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Posted: 18 years ago
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Part - 6


Its a beautiful day out...the sun shining brightly...n it rays r fallng on evry creature around....the rays also fall on a room...where sumone iz sleepng peacfully...jus then we hear an alaram clock ringing....the person who has fully covered himself inside the blanket...comes out...n switches off the alarm....n goes 2 sleep again...suddenly after a while the person gts up wid a jerk...its none other than shayan...
S:oh..no...mein tu gaya..mein kaisa bhool gaya..(looks @ the clock @ the bedside table)arey 6:30 hogaye....adha ghanta reh gaya hai...ab jaldi kar shayn warna aj tu shart hara samjho....
n he gts up....fastly takes shower...n comes out in a track suit ...looks @ the clock again...
its now 15 minutes to 7...
S:shayan beta jaldi kar..warna tu aj samjho baba...jeetey he jeetey...ab yeh laces manhoos ko kia musibat aye hai(hez tryng 2 tie his jogers lace..bt iz havng probs in doing it)...
@last he did..n ran out of the room....n went out....
now where he went tht u will gt 2 know in a while...
meanwhile we can see shayan's dad comng out of his room...
A:oh no...mein tu gaya ajj...yeh humare biwi ji bhi na..inko maloom tha..ke humare ajj shart lage hai...inke ladle bete se..tabhi humein uthaya nahee..takey hum har jayein..arey bhai..hum bhi akhir unke bete ke baap hain..phele se he bandobast kar rakha tha..bas ab dekho bache je...b kia karoge...
n he then went 2 shayan's room 2 chk....n saw tht shyan was sleepng....(kia howa.gt shocked..arey janab our shayan iz v intelligent he knew..his dad would frst chk 4 him...so he placed the pillows inside...so tht his dad should thnk...hez sleepng....)
A:acha hai ab ayega maza....ab dekhte hai...shayan kon jeeta hai challenge...har baar tum mujhe hara dete ho..is baar...meri bari...
n sayng tht he went out n closed the main door behind him...n was abt 2 step in lawn when saw sumone..infront....he looked up..n saw shayan smiling sweetly standng infront of him..
S:Asalam-u-alikum baba....good morning...waisey i know..mujhe yahan dekhne ke baad apke morning kitne good rahe hoge..tu ab bolye kaise rahee...akhir hara diya na apko...kaisa?
A:tu na...har baar..koi drama karta hai..mujhe laga ke tu abhi bhi soya howa hai..woh terey kamrey mein...
S:woh tu mujhe pata tha..app zaroor jayenge chk karne..isi liye tu..my sweet baba...
A:chal koi baat nahee..is baar tu jeeta tu kia howa..hum har ik komuka dete hain...is baar tujhe sahe..agli baar meri bari hoge...
S:haan..haan...pata nahee..mkab woh din ayega..mein kabse yahe sunta araha hon...come on baba..aj tu accept kar he lejiye..app burhe ho gaye hain..ab app mein woh dum khum nahee raha...
A:burha aur mein...arey aisi koi baat nahee..woh tu ein khud har baar late uth ta hoon..ke tum jeet ajo..aur mein tumhare chere pe yeh jitney ke khushi dekh paoon warna mein aur har..neva..mein tu apney zamaney mein...
S:plz baba...nt agian..app phir wahee..apni jawani mein...college mein yeh champion tha..woh champion tha..ka kisa maat shuru kijye...b tu mujhe sab zabani yaad ho chuka hai...
A:haan tu tha na..koi shak...
S:no ways baba..meri mat mari gaye hai..jo appko na bolon...
A:acha yeh chor..yeh armghan ko uthaya ke nahee...kia jog ke liye aj usney jana nahee hai..
S:i dono baba..mein gaya tha room mein uske..do teen baar awaz lagayi par no response..shayad mood nahee hoga..app usey chorye..hum nikalte hain..
A:chal theek hai..waisey yeh larka bara susat hota ja raha hai..isko tu mein akey dekhoonga...tu shyan ready..abhi tu ik bazi jetey ho..yeh jeet kar batao tu janey....
n sayng tht his dad ran 2ward the main door...
S:no baba..this is cheatng..rukiye..mein bhi aa raha hoon...
n sayng tht he 2 ran 2ward teh main gate...
now they were outside the house..in the street runing...n as shayan was a good racer...n younger 2...soon he was ahead of his dad..n ws wavng frm front....now the were jus few miles away frm park..n as per there race rules...they hav 2 ru frm there house main gate..till the parks main gate..n who eva reached frst wins..n mostly it was shyan who wins... suddenly..we see shayan's dad...cryng wid pain...puttng hand on his heart....n cryng wid pain badly...shayan jus looked bck @ the moment...2 see his father...n he saw him in this condition...n ran fast 2ward him...
S(tense):baba..kya howa app ko app theek tu hai na..baba...bolye..kya howa..wait app mein..doc..oh..mein kya..
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sorry guyz is bar ke liye itna he...nxt time a longer one 4 sure....
do take care...
wid luv
guriya....

