by the hand slowly and says "Mukti?"
When the lady turns around her dupatta flies off her face and lands on Prem's. Right then she runs away. She was standing by the Gate trying to hide…and soon Prem left with the dupaatta in his hands, The Lady was watching Prem leave then she turns and it appears to be Mukti.

Inside Basu House:

Anurag and Prerna were sitting and having a discussion about Simi and Ruhaan's shaadi, when Prem enters, when seeing Prem both Anu and Prerna stand up and ask him what happened…Prem said that he saw a lady looking at his window and when he asked if she was looking for him she ran away but her dupatta was left behind…he also said that he has a feeling its Mukti.
Prerna: yeh…yeh tu kya keh raha hai??? Voh Mukti kaise ho sakti hai…Mukti toh…humhe kuch mahine pehle hi chod ke chali gayi…voh kabhi wapas nahi ayegi
Prem: lekin…mujhe lagta hai ke voh Mukti hi thi…koi bath nahi…mein chalta hoon…zara fresh hoke ata hoon…and he leaves.
Prerna…agar Prem ko pata chal gaya ke voh Mukti hi hai...toh Mukti ki raaz ke bare mein kya hoga???

Prerna goes to her room and locks the door; she takes her phone out and dials a number.
Prerna: hello…Mukti…kya tu aaj Prem se mili????
Mukti: Choti Maa! haan aaj Prem ne mujhe dekh liya…usne mujhe chua…lekin mein vahan se bhag gayi…voh mujhe pukar raha tha, lekin mein vahan ruk nahi saki…
Prerna: dekh Mukti Prem ko lagta hai ke voh lardki tu hi hai...ab voh tujhe wapas la kar hi rahe ga…aur teri raaz???
Mukti: nahi choti maa kisi bhi had thak kisi ko pata nahi chal sakta hai ke…bas choti maa kisi ko nahi batao plz.
Prerna: mein try karoongi beta…
Mukti starts crying on the phone: jab Prem ko pata chale ga ke voh baap bane wala hai toh voh….kaise react karega…voh mujhe nahi pata…lekin voh bura react karega…aur mein is bache ko waisi zindagi nahi de sakti…Choti Maa…mein abortion kyon nahi kar sakti????
Prerna: MUTKI! Tu theek toh hai…agar tu abortion karegi toh tu mar sakti hai…aur mein tujhe kho nahi sakti…tere maa baap ke marne ke baad tere jo reaction hua tha…teri halaat aur hi bahar gayi hai…mein ujhe akela nahi chod saki…mein ek kaam karti hoon…mein sab ko kheti hoon ke meri maa o bohot bura bukhar hai…aur mein uske bpaas3-4 mahine reh ke wapas aongi…theek hai
Mukti: nahi choti maa…mein theek hoon aur mein toh waahan rooz ati hoon…chup chup ke…mujhe kuch nahi hoga…mein apni bohot khayal rakhti hoon…dont worry about me…
Prerna: theek hai Mukti ab mein rakhti hoon…bye
Mukti: bye choti maa….they both hang up.

Prerna unlocks the door and opens the door to find Prem standing there, he looked shocked.
Prerna: Prem…tu…
Prem: aapko pata hai ke Mukti kahan hai!
Prerna: nahi…mujhe kaise pata hoga??
Prem: aap abhi usi se bath kar rahi thi…apne Mukti ka naam liya…mein suna..
Prerna: tere kaan baj rahe honge…mein Mukti ka naam kyon boloon??? Mein toh…Ruhaan se bath kar rahi thi…
Prem: aap Ruhaan se phone pe bath kar rahi thi…lekin voh toh ghar men hai…
Prerna: …oh ho…sorry sorry sorry…mein Simi se bath kar rahi thi..
Prem: darvasa baandh kar ke?
Prerna: haan ghalti se lock hogaya tha…
Prem looks away sadly and walks to his room, Prerna goes downstairs when Anurag asks her…
Anu: Prerna chalo humhe bohot important meeting ke liya jana hai…
Prerna: theek hai chalo…

