FEW THINGS LEFT UNSAID:Rajveer Naina ff for LRL lovers.lu:25-6 P 108 - Page 9

Originally posted by: passiflora4eva

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Originally posted by: gargy4u

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Sweet update!!!!😳

Loved the Shiv mandir scene!!!😳

Bichara Huda... but his huddagiri is very entertaining!
Naina ke dil ki baat toh pata chal gayi...
But Rajveer ke dil aur dimag main kya chal raha hai? Ek romantic sa Rajveer PoV milega? 😉
I would love to see what Rajveer feels... About Naina... His love... His guilt... His insecurity... His faith... His feelings about Naina- Huda... his pain...his passion... His intentions...

Its known that Naina doesn't feel the same for Huda the way she feels for Rajveer BUT Huda risked his life for her... goliyan khayi uskay liye... it cannot be that Naina doesn't understand the magnitude of his actions, he could do anything for her. He might irritate her to no end!😆But it cannot be that she can dismiss him from her mind easily... she may not return his feelings but he is important in her life... 😊

By the way, sweetness and romance say toh updates hotay hi hai tumhare!😃But ab koi spicy twist kab add karney wali ho? Waiting to see your twist!

you know some clever mystery and suspence with romance will be so awesome!😉

The ending was ekdum filmy-romantic types!

Cannot wait for your next part.😃

And really loved your long update!👍🏼

Update soon.

Cheers

R.

That ws too shrt to undestnd d meanng:)any was.. agn u r here to hlp me out of the huge respnsblty..i wl keep in mind to bring some twist.but my prb is that...i realy dont blv in negtiv charctr that much.nor belv that there can be a person who has nothnng to do except creating problm in hero heroins life.soo.as its my story and i m getnnng a chnc so i wl try to bring the twist but with the minimal negtiv charctr..so...but surely i wl value what u hav suggsted and try to mak the story more intrstnng..

Thanq once agn dear for being soo so hlpful..
Lov gg

Originally posted by: gargy4u

That ws too shrt to undestnd d meanng:)any was.. agn u r here to hlp me out of the huge respnsblty..i wl keep in mind to bring some twist.but my prb is that...i realy dont blv in negtiv charctr that much.nor belv that there can be a person who has nothnng to do except creating problm in hero heroins life.soo.as its my story and i m getnnng a chnc so i wl try to bring the twist but with the minimal negtiv charctr..so...but surely i wl value what u hav suggsted and try to mak the story more intrstnng..

Thanq once agn dear for being soo so hlpful..
Lov gg

Originally posted by: passiflora4eva

Hey Gargy

I like giving you my inputs because your story is fun and full of potential. Hey you know you are the sweet one. You are so nice when I go crazy suggesting' away...😆

Very nice of you. heehee...😃

(Please don't make Huda evil! He is stubborn and won't give up easily but he is not evil. He may want to prove he is a better choice for Naina, he would do anything for that,lol, but he would never do anything extreme)

And thats not at all what I meant by twist. You know you don't need to make a character bad to create a twist.😊

Twist can be National secrets at stake... Exposing a Spy... saving the country from a big threat, stoping smugglers... bad organisations to expose, Saving the Motherland... some exciting mission!😃

Not some Saas bahu serial type Vamp or Villan...😆

hey bhagwan! there are too many on tv already!😆

You could create a Villian. You know, I too think like you...😊 I don't believe there are people who have no work but to cause problems for others, BUT there are selfish people in this world who do not think beyond their selfish goals even if it brings down hell upon the rest of the world, wanted criminal, terrorists, some unfortunately misled and brainwashed people, greedy people, people who do bad stuff... Its a sad and unfortunate truth, wouldn't you agree?

Coming back to the point😆...Create a character if you like! Remember Lala Gehlot? the corrupt politician, desh ka dushman? Something on those lines...

It would be SOOO exciting to see our brave heroes on a secret undercover Mission! Our brave heroes out to save the world.

😃😃😃

I'm very sure you can come up with an exciting plot!👍🏼Along with the romance you got going on... mix of both...

It is awesome already and I'm sure with or without my help you will make it better😊

Cheers

R.

Need ur hlp alws dear.and yes.i hav though of a mission.n wl try to mak it intrstngg to.just need some time to plan the plot...to arrange the base..so watch it grl but dont only wait:)feel free to suggst me when and what i need to ask..

Lov lov lov,gg

Hello,

Originally posted by: RNgirl

Hello,

Nice Update.

Raj and Naina are too cute, but I hate this Huda.

Hope he does not create any problems.