Edited by **-**Guriya**-* - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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guri di jhakas part awesome yaar i loove the relation between shayan and his dad 😳 aur yeh ab iske dad ko kya hua 😭 di app fikar maat karo chote part ke liye the best thing apne continue kiya ..continue soon once again mindblowing part 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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another rocking part guriya 👏 shayan and his father that was so funny 😆 but what happened to his father. 😭i hope nothing happens. cont soon 😊 😃
Edited by Paru_M - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: Honii

guri di jhakas part awesome yaar i loove the relation between shayan and his dad 😳 aur yeh ab iske dad ko kya hua 😭 di app fikar maat karo chote part ke liye the best thing apne continue kiya ..continue soon once again mindblowing part 👏

thanx honii dear 4 likng it so much...n m a lil bit busy these days thts y m nt able 2 continue tht often...i"ll try 2 continue asap...once again thnx...😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: SiMpLe_GiRl 24

aweosme part.....plz cont soon.... 👏

thnx....😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: Paru_M

another rocking part guriya 👏 shayan and his father that was so funny 😆 but what happened to his father. 😭i hope nothing happens. cont soon 😊 😃

thnx paru 4 likng...😊...n i"ll cont soon...😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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PART-7:
S(tense):baba..kya howa app ko app theek tu hai na..baba...bolye..kya howa..wait app mein..doc..oh..mein kya..
A(laughng loudly):kyun bacho darr gaye...ab dekho..
n sayng tht he ran away n shayan was shocked n was unable 2 thnk 4 a moment as wht happened...n when he realized tht his father made a fool out of him...he ran bt in vain as his father had reached da wining post n was now smiling playfully 2ward him...he came close 2 him.almost out of breath as he was running v fast..
S:thts cheatng baba..nt fair...u cant d this..u dono h worried i became seeng u lik tht...thts nt da way 2 win a game..
A:beta ji evrythng iz fair in love n war..m i rite or wrong..
S:whteva...i know tht u won by cheatng...so m still da winner as u cannot beat me da way u should...
n sayng tht he strted 2 walk back 2ward their home...
S(callng while walkng):ab app kya sham tak yaheen khare raheinge...ghar nahee chalna kya..
A:araha hon...jaldi kya hai..aur yeh aram se chalo aisey bhag rahe ho mano peeche kuta(dog)para ho...dhere chalo
S:mein tu apni normal speed se he chal raha hoon dad..lagta hai app ab budhe ho gaye hain tabhi tu...
n sayng tht he turns back looks @ his dad wid his kiler smile..n runs as he know now his dad will nt leave him
n he reaches his home..n runs into his room..n after freshng up..comes downstairs 4 breakfast..
@ da breakfast table evryone iz already seated waitng 4 him 2 come..shayan came n sat nxt 2 his bro
S:good morning evryone
Everyone:good morning
Ar:waisey bhai h was ur morning walk 2day..kon jeeta..waisay tu we all know tht u win da race evrytime u come...aj kia howa..
S:haan woh...
as he was abt 2 speak...shayan's Dad interfered in b/w
A:arey yeh kia bataye ga....becharey ke halq(mouth) se ranj(sadness) ke marey alfaz he nahee nikalein ge.
Ar:really baba..aj subah aisa kya hogaya ke bhai ke aise halat ho gaye
A:tumhein bara naaz tha apne bhai par..mujhe tu lagta hai shehar ke hawa ka asar hogaya hai is par..janab mein ab woh dum nahe raha jo phele hua karta tha.tabhi tu har gaya aj yeh tumhare baba se..