Prem: Mother India…Prem was back in Prerna's room, he didn't c her there and he was about to leave when he saw her phone on her bed…he goes to her phone and goes to dialed calls and phoned the last dialed call.
"hello Choti Maa"
Prem was speechless…Prerna lied to him…Mukti was here in Mumbai…and she hid the truth from everyone…
Mukti: hello…Choti M…
Prem: Mukti…
This time Mukti was shocked…she quickly hung up the phone, then turned her phone off
Prem re-dialed the call and heard, he phone is out of reach, plz try again later…her tried again and again…but it didn't work.
Mother India lied to all of us…how could she…I have been waiting for Mukti so long…wait…why was I waiting for Mukti…I don't love her…but wait why is she back…she said she was leaving for ever…then why'd she come back???? But if nobody knows y she came back…then mother India…what is she doing…I shouldn't tell ne one this until I figure out everything from Mother India…

Later that evening…everyone was having dinner together…Birju Kaka was putting the food on the table as everyone was eating.
Anu: toh Prem tumhara business kaise chal raha hai?
Prem: oh its great...I've just finalized a deal with Gupta Groups of Industries and well be starting that soon.
Anu: that's great...humhe bhi ek achi offer mili hai…
Prerna: acha chup! ...Khane ke waqt business ke bare mein nahi baath karthe!
Prem: Mother India…kya aap kuch kehna nahi chati?
Prerna: kya mujhe kuch samajh mein nahi aaya
Prem: ek lardki ke bare mein…
Prerna: Lardki…kaunsi lar..
Prem: haan haan voh wali jis ke saath aap baath kar rahi thi phone pe…jab mein darvase ke bahar tha…
Prerna: …Prem mein toh Simi se baath kar rahi thi…
Simi: kya mama??? Sara din mein toh ghar pe thi…aur apne mujhse ek baar baath nahi ki…aap kya keh rahi hai??
Prerna: …
Prem: toh aap kisse baath kar rahi thi?
Prerna: haan haan mein toh jewelers se baath kar rahi thi...Simi ke jewellery vahan se uthani hai…mein bas pooch rahi thi ke kab bane hoge???
Simi: …mein abhi aayi…she runs to her room all shy.
Prem and Prerna just stare @ each other and finish there food.

