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Posted: 18 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: sun_423

very damn interesting promo...keep up the good work.... 👏
tho ab manial ke father has told that tho le aao... kise aisey ka rishta jis pe humein aitraz na hoo...warna...bas chup chap beth kar tamasha dekho... hmm..i think ab rishtha aayega apne hero sahab shayan ka... ab aayega mazza.....😉 ab please jaldi continue karna.... me waiting for the next part eagerly.... 😃

thnx surya 4 ur lovely comment on the promo...n i hop ur guess comes trues...anyways i will continue soon...keep reading...😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: Paru_M

just caught up with all the parts 😊 nice work 👍🏼 feel bad for manial 😭 😭 her father is so mean 😡. i hope she gets married to shyan 😊 the promo was good too 👏cont soon 😊

thnx parvathi 4 likng the ff...n commentng...n i will try 2 keep up ur hop...keep readng...😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Part-3:
We see a huge house frm outside...we see a garden in tht house n its v beautifully mantained...we see a person workng on the plants in the garden...n seemng v deeply involve in his work...jus then a lady enters the garden from the iner side of house..she has a tray wid tea n other acessories...there was a table in middle of the garden...she keeps the tray on the table...n sit on a chair...
Lady:chalye ab app abhi jaye....chai warna thandi ho jayegi...aur phir app kahein ge ke chai pilaye woh bhi thandi..mein dubara garm nahee karongi...
no reply came frm the person....the lady wited 4 some time..then again
Lady:ab app a bhi jaye na...aisa kya masroof hain...yeh mali(gardner) kis liye ata hai ke app har waqt in jhar poonchon(the plants) ke saath he lagey hotey hain...yah tu us ko hata dijye...ya app usey he karney dijye...yeh kia ke hum usey paisey bhi dein aur khud bhi apna waqt lagayein..
@last the man turns...he smiles seeing the lady n her irritated expresion..the man iz asif khan our hero's dad...now hez comng 2ward the place where the ldy iz sittng..he sits n speaks..
A:tum biwian(wife's) bhi na...bas muka chaye naukroon ki burai ka..aur shuhroon(husband's) ko tu kabhi sakoon se na rehne dena..arey bhaye...mujhe tu acha lagta hai..in poodon(plants)..ke hifazat karna..in ki dekhbal karney se tum kya jano mujhe kitna zehne sakoon milta hai..
the lady is huma khan..
H:haan bas bas...app aur app ke befazool mashghale(hobbies)...ab lo bata bhala poodon ke dekh bhal kya zehne sakoon degi..par app ko kon samjhaye..aur samjhaney bethoo..tu app ke pass taweelein(explainations)buhat..
A(smiling):acha yeh sab choro..aur haan us becharey mali ko nikalne ke zrorat nahee...becharey ke rozi(job)...pe kyun laat marney...aur han yeh shayan ka koi phone aya..kab tak aney ka kaha hai..
H:haan...aj subah he call kiya tha usne..keh raha tha..sham tak yahan pohanch jayega..
A:chalo acha hai..woh ayega tu us sey milke he main mamla discuss karloon ga..mujhey tu kuch samajh nahee aa raha..ke kya karoon...
H:sahee keh rahe hain app...ab wohi ayega tu..kuch sochenge...app yeh sab chorye...woh armghan ke college ke masle ka kya huwa...
A:haan...woh sab kuch hogaya hai..main ne baat karle hai principal se....woh tu acha hua ke principal mera janewala nikla...han par usey samjha dena apney harkatoon se baaz ajaye warna...ayenda mein uske in harkatoon ko maaf nahee karonga..hadh hote hai...ab shayan ko he dekh lo..woh bhi uske umar se guzra tha..magar kabhi yehsab na kiya us ne..aur yeh..jab dekho...college se us ke liye phone atey hain..kabhi yeh kar diya tu kabhi woh...
H:app bhi na..abhi bacha hai..aur koi begra howa tu nahee hai mera beta..humesha achey marks le ke he pass hota hai...haa agar thori buhat shararat kar bhi leta hai tu us mein kya bura hai...abhi umar he kya hai.uski...
jus then we hear a voice frm back ..
V:aur nahee tu kya baba..abhi umar hi kya hai uske..aur is waqt hansi mazak nahee karega tu kab karega...bolye
H:arey mera bacha...agaya...?
V:ji mama agaya app ka beta...
V:Salam baba..salam mama..
A&H both:wasalam beta..
A:kaisey ho shayan(tu lijye agaye shayan sahab apney ghar)..kaisa raha safar?
S:m fit n f9 baba...as u can see...aur safar bas theek he tha..app ko tu pata hai..h much i hate this long travellng journey...par kya karein majbori hai..
H:aisey bhi koi majbori nahee hai...humney tu kaha bhi tha ke yaheen parhai mukamal karo...par nahee tumhein he lahore jake parhne ka shok tha...ab khud he bhugtu..
S:arey my sweet mama..mein tu yunhi keh raha tha...aur yeh kya app ka beta aya hai..aur woh bhi itne din baad aur app uske koi khatir dari(esp treatment)..nahee kareinge...mein bechara...bhuka pyasa...itne lambey safar se aya hoon..aur yahan kisi ko fikr he nahee meri..(mades a sweet puppy face)..isey tu acha tha..mein waheen rehta..phir chahey app bar bar phone karke bulatey rehte...
H:acha ab bas kar apna yeh natak..aur jake fresh hoja..mein ne aj dinner pe sab tera fav banaya hai...
S:oh mama..ur 2 good gr8..ab ayega na maza...seriously wahan tu mein bahir ka kha kha ke thak gaya tha..ab aj je bhar ke apne mama ke hath ka mazedar khana khaoon ga..
H:acha ab maska bazi band kar..aur fresh ho ja...
S:arey meri pyare mama..mein kab maska lagata hoon..mein itna sharif bhola bhala..kyun baba...sahee kaha na mein ne...(n winks @ him)
A:haan bhaye humara yeh kabil beta kahan mska bazi janey...yeh tu bara he sharif(innocent) hai..
when shayan hears this he came ner his dads chair n sit on the side of chair..n pts n arm around his dads shoulder...n says..
S:aur kya..sharafat tho mujh pe he khatam hote hai...kyun baba..
hearng this asif...khenchofaye shayan's ears...n says...
A:chal ab buaht huwa...mazak band..aur ja ke fresh ho aa..phir aram se baatein karte hain..
S(naughtly);oh...ah..ouch...baba..app pehle mujh bechare ka mazloom kaan tu chorye..phir mein kuch karoon na..
then his dad leaves his ear..n shayan goes inside...jus when he was entrng the main entrance..he turns n says loudly...
S:kyun baba..shrif hoona....
n leaves quickly...
A:yeh larka na...kabhi nahee sudhrega..
H:acha hai na humesha aisey he hasta muskurata rahee mera beta...kisi ke nazar na lagey isey.
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ok guyz this was the end of part 3...do tell me h it was...i"ll be waitng 4 ur all comments...so reply soon... 😊
nxt part:wht iz tht shayan's dad wanna tell him?....a proposal accepted 4 manial...