Ar:sach mein bhai..ap aj har gaye..i neva expected tht frm u..kya hai mano app ne hum young generation waloon ki naak he kata di..
Aliha:aur kya bhai...app se mujhe yeh umeed na thi..mein tu itney proudly sab ko bata thi my brother is this tht..aur app aj ik mamoli race..woh bhi jo app kabhi nahe hare..har gaye...ab mein kise ko kya mun dikhaoon gi..
Ar:aur mein bhi..(both make a fake sad face...shayan gts angry on hearng this...n burst out)
S:jhoot sara sar jhoot..baba..app aisa kaise keh saktein hain..chalye sab ko sach bataye..thts nt fair(kind of irritated now)
A:arey bhaye..yeh achi dhons hai..sach bol tu raha hoon..aur kya sach kahoon..
S:baba...
A:chalo beta..ab tum sab ke samneyapney har nahee mana chate tu mein tuhare khatir jhoot bol deta hoon..
S:jhoot..konsa jhoot..ab yeh kya jhoot..jhoot lagey hain..plz baba..sach bolye...
@last he looks @ his mother 4 help..
S:mama..ab app he meri help kejiye...baba jo keh rahe hain its nt true...mein apko bata ta hoon subah..baba ne kya kiya..ab jhoot bolye ga..ab maza ayega apko baba..jab mama apki class lengein..
A:arey bhaye kyun marwaney pe tule ho...ok mein sab ke samney kehta hoon..tum jetey they as usual..chalo ab behas khatam..chup chap nashta khao...nashte ke waqt zyada bolte nahee hain..
S:arey wah..baba..kya palti mari app ne..apney pe aye..tu chup chap nashta karo..ab tu mein sab ko sunao ga subah apne kya karnama kiya
A:shayan...no..yeh humarey apas ke baat thi..
S:acha baba...really...kab..app ne subah kuch aisa nahee kaha tha..tab tu app barey muskura rahe the...mein ne aisa kuch apko kehte tu na suna...
Huma(shayan' mom) @ last spoke: yeh ap dono apas mein kya lagey huwey hain..koi hum logon ko bhi bole ga ke majra kya hai...
S:je mama..mein bata hoon na apko..ke kya huwa..
A:shayan..yeh na ho..tumhein baad mein pachtana parey...
S:matlab..
his dad make sum signs..whch he understood n was confused now...
still he spoke
S:koi baat nahe dad..mama kis din kaam ayengi...
all da others @ table were confused abt wht both r talkng...
S:waisey mama kuch khas nahee huwa subah bas baba ke tabiyat...
he was half da way 2 tel da event of morning n hez dad was signing no..dont tell..tht his om interuppted..
H:apki taiyat..kya huwa tha..kitni bar apko kaha hai ke apna khyal rakhiye.magar nahee..is ghar mein meri sunta he kon..hai bachoo ke saath bas bache ho jata hain app..apni umar ka tu kuch andaza kijye...
n hez mom went on..n shayan had tht now howz tht..look n sweet smile on his face..n his dad expression were lik when she"ll stop...n was lookng @ shayan as i wont leave u look...
all left da table..bt his mom n dad were still there..n mom was still lecturng him...shyan went frm da table n giving his dad a bst of luck sign...
His poor dad had 2 listen 2 his mom lecture 4 another hour an than there was a diet program set 4 him by his mom...as wht he has 2 eat n nt frm now on...da nxt day shyan went bck 2 lahore...n was decided will directly reach 2 da village after giving his viva...
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Village:
We see a tall n handsom guy in his tweenties enter the haweli..hez wearng a starched kurta n shalwar n has tuffness on his face...one look says tht hez an arrogant man...who sees da world n all ppl in it r his servants...
Person(shouts):majee...majee
jus than majee(manial's mom) enters...
Mj:Kya hua..kya baat hai rahim kyun chila rahe ho...
hez rahim bro of manial played by huda aka vikas
R:chilaoon nahee tu aur kya karoon...app ko pata hai manial kidhar hai...