Late @ Night in Prem's room

Prem: voh Mukti hi thi…uski awaaz…lekin mother India ne use chupa ke kyon rakha hai?
Prem remembered how the lady came to his window…he went there and looked if she was there…and once e looked out...she ran away…he quickly ran down stairs and out the door…she stopped @ the gate to look back…and she turned back and saw Prem right behind her…she took a step ahead when Prem grabbed her hand.
Prem: Mukti!
She turned around.
Prem: Mukti…y r u here??? tum yahan kyon aayi ho…tumne kaha ke tum kabhi wapas nahi aaogi…toh why?
Mukti was quiet, Prem grabbed herby the shoulders and asked again.
Mukti was still quiet.
Prem: batao Mukti…batao!
Mukti: …mein nahi bata sakti…
Prem: kyon nahi…kya hai voh raaz jo mother India hum sab ko nahi bata rahi
Mukti: mein…mein nahi bata sakti…
Prem: Mukti tumhare maa baap intezaar karke marge…lekin mein nahi…plz hum sab ko batao…mujhe batao…tum kyon wapas aayi ho…
Mukti: …don't u understand Prem…mein tumhe nahi bata sakti...aur agar mein nahi keh rahi…toh u cant make me.
It started to rain…heavily…everyone was asleep only Prem and Mukti were on the streets.
Mukti turned to walk away, finally she was out of Prem's sight and Prem turned to go back inside.
Suddenly Prem heard a loud scream, he turned back" Mukti!" he started running to were Mukti went and saw her there with gunde all around her, one had pointed a gun @ her.
"chalo!" the gunde yelled as one of the gunde grabbed Mukti by the hand and pulled her into there jeep and started to drive away.
Prem: EEY!
He started running after the jeep…they drove away to a graveyard type place and Prem was still running behind them.
The gunde pushed Mukti out and she landed on the ground, she was sitting on the ground…they pointed the gun at her.
"chal ise ura!" the gunde yelled
Mukti: ek minute…tumhe yeh sab karne ke liye kisne bola?
Gunde: hum tumhe kyon batayein?
Mukti: …tum mujhe marna chate ho toh mujhe yeh batao ke kisne bola???
Gunde: hum tumhe ek shart pe batayenge…he crouched down…agar hum tumhe istamaal kar sakte hai…toh well tell you.
Mukti slapped him: besharam…tum aise kaise soch sakte ho?
Gunde: you slapped me!...he got up and pointed the gun @ her, Mukti closed her eyes…and right when he shot someone pushed the gun out of his hands.
Then someone punched all the gunde and they got into a fight.
Mukti opened her eyes and saw Prem punching and fighting with the gunde.
Soon all the gunde were on the ground, and Prem walked over to Mukti.
Prem: tum theek toh ho…
Mukti nodded, she looked behind Prem and saw one of the guys coming up behind Prem with a bat
Mukti: PREM!
Prem turned around right away and grabbed the bat from his hand, soon more gunde came and they got Prem on the ground.
Mukti: Prem! She ran towards them and started coming in the way and tried stopping them, they wouldn't stop…they kept hitting Prem and there was blood all over his face. One of the guys grabbed Mukti from behind and pushed her away. She landed on the ground, as soon as she hit the ground she yelled in pain, Prem looked @ Mukti as she moved her hand to her stomach, Prem pushed all the gunde away and ran to Mukti,
Prem: Mukti tum theek toh ho!
Mukti slowly sat up holding her stomach, just then Prem realized why Mukti had came back.
Prem: Mukti tum…
Mukti: Prem! ...ahh…Prem gunde,

Prem turns and right then the guy shoots his gun…Prem moves out of the way…
"AHHHHH"
Prem turned and saw that the guy had shot Mukti…Mukti hand was placed on her chest were she had got shot, she looked @ her hand and saw blood all over…she looked @ Prem…and fell back…before she hit the ground Prem grabbed her…
Prem: nahi! Mukti…Mukti tumhe kuch nahi hoga…Mukti…Mukti placed her blood fill hand of Prem's check and smiled…
Mukti: I love you Prem…
Prem: nahi Mukti!...tumhe kuch nahi hoga!...plz…mujhe chod ke nahi jao!...Mukti!......Mukti I love u too..plzz mujhe chod ke nahi jao!
Mukti's hand fell from his check and she closed her eyes.
Suddenly we hear another gun shot…and another...and another…all the bullets had gone into Prem's back…by a women, Prem slowly turned his head around and saw Apo*na, standing there laughing as she held the gun in her hand…she and the gunde left in the jeep they had came in…Prem looked back at Mukti…he placed a hand on mukti's hand and placed it on his check...quickly his eyes felt heavy as he closed them, he remember all the moments with Mukti…even though they hadn't spent much time together…there love was so strong, he remember everything that just happened when Mukti got shot…and then remember when he got shot…and everything became black…Prem and Mukti were dead.

here was a...kinda long part...hope u all liked it...and plz comment!

luv ya

Umam
Edited by Umam_Paracha_13 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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u killed them both on the same night? how could u? I mean, they were gonna get back 2gether and have a kid and there u go killing them!
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kk guys this is a character sketch and part 6, right now In my ff there is a generation leap….so here is the character sketch:

The family soon figures out about Prem and Mukti being dead and was shattered…Everyone was shocked, they had to figure out who did this and they finally did they got Apo*na in jail. Everyone was really sad, but Prerna and Anu still celebrated Simi and Ruhaan's marriage.

21 years later

Sneha and Yuvraj: they have a 20 year old son named Karan and a 15 year old daughter named Pia, they have told there children about Prem, Mukti, and how apo*na killed them…they've always wanted to c them but now they'll never get a chance.