keep readng...n commentng...
wid luv
guriya... 😊




Edited by **-**Guriya**-* - 17 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#44
guriya yaar the part was really very sweet.. very very very very very very very niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeee...
tooooooooooooo gooddddddddddddddddddddddddddd... the relationships in shayan's family are just soo nice... liked the way shayan was with his parents... totally a perfect family.... liked it very very very much... keep up the good work going..... 👏
tho dear i think i know what shayan's dad wants to talk to shayan.. uski shaddi ki baat.. and on the other side manial ko ek proposal aaya which is accepted.. well i think it is our hero sahab ka rishtha.... kyun dear... what say ?? 😉
ab please jaldi se continue karna...me waiting for the next part eagerly.... 😃
Edited by sun_423 - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#45
thanx surya 4 such a lovely n sweet comment...
n m happy u liked the part... 😊
n abt ur guess...
keep readng n in nxt part u wil know..
whts the talk...
till then wait...
n njoy... 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
#46
that was really cute part guriya 👏 and shyan and his relationship with the family 😳 me too thinks his father wants to talk to him about manial 😉 good work 👏 plz post the next part soon 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
#47
thanx paru 4 likng the part...n i will continue soon... 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
#48
continue soon guriya dear me waiting... 😃
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Part-4:
We see a grl standng near the window...its raining outside..n shez jus lst in rain n doesn't know whts happening near her...in her surroundngs...shez lst in her own world...n iz nt bothered abt this world...shez none other than manial...u can jus know while havng a glance of her face tht shez lookng v sad...n hav cried a lt...cried so much tht now there r no more tears left 2 shed....her mom..passes by her room n peaks in n sees her standng lik tht near the window...shez so lst tht she didn't notice tht coz of wind blowng hrd now the rain iz comng inside frm the wind..n shez half wet coz of it....her mom saw tht n calls her..
Majee(Ma):manial...
no answer..
Ma:arey sun rahee hai ke nahee..manial..chal wahan se hat...bheeg rahee hai..
no response agian...
n she comes close 2 her n forcefully moves her aside frm the window...n closes it...manial..still in same position standng...her mom takes her 2wards the bed..she sits..bt iz nt utterng a single word...
M:manial bache..kuch tu bol...kya howa...aur yun barish mein kyun bheeg rahee the..agar kuch ho jata tu..
@last she spoke..
M:ho bhi jata tu...kya farq parta tha majee...phele he kon sa acha ho raha hai meri zindagi mein...acha hai na...yun barishmein he bheeg bheeg ke mar jaoon...us marney se tu behtar hoga..jo mein roz maroongi...til til ke(dieng coz of frustation)..
Ma:mein jante hoon tu kya kehna chahte hai..par bache tu jante hai..mein kitne majboor hoon..agar merey bas mein hota tu kab ka tujhe in sab jhameloon se azad kar chuke hote..par haye re meri phoote kismat ke mein apni bachion ke le na phele kuch kar paye..aur na ab kuch kar sakte hoon..
n sayng this she strted cryng bitterly...manial saw tht n felt bad 4 her mom..n hugged her ..consoles...
M:majee..app aisey na royee...mein app ko is halat mein nahee dekh sakte...mein theek hoon app meri fikr chorye..kuc nahee hoga mujhe..aise kamzoor nahee hoon..seh loon gi mein sab..bas app khud ko yun gham na dejye...mujhe acha nahee lagey ga..
