My first attempt at Fanfic - Page 7

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The world swam around Naina….her mind and senses numb….her body paralysed….her heart was beating….and that made her feel that she was alive….was she feeling his touch….or trying to believe that it was him standing there….or she was looking into…and at the same time making a failing effort of not looking into those eyes…..

Aalekh stood rooted….thoughtless….unable to move and speak….it was the last thing he wanted to happen….especially now, when Naina was trying to smile…..he didn't know the feeling….

But before anyone could speak or move, Pooja's talkative cousin came in and switched on the light…..

"Main kahoo kithe gayee kudi!!(looking at naina's dry hands and water running from the tap) Mine ek baat kahee thi, mahendi te paani nahin lagana! Saadi Poojji di mahendi kaisi khil rahi hai…..dekhya tusi?"

Naina's hands hadn't touched a grop of water….she attempted to hide her hands, but….

"Dekhuun to,(grabbing naina's hands) tere haath pe rang kaisa chada hai! Hai rabba inna sona! Inna sona rang to Pooji de haathon par bhi nahi laga kudi! Bilkul dulhan ke haath…. Aur tu Sharma ke ithe andhere vich kyun chali aayi, tere pati da pyaar is rang sa gehra hai tere vaste…"

Naina stood there, expression less…..numb….

Pooja and the others came running, as they heard the commotion!

"Oye Pammi, ki hoya?", Pooja, Huda, Ali and Yudi came running out…..and they too stopped dead, as they saw the goings on……whatever Pammi was saying wasn't completely false….but still how weird things were…..there stood naina, somehow looking extremely beautiful, with a face full of pain and torture, her hands with red-dark mahendi…..her hair falling on her face….her eyes with an unreadable expression….fear, anger, sorrow, pain, ridicule, hatered, disgust and at the same time, shyness, longing, questions, trust and love…..Naina did look like a bride! And there he stood in front of her…….the man who changed their fiery little Naina forever…..who broke her trust, who killed her faith, who murdered her love in the bitterest possible way!

Pammi turned to Raj, and said in a very obvious way, "Yeh dekh Poojji, ki kar rahi hai yeh teri sahelli! Ek to mandap chood k ithe ekele chali aaye…..(pointing at Raj)….aur tu, Khotya, inni soni chand si janani nu chad ke, kithe tha tu? Aur dekh, tune zarasa haath hi lagaya….aur kudi da chehra gulabbi ho gaya…."

Naina lost control….but she had long back stopped crying….she couldn't bolt her emotions anymore…..she let go….couldn't hold the ground….she fell on her knees…..her expression unchanged……

"….ab theek hai…jo hua", ignorant of the situation, Pammi continued, "chal oye, ab iski baaki ki mahendi nikalva de….."

A lot of things happened as she said this, within an interwal of 2-3 seconds. Huda, his teeth crenched, tried to step ahead….but Ali held him back, and gave him a 'don't-make-a-scene-it-will-b-worse-for-naina' look. Aalekh tried to say something, but rather took a step towards Naina. Worse happened when,

"No!", said Naina, finally, slowly, in a low voice…..and her eyes red, and blazing, ran towards the house….all but Aalekh ran after her, one after another.

Aalekh and Rajveer stood there…..both quiet…..Aalekh's eyes had an army Major's interrogative look, undecieded whether the subject was innocent or guilty.

With a minute….Raj, feeling that he couldn't conceal his emotions and outburst anymore…..walked away……but…..Aalekh still stood there……wondering…..

……if it was a tear that he saw was shining on Raj's face!

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Raj was marching up to his room, as fast as his foot would carry him…..

Ladies sitting in the varandah, confused about the suddent outburst, spoke among themselves….

"Ki hoya?"

"Mahendi pe paani lagaya kya kudi ne? Pata hai bada apshagun hota hai!"

"Yeh shaher ki jananiyaan bhi!"

"Naaji, uska pati aaya tha!"

"Dekhya tusi usko?"

"Dono ke beech kuch…."

"O naaji na! Kudi te kinni soni hai-aisa to bolo hi na…."

"Subah main to badi khush thi!"

He had done it, he told himself….why does every pain, every sorrow, every trouble in her life originate from me???????

As he raced towards his lodging, he could see his 4 favourite cadets standing quietly, and looking at a closed door, with eyes full of concern, the door – evidently Naina's room!

He couldnt take it anymore. He went into his room and banged the door shut!

He always knew, that whatever happened, whatever he did, would pain Naina….would pain her beyond anything…
….but never thought her love was so very deep and mature
….but what he felt today, was worse than anything he had imagined!

Others might feel it was only Naina's dejected self-respect and broken heart took her miles away from the army….but he knew better, maybe the sole man who could see through her….see through the vivacious supermodel!

Who he saw that night wasn't Naina….her external transformation, her designer cloths, her perfect figure, her wonderful hair, her exquisite jewllery, her perfect makeup….was all she used to distract herself….to hide herself….to immerce herself….to hold back her emotions her pain from reserfacing…Naina now never listened to or spoke to her beautiful conscious. She had suppressed her hearts voice for soooo long that now it had stopped speaking, stopped reacting, stopped calling.
…..This girl wasn't Naina……

Then who was she?????

He could have lived with the pain of breaking her heart, of betraying her trust and remain silent forever……but now it seemed impossible to even breath….with the guilt….knowing that he had broken Naina, he had killed the brake, truthful, strong and determined girl…..he had destroyed her capacity to trust, to befriend, to love, to smile…..the warm person in her had gone cold with pain!

…..he suddenly realized that she loved him a lot more, maybe more than he had ever imagined, ever estimated, she ever acknowleged, ever confessed……maybe her love was too much for him to bear!

Raj reached the water-jug – poured himself some in a glass, and sat down on the bed with a thud!

Naina's laughing, warm, beautiful pink face appeared before his eyes (the one when he had fallen into the mud during mentorship camp)…..and…..then the blazing, unreadable expression of tonight…..he sipped some water into his dry throat….but coulnt swallow……..he felt a shrinking, numbing sensation all over!

'I have failed….', he thought, '…..miserably, pathetically……failed as a mentor, as a teacher, as a confidenate, as a beloved…….and worst, as a friend!"…..and his mind went blank!

Glass of water n his hand, tears flowing from his eyes, Colonel Rajveer Singh Shekhavat, the pride of the Indian Army, as if lost a battle again……sat on his bed, staring at the dark sky outside….a sky, without any sparkle, any light, any hope – any star…..that was soooo dark…. Spooky…..quiet……hollow…..neverending…….&…cold!

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