(just to say Karan and Pia are the same people in Meri Doli Tere Angana, the couple, but in my ff they're siblings)

Karan: goes to collage and hangs out with his cousin Avni, who is a year younger then him, he never lets his family down! And always wants to see them happy!

Pia: goes to middle school, not really in the story but well come in some parts, she is also a very sanskari person and always obeys her parents


Simi and Ruhaan: they have a daughter who is 19, her name is Avni, Avni also wants to know a lot about Prem and Mukti…


Avni: she goes to collage with her cousin and is a big believer in God, she has lots of sanskar and never disobeys her parents…

Anu and Prerna r still the same and have become more silent after PM's death
Apo*na and Komo will come back.
There r still more characters but they'll be introduced later

Part 6

You can see a girl and a boy's back and they were walking towards the kitchen in Basu house.

Girl: Eyyy Mama! Bhaiya ko kaiye ke mera peeche chodein!
Boy: kyon chod doon…tum toh meri choti si behen ho!
Women: acha! Ab larna shuru nahi karo!...breakfast khalo aur phir school toh jana hai!
Girl: haan mama theek keh rahi hai! Aur mein kabhi mama ki baath nahi dalthi!
Boy: haan haan…tum yeh har roz karthi ho…nahi! Tum toh mama ki baathein na sunke kahin bahar jaa thi ho!
Girl: MaMa!
Women: Karan aur Pia! Ab baathien chodo aur breakfast karlo! Aur haan Karan tumhe aaj bus pe jana hoga school aaj mein aur tere papa kahin bahar ja rahe hai!
Karan: what! Me and on a bus! Never! Karan never sits in a bus…u know how humiliated ill be in the bus!
"Are! Sneha! Plz Meri Madat Karo!"
The women turns around and its turns out to be Sneha: Ayi!...Karan Pia khao aur phir jao school ke liye late ho jao ge!
Karan and Pia eat soon Pia see's her ride is there, so she leaves soon Karan also leaves, he phones someone on his way out.
Karan: hello! Avni!
Avni: hello! Mere pyaare se cousin! Kya baath hai!???
Karan: mujhe bus pe jana hai collage thak…kya tum gadi le ke jaa rahi ho???
Avni: sorry…mein gadi nahi leke jaa rahi!....heyyy! I can see you! (she waves her hand)
Karan turns around and see's that Avni is right behind him.
Karan closes his phone and so does Avni.
Karan: tumhe bhi bus pe jana hai!
Avni: haan!..mere paas gadi kab se ayi! Don't u remember I planned not to drie until I get married!
Karan: oh my god!
Avni: aur toh mein har roz bus pe hi jathi hoon!
Karan: kk what ever lets go the bus is coming.
They get on the bus, soon the stop again and 2 people get on…one girl on guy…the bus is the only buts that takes them to school so they must be new students.
Avni: chalo Karan! Hum hi keh ke atein hai!
Karan: nahi tum jao (he was trying to cover his face with a book, pretending to read it)
Avni: wow! Look there so cute! Mein jaa rahi hoon
The 2 people go and sit @ the back of the bus, Avni stands up and goes to them.
Avni: heyy tum log nayee ho kya?
Guy: haan…
Avni: really! Hi! My name is Avni! (she takes her hand out)
The other girl looks @ the guy…she takes her hand out: Hi! Im Mukti!
Avni: aur aap ka naam??? (pointing @ the guy)
Guy: im Prem!
Avni: wow! You know what!
Mukti: what?
Avni: my mom's sister's name was Mukti! And my mami's brothers name was Prem…my mom told me that Prem and Mukti loved each other for such a long time…that funally when they got back together this lady in my family, she knows my grandpa, she sent gunde to go beat up Prem and Mukti…they killed both of them and now we always talk about how they're love story.
Mukti: wow!...if that happened to me…or someone I knew...i'd be totally upset
Avni: it's a wonder that my parents never get upset when ever the topic comes up that my other mamu and chachi is dead…
Prem: so you said that you're uncle and aunt died…and someone you knew killed them why'd she kill them???
Avni: my mom told me that when they caught that lady she said that since my Prerna dadi had taken Prem away from her that she had to get revenge…that's why she planned on killing my mamu…but when one of the guys she sent accidentally shot my chachi she came and shot Prem.
Avni: you guys kinda remind me of my chachi and mamu…by you're names you kinda bring them back…I feel like im talking to them…
Prem: hey would u have a picture of your aunt and uncle?
Avni: no…my mom and dad said that I should not see a picture of them…I don't know why…but I did see one when I was like really small…but I don't remember right now.
Mukti: wow that lady is such a creep!
Avni: my mom says that I kinda look like my chachi…and they say that my cousin Karan looks like my mamu…hey! Ek minute mein abhi ayi!
Avni goes back to Karan: Karan! Tum unse nahi miloge???
Karan: nahi…mujhe bas school thak poochna hai!
Avni: tumhe pata hai…unka naam Prem aur Mukti hai….ajao hum unse baathein karenge
Karan: theek hai chalo…lets meet Prem and Mukti!
Avni: toh Prem aur Mukti tum log ek doosre ko kab se jante ho?
Mukti: hum elementary se bohot ache dost hai aur humare maa baap yahan move hogaye the isiliye hum bhi move ho gaye!
Avni: aap log kab poochen yahan?
Prem: bas do din pehle…
Avni: toh yeh lo! Yeh hai mera cousin…Karan!
Prem: supp man…???
Karan: nothing much…you??
Prem: same…
Karan: Avni…yeh toh bilkul…
Avni: …kya???
Karan: meine do din pehle hi…mami aur chachu ki tasveer dehki thi…
Prem and Mukti both say: what are you saying??? I don't get a word…
Avni: kya tum kehna chate ho ke yeh dono…Karan nods his head.
Prem: can u tell me what's going on???
Mukti: I don't get a word plz tell me…
Karan: here look @ this picture…he hands Prem and Mukti a picture.
Prem and Mukti are shocked to see the picture…