Mj:yaheen kahin hogi..kahan jana hai us bechari ne..
R:bechari..huh...poora ghar chan mara mein ne kahin nahee mile...app ko pata hai..ajj sham ko mujhe shikar ke liye nikalna hai aur yeh manial ka koi ata pata nahee hai..
Mj:shikar pe tu mano har dus din baad jata hai..is mein konsi naye baat hai..aur manial ko kyun dhoond raha hai..us sey kia kaam agaya aj tumhein..waisey tu behan ki koi fikar nahe hoti..jeye ya marey..bas sab apney matlab ke ho..
R:mujhe appse koi behas nahee karne...manial ko dhondye aur agar mil jaye tu usey kahye mere kamrey me aye...aur jaldi dhond lijye ga..agha je ko maloom para ke woh ghar se gaya hai tu...agay app khud buhat samajdar hain..
n sayng tht he left 4 his room...
Mj:sarey ka sara awa he bigra hua hai(evryone livin here has his or her wayng of order...n tends other 2 follow them)..ab yeh manial kahan chalee gaye..waisey tu sara din ghar mein he hoti hai..agar un(agha je)ke aney se phele na mile tu..aur yeh rahim bhi na..Ya Allah kis mushkil mein daal diya..ik beta aisa nahee hai..jo maa ko sukh de..sarey bas roab(orders) jharte rehte hain..
n she calls da servants 2 go n search 4 manial...after lt of searchng manial iz found n she comes wid da servant 2 where her mom was..
Mj:kahan thi tu..kab se yahan mein pareshan ho..soch soch ke hol(abt 2 faint) uth rahe the ke kahan gaye..bata ke jate...
M:woh maa jee mei tu bas pass ke basti tak gaye the..woh mein ne woh rasheda(sum worker) ke beti se vada kia tha na us ke school ke kitaboon ka wohi deney gaye the..ab bhi na beja(useless) pareshan ho jate hain...aur app mili nahee warna bata kar jate..waisay maine bhabhi ko bataya tha
MJ:woh mahrani ghar e tike tu baat hai...gaye hai phir aney mayke(mom's house)..kehne ko baho hum viyah(married) kar laye ke app in budhe hadyion ko sukh milega..magar hai re kismat..jab naseeb acha na ho tu kis se shkwa karein...aur yeh tujhe har ik ke bari fikar pari rehte hai..yeh rashida khud nahee la sakti thi kitabein..
M:maa jee app tu janti hain us ke aur bhi bache hain..kis kis ko pora karegi.agar mein ne thori madat kardi tu kya
Mj:haan bas..tu har ik ke liye sochti raha kar..aney barey mein na sochna..
M(laughs sarcastically):apna kya hai maa jee...faisla tu ho e chuka hai bas..soli e latakne ka intezar hai(waitng 4 time of hanging)..
Mj:chup kar..ol fol(stupid talks)bolti rehte hai...ja rahim tujhe pooch raha tha..koi kaam hai tujh se..pooch aa..wrna phir chilata phere ga porey ghar mein...
M:arey rahim shehar se a gaya...aur app mujhe ab bata rahee hain..mein abhi aye..
n sayng tht she ran 2ward his bros room...
Mj:Wah re kismat..ik yhe behan hai jise bhayion ke itni fikar hai..unke aney ka sun ke kaisey khush hote hai..aur ik woh hain...behan ke koi khabar he nahee...us ke saath kuch bhi ho...
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in rahim's room....
he was havng rest on bed..when there was a knock on the door...
R:kon hai..andar ajao
manial enters..
M:Salam rahim bhai..app kab aye shehar se..
R:wasalam..arey haan manial tum..aoo betho..aj he aya..aur yeh tum kahan gayab thi..poorey ghar mein dhondhta phir raha tha..
M:je woh zara basti tak gaye thi kaam tha kuch..ap bolye kuch kaam tha mujh se...
R:basti..tumhein maloom hai..agha jee ko yeh sab pasand nahee...unhe malom para tu ghusa honge..ainda dehan rahee..
M:je
R:haan woh mein sham ko shikar ke liye niklon ga tu zara sab saman waghira nikal dena..aur apni nigrani mein saaf bhi karwa dena..janti ho sarey kitne kamchoor hain..inhe kaha tu..kuch garbar he karein ge...