Ma:kaisey na dukhee hoon bache tumharey liye...jo faisla tumharey aghaje ne kia hai..kya main nahee jante us ka nateeja kya hoga...kya main ne nahee dekha ke afshan ke bar pe tere aghaje ne jo faisla kia..us ka kia nateeja nikla...phir kaisey bache..mein dekh kar bhi sab ko andekha kar doon..bata...tu mujhe...
n strted cryng again...
M:majee..yeh tu naseeb ke bateein hain..shayad hum bhenoo..ka naseeb he kharb hai..ke humarey sath acha ho he nahee sakta...aur jab aisa he hai..tu kyun ache ke umeed karein..chorye ab in sab batoon ko..aur tayaryan kijyee...agle hafte..app ke beti ki bedayi hai...jayee..
Ma:bedayee..haan...maain(mothers) hote hain...betyoon ke bedayee pe unke janey ka gham manate hain...roote hai..par woh udasi pal bhar ke hotee hai..ke uske baad..agle din jab woh apney ghar mein khush azar ati hain..tu tumhein nahee pata bache..maaon ko kitni khushi hotee hai..magr main tu woh badnaseeb maa hoon..jo ke bedayee ke waqt royegi tu na sirf apni beti ke judai mein..balke is gham mein bhi..ke jante bojte..apne bete ko aag mein jonkh rahee hoon...kaisey mein khush hoon..kaise mein apne beti ke shdi ke tayaryan karon..jabke mujhe maloom hai ke yeh shadi meri beti ke liye khushyoon ka saman nahee..balke woh matam kada(dead place) banke aye hai ke jis mein janey se mein usey rok bhi nahee sakte...rok bhi nahee sakti...
n she went out of room cryng..n manial was now left alone..she had no tears in her eyes..as she no..tht her tears cant do anythng..they cant change her fate..the verdict of her dad is always...the last one...no one can change it..n she also knew..tht wht was decided 4 her..wil happen....no one can do anythng 4 her no one...
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Its a room...frm the appearance u can say its a study room...a grl iz sittng on a couch placed in the room..n a book iz infront of her face...we see a man entrng the room..he opens the door..quietly..so tht the grl iz nt disturbed...than he comes @ the back of the couch...n pts his hand on her eye...
G:kon hai..?
P:bhujo tu janey..
G:yeh kya baat huey...tell me..who it is..
P:no ways..u hav 2 guess...
G:ok...i know armghan its u..nt stop irritatng me..n lt me read the book...m on a v strtlng point of the novel...
P:no..m nt rmghan..aur yeh kya..again u strted readng these stupid novels....how many times i hav told u...these all r jus bakwas..far away frm reality..bt u..neav listen 2 me..
G:shayan bhayia app....
n person removes his hand frm the grls eye...n its our sweet shayan..n the grl stands..n faces him..n shez none other tahn shayan's sis...aliha...shez wearng glasses on her face...n lookng v cute..wid the simplicity..whch iz her asset...
A:oh...no..i can't believe..shayan bhayya app..kab aye app...aur mujhe bataya bhi nahee..jayee m nt talkng 2 u..ik tu bena miley chalee gaye..aur ab aye bhi tu...bina bataye..(she sys wid a lt of ghussa..n makes a face...2 show shez nt talkng 2 him..)jayee..mein appse baat nahee karti..
S:arey baap re..itna ghussa...arey my sweet lil sis...ghalte ho gayee..lo dekho..mein ne kaan bhi pakr liye hain...m sorry...aur ab mein kay karta..mein jab utha..tu madam college gaye hoye thein..n i hd 2 leave..agar itna he..bhai ka khyal tha..tu chotii kar letein..par nahee..bhai ke yahan kisey fikr haan...
A:acha je..yani ulta chor kotwal ko dante...ghalti appke..aur ilzam hum par..ap bhi na bhai kabhi nahee sudhroge..agar app ko yaad ho tu...college janey se phele mein app ko utane ayee thee..par app the ke uthne ka naam he nahee le rahe the..tu mein kya karte..jab app ko he parwah nahee thi..behan ke tu..mujhe kya pare...(again mun phooloang)
S:ok..acha baba..m sorry..ab ghalte hogayee..maaf bhi kardo..ayenda..dehan rakhoonga..promise...
A:promise...tu phir theek hai..