(the picture that is shown)
Prem: heyy we look exactly like these 2!...
Mukti: these 2 are Prem and Mukti…??? I'm kinda afraid now…what if it does any cause in our life…looking so much like them…what if that lady comes after us???
Avni: don't worry…ab hum dost hai ! hum tumharey saath hi rahenge! Right Karan!
Karan: yea!....well be by your side and you'll be by ours
Right then the bus stops and they all get off.

They enter the collage, Karan and Avni help Prem and Mukti around the school. They 4 had the same classes so they went to there class, Karan and Avni sat next to each other.
Avni: hum yeh baath Mama aur Papa ko nahi batayenge!
Karan: kyon nahi?
Avni: dekho agar unhe pata chala ke Prem aur Mukti ke chera ek dum chachi aur mamu ke thara lagte hai toh voh toot jayenge!...jab sahi waqt aayega thab hum batayenge!
Karan: haan tum theek keh rahi ho! ....hum unko inke bare mein nahi batayenge
Avni takes her hand out and rests it on the table facing upwards "deal" and Karan puts his hand in "deal"
Professor: ok class I am giving out an assignment and you'll be working on it in teams of 4...It's a dance type project and you'll all need to participate…I give u 2 weeks to make a fabulous dance and which dance I think is the best those 4 well go to the dance competition…He reads out the groups and since Karan and Avni's name were @ the bottom they didn't get into a group…and Prem and Mukti were new so they're name wasn't on the list…the Professor decides that Karan, Avni, Prem and Mukti well work together…Prem and Mukti smile at each other while Karan and Avni give each other worried looks.