Love You

Misha

Thnks dear..n huda..i hop so..we lov all our cadets.isnt?:)

Lov gg

wow
superb update
shiv mandir sceen was fab
pandit ji ne toh saath rahne ka aashirwad bhi de diya ab toh kuch kaho raj
huda huda huda !!!!
humesha beche me tapakta h what should i do to him
but naina ne white rose magaye red magana tha na dear 😳
sab ready h raj ko koi ata pta he nhi h jaldi aao raj kya kar rahe ho
wase naina na humesha he raj ke liye anmol vachan bolti h aj bhi bol rahi h
gud abhi se biwi ka hak dekha rahi h
waiting for next part
update soon


love naina

Originally posted by: meenuraj97

wow
superb update
shiv mandir sceen was fab
pandit ji ne toh saath rahne ka aashirwad bhi de diya ab toh kuch kaho raj
huda huda huda !!!!
humesha beche me tapakta h what should i do to him
but naina ne white rose magaye red magana tha na dear 😳
sab ready h raj ko koi ata pta he nhi h jaldi aao raj kya kar rahe ho
wase naina na humesha he raj ke liye anmol vachan bolti h aj bhi bol rahi h
gud abhi se biwi ka hak dekha rahi h
waiting for next part
update soon


love naina

White s the colour of starting the relation now:)
To forgt and frgiv:)
Wl updt tody...
Thnkq for ur valuable commnt..
Lov,gg

PART 18:



With all the ordered roses Raj reached there and he was about to go where the ladies were getting ready.But watching Naina going towrds her room Raj too follows.

though he couldnt see her face properly but she was looking soo clam and beautiful from back also.

Raj was watching at the doorstep and gazing at her back. With white lahenga choli and a bun hair style she was lookinv soo attractive..

He noticed that Naina is havinv problem to hook her neckless and was about to go and help but bang...mistaking him as pooja she was fireing at him.

First he felt uncomfortable listening to what sbe thinks of him but then knowing her rights at him a cute smile appears at his face:)
"Are pooja kya kr rhi hai?aaa na jaldi.yea phir tu bhi unke tarha..."before naina could complete her shouting she felt someone hooking her neckless and knowing who that might be Naina freeze.


with a naughty smile Raj said"ha ha bolo..chup kyun hoo gyi.bolo...main kya..."

But Naina didnt had the guts to tell him aganst him in that way.she was feeling so embarsed at her privious words.

"Bolo naina..mujhe kuch complain tha?"Raj asked making an innocent face.

"Wow sir, ummm.actualy..."naina was hesitating to say anything.

"Han han bolo..."raj was smileing and contnued to tease her.

Now when she gets that he is not angry with her but teasing her she turned to face him"aap itne der kahan..."before she could complete the sentnce she got a shock,which shakes her to the core.

Who was standing next to her doesnt resemble to look like Raj. His appearence was suggesting he was a south indian.

Naina gets irriteted"who are u?yahan kya kr rhi hooo?"

And looking at her face the person gets a shock too.as she was looking heavenly beautiful.with so minimal touch of mackup,a little bit of kajal and a red colour lipstick.and the long stone earring touching her bare shoulder and the stones of the neck piece enhancing the beauty of her neck she was looking heavenly pure and the spark in her eyes wasnt allowing him to move his eyes anywhere.

But our phoolan was attacking him like BELAN LEKE CHAD JANA.."oye who r u and wht r u doing here at my room?"she was damn irritated anyone can saw that in her attitude.

Thinking something the person standing next to her said in a south indian accent"main yahan tumhare waste aayi JAAN.u r looking so beoooutiful Jaan.mujhse raha nehi gayi aur main aa gyi tumhe help krene"

"Kaun Jaan kahaka Jaan.aap hai kaun??"Naina Rashon pani leke chad gyi...

"Myslf KUTTY,BHADRESH KUTTY...main yahan aayi to thi marriage attend karne par aab lagti God humko tumse milwane khatir yahann bhejti..u r soo beautifoool JAAN"the preson replied (and i hope by now you guys have guessed it..how can we forget our Reporter Kabir Sharma's Bhadresh Kutty appearnce:) )

Naina was about to give him a punch who was missbehaving with her(just think of our phoolan.just few seconds ago she was like heavenly peace and now she had become our jhanshi k rani:) ) but the person holds her hand. Again she gets a jhatkaa.now she looks at his eyes and gets surprize to found his real identity.and shock shock shock...

Here our Capt. is trying to hide his smile so hard..

"Sir aap?"a super surprizingly shocked Naina Asked...

knowing that finally she has identified him he let his expression of laughters out soo hard that it irritated Naina even more.

"What the... what is this?..yea kyaa hai?.aur aap aise.?.aur yea jo majak...how could you?...y r u in this look?"naina was fireing one after another making Raj confused which one to answer first.

Naina was again about to shoot something and was moving forward then suddenly her heels slipped and she was about to fall when Raj holds her in his strong arm and their eyes meet and both were freeze in the position for a while until someone came there and started humming "bahon ke darmiyaaa do pyaaar mil rahe haiii..."

Hearing this when they brought back to sences feeling uneasy with the position they found it was pooja standing at the door..


Ok its a short updat but i guess the masala n twists are there which u were waiting for..will update soon...plz like it and doo do do comment as u knw hw importnt it is for me..

Keep smilling..
Gargy