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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: dellzcreationz


yeah thats true 😆
haan mere saath rehte rehte Jasmine too became like ms 😃
and ya since i am in my college am learning and about this and i told Jasmine to do so because i have alot of novels to read which are based on such kind of concept 😆


Choti..
U R REALLY SOMETHING ...
Edited by pakpearl - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#12
Interesting dear
Update soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Good concept dear Thanks Sydu for recommending this.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Thanks a lot my friends 4 the support
khwaishfan,Salley

Manzil (Destination)Part 1

A middle aged paralyzed man was lying on the bed.


He tried to move his hand to reach the water jug which was kept near by.A young man entered there.He smirked seeing his inability to take water on his own.
He asked in a sarcastic tone:What happened Mr.Aryan Singh Raizada?You are thirsty,but you are not getting water?I am not a normal son who will feed water to his sick father.There may be children who look after their sick parents.But I am Aarav.I won't do such good things.Because you don't deserve it.
Aryan's tears rolled down his cheeks.
Aarav:You remember how you made my mother starve?The same way you also starve.







Flash back...

Aryan came back home late.
Aryan:Serve dinner for me Khushi.
Khushi:Yes Aryanji.
Khushi served him dinner.
After having dinner Aryan told him:Now you can dinner.
Khushi:I already had it Aryanji.
Aryan was shocked.
Aryan:What?You had dinner before me?
Khushi was startled by his loud voice.
Khushi:You became very late.So I thought...
Aryan pulled her closer harshly scaring Khushi.


Aryan:Don't you know that a wife should eat food only after her husband eats it?
Khushi's lips shivered:I..I...sorry Aryanji.

Aryan:I will give you a punishment which you will never forget in your life.
Khushi got nervous.
Aryan grabbed her hand and pushed her into the store room.
Aryan:Be here.Tomorrow also you will stay here without any food.You will starve for the whole day.Then only you will remember that you made a big mistake by having food before me.

Khushi wept:Aryanji...please don't do this to me.
Aryan ignored her and went out.The little Aarav wept seeing his mother's condition.
Aarav wiped her tears.
Aarav:Maa...don't cry.
Khushi could'nt stop her tears.
Aarav:If I was there before you got married to papa I would not have allowed him to marry you.I myself would have married you instead of papa.Because I love you that much.
Khushi:Badmash!Will anyone marry their mother?
Aarav:Why not?I pray that in the next birth I can marry you and not let any wretched man near you.
Khushi:Even when you were a baby you did'nt want your father to be near me.You used to push him when he came closer to me.You wanted to lie down closer to me.So possessive since babyhood.
Khushi pulled his cheeks cutely.He smiled.
Aarav:Yes,I don't like anyone else near you.You are only mine Maa.

Khushi hugged him.


The next morning Aarav got into the store room secretly with break fast.
Aarav:Maa...you eat it.
Khushi:No Aarav.Papa will get angry.

Aarav:No Maa.He won't know it.I came here without his knowledge.
Aarav tried to feed her with his hands.Suddenly the plate was thrown away with somebody's legs.
They were shocked to see Aryan burning with anger.
Aryan:How dare both of you cheat me?

Aryan hit both of them cruelly.
Khushi cried:Aryanji..beat me.But please don't beat our son.
Aryan beat her again.Aarav cried.

Present...

Aarav brought hot water to massage Aryan.He massaged his body roughly.
Aryan:Ah...
Aarav:What happened dad?Is it too hot?But as far as I know you prefer the water to be really hot.Right?That day you did that to my mother.Right?

Flash back...

Khushi gave warm water to Aryan to bath.Aryan poured water upon him to bath.
Aryan got irritated:This water is just warm.Not hot.Don't you know that i want the water to be more hotter?
Khushi:Sorry.I will heat it now.
Khushi heated the water again.
Khushi:Aryanji..is this fine?
Aryan:I think this is more than enough Khushi.
Khushi smiled.
Aryan took a mug of water and poured it on her face.


She was shocked.
She screamed feeling the burning sensation on her skin.
Aryan:Now you will never forget to give me hot water.

Khushi looked at him painfully.


Aryan walked off smirking while Khushi burst into tears.
Aarav who watched it helplessly cried.
Aarav put ointment on Khushi's face.
Aarav:Maa...don't worry.Your face will be beautiful like before.
Khushi cried hugging him.
Khushi:You are my only relief Aarav.
Aarav:I will be always there with you Maa.
Khushi smiled tearfully.