M:yeh kya app abhi tu aye shehar se..aur ab phir shikar ko nikal parey..kuch dair ghar pe hum sab ke saath agar.
b4 she could complete he almst shouted @ her..
R:jitna kaha hai utna he karo..mein har ik ke agaey jawab de nahee hoon...
M(a bit scared):je mein karwa doongi..aur kuch...
R:nahee bas itna he..
n manial was abt 2 leave da room n was on the door step when..
R:aur whan mein shehar se kuch kitabein laya hoon.tumney jo kahin thin..bag mein hongi le lena..
n manail almst turned happily...
M:thank you rahim bhai...app buhat achey hain..mein abhi app ka saman nikalwati hoon.n sayng tht she ran away wid hapiness..
n on her way she met her mom..n she stopped her...
Mj:dhere se manial..aisey bhi kya afat a gaye...aur kya kaha rahim ne..
M:woh maje...bhai ka saman nikalwana hai bas..yahe bola...
Mj:haan sare naukar tu marr gaye hain na jo ab yeh kaam bhi tujse karwaye ga..
M:choriye na maje app bhi choti se baat ko bhara dete hain..akhir bhia hai merey kuch kaam bol diya tu kya huwa...
Mj:bhai..bhai hai tu farz nibhaye bhai honey ka....naam ke bhai hain..
M:app bhi na..mein unke kaam is liye tu nahee karte..ke woh badle mein kuch dein muhe..mein tu apney dil ke khushi se karti hoon..woh chahein jo karey merey saath mein tu waisey he karoon gi jaosa mujhe karna chaye...aur salim bhaya thore gussey walee hain...par rahim bhai buhat alag hain..apko nahee maloom woh merey liye shehar se kitabein bhi laye..
Mj:tu us ne aisa behla liya tujhe...tabhi bare gun ga rahe hai..meri bholi beti..tu kab smjhegi..yeh choti batoon se tujhe khush kar detein hain...magar andar se kisi ko koi farq nahee parta tu jiye ya marey..ab bhi hosh mein aa..aur nahee yaqeen mera..tu afshan ke haal se sabak le...uske saath bhi aisa he karte the yeh sab..aj kya hai meri bachi..koi poochta tak nahee..mahinoo beet jatey hain..koia aake dekhta tak nahee ke..kaise hai..main aur tu na hotey tu aj kab ke marr chuki hoti woh...
M:khuda ke liye maje aisa tu na kahin..acha chorye..
Mj:haan isey chor..aur tu woh rahim ke kaam ke baad foran kitchen mein aa...kal subah mehamn aney hain..buhat kaam para hai..
M:mehman kon?
Mj:tera chacha jee..bataya tu tha..unke barey mein...
M:haan...yaad aya..sach woh log a rahein hain..chalein acha hai..ghar mein ronak ho jayegi..
Mj:sahee kaha..be amma bare khush hain..akhir ko unka ladla beta a raha hai..chal jaldi ja...dair na kar...
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so guyz this was the nxt part......hop u all liked it...do comments plz...i"ll be eagerly wiatng 4 u feedback...
nxt part:shayan gng out wid aaima.....shayan's family reach manail's home...
till then bye 4 now....
hav nice time..
wid luv
guriya.... 😊

Edited by **-**Guriya**-* - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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gr8 part guriya 👏 👏 make them meet soon 😊 👏 and tell shayan's dad not to cheat next time 😊 😆 😉 cont soon 😊
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Originally posted by: Paru_M

gr8 part guriya 👏 👏 make them meet soon 😊 👏 and tell shayan's dad not to cheat next time 😊 😆 😉 cont soon 😊

thnx paru 4 likng...n i"ll pass ur msg 2 shayan's dad soon...😆

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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow guri di long tie since u continued this fic was missing it very much... but now u poset m so so so happy this part was hamesha ki tarah superb just toooo goooooooooooooooooood 👏 will be waiting 4 the next part continue sooooon

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