Canteen:

Karan: Avni ab hum kya karenge???? Agar voh dono humarey ghar agaye toh…Maa aur Papa…kya kehenge????
" don't worry well practice @ my house"
They both turned around and saw Prem and Mukti standing behind them
Karan: wow! you guys always sneak up on people like that?
Prem: who ever said we were sneaking…
Avni: aww you guys should go out! You make such a cute couple!
Mukti blushes: what are you saying…Me and Prem are just friends.
Prem: ey karan I saw a work out room in the collage center want to go with me…???
Karan: sure…let's go..
Karan and Prem leave.
Avni: so do you???
Mukti: Kya???
Avni: kya tum Prem ko pasand karthi ho???
Mukti: blushes like crazy!
Avni: mujhe pata tha! Jaise mere chachi aur mamu ki thara tum dono ko bhi pyaar ho jayega!
Mukti: lekin tumhe toh nahi lagta! Ke mera aur Prem ke rishta…vaise jaise nahin guzre ge jaise tumhare chachi aur mamu ki hui thi???
Avni: meine kya kaha tha pehle! Mein ar Karan hai na! hum tum dono ki dekh bal karenge!...
Mukti: lekin mujhe nahi pata ke mein kab Prem ko batao ke mein use pyaar karthi hoon??
Avni: meine toh socha ke tum use pasand karthi ho??? toh ye pyaar???
Mukti: budhu! Mein Prem ko aaj se nahi elementary school se janti hoon…aur pyaar toh middle school mein hogaye tha…
Avni: wow! itna gehra pyaar!....jaise chachi aur mamu, I never knew you guys and my aunt and uncle would have so much in common..
Mukti: well don't we look the same???
Avni: yea that's right!
Mukti: toh next class kab hai??
Avni: bas ek ghante mein…Prem aur Karan ko ane do phir hum chale jayenge…toh Mukti mujhe yeh batao..Prem kaisa hai…by means in school...ke…kya voh popular hai???...is he a geek…I mean in middle school…????
Mukti: oh my god! U just don't want to know!
Avni: no c'mon tell me!
Mkti: elementary school mein toh Prem saare bacho ke thara tha…lekin middle school mein, when I fell for him…he had the looks and the style…he was soo popular…he totally forgot about me…
Avni: sad…toh how'd you guys get back together…
Mukti: it just so happens he was trying to show off infront of me…and so he was like just playing a game with me for the whole time…but he was still in the popular groups…in high school I was also part of the groups too
Avni: wow Karan was in the popular groups too and he'd pretend that he was so popular that he'd totally forgotten about me, bu then he still kinda acts like he's popular…like he can't be seen on a bus…it well hurt his dignity …
Mukti: toh you don't like Karan????
Avni: NEVER! He's my cousin…and cousins don't get crushes on there cousins.
Mukti: yea yea yea..toh dance ke liye hum kaunsi gane pe nachenge???
Avni: I don't know maybe something kool and some nice songs like Aa Kushi Se Khudkushi Karle!...or any type of Bhangra song
an hour later Avni and Mukti go to the weights room to check on Karan and Prem…to Avni's surprise only Prem was working out as Karan was sitting on the bench getting a cold water bottle…Mukti and Avni ran inside
Avni: tum itni jaldi thak gaye!
Karan: tum kisse baath kar rahi ho???
Avni: tum se…dekho saare workouts Prem kar raha hai…aur tum boron ke thara bethe ho!...Prem don't mind eh..lekin ur body structure is fine! Avni and Prem laugh.
Mukti: toh Karan: tumne kabhi workout kiya hai…ke nahi???
Karan: maybe 5-10 times…in my whole life…how was I suppose to know what that poor gym teacher was saying…I couldn't understand a word…
Avni: u couldn't understand or didn't want to understand???? Huh tumharey saath saare ladkiaan beththi thi na!
Karan: you're just jealous…kyon ke tumharey saath kabhi koi ache ladke nahi bathe!
Avni: blah blah blah! Im not listening!
Prem had stopped working out lke 10 minutes ago and left and sodid Mukti when they were finally done there argument they looked around and didn't see Prem or Mukti and started to laugh @ there stupidity! They just left from there…

hope you all iked it...plzz comment!