Present...

Aryan struggled hard to suppress his pain.Aarav smirked seeing it.

Aarav was sitting in a restaurant.
A cute beauty embraced him from behind.
Aarav smiled:Ruhi...
Ruhi came in front of him.
Ruhi:You identified me immediately.
Aarav:Yes.Who else will hug an unromantic boring person like me?How could you love me Ruhi?
Ruhi:Because though you are rough in behaviour I know that you are a sweet boy.
Aarav:I could'nt never imagine falling in love.I had no faith in love.But your sweet nature made me fall for you.
Ruhi smiled.
Ruhi:By the way why did you call me?You said we will have celebration.
Aarav:Yes Ruhi.I want to celebrate my life with you.
Ruhi smiled.

Aarav led her to the table.

They cut red velvet cake and fed each other.


They started sipping red wine together.
Ruhi:You did'nt tell what celebration is this?

Aarav:I am very happy Ruhi..

very happy to see my father's health getting deteriorated.Like I wished his last days are going to be very tough.I am happy to torture him like hell.So I decided to have a celebration.
Ruhi's face became dull.
Edited by jasminerahul - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#15
loved the first chap 😳
wow jasmine di thankyou for taking this step in to your story,
Aryan was paralyzed and couldnt take water for him first felt sad for him ,but when Aarav told about his karma i also feel so that he deserved so the way Aryan said to eat food after he eats gave me a olden indian men behaviour towards their wife which is really so bad...
and i loved Khushi and Aarav FB scene where it got me reminded to Tabu and Shahid scene from Haider ,the way Aarav said that i wish i would have being older i would marry you ,since he is very possesive about her that no one can sleep besides her and no one can even make her cry really gave me the visuals of them
the next scene was Aarav giving him hot water massage and then Aarav told Arnav about how he used to do with Khushi to make her follow her command and to such extent that he went to throw hot water over its just so pathetic ..
and then again you gave a very beautiful scene of Aarav and Khushi where she said that you are my relief Aarav that Aarav will always be there for her whenever she needs him and take care of her
i just loved Aarav and Ruhi scene they are so cute the way Aarav calls himself as unromantic ,seeing the way his father used to threat him ,he lost all faith in love but with Ruhi he gets a new hope in love,she is the one that will make him fall in love with the meaning of love ,the regain of trust and lost hope
Ruhi was called for a celebration and that celebration turns out to be the celebration of victory of Aryan getting his karma to fall in the death bed ,the celebration of his inner desires [in Odepius /Hamlet style : killing the father and marrying the mother ] the way Aarav says to torture Aryan like hell reminded so much of Haider the way Haider wanted to kill his step father but he doesnt because it would turn to be the same like his step father did to his father
and also to the notice that we get to see that Ruhi is disheartened by the fact knowing that the way Aarav is celebrating this ,i feel she will bring in the good side of Aarav by her love

Edited by dellzcreationz - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Superb awesome fabulous update dear
Thanks for pm
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Posted: 6 years ago
#17
Rocking first update dear!!! Aryan really troubled Khushi... Now Aarav taking revenge against him... How cruel was Aryan... Now Aarav troubling Aryan... Arav's love interest Ruhi...
Loved it to the core dear... Eagerly waiting for next part... Thanks for the PM.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Cruel man Aryan, Aarav is not wrong at his place, no one can see a mother's pain, even if he's taking revenge, by celebration nothing will happen
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Amazing start of a very sensitive topic...
Jazz...
U deserve around of applause..

Aarav is not behaving well with Aryan ...
It's only because of the cruel behavior of Aryan with Khushi...
Aarav has always been so possessive of his mother ..
He used to try to protect her from his cruel father..
N NOW HE'S TAKING REVENGE !!!!

I felt bad for Aryan but he's not earned a little bit of respect n sympathy as his sheer tyranny has made him damn detestable..

Aarav is in love with Ruhi..
Her sweet nature has made a dry boy like Aarav fall for her..
He wanna celebrate with her but the reason of celebration perplexes her...

The question arises...
WHERE IS KHUSHI ??
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Posted: 6 years ago
#20
It's not fair if I don't comment about the amazing pics u post..
😃


Only my Khushi can look so fresh even after starvation..
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U've used this pic according to the story so aptly..
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Nice couple..
I must say 😊
Edited by pakpearl - 6 years ago

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