jus then sumone comes n says...
P:inke promise pe maat jao aliha..u dono..humesha promise karte hain..aur phir mukar jateey hain..u don no him kya..yhe aur inke promises tu...
S:je nahee janab aisa kuch nahee hai..app ko koi ghalat fehmi hui hai...u dono..shyan ke barey mein tu mashoor hai..ke shyan woh hai..jo waada..
P:toorne mein mahir hai..kyun m rite na bro..
yah the person iz armghan shayan's lil bro...
S:tu na..kabhi meri achye maat karna...ik tu itni mushkil se issey mana raha tha..aur yeh maann bhi gayee thi..ke tu gaya...humesha ghalat time pe he entry deta hai..app kar meri help..isey mananey mein..
Ar:no ways bro..yeh kaam apko he acha ata hai..mein nahee karney wala..is chipkali ke khusmadein..no ways..
A:tumne mujhe chipkali bola..u..mendak...donkey..khud ke shakal dkhi hai..aainey(mirror) mein..
Ar:haan..ofcourse dekhe..hai balke roooz dekhta hoon..kyun bro hoon na handsom..
shayan jus smiles...
Ar:tumhein kya pata chipkali..kitne ladkyan iss sorat pe marte hain..aur ik tum..paney bhai ke personality ka ehsas he nahee...
A:haan..haan..bari marti hain..bare yae mr.Personality walee...huh..
Ar:arey bhaye..jalne walee tu hote he jalne ke liyee hain..app jalte rahye chipkali je...ke ab kya karein hum behan bhayooon mein..merey aur bhai ke ilawa..aur koi..woh kya kehtehai..sohna nahee hai..pata nahee tum kis pe chale gayee halanke..mom n dad tu..
n hearng this aliha strted cryng...n was abt2 go out when shayan..stoped her..by holdng her hand..
S:armghan....
Ar:woh bhai mein tu...
S:come on aliha yeh kya bachpana hai..itni se baat pe yum roona shuru kar diya..tum jante hoo..he wasn't serious..phir bhi..bewakoof larki..
A:woh bhai..yeh humesha aisa he akrta hai...aur mom..bhi isi ke side kete hain..mujhe he dante hain..ab app bhi aisa he karoo..akhir mein hoon he an buri..sab ko buri he lagte hoon...koi mujhe pyar nahee karta..
n was abt 2 go..when shayan again stopped her..
S:aisa tumney kaisey socha..tum tu hum sab ke jaan ho..is ghar ke ladli ho..tumharey baghir tu yeh ghar ghar he nahee lagta..tumharey he dam se tu yahan ronak..hain..aur ainda kabhi aisa nahee kehna ke tumse yahan koi pyar nahee karta..kya mein tumse pyar nahee karta..kya dad nahee karte..yeh tu main tha..jis ne sun liya..dd hote na..tu kitne upset ho jate yeh sun ke..aj bol diya..phir nahee bolna..aur yeh budhu tu...aise he bolta hai..asal mein iska din nahee guzarta na..tum se laree baghir..warna..tumhein na dekhe..tu ise bhi kahan chain parta hai..kyun ghade..m right na..
Ar:yes bro...
n he came close 2 his sis..n hugged her..
Ar:m sorry...chipkali..
n ran away..
A:dekha apney bhai..is ne phir se...
S;pagal hai..tu yeh chor..aur ainda aisa kabhi nahee sochna..tum mein hum sb ke jaan hai..tujhe kuch hogaya tu hum sab ke jaan nikal jaye gi..samjhe..
A:je bhaya...
jus then we hear armghan's voice frm outside..
Ar:bhai..agar manaey ka progrm khatam ho gaya ho tu khaney ke liye ajayein..mom n dad r callng u both..
S:haan..haan..aa rahee hain..chaloo aliha..
A:ji chalyee..
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ok guyz this was prt 4 ...hop u all liked it..plz do comment n tell me h it was..i"ll be waitng 4 ur all comments...
nxt part:manial ke shadi agle hafte kis se tey hui hai..woh kyun is shadii se khush nahee hai..afshan ke zindagi ka woh kya raaz hai jo ke uski is halat ka zimidar hai..yeh aur is se related aur sawaloon ke answers ke liye...keep readng...n commntng..
wid luv
guriya... 😊

Edited by **-**Guriya**-* - 17 years ago
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no one liked it 😭 .....ppl...do comment...me waitng eagerly..... 😭

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