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Posted: 17 years ago
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so they have reincarnation done. Oh kool! I love this part. Awwwwww, its just like how it was back when the first PreMukti were alive and all; Mukti having a crush on Prem and loving him, hope nothing goes bad this time and they will have millan
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Here is a picture of Avni sorry I tried pasting it before but it didn't work…here


So u guys they go to like university and all so Prem, Mukti and Avni and taking MBA and Karan is talking like an engineer type class. The university has many buildings and has a university center where they well be spending most of there time.\

Part 7

In the next week they had been practicing their dances and had a GREAT song mixed for them selves!
All 4 of them practiced @ Prem or Mukti's house, they had met their parents and thought that they were really nice and protective. They thought of there parents as their own so they also called them mama and papa. Simi, Ruhaan, Sneha and Yuvraj are really suspicious about the 2 (Karan and Avni) always being outside the house. On the Friday of the first week that had gone by was holi…Mukti and Avni were preparing a BIG event @ school for the whole school. Mukti was planning on doing a fabulous dance and couldn't wait! When ever Avni and Mukti went to their class that was together they talked non-stop about either Prem or someone Avni liked in that class of there's, when the teacher noticed them talking right before he'd turn his head they'd be looking @ there papers. Finally the day of holi came and everyone came in white shalwar kameez.

Mukti's outfit looked like:


Avni's Outfit looked like:


They guys were wearing a white shirt with jeans. Prem was looking adorable with colors all over his face!

Suddenly everyone heard some music start up:

We see someone walking up the stairs @ the side of the stage…

Ho ho o o o o...
Ho ho o o o o...

They get on top of the stage but there back is turned towards the crowd. They turn around and we see its Mukti, she grabs rang in both her hands ands starts dance with loads of colors throwing it and dancing.

Yahaan har kadam kadam pe dharti badle rang
Yahaan ki boli mein rangoli saat rang

Yahaan har kadam kadam pe dharti badle rang
Yahaan ki boli mein rangoli saat rang

Dhaani pagdi pehne mausam hain
Neeli chaadar taane ambar hain
Nadi sunehri hara samundar hain sajila

Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila

Mukti gets off the stages and walks over to Avni and dances with her then they all throw rang on each other
They both do some sort of dance step to this part.

Vande Mataram Vande Mataram Vande Mataram Vande Mataram

Sindoori gaalon wala suraj Jo kare thi holi
Sharmeelen kheton ko dhank de chunar peeli peeli
Ghoonghat mein rang panghat mein rang cham cham chamkila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila

Ho ho o o o o...

Abil gulaal se chehre hain yahaan mastaanon ki toli
Rang haseen mein rang khushi mein rishte jaise holi
Baaton mein rang yaadon mein rang rang rang rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila

Hey dholaaa~
Re mharo dhola re

She goes and dances with Prem and Karan who were standing by each other

Ishq ka rang yahaan par gehraa chadh ke kabhi na utre
Sachem pyar ka thehra sa rang chhalke par na bikhre
Rang adaa mein rang haya mein hain rasila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila

Prem starts to stare @ her every move

Yahaan har kadam kadam pe dharti badle rang
Yahaan ki boli mein rangoli saat rang

Dhaani pagdi pehne mausam hain
Neeli chaadar taane ambar hain
Nadi sunehri hara samundar hain re sajila

Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Ho ho o o o…
Rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila
Des rangila rangila des mera rangila

Then from the ending music it changed to another songs Music and Prem and Karan start dancing…

Prem goes upto a girl that lived in their area and started dancing with her:
Dekha jo tujhe yaar
Dil mein baji guitar

Karan goes upto a girl that lived in that area and started dancing with her:
Dekha Jo tujhe yaar
Dil mein baji guitar

Prem and Karan:
Chhalka aankhon se pyar
Dil mein baji guitar
Chaa raha kaisa yeh nasha re...
AA raha jeene kaa mazaa re..

Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re

Karan:
Dil ke varak pe hai likha
Jaaane wafa tera naam

Prem:
Chalte Chalte ruk jao to phir
hove mohabbat ki shaam

Karan goes to another unknown girl:
Jhoomu jhoomu teri bahoon mein jhoomu

Prem goes to another unknown girl:
Chumu chumu tere hooton ko chumu

Karan and Prem:
Chahat ki dekho yaar maan mein bagi sitaar
Chahat ki dekho yaar maan mein bagi sitaar
Saansein hai bekarar maan mein bagi sitaar

Karan:
Jhoom utha sara yeh jahaan re

Prem reaches his hand in the air:
Chu liya mein aaasman re

Pre and Karan:
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re

Prem:
Pepaal kiya chaiyaan tale
Ek duje mein hum kho jayeen

Karan:
Tinka tinka chun chun ke hum tum
Chota sa ek ghar banaye

Prem and Karan:
Chahoon chahoon din raaat mein chahoon
Lamha lamha tere saath betaoon
Sawaan mein mere yaar Dhadkan gaye malhaar
Sawaan mein mere yaar Dhadkan gaye malhaar
Saason mein tere pyaar Dhadkan gaye malhaar

Prem:
Rog mujhse kaise yeh laga re

Karan:
Raat bhaar khwaabo mein jaga re

Prem and Karan:
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re

Karan:
Dekha jo tujhe yaar
dil mein baji guitar
Chhalka aankhon se pyar
Dil mein baji guitar

Prem:
Chaa raha kaisa yeh nasha re...
AA raha jeene kaa mazaa re..

Karan and Prem:
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re
Arerere main toh gaya re...dil bhi gaya re

At the end while dancing Avni was really going close to Prem, and Mukti noticed…Mukti suddenly wasn't feeling good and ran from there crying. She ran to the nearest bathroom area and ran inside. Mukti had been sitting there crying for @least 10 minutes when she heard foot steps outside. She opened the door slowly and saw Avni and Prem standing there.
Prem: Mukti tum…
Mukti: plz go from here Prem!
Prem: Mukti tumhe kya hua hai??? Kyon ro rahi ho?
Mukti: plz Prem chale jao yahan se! mein tumse aur Avni se baath nahi karna chati
Prem: Mukti mujhe batao…thab thak mein nahi jane wala!
Mukti: theek hai tum yahan raho mein chali jati hoon!
Mukti starts running to her house.

Avni: Prem use keh dena ke mein bas dance kar rahi thi…
Prem: lekin voh bhagi kyon???
Avni: Prem! R u ok! Have u not seen!...Mukti loves u!
Prem: wat that cant be were just friends.
Avni: no Prem for her she wants to be more than friends! That's y I was dancing close to u…to make her jealous…but I didn't think that she'd think…that…u noe…plz just go make sure shes ok…kk bye! She starts to walk off , then she sees Karan waving her to come quickly as they have to hurry home and she ran to him.
Night (around 10 pm):

We see a shore and a girl sitting at the shoreline…the water lapping at her feet.
"What if Avni told Prem that I love him...what if he found out by how stupidly I was acting! Plz if he found out then…id be really embarrassed" she stands up and starts walking at the shoreline "oh great what a stupid person I am! Why did I run from there in the first place? If I didn't then both wouldn't have expected! Now how am I going to face Prem…but I really love him…if I see anyone else near him I start getting jealous that he never would ever think of doing that same with me…like when he's with his girlfriends then he'd put his hand around her waist or kiss her cheek…but I know he'll never do that to me…ill never get the chance." She gets on the road and starts walking n the middle of the streets. She was wearing a white long skirt that reached to her ankles and a turquoise top. She started to cry. Sitting there she remembered what Avni and Karan told her. About there relatives, Prem and Mukti, what if something like that happened to them…suddenly Mukti gets some flash backs they were really unclear. To people looking at each other, the guy says something then she gets another very unclear flashback, 2 people r in bed, the next morning the girl wakes up and starts crying, still very unclear a girl running to the bath room, she hears a voice " ur pregnant!" suddenly the flashbacks end and she see's a white light, it was a car, it hits her and she falls to the ground, unconscious.

hope u liked the update!!! plz comment! and ill update soon

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